Well, even for someone that really likes Sakura/Shirou like me, this felt a bit off. Doting mother, okay. But the nosebleeds, you're pushing it a bit much even for that, and she's starting to become that Sakura used in the Heaven's Failure doujin. I started to expect her to take little Shirou clothes shopping and soak the floor with her blood it was so silly. You did say it was crack though, but you've definitely made Sakura a bit creepy.AAHHH!! That's not what I meant at all! My god, what monstrocity have I unwittingly unleashed?!
"Fate/stay night: not really an eroge, and not really a cooking sim, but actually an RPG wherein everyone’s primary stat is “self-loathing” and the goal is to level it up beyond all the other characters."
Yeeaaaah this wasn't good. At all.
No need to be an ass about it.
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Not being an ass, I'm just not sugarcoating it. Being an ass would be telling him he's a hopeless cause and to stop writing forever, which is not what I did.
Precisely. Criticism should be constructive and with explanations. And no I ain't offended or mad, or going to call the cops on you, Agailius. You said it was a random blast of crack, I just thought it was a tad creepy. But hey, you'd likely get the same reaction if you had Rin nosebleed as she smothers a little-Shirou as his mom with Archer as dad.
But you never added why you felt that way along with your critique. That isn't helpful.
"Fate/stay night: not really an eroge, and not really a cooking sim, but actually an RPG wherein everyone’s primary stat is “self-loathing” and the goal is to level it up beyond all the other characters."
What then, would you have me say, Alt? I'm merely agreeing with the generally voiced criticisms. Anything else would just be a repetition at this juncture. I've given more detailed breakdowns in his other threads (which I do actually like, though they've got their issues), but I've come to the party late today.
I make it a point to be direct, just as I'd expect commentators in my own threads to be.
Well, like I said, it was indeed a blast of crack--a simply ludicrous whim which overrode any logic processing in my brain at the time
And now, I've come to regret it. If it were, instead, Shirou and Sakura's kid? Then it would be a bit sweeter. But this? Sounds like something out of the Twilight Zone--and not the good kind.
Well, hopefully, the Shirou raised by Enkidu oneshot I'm formulating will be... less disturbing. If I can actually FIND Enkidu personality.
Don't worry too much, people have been guilty of far worse with a serious story (don't get me started on crack)I assure you. Just take it in stride and you'll be fine.
"Fate/stay night: not really an eroge, and not really a cooking sim, but actually an RPG wherein everyone’s primary stat is “self-loathing” and the goal is to level it up beyond all the other characters."
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Yeah, I'm pretty sure that Sakura wouldn't go quite that far. She already has one Shirou, after all.
I don't think this is really as bad as some people are saying, given the crack nature of it. Sakura is someone I would see as a very doting mother, and if the child in question is Shirou, I can definitely see her being very loving towards him.
Well, it was definitely crack (the nosebleeds made that clear), but given that I don't think it was too bad. Sakura seems like she would be an extremely doting mother, and given that it's not really going that far for a crack story.
Yeah. I didn't find it creepy at all. I just saw it as Sakura being a loving mother to a child who just happens to be an adorably cute child version of her own lover, with the crack addition of all the nosebleeding to imply how cute she finds him.
I think it helps somewhat that I have a little sister, and thus know how affectionate little kids can be.