I did say that it was a joke servant
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I did say that it was a joke servant
@shiki-pon thanks for the advice. As for the servant criticism B is the rank of kings which he was so I’ll die on that hill. As for mystery slayer Berserker Mom is the only servant with it so far and it’s at A rank so I figured putting it at B rank wasn’t the worst. If I make another servant with mystery slayer maybe I’ll lower the rank though.
Götz of the Iron Hand
Class: Striker
Identity: Gottfried von Berlichingen
Gender: Male
Source: Historical fact
Origin: Germany
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Height: 193 cm
Weight: 111 kg (arm not included)
Theme: Kingdom Under Siege by Kevin Simon
Parameters:
Strength: A
Endurance: A
Agility: D
Mana: D
Luck: B
NP: B+
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Character
Personal data
A sheet that came out mostly because I wanted to make Götz have a big ass mechanical arm like Z's as his NP. Other than that, his skillset doesn't convince me enough and neither does making him a Saber
Nah, I wasn't. Thanks though. I already went over the final design with the artist beforehand,
https://i.imgur.com/HnzMq0z.jpg?1
Ooh, that one's a keeper. Combines what's best about the second and third designs.
Ooh, really like the how the fiery glow is portrayed. Very nice
[English is not my Main Lang, sooo :neco_arc:]
I've done some Servants related to buddhism, this is the first
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True Name: Siddharta Gautama
Class: Archer
Other Classes: Saber, Lancer, Rider
Alignment: Neutral Good
Source: History, Buddhism
Place of Origin: Nepal, India
Parameters:
STR: C
END: A
AGI: C
MGI: C
LCK: A++
NP: B+
Likes: His wife Shakti, his home, everything is "beautiful"
Dislikes: Disease, death, ugly things
Talent: Military Arts
Attribute: Star
Armament: A sword (basic), military armor
Catalyst: a piece of Kapilavastu's Gate
Personality: A chill guy. What he want he take, but always kindly.
Lore:
Prince Siddharta lived in Nepal, about 600 a.C. and comes from a warrior tribe named Sakya, discendant from the legendary king Iksvaku.
He's born as the greatest warrior, and a prophecy announced that he'd been fated to become the King of the World.
Luxurious things and love from everyone sorrounded him every time, but He started to question about World's Souffering after have seen a dead animal during an hunting trip. His Father, seeing Siddharta near the path of the spiritual guides instead of the kings one, built for him a palace where souffering doesn't exist, the servants were always young and the fading flowers substitute in time. More than all, an Home where happily live with his wife.
At adult age Gautama left everything, then He'll become what the people call "The Buddha".
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What others say about him
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The idea of a Gautama Servant based on before he became the Buddha is a pretty cool one. I think Eye Of The Mind and his second NP are a bit over-ranked though. Kapilavastu seems at around the same level as Nero's theatre, so I'd say B-rank would be enough.
Kanthaka feels pretty pointless. There are other non-Rider Servants that have their horses (Titoria, Lanling) but don't use them as NPs
Thanks :nobunobu: the sheet idea was "Not a Strong Legendary Monster Slayer but still a little genius that somehow could duel with Artoria"
Edited Eye with a A Rank and Kapilavastu with B+ (since other than the Theatre-like It has some added features)
For the horse, i looked at Iskandar, since Kanthaka is mentioned a few times as an important partner in Siddharta's youth
Anybody have any ideas for a Hildebrand servant? (Has connections to several other notable servants here like Dietrich and Kriemhild)
Currently working with an artist to design Daji, and another for a more historical/realistic take on Saber Jeanne, one for Yuenu, and yet another for Helgi Hundingsbane. These are all original Servants in the story I'm writing.
Pretty fun so far.
edit: got permission to share WIPs. Here's Daji so far (rough sketches):
https://i.imgur.com/90kZ2vn.png?1
Sexy. I like it
Daji looks really neat, @Historia. It seems to capture her unhinged nature. It'll be interesting to see what role she plays in your story.
On another note, I have a submission for a relatively minor Greek legend I found out about when reading up on the Olympics:
Oinomaos/Myrtilos ~ Taraxippos Olympios
Class: Avenger
Alternate Classes: Berserker, Rider, Lancer (Oinomaos)
Appearance: A grim man riding a chariot, cast in a dark shadow that obscures most of his features. Even so, if you look closely enough, his face and expression seems to subtly change ever so often.
Alignment: Chaotic Evil
Lore ~ Ghost of the Hippodrome
Personality: Because Avenger is a fusion of two separate individuals, ones who each hate each other, their mind is incredibly chimerical and schizophrenic. It's pretty much a coin-toss on whether their wish at any moment would be to kill every relation and incarnation of Pelops, gain Hippodameia as their devoted lover, or kill each other. The only things they seem to agree on is their lust for pretty women, both young and mature (it was rumored that in addition to his other vices, Oinomaos's wife was in fact his own mother), and their hatred for pretty-boy heroes and anyone of the Rider class or with skill at riding in general. As both men were sneaky bastards who would do anything to get what they wanted, Avenger should be treated cautiously, even by those who are allied with him.
Parameters:
Strength: D
Endurance: E
Agility: A
Mana: E
Luck: E
Noble Phantasm: B
Skills
Noble Phantasms
I'm always trying to improve, so feedback is greatly appreciated!
So since Oinomaos and Myrtilos share a similar background and connection to each other, they've fused into one? The sheet's premise is interesting, though the mechanics of their fusion could be elaborated upon more. Oinomaos himself might qualify for a Lancer too, I recall him skewering people he caught up to on his chariot.
As for the sheet's mechanics, Mad Enhancement doesn't seem to be the right choice if it's mood swings or a fragmented personality you're after, whereas either Mental Pollution or Contradictory Mind might fit better. The rest is fitting and the Noble Phantasms are quite interesting. It's a bit of a shame, however, that both of the NPs appear to be Myrtilos', so Oinomaus feels a little tacked on (given that his only contribution to the sheet is Aesthetics of the Last Spurt, which could just as well be Myrtilos', owing to the fact that he drove the chariot).
Thanks for the feedback, @Shiki-pon. You're right, Mental Pollution makes more sense; I'll replace Mad Enhancement with that.
You have a point about Oinomaos getting the short end of the stick. I could have just made it Myrtilos's, but I liked the idea of the two legends being fused together, especially since the two individuals hate each other. Unfortunately, Oinomaos gets the short end of the legend. Though I did just realize that Oinomaos also had partial divinity, so I can make note of that in the sheet.
...Actually, I think I might have an idea on how to improve things on Oinomaos's end! Reading up on him online (he's also called Oenomaus), it appears that, at least according to some traditions, he was posthumously considered a founder of the original Olympic Games, in that the first games were started in memory of his last race (perhaps to appease his spirit, or otherwise to celebrate Pelops's victory), and in that the Olympic altars to Zeus stood in Oinomaos's old house, since he used to sacrifice to Zeus before taking to his chariot for each race. So maybe there could be a third noble phantasm related to that? I'm not exactly sure how it would work - getting a stat boost or lightning/flame empowerment reflecting the blessings of Zeus, maybe? - so any ideas on how to approach that?
Though I'm a little confused how you thought Myrtilos was driving the chariot; from how I understood it, Myrtilos's title meant that he in essence tended to the chariot and horses whenever the king wasn't racing; if he actually rode on the chariot, he would have been hurt by the sabotage, too.
Edit: Sorry the whole thing with the fusion wasn't the clearest. I was sort of inspired by how Jack is a fusion of multiple ghosts, and how sometimes the legends affect one's form, like how Vlad got burdened with vampire traits. I wasn't entirely sure how it would work, but basically I felt that since the two basically assumed the same legend, that of being the ghost haunting the Olympic Games, they could be considered a single Servant - kind of an inverse of the situation Fate/Zero's Assassin had. Any thoughts on how I can clarify things?
I seem to recall Myrtilos being Oinomaos' charioteer (as in guy who steers the chariot while also acting as the ancient equivalent of a mechanic), but I suppose he wouldn't be present for the 1-on-1 chariot race's to the death. The Olympic Games were started as a kind of appeasement to Oinomaos, if memory serves. The entire concept of the Olympic Games would be hard to make into a Noble Phantasm, though (which is precisely why I went with a more general Skill for my Pelops).
Maybe just a noble phantasm or even a skill based on getting a blessing from Zeus, since the altars to Zeus were in what was said to be the king's old house, and he made a habit of doing tribute to Zeus before entering the races. Maybe something that temporarily boosts Avenger's stats and his Riding, letting him briefly overcome his impairment? Do you think that could work?