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    Quote Originally Posted by Crying View Post
    Sure I'll give you some feedback.

    He's... honestly rather boring.

    He doesn't really have any skills with unique or interesting effects. I mean, Prodigal Son is technically unique, but it's pretty much just a reflavoured Imperial Privilage, except more limited.

    On top of that his NP has some potential to be interesting due to the variability it has, but is held back by the fact that it isn't interesting to read about or fun to imagine the applications of. That might just be due to the lack of text, though.
    That's perfectly fair, I've added another skill and given more depth to Saoil s Turas to make the effects more clear.

    Is this any better?

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    He's more interesting now, yeah.

    Still not very powerful, but I don't think that you wanted him to be.
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    Woops, double post.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Crying View Post
    He's more interesting now, yeah.

    Still not very powerful, but I don't think that you wanted him to be.
    Nah, he's low to mid tier, getting by on skill alone.

    That's one of my three servants connected to Cu Chulainn, lets see who can guess the other two.

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    Well, Aife is obvious.

    Maybe Cu's wife who I can't remember the name of. Or his carriage driver buddy?

    Um... Scathach's daughter who he slept with?

    --EDIT--

    Medb?

    One of the countless girls Cu slept with? He slept with everybody, seriously.
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    I can confirm you were right with at least one of them, I considered two of who you said but wasn't sure with how to adequately.

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    Feridad cu's best bud he had to kill

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    Servant Saber:

    True Name: Yamato Takeru 'Brave of Yamato'

    Alignment: Neutral Good

    Alternate Classes: Lancer, Assassin

    Strength- C+
    Agility- B
    Endurance- B+
    Mana- D
    Luck- A-
    NP- A++

    Appearance:


    Personality: Elegant and ladylike, Saber gives the impression of a refined warrior whose every action exudes grace. In truth, she is a highly devious person willing to use even underhanded means to win. She has no scruples over such an approach, saying that her wits are just as much a valid weapon in combat as her sword or limbs. Despite this she is not a bad person by any means. To her enemies she is a demon who cuts them down without granting even the honor of a fair fight, while to her allies she is boundlessly loyal and an invaluable friend.

    Also a bit of a pervert, secretly fascinated by things such as "Hentai" and dirty novels. As a Heroic Spirit who could be called the champion of Japanese spirit, perhaps the existence of such a side goes without saying...?

    Due to having met demise as a result of accidentally blaspheming a local god, she holds an animosity towards divinity. As a hobby, she likes to compose poetry, having dabbled in such before her death and grown fond of the art. Though, the subject matter of her most private poems is rather on the lascivious side...

    Likes: dirty novels, trickery, her aunt
    Dislikes: fickle gods, fair fights, bandits
    Talents: targeting enemy's weaknesses, composing poetry
    Natural Enemy: her father


    Class Skills:

    Magic Resistance (C)- Cancels spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against Magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals. Though hailing from the Age Of Gods, Saber was not known for encountering sorcery in life so her rank in this Skill is solely a result of her Class Container.

    Riding (C)- Ability to ride animals. At this rank, the Servant is capable of handling almost any mount and medium-sized vehicles (i.e. automobiles) with an average amount of skill.


    Personal Skills
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    Eye Of The Mind (True) (B)- Calm analysis of battle situation and conclusion of action during a tight spot through "theory of battle". At this rank, Saber is capable of calmly analyzing situations even in the heat of battle. So long as there is at least a one percent chance of victory, she is able to devise a plan to exploit that possibility. Saber relied not just on her strength and skill as a warrior but a great deal on her wits as well. Her most famous exploits involve taking down stronger opponents through subterfuge and trickery, such as disguising herself as a serving girl to assassinate two rival princes at a banquet or secretly swapping out the sword of another bandit with a fake before battle.

    Espionage (C)- Does not conceal one’s presence, but rather makes one presence fail to register as hostile in the first place. At this rank, targets will have some difficulty discerning any hostile intent from Saber, though its only truly effective against those inebriated or otherwise distracted. On one occasion, Saber disguised herself as a serving girl, infilitrated a banquet hosted by two cruel Kumaso princes and assassinated them in their tents after plying them with alcohol to lower their guards.

    Bravery (A+)- The ability to cancel through sheer fortitude of will mental interferences such as pressure, confusion and fascination. At this rank, melee damage is also boosted. A high rank befitting the title 'Bravest of Yamato'.


    Noble Phantasms:


    Ame-No-Murakumo- Sword That Divides The Clouds Of Heaven (A++, Anti-Unit~Fortress): Sword of the storm god "Susanooh", recovered from the corpse of the great eight-headed serpent "Yamata-No-Orochi" that had been terrorizing the land. One of the Three Imperial Regalia, sacred treasures annointing one as the Emperor of Japan.

    Many generations later, Takeru recieved the Ame-No Murakumo as a gift from her aunt, Yamatohime in order to insure her safety in times of peril.

    A long sword reminiscent of a katana, artwork depicting ferocious ocean storms is engraved all along the flat of the blade. The handle is navy blue with a gold pommel, and the handguard is decorated with a wave design.

    A sword with the divine authority to command the wind itself. Just by swinging it, Saber can direct the wind in whatever direction she swung it in. The effect varies on her will and the manner in which she swings it, from low-level gusts to knock foes off-balance, crushing gales to bowl them over entirely or concentrated in the form of razor-edged blades of wind which can cut through stone at a distance. Saber can also coat the blade in an invisible, ultra-thin layer of wind to bolster its cutting power far beyond what one would expect from a merely ceremonial weapon.

    While powerful, these effects do not even require Saber to reveal the Noble Phantasm's True Name. Should she do so while holding the blade skyward, its true destructive potential is revealed making any other feats the sword is capable of appear like little more then light summer breezes in comparison.

    An artificial weather phenomenon is generated with the sword as its focal point. The sky darkens, thunder rumbles and churning, ashen clouds gather around Saber as a tremendous amount of magical energy is released from the sword, ionizing the air. Then, from the heavens comes a massive, swirling column of wind at least forty kilometers in height as she brings down the sword for a vertical slash.

    Everything in front of Saber is annihilated before the awe-inspiring might of the unleashed storm. Rocks, trees, houses, even Heroic Spirits all are swept away like mere debris. It is an attack calling to mind the wrath of a storm god, a wholesale destruction brought upon one for angering the gods. Furthermore, its nature as a pillar of wind reaching the heavens is akin to the Alt Nagel of a certain
    Crimson Moon
    True Ancestor
    , though such resemblences are surely no more then coincidence.

    Due the huge amount of destruction sure to accompany this Noble Phantasm, Saber is loathe to utilize its true power unless she can be sure innocents won't be harmed.

    Incidentally, the sword is more commonly known by the moniker of 'Kusanagi-No-Tsurugi', deriving from an anecdote in which Takeru used it to chop down burning grass before realizing its power to control the wind. This is the name Saber holds closer to her heart, though Ame-No-Murakumo is the title it is formally invoked by.


    Yaiba No Tōnan- Triumph By Subterfuge (C, Anti-Property): A Noble Phantasm born of the anecdote in which Saber triumphed over a particularly infamous bandit by the name of Idzumo, feared across the lands for his swordsmanship and ruthless nature. The bandit was rumored unstoppable in a fair fight, so Saber didn't even try.

    She befriended the bandit and, while he was out swimming one day, took his signature sword out of its scabbard and replaced it with a wooden fake. Upon his return, Saber challenged Idzumo to a duel:

    "Let us prove once and for all which of us is the greater swordfighter!"

    Accepting without a moment's hesitation, Idzumo made to draw his blade only for the fake wooden sword to get stuck in the scabbard and refuse to come out. Siezing her chance, Saber drew her own blade and lopped off the bandit's head in one stroke. It was a battle that had been won before it even began.

    As a Noble Phantasm, this carries the concept of 'replacing the enemy's weapon with an imitation', allowing her to swap out a weapon the opponent is holding with an item of similiar shape and size on her own person. All she has to do is touch the weapon in question and invoke the Noble Phantasm's name, after which the swap will be carried out instantaneously. Saber will end up holding the opponent's weapon, while they will be stuck with some random object such as a branch or brick.

    Saber gains temporary authority over the opponent's weapon in her hands, and can use it as her own unless they take it back. If it's a Noble Phantasm, then she won't be able to utilize any special properties it has or invoke its True Name however.


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    Another sheet I've had in mind for a while. Surprisingly there doesn't seem to be a Takeru sheet anywhere here, though there's like a dozen takes on Kusanagi around. Very powerful, with Ame-No-Murakumo in particular possibly being more so then Excalibur even (rank is the same, but in sheer widespread destruction it's probably greater). Originally I'd planned to give her a few more NPs, including a silken robe that disguises her identity as a Servant and the holly spear she got at one point, but ended up just trimming it down to the essentials (replacing the robe with rank C Espionage Skill). As a Lancer the spear would be her primary NP though, with an Anti-Demon attribute deriving from the holiness of the holly tree, and by planting it into the ground she could erect a Bounded Field repelling the very concept of demonic spirits.

    Anyways, be sure to drop by with comments and criticisms!

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    She seems to be a bit more of a fanservice-y character with her personality, but she could be considered to be a more randy nero. The skills suit her well, I never thought i'd see Bravery and Espionage next to each other.

    You are right in that there have been dozens of versions of the Kusanagi (as I have done one for Yamata-no-Orochi) and it is basically the Japanese Excalibur but Yaiba No Tōnan adds much more flavour to her. Good idea with triming down the NP's as with Diomedes I almost gave him his Boar-Emblazoned Shield and his Phantasmal Chariot but I thought they weren't suited to his class as Lancer.

    Also Crying and ZSB1999- The two I'm working on are Ferdiad and Aife. Both are almost done.

    --EDIT--

    I finished Ferdiad and didn't want to double post, so here he his.


    Class: Lancer (Can also be summoned as Caster)
    True Name: Ferdiad
    Alignment: Lawful Neutral
    Place of Origin: Ireland

    Strength- B
    Endurance- B
    Agility- A
    Mana- C
    Luck- E
    NP- B+

    Height/Weight: 187cm/70kg
    Likes: Exhilaration, Strong willed people, Dogs
    Dislikes: Bribery and blackmail
    Talent: Hunting, Tracking, Cooking
    Natural Enemy: That wicked and scheming woman...

    Class skills:

    • Magic Resistance (C) - Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against Magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.


    Personal Skills:
    • Bravery (A) - The ability to negate mental interference such as pressure, confusion and fascination. Lancer faced the famous Hound of Ulster with full knowledge of his strength and even knowing that one would die on the final day, he never faltered in the three day combat. Even when facing the legendary 'Warp-Spasm' that slew entire armies, Lancer continued to fight on.
    • Protection from Arrows (C) - An increased defence against ranged attacks by predicting the projectiles' trajectories through exceptional means, such as hearing the sound of air being cut, or sensing the killing intent of the enemy. Not an inborn ability like that of Cu Chulainn, but rather one gained in the Land of Shadows. He has to be able to identify the object of the attack with his eyes, so few projectiles from a visible opponent will be effective against him unless it is a Noble Phantasm.
    • Relentless (A) - A skill reserved for those who fought on for long periods of time. The longer the Feridad fights without stopping or resting, his parameters will slowly increase over time, allowing them to rank up multiple times should the battle be long enough. When combat ends, his parameters will return to their base level.
    • Rune Magic (C) - Knowledge about this type of Magecraft that originated in northern Europe. Capacity to use the 18 original runes with some proficiency.


    Noble Phantasms

    • Scála Sciath Horned Skin of Connacht (Barrier) (A) -While Cu Chulainn and Ferdiad were equals in martial ability, they each had an advantage over each other. Cu Chulainn had the demonic spear, Gae Bolg, while Ferdiad had impenetrable skin coated in horns. His Noble Phantasm manifesting as his skin is truly impenetrable and protects against any piercing and slashing damage. However it does not defend against the likes of Gae Bolg or Kazikli Bey as he cannot defend against any internal attacks.
      By activating this Noble Phantasm as 'Active', he can cause barbed horns to erupt from his back and his head. These horns count as B-rank Noble Phantasms and can be fully detached to create spears and knives. The mana cost for doing so is inefficient, unreliable and should not be done repeatedly.
    • Cois Locha Cath That Fated Encounter (Anti-Unit) (B) - The crystallisation of his final battlefield, Ferdiad and Cu Chulainn fought for three days straight. On the third and final day, Ferdiad began to gain the upper hand so Cu Chulainn called for his charioteer to float down Gae Bolg down the river. Distracting Lancer with a thrown spear, causing him to raise his shield, Cu Chulainn grasped the Gae Bolg in the fork of his right foot and impaled Ferdiad.
      Activating this Noble Phantasm creates a bounded field where none can escape. Use of this Noble Phantasm locks the two servants into single combat, with no means of escape. If the target were to have failed a luck check, their Noble Phantasms are sealed alongside his own; ensuring the battle is one of skill alone. The bounded field will last until either Ferdiad or his opponent have perished.


    Lore

    Ferdiad, son of Damán, son of Dáire, of the Fir Domnann, is a warrior of Connacht. He and Cú Chulainn are equal in all martial feats, with two exceptions: the Gae Bolg, a barbed spear which Scáthach has taught only Cú Chulainn to use; and Ferdiad's horny skin, which no weapon can pierce.

    Cu and Ferdiad trained together under the rigerous and deadly tutelage of Scáthach, whom he refers to as his mother. However Ferdiad and Cu Chulainn, despite being from warring nations were very affectionate and close to each other with an ambiguous relationship that was difficult to differentiate from platonic or romantic. Although Ferdiad fought relentlessly, he was always second best. He was content with this as this way, he always had a goal, a target, something to get him keep moving forward. He and Cu asked "How about coming to my country?" as they left the Land of Shadows, each laughing at the realisation that neither would budge from their position and they would never have a chance to live out their lives together in peace.

    Connacht and Ulster's relationship hit a climactic point when the Connacht queen broke a treaty and outright declared war However Cu Chulainn tore the Connacht forces apart killing between hundreds and thousands daily. Eventually Medb declared single combat, the greatest warrior of Ulster versus the greatest warrior of Connacht. Cu Chulainn versus Ferdiad.
    Although Ferdiad did not wish to fight, he would not set aside his honour as a warrior as it would be an insult to his country and his closest friend. The two fought each other for three days straight. They matched each other blow for blow. Weapons shattered under their might, Rune countered spell. Ferdiad even faced off against Cu Chulainn's dreaded 'Warp Spasm'; a monstrous transformation that allowed Cu to single handedly slay armies and yet he stood firm.

    In the end, Cu Chulainn used the curse of the Gae Bolg to pierce the heart of the man he held closest to him. Taking Ferdiad's life was the first time the demonic spear had seen battle since leaving the Land of Shadows. As Cu held his fallen brother in his arms, Ferdiad said his final farewell to Cu Chulainn.

    "Gáe Bolg is a glory given to only the most gifted of warriors. In that brilliant hall of learning, you were our pride."

    The battle ended with the defeat of Connacht, allowing the recuperated warriors of Ulster to pursue their army and add a great blow to the defeat. However, this was all a part of Medb's evil schemes and this act lead to the eventual death of Cu Chulainn.

    As a Servant, Ferdiad is somewhat carefree and relaxed, being more interested in the battles than in the Grail itself. He does not regret what happened in his life and doesn't really have a wish. He is at peace with his death and all the events as if he was going to be killed by anyone, he's glad it was Cu Chulainn. Although he has no wish for the Grail, he may still answer a magus' call if he empathises with them but the chances of which are low. Although he has no wish, he will still fight at full capacity in order to win. If someone from the Ulster cycle were to be summoned, his likelyhood of being summoned increases dramatically as he would like to face them in combat, especially if it's the likes of Fergus or Cu Chulainn. Even though it is not a wish, he has a strong desire to punch Medb in her stupid face.


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    To my knowledge, Ferdiad hasn't had a sheet made about him in a long time and I can see why. I had to give him a few extra skills to make him stand out and take a few liberties with his Scaly Skin and his second Noble Phantasm. As I made Connla a Lancer, I was reluctant to make Ferdiad one as well but I just could not make him work as a Caster, especially with the Noble Phantams, he'd probably end up with Wicker Man like Cu did as a druid.

    Any and all feedback would be greatly appreciated, next up is Aífe!
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    Nice job on the Ferdiad sheet, Hermes. Scála Sciath NP is certainly powerful, considering how many Servants rely on bladed weapons of some sort. Albeit balanced somewhat by not giving any protection against blunt damage (though hitting him with your bare hands sounds as inadvisable as doing so against Shirou in full "I am the bone of my sword" mode). So if he got hit with a sword at high enough speed the blade itself wouldn't pierce through his skin, but the sheer impact of it might still pack a hefty punch (like how the real danger of getting shot isn't the bullet hole but the shockwave tearing up internal organs).

    Cois Locha reminds me a lot of Achilles's Duel Field, not saying that's a bad thing necessarily. And it does fit his legend.


    Quote Originally Posted by The Bird Of Hermes
    I finished Ferdiad and didn't want to double post, so here he his.
    You're a lot more honorable then I am. I would never waste an opportunity to kick my entry to the top of the page.

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    I take it Cois Locha only seals the enemy's NPs and not Ferdiad's own? If so, that doesn't really fit with saying it 'makes the battle a true test of skill' since he gets to keep his trump card and only the opponent loses theirs. And if it takes away the impenetrability effect from his skin as well, you should say as such in the description.

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    Quote Originally Posted by RoydGolden View Post
    I take it Cois Locha only seals the enemy's NPs and not Ferdiad's own? If so, that doesn't really fit with saying it 'makes the battle a true test of skill' since he gets to keep his trump card and only the opponent loses theirs. And if it takes away the impenetrability effect from his skin as well, you should say as such in the description.
    I thought I had said that, clearly not. Fixed.

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    Quote Originally Posted by The Bird of Hermes View Post
    I thought I had said that, clearly not. Fixed.
    Ah. Now that makes more sense.

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    Class:
    Rider (Can be summoned as Lancer or Caster)
    True Name: Aífe
    Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
    Place of Origin: Ireland

    Strength- A
    Endurance- B
    Agility- A+
    Mana- B
    Luck- E
    NP- A

    Height/Weight: 178cm/75kg
    Likes: Victory, Glory, All forms of pleasure
    Dislikes: "Filthy, Cheating Dog"
    Talent: Wanton Destruction
    Natural Enemy: Scáthach , Cú Chulainn

    Class Skills:
    • Magic Resistance (B) - Cancel spells with a chant below three verses. Even if targeted by High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals, it is difficult for them to be affected.
    • Riding (A+) - Creatures on the level of Phantasmal Beast and Divine Beast can be used as mounts. However, that does not apply to members of the Dragon Kind.


    Personal Skills:
    • Battle Continuation (C) - Capable of ignoring all penalties that damage might cause while still suffering in the end through amassed battle damage.
    • Clairvoyance (C+) - Connotes superior visual perception and dynamic occipital capture, such as to supplement the long-range aiming of projectile weapons. Aífe is capable of leaping out of her chariot at high speeds to make precise strikes.
    • Eternal Arms Mastery (A) - The Servant in life fought under conditions that were the stuff of legend. Almost all fighting skills are still accessible even under all but the heaviest mental hindrances. The barrier between possible and impossible starts to become porous; they can push the boundaries of what is possible through pure skill alone.
    • Honourable Warrior (B) - Aífe was a warrior who wished for fair fights, and refused to lay down before her enemies. When facing someone that fights in a cowardly manner or uses trickery, she gains a 'Rank-Up' to all parameters except Luck.
    • Rune Magic (A+) - Knowledge about this type of Magecraft that originated in northern Europe. At this rank, one is a master of the original 18 runes to high proficiency. Runes can be written by simple movements of her fingers on any desired surface (even in the air, or any other elements) and those instantly activate the corresponding Mysteries if she so wishes. In fact at this rank some could even mistake her spells for True Magic.

    Noble Phantasms

    • Carbad na Ghlóir Reins of Fury (Anti-Army) (A) - Aífe most prized possession. A fearsome chariot covered in darkness pulled by demonic horses from the Land of Shadows. This Noble Phantasm possesses fearsome power and speed. On the battlefield Aífe becomes a "dark thunderstorm", crushing everything underfoot. Each stomp of the Horses is a B ranked attack , destroying whatever it tramples. At full speed, it can reduce the distance of two hundred meters almost instantly. This was Aífe's preferred method of combat and why she is a superior combatant in this class.
    • Scáthanna Iúr Darkened Spear that Pierces with Bloody Death (Anti-Unit) (A) - Envious of Scáthach's Gae Bolg, Aífe created her own weapon to match it. An innate property of her spear, Scáthanna Iúr. Upon piercing the flesh of the enemy, the spear will branch out into many thorns, rupturing the enemy's arteries, killing them instantly with a single blow. These thorns will not retract as long as they are soaked in blood. Had she been summoned into the Lancer class, her spear would have properties mirroring, but not similar to the Gae Bolg, such as creating rifts to stab the target at any point.

    Lore


    "When you've got legs that can crush a mans skull, you're obligated to show them off"

    Aífe is a character from the Ulster Cycle of Irish mythology. She lives east of a land called Alpi, where she is at war with a rival woman warrior, Scáthach. She is Scáthach's twin sister as well as rival – they are both daughters of Árd-Greimne of Lethra.

    The legendary hero Cú Chulainn was training in arms under Scáthach when a battle broke against Aífe. Scáthach was fearful of Cú Chulainn's safety and gave him a sleeping potion to keep him from the battle, but a potion that would put most people to sleep for twenty-four hours only knocks him out for an hour, and he joins the fray. Aífe challenged Scáthach to single combat, and Cú Chulainn fights as Scáthach's champion, but before the fight he asks Scáthach what it is that Aífe loves most, which Scáthach reveals is her chariot and horses. When the fight began, she quickly overpowered him and shattered his weapons. He cries out that Aífe's chariot and horses have fallen over a cliff. When Aífe foolishly turned to look, he kncked her down while she was off guard, threw her over his shoulder, and carries her back to his side.

    While they were hated enemies, Cú Chulainn realised that he found her appealing, so he pursued her and was beaten by Scáthach for it. They eventually parted ways, and he asked that if she bore his child to name him Connla and send him to Ulster. He was to be given three vows to follow: "To not answer his name when asked", "To not change course", and "To not back down from a fight", the worst possible rules that could be given to his son. When Cú Chulainn returned to Ireland he left Aífe pregnant. She gave birth to a son she named Connla and trained him herself.

    An unscrupulous and hedonistic woman. Aífe doesn't care for authority or intimidation.Her main motivations are "it seemed fun at the time". A savage combatant who was said to rival even Scáthach in terms of power and skill, she however is not the most intelligent in regards of common sense or academia and will easily fall for simple ruses.

    Aífe and Scáthach have the unique kind of sibling rivalry where they’ll fight on sight but the moment one gets between them and become a mutual target, they'll actually work together really well. She openly despises Cú Chulainn as she believes him a weakling and a cheat. Although they are reasons she hates him, they are not the ultimate reason- he committed the unforgivable crime of killing their son. She will declare that she wished she did not fall for his trick and that she instead killed him on the spot but what she truly wants is just to be reunited with her son. And a mother would do anything for her son.

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    Anyways, I've been working on her for quite a bit now. I'm a little concerned she may be a bit wanked but she was said to be Scáthach's rival in terms of power and prowess and I wanted to do her justice in that respect.
    Her parameters are equal to prototype!cu with lower luck which is the younger state he was in the Land of Shadows and she was able to overpower him so I think it's justified. That and her sister has the 'Primordial Runes', 'A' Rank endurance and 'Wisdom of the Haunted Ground' so i think it's fair.
    The NP's I had a bit of trouble with so I kind of had to make them up. but eh.

    As always, please leave a comment below regarding judgement - good or bad. Any and all feedback would be greatly appreciated.
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    Well, she's not bad...

    I feel like if this Aife went up against Scathach, she'd get her ass handed to her.

    Scathach's whole thing is that she's too good at fighting, she killed Divine Spirits in the Age of the Gods for fucks sake. And Aife is her rival.

    Cu Chulainn, who's a pretty damn strong hero in his own right, had to defeat her through a suckerpunch.

    If ever there was a Servant to overwank, it's Aife.
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    Okay, slight change to Diomedes: he no longer has Prana Burst (Flames); instead, the fire is now part of the Noble Phantasm (which has been lowered to C+). Now, onto a new servant... No faceclaim this time around.

    Class: Caster
    Gender: Male
    Alignment: Chaotic Evil
    Attribute: Man

    Strength: D
    Endurance: D
    Agility: B
    Mana: B
    Luck: C
    Noble Phantasm: B

    Class Skills:
    Item Construction: A
    Caster specializes in creating torture devices, and he cannot craft anything else.

    Terrirtory Creation: B
    Capable of creating a "Torture Chamber", a specialized form of Workshop.

    Personal Skills:
    Charisma: C-
    Due to his depraved nature, Caster can only effectively lead those who are of the same alignment, or are at most one step removed.

    Torture Techniques: A++
    Knowldge of a collection of techniques used to torture other peoples. At this rank, one is a master of torture, being capable of inflicting unbearable pain while causing minimum damage, in order to mantain the target alive for a longer period of time.

    Noble Phantasms
    Iron Apega
    Embrace of my Beautiful Wife
    - Anti-Unit, Rank B

    Caster's masterpiece, the greatest torture device he created, and a present for his equally depraved consort, Apega. The Iron Apega is a flawless automaton, an exact replica of Caster's beautiful wife; it is almost impossible to distinguish it from a real human through vision alone. It is "programmed" to act in a way that attracts men, and from the sheer work and love put in its creation, it possesses an aura of seduction, causing men to instinctively come towards it. However, the Iron Apega a cold metal torture instrument, containing spikes, hooks and drills, which can spring from its body. It is also quite strong, equal to a servant possessing B-Rank Strength. Its purpose is solely to attract people to her embrace, and then slowly crush them while simultaneously piercing their entire body, causing a slow and painful death. It is said that the Iron Apega was one of the inspirations of the ficticious iron maiden.

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    Caster King Nabis, a tyrant who ruled Sparta between 207 and 192 BCE. An ambitious, sadistic man, he overthrew the young Prince Pelops, executed the descendants of the Spartan royal dynasties, and freed slaves and criminals in order to build himself an army, seeking to expand the Spartan dominion. He opposed the Achaean league and Macedonia, and allied with the Aetolian League and Rome.

    Though he successfully conquered multiple territories, including the important city of Argos, he ultimately lost all that he gained, often due to the work of the Achaean general Philopoemen, and entered war with Rome after they ordered him to return Argos to the Achaeans, fearing his power. Nabis was ultimately betrayed and killed by the Aetolians, and Philopoemen convinced the Spartans to join his league; thus, Nabis was the last ruler of an independent Sparta.

    Nabis was a sadistic man, and had the design and construction of torture devices as a hobby; however, it is said that his wife Apega was even more depraved and vile, and that the Iron Apega was the personification of her evilness and deceitfulness. It was used to take money from the rich: those who refused to pay tribute to Nabis were "sent to deal with his wife", and, seduced by the statue, they were kept in her painful embrace until they agreed to give their money, or died. Although both Nabis and Apega were cruel, vile creatures, they truly loved each other; his wish for the Grail is to meet his wife again.
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    That... is... actually a pretty good servant.

    He's rather simple, but I like him.
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    This guy seems alright. King Nabis is bit simple, but it works.

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    Quote Originally Posted by The Bird of Hermes View Post
    At full speed, it can reduce the distance of one hundred meters to zero in one or two seconds. This was Aífe's preferred method of combat and why she is a superior combatant in this class.
    Interesting sheet but 2 things.
    a) that doesn't sound fast at all for servants
    and
    b) that the Gae Bolg was something Cu got from Aife but I guess you're using Nasu-lore
    Quote Originally Posted by Crying View Post
    Well, she's not bad...

    I feel like if this Aife went up against Scathach, she'd get her ass handed to her.

    Scathach's whole thing is that she's too good at fighting, she killed Divine Spirits in the Age of the Gods for fucks sake. And Aife is her rival.

    Cu Chulainn, who's a pretty damn strong hero in his own right, had to defeat her through a suckerpunch.

    If ever there was a Servant to overwank, it's Aife.
    The problem here is that Scathach is completly overwanked.
    Aus Feuer ward der Geist geschaffen,
    drum schenkt mir süßes Feuer ein!
    Die Lust der Lieder und der Waffen,
    die Lust der Liebe schenkt mir ein,
    der Trauben süßes Sonnenblut,
    das Wunder glaubt und Wunder thut!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Elthanes View Post
    Interesting sheet but 2 things.
    a) that doesn't sound fast at all for servants
    and
    b) that the Gae Bolg was something Cu got from Aife but I guess you're using Nasu-lore
    I am using Nasu-Lore and i figured you were right about the chariot so I improved its speed. It should be comparable to Iskander's chariot now.

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    Went back and tinkered a bit with my Christopher Columbus sheet since I was planning on maybe using it a fanfic sometime. Buffed his second NP greatly, going back to the original effect of redesignating mana rather then the one I settled with initially. It's quite a bit scarier then it was originally (and even the original was pretty scary!), suitable for a mid-level boss character. Also changed the title of his Santa Maria NP to "To The New World" instead of the more generic "That Phantom Ship".

    Added a bit more flavor to the Squanto sheet too, particularly to her Tisquantum NP. I'd like some commentary on the latter one in particular, since I didn't get any when I first posted it.

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