Fate/Stay Night [Realta Nua] PC version Mirror Moon TL insertion project

[Kotonoha]

Yeah, I checked after you said it.I just thought that was a weird choice of quote to put in a sig, except it's Keyne so it actually makes sense.

[Jacktheinfinite101]

Yeah, I checked after you said it.I just thought that was a weird choice of quote to put in a sig, except it's Keyne so it actually makes sense.

Personally I want to know what's up with the other quote in his sig.

[Jacktheinfinite101]

Hey Kotonoha, are you busy (I imagine you are)? If not, there's something we could use your assistance on. There's a segment of UBW with a new conversation between Shirou, Saber, and Rin that wasn't in the original FSN. Since it wasn't in the original, it obviously wasn't TL'ed by Mirror Moon. Would you be willing to take a crack at it if you aren't busy with something else?

[Keyne]

Personally I want to know what's up with the other quote in his sig.

The other one was a quote from an Irc conversation. I mixed two fictions, Corpse Party (where a guy named Satoshi plays a main role) and Lantz's "Sword and Sorcery" (where his MC is also named Satoshi) to get a hilarious result. Also the Rene Descartes "Give her the dick" meme card was also played.

[Kotonoha]

Hey Kotonoha, are you busy (I imagine you are)? If not, there's something we could use your assistance on. There's a segment of UBW with a new conversation between Shirou, Saber, and Rin that wasn't in the original FSN. Since it wasn't in the original, it obviously wasn't TL'ed by Mirror Moon. Would you be willing to take a crack at it if you aren't busy with something else?

I can give it a shot.

(if you can give it to me because I don't know what scene that is)

[Jacktheinfinite101]

Thanks, really appreciate it. Here's a direct copy of the portion of the file still in Japanese:

「始めによった店とは違った雰囲気ですね。[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_sav_0070
　凛、ここには何が？」[lr]
@rep fliplr=0 storages=セイバー私服04a(中),凛私服01b(中) time=400 flipud=0 poss=l,r bg=i喫茶店改-(昼) indexes=1000,2000
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0100
「単なる小休憩よ。ふたりとも疲れてると思ってね。このへんで一服しとかないとゼンマイが切れちゃいそうだから」[lr]
@chgfg time=400 storage=セイバー私服13c(中)
@say storage=rin1104s_sav_0080
「？　たしかに目まぐるしい二時間でしたが、休憩をとるほどの運動量では[line3]」
@pg
*page21|
@chgfg time=400 storage=凛私服01d(中)
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0110
「そりゃセイバーはね。けど、見えないところですっごくすり減ってるものもあるワケ。[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0120
　わたしたちにとってはフツーの床でも、人によっては毒の沼地って事もあるんだから」
@pg
*page22|
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0130
「あ、わたしこっちのバナナパフェね。セイバーはこっちのデビルズサンデーにしときなさい。[lr]
@chgfg time=300 storage=セイバー私服01a(中)
@chgfg time=200 storage=セイバー私服20a(中)
@wait canskip=0 time=150
@chgfg time=300 storage=セイバー私服01a(中)
@wait canskip=0 time=400
@chgfg time=300 storage=凛私服05c(中)
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0131
　衛宮くんは？　甘いの、食べる？」
@pg
*page23|
@say storage=rin1104s_shi_0110
「朝からそんなの食べるか。ブレンドでいい」[lr]
@chgfg time=300 storage=凛私服01d(中)
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0140
「あら男の子。でもいいの？　ＨＰ、回復しとかないとタイヘンよ？」[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_shi_0120
「…………」[lr]
　言われるまでもないのだが、ここで一緒になってアイスなんて食べたらそれこそ異次元空間だし、そもそも物を食べる余裕なんてない。[lr]
　あと、デジタルオンチのくせになんでそーゆー知識だけはあるのかコイツは。
@pg
*page24|
@chgfg time=300 storage=凛私服01b(中)
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0150
「強情強情っと。ま、それはそれで楽しいからいいけどねー」[lr]
　何が楽しいのか、ニヤニヤ笑う赤いあくま。デビルズサンデーはむしろ貴様が食え。[lr]
@chgfg time=300 storage=セイバー私服04a(中)
@say storage=rin1104s_sav_0090
「シロウ、糖分を軽んじてはいけません。凛の言うとおり体力を消耗しているのなら、このマンゴーラッシュ＆クリームなどいかがでしょう」[lr]
　そしてさりげなくメニューを薦めてくるセイバー。
@pg
*page25|
@chgfg time=300 storage=セイバー私服01e(中)
@say storage=rin1104s_sav_0100
「……ええ。大きな声では言えませんが、連日行軍の時などみなに隠れて甘い果物を口にしたものです。もともとはチョコレートなども、錬金術から発生したものだとか」[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_shi_0130
「そりゃ初耳だ。[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_shi_0140
　……で。セイバー、マンゴーラッシュも試してみたいんだな？」[lr]
@chgfg time=400 storage=セイバー私服07a(中)
@say storage=rin1104s_sav_0101
「はい。一口ほどいただければ幸いです」
@pg
*page26|
@say storage=rin1104s_shi_0150
「[line6]」[lr]
　……なんて、孤独。[lr]
　セイバーは緊張しまくっている俺を置いて、はやくも遠坂の毒牙にかかってしまっていた。
@pg
*page27|
@clfg
@dash page=back mx=79 opacity=255 layer=base irot=-0.0 cx=571 imag=1.5 time=500 cy=300 mag=1.5 my=0 storage=i喫茶店改-(昼) rot=-0.0 accel=0
@fg left=0 index=2000 top=-500 storage=black
@fg left=0 index=1000 top=500 storage=black
@fg left=78 index=3000 top=21 storage=凛私服03a(近) opacity=0
@transex time=100
@movefg opacity=255 time=500 pos=rc accel=-2 storage=凛私服03a(近)
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0160
「あら、遠慮しなくていいのよセイバー。せっかくだから両方頼んじゃいましょ」[wm canskip=0][wdash canskip=0][lr]
@clfg
@dash page=back mx=-42 opacity=255 layer=base irot=-0.0 cx=259 imag=1.5 time=300 cy=400 mag=1.5 my=0 storage=i喫茶店改-(昼) rot=-0.0 accel=0
@fg left=0 index=2000 top=-500 storage=black
@fg left=0 index=1000 top=500 storage=black
@fg left=6 index=3000 top=67 storage=セイバー私服12b(近) opacity=0
@transex time=100
@movefg opacity=255 time=500 pos=lc accel=-2 storage=セイバー私服12b(近)
@say storage=rin1104s_sav_0110
「む……そうしたいのは山々ですが、それでは支払いに無駄が生じる。空腹ならいざ知らず、興味本位で余分な注文をする訳には……」[wm canskip=0][wdash canskip=0]
@pg
*page28|
@clfg
@dash page=back mx=79 opacity=255 layer=base irot=-0.0 cx=571 imag=1.5 time=500 cy=300 mag=1.5 my=0 storage=i喫茶店改-(昼) rot=-0.0 accel=0
@fg left=0 index=2000 top=-500 storage=black
@fg left=0 index=1000 top=500 storage=black
@fg left=199 index=3000 top=17 storage=凛私服04c(近) opacity=0
@transex time=100
@movefg opacity=255 time=300 pos=rc accel=-2 storage=凛私服04c(近)
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0170
「だから、その負担がデートの醍醐味なの。[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0180
　こういう場合、衛宮くんは笑顔でおごってくれて、わたしたちは衛宮くんの器の広さを実感するっていう仕組みなんだから」[wm canskip=0][wdash canskip=0][lr]
@clfg
@dash page=back mx=-42 opacity=255 layer=base irot=-0.0 cx=259 imag=1.5 time=400 cy=400 mag=1.5 my=0 storage=i喫茶店改-(昼) rot=-0.0 accel=0
@fg left=0 index=2000 top=-500 storage=black
@fg left=0 index=1000 top=500 storage=black
@fg left=-6 index=3000 top=67 storage=セイバー私服12g(近) opacity=0
@transex time=100
@movefg opacity=255 time=400 pos=lc accel=-2 storage=セイバー私服12g(近)
@say storage=rin1104s_sav_0120
「なるほど、素晴らしい。あいかわらず、凛の采配には驚嘆するばかりです」[wm canskip=0][wdash canskip=0]
@pg
*page29|
@clfg
@dash page=back mx=239 opacity=255 layer=base irot=-0.0 cx=205 imag=2.3 time=18000 cy=292 mag=2.3 my=0 storage=i喫茶店改-(昼) rot=-0.0 accel=0
@fg left=0 index=2000 top=-500 storage=black
@fg left=0 index=1000 top=500 storage=black
@transex time=600
@say storage=rin1104s_shi_0160
「[line6]」[lr]
　毒牙どころではなかった。[lr]
　セイバーはもはや遠坂陣営の敵なのだった。
@pg
*page30|
@rep fliplr=0 storages=セイバー私服05c(中),凛私服05c(中) time=600 flipud=0 poss=l,r bg=i喫茶店改-(昼) indexes=1000,2000
@stopdash
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0190
「じゃ、そうゆう事で注文確認します。[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0200
　バナナパフェ、デビルズサンデー、マンゴーラッシュとブレンドでよろしいでしょうか、お客さま？」[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_shi_0170
「……なんで俺に聞く。いいよ、好きにしろよ。どうせ拒否権ないんだろ。[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_shi_0171
　あと、頼むならマンゴーラッシュよりスポンジオレンジの方がいいぞ」[lr]
　そっちの方が遠坂とセイバーの好みに合うだろうし。
@pg
*page31|
@chgfg time=300 storage=凛私服10c(中)
@wait canskip=0 time=500
@chgfg time=400 storage=凛私服01b(中)
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0210
「ではご助言にあずかりまして、そのように。[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0211
　衛宮くんのそういうところ、大事にしてね」[lr]
@clfg pos=all time=400
　そんなこんなでちっとも気の休まらない一服が始まった。
@pg
*page32|
@fadein time=600 storage=black
　……そう。白状すれば、最初の一時間はひたすら緊張していたと思う。[lr]
@clfg
@dash page=back mx=442 opacity=180 layer=base irot=-0.0 cx=196 imag=1.6 time=15000 cy=300 mag=1.6 my=0 storage=i新都_ショッピングモール rot=-0.0 accel=0
@fg left=0 index=2000 top=-450 storage=black
@fg left=0 index=1000 top=450 storage=black
@fg index=3000 pos=c storage=凛私服03a(中)
@transex time=600
　なにしろ遠坂だけでも目立つ。[lr]
　目を引く鮮烈な赤色の服と、長くしなやかな黒髪。[lr]
　その色彩だけで目立つって言うのに、[rep fliplr=0 tops=450,-350,,21 storages=シネスコw1000b,シネスコw1000a,セイバー私服01a(近),凛私服03a(近) time=600 flipud=0 lefts=0,0,,13 poss=,,c, bg=i新都_ショッピングモール indexes=1000,2000,3000,4000 opacities=255,255,0,255][stopdash]遠坂自体も隙のない美人ときた。[lr]
@movefg opacity=255 left=1 top=70 time=700 accel=-3 storage=セイバー私服01a(近)
@movefg opacity=255 left=150 top=21 time=700 accel=-3 storage=凛私服03a(近)
@wm canskip=0
@wm canskip=0
　そんな遠坂の隣にセイバーがいるんだから、どのくらい華やかな二人組かは言うまでもない。
@pg
*page33|
@fadein time=800 storage=black
@rep fliplr=0 storages=凛私服03d(近) time=800 flipud=0 poss=c bg=i喫茶店改-(昼) indexes=1000
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0220
「ん？　なに、人の顔ジロジロ見て。[lr]
@chgfg storage=凛私服03b(近) time=400
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0221
　あ、さては緊張解けた？」[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_shi_0180
「[line3]ふん。まあ、これだけ好き放題連れ回されれば、そりゃあな」[lr]
@chgfg storage=凛私服01b(近) time=400
　……くそ。ほんっとーに悔しいが、一服しようと言った遠坂は憎たらしいまでに正しい。
@pg
*page34|
@chgfg storage=凛私服01d(近) time=400
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0230
「オッケー。じゃ、ここからはもうちょいグレードあげていいってコトね」
@pg
*page35|
@clfg pos=all rule=シャッター左から time=400
　にんまりと[ruby text=わら o2o=1]微笑う最強の敵。[lr]
　ほんとう、自分でも自分が分からない。[lr]
　マスターとしてなら背中を合わせて戦えるっていうのに、今は見慣れた仕草でさえ心臓が跳ね上がる。[lr]
　……きっと、なまじ近づきすぎてしまったから、今更普通に接する事が難しかったんだろう。
@pg
*page36|
@fg index=1000 time=400 pos=c storage=凛私服01b(中)
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0240
「あ、そうだ。せっかくの機会だし、次はアレいってみよっと。[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0241
　セイバー、アクセサリーに興味ある？」[lr]
@rep fliplr=0 storages=凛私服01b(中),セイバー私服04e(中) time=400 flipud=0 poss=r,l bg=i喫茶店改-(昼) indexes=1000,2000
@say storage=rin1104s_sav_0130
「装飾品、ですか？[lr]
@say storage=rin1104s_sav_0140
　収集家ではありませんが、見ていてつまらない、という事はありませんが」[lr]
@chgfg storage=凛私服04c(中) time=400
@say storage=rin1104s_rin_0250
「なら次はそっち方面のお店に行きましょ。わたし、セイバーにいろいろかけさせてみたかったのよ」
@pg
*page37|
@clfg pos=all time=400
「[line8]」[lr]
　緊張が解ける事なんてない。晴れやかな笑顔は、それだけで目が眩む。[lr]
　正体の分からない焦りだか動揺だかで、少しだけ胸が苦しい。[lr]
　だからデートなんかより早く帰って作戦を練った方がいいと思っていたのだ。

[Ossan99]

@Jack
These lines are include traps of translator but Kotonoha will do these for you, I believe (^^;.

[Crown]

Yeah, Kotonoha is a pretty cool person.

[Jacktheinfinite101]

@Jack
These lines are include traps of translator but Kotonoha will do these for you, I believe (^^;.

Traps?

[Ossan99]

@Jack
For example, "ゼンマイが切れちゃいそうだから" is difficult to translate from Japanese to English (^^;.

[Jacktheinfinite101]

Ah, I see, well I have faith in Kotonoha's skills.

[Jacktheinfinite101]

Ok, I just received a TL for two other scenes that aren't in English (I won't be elaborating any further on what those scenes are or where I got the TL), but it's not 100% complete, so far I've run into one line that wasn't included in the TL (there may be more), likely because it's marked for deletion, but I'd like the option of deciding whether or not it should stay deleted.

With that said, can anyone tell me what this says: その魔術回路を、自分以外に分け与える[line3]？

Context: Shirou is describing to the reader what a magic circuit is.

Edit: additional line found: 必要不可欠なパーツとして設計図には画かれているのに、そのパーツを失えばどうなるか。

[Mcjon01]

I won't be elaborating any further on what those scenes are or where I got the TL

Why?

And what do you mean lines marked for deletion? You mean the ones that are commented out in the script?

[Jacktheinfinite101]

Why?

And what do you mean lines marked for deletion? You mean the ones that are commented out in the script?

Until I get approval of all parties involved (particularly the one who sent me this in the first place), I'd rather not say anything unnecessary.

Also if by "commented out", you mean there's a semicolon in front of the line which dictates to the engine that it ignore that line, then yes, that's what I mean


Also, found a third one: 台詞の後に、ほう、と苦しげながらも深呼吸をする感じを

[Mcjon01]

Yeah, that's what commented out means. Generally it's intentional, I wouldn't go around just adding them back in willy-nilly. And at least say what script file you're looking at so I can look at it. It sounds like Rin's H-Alt scene, but I don't, like, know when that happens off the top of my head.

[Jacktheinfinite101]

Yeah, that's what commented out means. Generally it's intentional, I wouldn't go around just adding them back in willy-nilly. And at least say what script file you're looking at so I can look at it. It sounds like Rin's H-Alt scene, but I don't, like, know when that happens off the top of my head.

It may be intentional, but adding it in isn't always a bad decision.........for example, when I put together Waku Waku and MeruP's version of the Last Episode (Waku Waku's having sped up the auto read, and Meru's having restored two commented out lines), it resulted in the music being perfectly synched to the scene.

Also, it's not Rin's H-alt, but you're close.........since Waku Waku is fine with it, I'll say it. It's Saber's. I have both of Saber's, however don't get too excited everyone, I'm not sure if I'll be releasing it yet.

- - - Updated - - -

Also two more commented out lines: セイバーの肌は、新雪か、大理石か。[lr]
しどけなくブラウスの前をはだけたセイバーは、勿体ないほどに綺麗だった。 (Just from what I can gather is being said in these two, I really want them back in)

[Mcjon01]

Anyway, this:

Also, found a third one: 台詞の後に、ほう、と苦しげながらも深呼吸をする感じを

Is a script direction, not game text.

[Jacktheinfinite101]

Anyway, this:


Is a script direction, not game text.

Strange, I thought so at first, but then it looked more like part of Shirou's narration. In any case, crossed that one out.

So I'm guessing you aren't willing to help me with these then since you want them to stay commented out?

[Paitouch]

EDIT: This isn't the right thread, what am I doing here.

[Jacktheinfinite101]

EDIT: This isn't the right thread, what am I doing here.

*starts Jedi mind trick, waves hand* You are here to help me translate the lines I have posted.