This is nice.
This is nice.
Then let it break, if it shatters to pieces then forge an even better blade to take in hand. Should that blade crack then forge once again, untill the battlefield is a graveyard of blades that have fallen and but a single sword claims the field that embodies the world. Let that sword bear the world untill its time comes and time blows its dust to the winds. Then forge again.---Eric Dagger
you seem to be really good with bittersweet stories(that have emphasis on the "sweet" part).
man, I wish I could get that chapter 3 out but I lose focus and is distracted by the internet.
Aww, just... aww....
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[Sign: You almost made me shed manly tears... ALMOST, it was so close.
Oh, I favorited the story in FF.net]
Last edited by Gabriulio; December 2nd, 2011 at 07:26 AM. Reason: Minor spelling error
Originally Posted by celsius
Well, it did make me shed "manly tears", so....
Well, she does apparently admit it to herself (after a bit, where she acts exactly as she does in this fic), but I read her as later slipping back into that 'game' idea, or whatever, because of these lines:
I don't think you can deny that she knows he's dead, but here she comes off as not at all wanting to admit it, hiding from what she knows is true. Thence, beam's interpretation (and mine).
Um. Actually, thought about this a bit more, I suppose you can also read this as her wanting to die (viz. Shirō 'appearing' when she dies, the next line saying "I hope I can be healthy until that day"). Yay, even more tragic!
Anyway, great work, beam. Very powerful.
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Yeah, Sakura knows on an intellectual level that Shirou is dead and isn't coming back, but in HF Normal she never truly accepts it, hence why she's waiting around his house, growing flowers and saying things like that. So, I don't think that what she's saying here is really all that far off the truth.
She does treat it like a "game", and whilst she knows in her heart of hearts that Shirou isn't coming back, she does still seem to cling to some small hope that, if she prays hard enough and keeps waiting, he will come back. And, she does seem to almost treat it like a game of hide and seek (indeed, if you watch the initial bit of the ending, she does genuinely think Shirou is "hiding" at first). Possibly it's a little off, but I don't think it's that unrealistic, and given how sweet and heartwarming this is, I can definitely overlook it....
This is the most unsmith thing I have read in a while :>
Unsmith? What does that mean...?
From a series of emoticons on the Something Awful boards, I believe (presumably Troika normally visits there/learned his/her internet habits there). As to what that particular variation on the theme is, I don't recall. Possibly one with a sad/bittersweet smile.
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A very beautiful tale.
"Those who say it can not be done should not interrupt those who are doing it."
-- Chinese Proverb
Nice job, Beam!
Keep it up ^^.
This... is why I read.
Choose your Guild,
Join the DARK SIDE!!!
I'm sorry to say I've found I can't RP. I just can't trust myself to stick around long enough.
More or less correct, I am indeed an SA goon.
To quote from the SAclopedia topic about it:
Unsmith is basically reverse :smith:, as follows:The Tale of Smith was a GBS MSPaint thread started by Xy Hapu in which he documented, through use of MSPaint, the lifestory of Smith, starting from conception and moving mostly chronologicaly. Smith had a bad life, and any time he found some good or happiness in it, it was snatched from him. Thus, Smith (almost) always wore a look of longsuffering unhappiness. Thread spawned thesmiley.
Alsofor extremely sad moments that one is too pathetic to kill themselves over.
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Dammit! This made me be closer to shed manly tears than anything I've read in the last six months (I would have said years, but ML Alternative is powerful, too). I felt like I have no soul, after reading about so many people sheding a tear. Be it of happiness, of sadness or of a mix of both. Techlology suggestion about music didn't help, either.
And I don't think is that far off, the thing about the game. We know that Sakura didn't accept Shirou's death in HF Normal. That's just an interpretation of how she was doing it, and very good, in my opinion.
Also, "It's pink"...
Rin, never change, please. *chuckles*
Agreed. And oneshots like this one are one of the reasons why I hate when added stories make a bittersweat, or a tragedy ending a happy one by miraculously saving/reviving someone, or making all fine by Deus ex machina.
Spoiler:
Yeah, I was very impressed with Rin here. Using her bluntness to actually knock some sense into Sakura,, rather than making things worse with ill-judged comments....
Well it is good things worked out as they did. Guess her luck held out this one time.
And while I too think some things feel off here, I am willing at least to let the WAFF override it for now. I was close to tearing up, but then again, that 'off' feeling stopped me. Perhaps, like others said, it was the interpretation.
"Fate/stay night: not really an eroge, and not really a cooking sim, but actually an RPG wherein everyone’s primary stat is “self-loathing” and the goal is to level it up beyond all the other characters."
Well, yeah, looking back through it, it does seem like Sakura here is less cognitively aware of Shirou being gone than she is in canon. I think the emotional side of it is about right, though. Even though she knew he was gone, she quite clearly never accepted that, and she was most definitely waiting for him to return to the very end of her life. even though if you'd asked her truthfully she'd have admitted that she would need a miracle.
But, then again, when Saber sits around waiting for Shirou to just show up, that's apparently sweet and heartwarming. Mainly because he actually does....
A very high possibility. I admit that even to myself, the logic seems a tad OOC for Sakura, but I was mostly basing it off how at certain points in the HF Normal epilogue, she seems to treat the whole thing as a game where if she's patient and waits long enough, Shirou will come out of hiding and be with her again. I do admit it's not the only interpretation one can make about her opinion on things at that point, though.
I don't think you're too far off, although it is definitely a bit over-exaggerated. Although, the bit about her treating it like a "game" comes from the very beginning, before she realised he was even gone. She went around the house looking for him, and assumed he was "hiding" when she couldn't find him.
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