This are the errors that I am fairly certain of:
2) artificalthat, that townthatcleft
3) tabloidas
5) associationthat organization, togethersaw
7) headbut, classthe, battledoes
8) apprenticeor, agotook
9) magibut
10) theneven, designrustic, magi’ (without’)
15) countless many magi (just many)
34) where upon (whereupon)
36) was (at the end of the page, some – or .)
48) countless many (just countless)
50) the blackrobed woman (black robed or black-robed)
56) countless many
57) countless many corpses
59) air-conditioning (air conditioning)
59) unusual illusion(s)
60) we need only (to) eliminate
79) life-energy (life energy)
79) full with thoughts (full of thoughts)
83) he had himself (he himself had)
84) the odor of meat echoed about (an odor can’t echo, maybe spread)
92) I have no particular desire (to) answer
92) un-enhanced (unenhanced)
92) to draw a breath (to draw breath)
93) his expression softened some(what)
94) The king believed his power to (be) supreme
98) there isn’t enough reason in my interventions (for my interventions)
101) smeared in (smeared with)
107) she had to burn into her memory everything that happened from now on (she had to burn everything that happened from now on into her memory
107) it was completely as if the forest had a will of its own (it was as if the forest had a will completely of its own)
107) Barrier (barrier, no capital)
116) smiled an expression (smiled with and expression)
117) ground tremors (earth tremors)
117) Right before Gilgamesh had departed, he had said (before Gilgamesh departed, he had said)
118) massive mana (massive amount of mana)
122) it simply (was) the fastest way for each other to feel
123) dreary land as this is, I even notice the sand worms and rats (even I notice)
124) the paradoxical scene illustrated the how well matched their friendship was (how well matched)
126) gods, humans, and wine (gods, humans and wine)
126) the two Enuma Elish, the two creation epics met, and left their marks on the world (the two Enuma Elish, the two creation epics, met and left their marks on the world)
132) barbed-wire fence (barbed wire fence)
133) many of this cameras seemed (to) be using
134) Faldeus wondered which the case was (which was the case)
150) she was a young women (,) perhaps twenty years old
162) the glow on her symbols (the glow of her symbols)
162) the first meeting between (a) woman with dyed hair and glasses and the mysterious
Some remarks:
Things like “toward” or “towards” are alternately used
Character names: Rohngall -> Rangul (later chapter)
Jester Karture -> Jester Karturei (48) or Jester Carteur (136)
Things that I am either not certain of or words that just make the sentence somewhat less archaic:
14) raw power, of the sort (raw power, the sort or raw power of the sort
50) their magical energies (energy)
73) rationally-applied (can’t find an example of this sentence)
84) became as unto a weapon (very archaic)
113) broke the world or broke down the world
121) loosed upon (released upon)
121) to light the far-off sky (to light up)
122) Pale Rider is referred to as “she”. Is that in the text, it’s always “he” or “it” otherwise
127) the sounds of thunder (the sound of thunder)
135) the accidental phenom (or phenomenon)
Originally Posted by Phil12
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