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    Quote Originally Posted by Lunaludus Scribex View Post
    You're dwelling too much on physical pain, I think. The one thing that struck me about his deaths in canon was how quick they were--he barely saw Berserker before he went splat in Fate, and he never even realized he was dead when Sakura offed him in Heaven's Feel.

    For his death in this fic, I was more interested in emotional pain. I wanted him to see it coming (well, in a matter of speaking) have a chance to dwell on it for a moment, and completely break down before his life ended.
    Not really. I thought it would be nice if Shinji gain the ability of using circuits to draw prana (like a proper magus) just as he wanted, only for him to lose control. As the circuit starts to burn his body inside out, Shinji starts to realize that it was his wish that caused it. I think it would cause more impact on Shinji that way. The high physical pain is just an added bonus.
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    No offense, but I much prefer Lunadulus' version.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Elf View Post
    Yep, and it is delicious. Saber is protective dragon.

    There's also some AyakoxRin hints too. And AyakoxRider too.
    So... Shirou is going to be forever alone, and Ayako is buiding her own harem, then (I had read this story, but there are things I just don't remember anymore)

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    Rin: "I wanted Saber..."
    Archer: "What? But Archers are all insanely OP, it's like a rule or something, why would you think Sabers were better?"
    Rin: "Sabers are more molestable..."
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    I dont even know what Lunatique is. I assume it's terrible for the sake of argument.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ergast View Post
    So... Shirou is going to be forever alone, and Ayako is buiding her own harem, then (I had read this story, but there are things I just don't remember anymore)
    Shirou has bigger concerns than his lack of a harem.

    Such as his lack of a body.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Fafnir View Post
    No offense, but I much prefer Lunadulus' version.
    This seems to be a differences in opinion thing.



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    Are you talking about what would be the better way to torture a character you don't like?

    You can't really hurt him. He's just fiction. Calm down.
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    Quote Originally Posted by RadiantBeam View Post
    This seems to be a differences in opinion thing.
    Not really, it's that what Sleepy is describing is a probably very interesting but completely different take on a plot point that happened aeons ago.
    So much that I'd argue it would make more sense as a separatepost in the FF ideas thread.

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    Ah, I should have been more clear. I meant more like it's a difference in opinions between the writer who wrote the scene one way and thinks it works just fine as is, and the reader who read the scene and thought it could have worked another way.



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    Quote Originally Posted by RadiantBeam View Post
    Ah, I should have been more clear. I meant more like it's a difference in opinions between the writer who wrote the scene one way and thinks it works just fine as is, and the reader who read the scene and thought it could have worked another way.
    Whoops, sorry, misunderstood you.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Fafnir View Post
    No offense, but I much prefer Lunadulus' version.
    None taken.
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    How did Shinji die again?

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    Quote Originally Posted by CyberNinja View Post
    How did Shinji die again?
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    Quote Originally Posted by Elf View Post
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    He shouldn't have fucked around with Caster.
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    The nicest thing Kuzuki ever did.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Fafnir View Post
    Shirou has bigger concerns than his lack of a harem.

    Such as his lack of a body.
    Eh, it's never too soon to begin to worry about the posible future. And I'm not sure a lack of body will stop him from sure. It didn't in HF. That aside, I was mostly joking and summing up, because I didn't remember almost any of that.

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    Rin: "I wanted Saber..."
    Archer: "What? But Archers are all insanely OP, it's like a rule or something, why would you think Sabers were better?"
    Rin: "Sabers are more molestable..."
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    I dont even know what Lunatique is. I assume it's terrible for the sake of argument.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Ergast View Post
    Eh, it's never too soon to begin to worry about the posible future. And I'm not sure a lack of body will stop him from sure. It didn't in HF. That aside, I was mostly joking and summing up, because I didn't remember almost any of that.
    He can always have a relationship with someone else and considering the tone of the story lots of characters are going to die as well, so I'm sure he'll have someone lined up.

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    Liking it so far, specially the situation. I just hope Shirou gets rescued soon...
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    Heh.

    Spoiler:
    Romance isn't a big factor in this story, but I will say that when the dust clears (as in, time-skip epilogue) there will be three final pairings. Shirou's in one of them.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Lunaludus Scribex View Post
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    Romance isn't a big factor in this story, but I will say that when the dust clears (as in, time-skip epilogue) there will be three final pairings. Shirou's in one of them.
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    I hope it isn't the pairing of Shirou x Shelf Illya put him on
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    Quote Originally Posted by Mattias View Post
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    I hope it isn't the pairing of Shirou x Shelf Illya put him on
    Cargo is a pairing too!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Lunaludus Scribex View Post
    Spoiler:
    Romance isn't a big factor in this story, but I will say that when the dust clears (as in, time-skip epilogue) there will be three final pairings. Shirou's in one of them.
    *gasp* Could it be-
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    Homoncuus route?
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