Oh wow. I thought Unfortunate was very meh to bad at first, and poorly formatted, but knowing about the black text makes it much, much better. Dark humor, no doubt, but it deserves credit for being unique. I've never seen a story use that gimmick, and certainly not as the centerpiece.
Rule Breaker didn't strike a chord with me though, while the pool definitely did. Spots was also short and sweet.
Originally Posted by Hymn of Ragnarok
I refuse to believe that any eroge scene with Taiga would not make allusions to her Christmas Cake status, and this being Nasu, include references to making a cake. Stirring the batter, whisking the eggs, swirl the mixture around....
Originally Posted by RadiantBeam
....
IS THIS REVENGE, HYMN? REVENGE FOR ALL THE ABUSE I PUT YOU THROUGH?
That's all, folks!
Originally Posted by Guy, Vlad_the_II (3 times), Radiantbeam (5 times), YeOfLittleFaith, Ars Poetica, The Curious Fan, Raven2785, zhead
Damn you Hymn.
Originally Posted by Spinach, KAIZA (2 times), Old_Iron, YeOfLittleFaith (2 times), Trevelyan, ianmuff, ZidanReign, Sage of Eyes, legoguydude, KooriRenchuu, Break, Keyne
All humour read...I really liked URB the most followed by Day at the Pool, though Pool was kind of dry for most of it.
Spots and Unfortunate are pretty forgettable for me.
Fic's
Wishing Upon The Sun (Fate/Guyver) - Updated: 11/04/12 Broken on the Rocks - Updated: 20/07/12
Spoiler:
[11:37] <Wakarimaspin> Hahahaha, an NTR doujin by Tusia with three chapters. Chapter 1: Five and Leo share pure loving relationship, ends with Leo going on a trip and Five promising to wait for him [11:38] <Wakarimaspin> Chapter 2: Exiku the temptress comes along and slowly erodes Five's yearning for Leo, and takes him in a moment of weakness. Ends with Leo returning to see what has happened [11:38] <Wakarimaspin> Chapter 3: NTRNTRNTRNTRNTR
Oh wow. I thought Unfortunate was very meh to bad at first, and poorly formatted, but knowing about the black text makes it much, much better. Dark humor, no doubt, but it deserves credit for being unique. I've never seen a story use that gimmick, and certainly not as the centerpiece.
Well, like I said, without the black text gimmick (which fell flat for me because I was viewing it on a white board), it's really not funny and, given the nature of it, it comes across as mean and spiteful as a result. With the black text working as expected, I might have at least seen some comedy in there, although only the ending really seems like it has much comedic potential (as opposed to just being one long "take that" at Sakura). It's hard to tell, though, because I can't go back and read it again.
I found Unfortunate to be rather amusing. The fact that you guys keep saying it's dark humor when the humor is in black text makes me think that you are all trying to make a pun there. Whatever the case, using Sakura for the character to be ignored was pretty smart. It probably wouldn't have worked for any other FSN character.
Reading over my short review, I feel really mean - I appreciate the work the entrants put into it, but yes...humour is an individual taste. Whether you find someone who shares your tastes is a rare and lucky thing indeed.
I also didn't want to launch into all the grammar/spelling errors there were. Also, I'm pretty sure I wouldn't classify Unfortunate as 'Dark Humour' but then the joke was ruined for me because at the time I read it, Milbunk had missed one line that referenced Sakura >.> (I use the standard black BG) But still, it's not 'Dark Humour' :/
Fic's
Wishing Upon The Sun (Fate/Guyver) - Updated: 11/04/12 Broken on the Rocks - Updated: 20/07/12
Spoiler:
[11:37] <Wakarimaspin> Hahahaha, an NTR doujin by Tusia with three chapters. Chapter 1: Five and Leo share pure loving relationship, ends with Leo going on a trip and Five promising to wait for him [11:38] <Wakarimaspin> Chapter 2: Exiku the temptress comes along and slowly erodes Five's yearning for Leo, and takes him in a moment of weakness. Ends with Leo returning to see what has happened [11:38] <Wakarimaspin> Chapter 3: NTRNTRNTRNTRNTR
Yeah, the problem is that criticizing an anonymous work, without being able to talk with the author, can come off as pretty mean, so maybe you guys should wait till the names are out before extensively discussing and criticizing it.
Agreeing that it's not "Dark Humor" though, it's not really macabre/cynical or anything. A pretty harmless joke.
Whatever the case, using Sakura for the character to be ignored was pretty smart. It probably wouldn't have worked for any other FSN character.
Oh, what a shock, a not-too-subtle dig at Sakura from Fish....
Originally Posted by I3uster
Yeah, the problem is that criticizing an anonymous work, without being able to talk with the author, can come off as pretty mean, so maybe you guys should wait till the names are out before extensively discussing and criticizing it.
Why?
At least the author knows that we're judging the work on it's merits, and not because we like or dislike them personally.
Agreeing that it's not "Dark Humor" though, it's not really macabre/cynical or anything. A pretty harmless joke.
I don't think Sakura would call Shirou forgetting her "harmless"....
At least the author knows that we're judging the work on it's merits, and not because we like or dislike them personally.
Oh, don't misunderstand, giving constructive criticism is not bad, but once everyone starts repeating "the joke didn't work for me" it stops being constructive and it becomes attacking, just wanted to say that before there it becomes too much.
Originally Posted by Mike1984
I don't think Sakura would call Shirou forgetting her "harmless"....
But you wouldn't call it "dark humor" either, no? It's not about a serious subject matter, it's just about Shirou not noticing Sakura (it's funny because Sakura is shy and Shirou is dense), that's pretty harmless in my opinion.
Oh, don't misunderstand, giving constructive criticism is not bad, but once everyone starts repeating "the joke didn't work for me" it stops being constructive and it becomes attacking, just wanted to say that before there it becomes too much.
Honestly, that's how criticism works. Sometimes, all you can say is "that just plain doesn't work at all, do something else next time".
But you wouldn't call it "dark humor" either, no? It's not about a serious subject matter, it's just about Shirou not noticing Sakura (it's funny because Sakura is shy and Shirou is dense), that's pretty harmless in my opinion.
Well, honestly, calling it "humour" at all is a bit of a stretch....
But, yeah, I guess it doesn't really fit with the description "dark humour". Not sure what it does "fit" as, though, other than being entirely non-sensical and not very funny....
It's all about perception. You may not find it humorous Mike, but others do. Coincidentally, a lot of other members enjoyed A Day at the Pool, while I thought it missed completely in trying to be funny.
Fortissimo EXA//Akkord:Bsusvier Video Walkthrough: COMPLETE (thread here)
I've always done and said what I feel and I don't let the opinions of others guide my actions. I've always marched to the beat of my own drummer and I will always march to the beat of my own drummer.
It's all about perception. You may not find it humorous Mike, but others do.
Well, of course, but a lot of people here don't seem to find it funny, so....
Coincidentally, a lot of other members enjoyed A Day at the Pool, while I thought it missed completely in trying to be funny.
Fair enough, but at least A Day at the Pool doesn't come across as being outright mean (whether that is actually intentional is not certain, of course)....
When I first read this, I thought Milbunk forgot to upload the rest of the story somehow. The fic was interesting to read, but not really funny in a way you'd expect a "humor" entry to be. For me, it falls flat into last place. Probably written by Misheard
Unlimited Rule Breaks
It was great to read through from start to finish. I liked the ending, but personally, I would have enjoyed this fic a hellava lot more had it ended in a completely batshit insane manner rather than a somewhat anti-climatic one. probably written by KAIZA
Unfortunate, Maybe, Amusing, Definitely
It was amusing to read through, but nothing else. Though, after reading the "black text" comments and re-reading the story, it instantly became my favorite. Damn you Mereo.
A Day at the Pool
Funny at times, dry at other. It was definitely a good attempt, but overall, easily forgettable. Small note, Berserker won't die from the same attack twice, not "ability". In other words, Berserker can't be immune to GoB since GoB isn't an attack, just a gate that launches weapons from it. Probably written by the anon
Overall,
Unfortunate >= Unlimited > Pool > Change
Originally Posted by Misheard
I didn't really like any of these... Spots wasn't really that funny, Rule was toeing the line of repetition between 'funny' and 'getting boring', Unfortunate only had the ending to go for it, and Pool dragged on for me.
But you're one of the contestants ಠ_ಠ
Originally Posted by deviatesfish
It probably wouldn't have worked for any other FSN character.
It's unfortunate, but I have to agree. Illya or Sacchin both could have worked, but Sacchin's for Tsukihime and Illya wouldn't have had the same effect as Sakura did.
Last edited by Flame; March 7th, 2012 at 10:32 AM.
Reason: Unlimited typo/derp works
Well, like I said, without the black text gimmick (which fell flat for me because I was viewing it on a white board), it's really not funny and, given the nature of it, it comes across as mean and spiteful as a result. With the black text working as expected, I might have at least seen some comedy in there, although only the ending really seems like it has much comedic potential (as opposed to just being one long "take that" at Sakura). It's hard to tell, though, because I can't go back and read it again.
Well, I was lucky enough to read through first without noticing the black test. Like I noted.
Without the black text, the entire story would fall completely flat. It's the surprise and subversion upon noticing the hidden text that carries the entire joke.
Originally Posted by Flame
It's unfortunate, but I have to agree. Illya or Sacchin both could have worked, but Sacchin's for Tsukihime and Illya wouldn't have had the same effect as Sakura did.
This. Were this story taking place in Tsukihime, Satsuki would have been just as valid if not a superior choice for a forgotten character. Ilya could technically work due to having no route, but Ilya is no wallflower. She nigh on demands attention with her very presence, and that's not including the Tiger Dojo. Ilya disappearing really doesn't fit the gag well. Sakura can fade into the background, and did exactly that in two routes. And of course, there's Sakura's reputation on the forum to consider. That helps.
This is a much more meta sort of humor, but it works for me.
Originally Posted by Hymn of Ragnarok
I refuse to believe that any eroge scene with Taiga would not make allusions to her Christmas Cake status, and this being Nasu, include references to making a cake. Stirring the batter, whisking the eggs, swirl the mixture around....
Originally Posted by RadiantBeam
....
IS THIS REVENGE, HYMN? REVENGE FOR ALL THE ABUSE I PUT YOU THROUGH?
That's all, folks!
Originally Posted by Guy, Vlad_the_II (3 times), Radiantbeam (5 times), YeOfLittleFaith, Ars Poetica, The Curious Fan, Raven2785, zhead
Damn you Hymn.
Originally Posted by Spinach, KAIZA (2 times), Old_Iron, YeOfLittleFaith (2 times), Trevelyan, ianmuff, ZidanReign, Sage of Eyes, legoguydude, KooriRenchuu, Break, Keyne
Well, I was lucky enough to read through first without noticing the black test. Like I noted.
Without the black text, the entire story would fall completely flat. It's the surprise and subversion upon noticing the hidden text that carries the entire joke.
Well, yeah, that probably explains a large part of me not finding it funny (and, me finding it outright offensive follows naturally from that and the content...).
I think Pool would have worked better in a different format. If it was a doujinshi instead, it would have been easier for me to read/follow. As it is, I felt like the switching between the scenes was a little too quick and the scenes could have been elaborated upon.
Originally Posted by Mike1984
Oh, what a shock, a not-too-subtle dig at Sakura from Fish....
Oh, what a shock, a not-too-subtle, passive-aggressive dig at me from Mike.... even though all I did was point out something that many people agreed on seeing too.
Last edited by deviatesfish; March 7th, 2012 at 09:31 PM.
It's true, Sakura is the least interesting of the heroines. Although when I discovered the blacktext, I liked it less. Sort of. After I laughed.
Originally Posted by lantzblades
says the hater, you keep on hating, i'll be around ignoring your invalid, incorrect opinion.
[18:00] Spinach: Because I don't like Saber's personality but boy oh boy does she make my dick turn to diamonds when I see her getting tentacled.
[18:01] Leo: feeling superior to EU makes me hard [16:16] <Bloble> Drakengard? Is that a rhythm game?
Well, I'll agree the entries may have been a little weak, but still, they all had their moments.
Humor is subjective, after all.
*sigh*
We'll have to wait and see what the judges say, though.
Last edited by KAIZA; March 7th, 2012 at 10:56 PM.