Fate/Crossover

[mirakura]

Okay, seeing "Arturia Fate Pendragon", specifically "Fate" as a middle name gave me a negative impression right off the bat. That's not a realistic middle name (and I would question if including one was necessary at all) and is rarely indicative of a well-written story.

And like someone else, I question the names of her parents here.

Also, the ability to communicate mind-to-mind is not called telekinesis; it's called telepathy. Telekinesis is the ability to move objects with one's mind.

Oops, I knew I probably got that wrong. Huh, I guess so...I should change that then.

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Saber Lilly = alternate costume or, according to Urobutchi, a Saber under Caster's thrall.

I knew that, just thinking...

[Kirby]

It's less of a "less details" thing, and more "less (fewer?) unimportant details". Like, you can elaborately describe things I guess, but there should be a reason behind it. For example, if I were to describe someone's clothes, it'd be to give off an "impression" of a sort. Are they shady? Formal? Worn down? And so on.

[mirakura]

Hmm... well the middle name was me being childish, hell fanfics are alot of work..*drifts into imagination land where nether fanfics nor fanarts are needed to portray imagination...*