And CLAMP. Everything is bi in CLAMP. Yes, even the robots.Originally Posted by xelloss
And CLAMP. Everything is bi in CLAMP. Yes, even the robots.
Noodley people operate on a far higher level of love and tolerance than you and I. I think it's because Mokona is their God.
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And Mokona eats apples.
And smelling flowers.
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Verily.
The usual: Spelling, grammar, characterization. Then there's how it's written; I can't tell you how often I've tried reading something and just. Could. Not. Get into it for the life of me because I kept wanting to take it and give everything a once-over so it flowed more smoothly or just had fewer sentences that went "clunk." The tendency for writers to portray same-sex male relationships as strictly heteronormative rankles me a bit as well, though that doesn't come up nearly as often, least of all here.
If the only response you can think of for something is an overused terrible image with text on it or a beaten to death catchphrase, you should have a sit down and question your direction in life. "Who am I?" "Do I even have my own personality?" and "When did I replace my wit and social interaction skills with a series of shitty .jpg's?" are only a few examples of things you might consider pondering.
in fanfiction nothing really annoys me with the exception spelling errors and so on. I can deal with (and in some cases prefer) original characters. it's true it's nice to see a story about the people we know but too much of that is like the status quo in comic books. it's ok but doesn't give much room for growth. original characters can bring new perspectives to the table.
oh and people who don't actually read the work with an original character and still presume them sues based on what they've heard. it takes every step of a journey to justify the label mary sue/gary stu etcetera and i hate people who refuse to walk the mile and bitch anyway.
WHY, WHATEVER DO YOU MEAN
[18:00] Spinach: Because I don't like Saber's personality but boy oh boy does she make my dick turn to diamonds when I see her getting tentacled.
[18:01] Leo: feeling superior to EU makes me hard
[16:16] <Bloble> Drakengard? Is that a rhythm game?
Flap flap flap.
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Goddamnit Neir, now no one can take any discussion seriously when you post in it!!
<NEW FIC!> Revolution #9: Somewhere out there, there's a universe in which your mistakes and failures never happened, and all you wished for is true. How hard would you fight to make that real?
[11:20:46 AM] GlowStiks: lucina is supes attractive
[12:40] Lace: lucina is amazing
[12:40] Neir: lucina is pretty much flawless
Keisan doori desu.
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I swear to god the next time I see someone post about Neir's sig
Then you'll just take a gun, run here and-
FLAP FLAP FLAP
<NEW FIC!> Revolution #9: Somewhere out there, there's a universe in which your mistakes and failures never happened, and all you wished for is true. How hard would you fight to make that real?
[11:20:46 AM] GlowStiks: lucina is supes attractive
[12:40] Lace: lucina is amazing
[12:40] Neir: lucina is pretty much flawless
"Oh! Oh! Oh kami! Onee-san's big throbbing manhood is entering my clitoris desu~!"
But yes, that. And also:
1. Horrible prose. I don't care how good the plot is, but if it reads like having sandpaper rubbed across your retina by a dyslexic 12-year-old, it's dropped faster than my pants do when-
2. Misusing "big" words/thesaurus syndrome. I'm sorry but I don't think that word means what you think it means.
3. The amazing OC that wins at everything forever and bags all the chicks.
Prose before hos.
<NEW FIC!> Revolution #9: Somewhere out there, there's a universe in which your mistakes and failures never happened, and all you wished for is true. How hard would you fight to make that real?
[11:20:46 AM] GlowStiks: lucina is supes attractive
[12:40] Lace: lucina is amazing
[12:40] Neir: lucina is pretty much flawless
You know what? I have no idea what the hell I'm saying.
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Someone should hire Mai Kadowaki to speak that line you just wrote, Tech. It'd be awesome.
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Characters in name only. In other words, blatant OOC.
THIS. A thousand times this. Honestly, I don't think GB's work is all that good. His writing style really irks me.
Also, another thing that bothers me: Pretentiousness in a story and/or the writer being pretentious.
Dude, you're writing a fanfic, not the next great American novel.
This leads me to another thing, flowery, purple prose. Show, don't tell, but don't get TOO elaborate. Less is more, keep it simple stupid.
And bad porn. Stuff like not knowing anatomy etc. Also, it takes a girl a lot more to get wet than to just suck a guy off. She needs stimulation too, but that's a mistake I see all the time though.
One of my dad's favourite quotes.
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