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    Gamma Tales: Excuse me, but I don't care

    (Gamma Tales is a story which seeks to demonstrate the answers I found missing in every bubble headed plot concept in fanbooks and the like. The story does not debate the situations themselves but the resolutions that come about in ntr stories and the like. In short, it's going to contain some bad situations and bloody resolutions, reader discretion advised.)

    Gamma Tales: Excuse me, but I don't care

    Shinji Matou stood in the living room of Shirou Emiya, a leash in the hand of the non-Magus. Surrounding him was Shirou along with three servants: Saber, a Dark Servant to Kirei Kotomine calling himself Satoshi and Archer, whose Master was currently on the other end of the leash. Rin Tohsaka was ashamed of her position but, true to her heart, had bargained for her sister's life. Sakura meant more to her then magic, dignity or life itself. Rin would be Shinji's slave so long as Sakura was left to be.

    Of course, not only did Rin know this whole arrangement was fixed so that she would never be free, she also knew that, in order to save Sakura, she would likely have to kill Shirou on Shinji's whim.

    Shirou was, of course, outraged. His body shook at the sight and the utter garbage that had spilled forth from his friend's mouth. Just as he was about to snap and launch a tirade against Shinji full of verbal abuse and curses, a shot rang out.

    A thick, sickening sound erupted as what was left of Shinji Matou splattered against the walls behind him and his body slumped over, landing on the table. The table where Shirou's family ate meals, the table which would now, along with the body, be burned.

    Stunned silence grew as the four turned to find the source. There, still holding the gun was Satoshi. Saber was the only one to surmise that this man's class was Caster. The others had more pressing concerns.

    Strangely it was not Shirou who spoke up, but Archer. "You had no right to kill him!" he said.

    Satoshi's golden eyes locked on to Archer's grey ones.

    "A man is a man and a monster a monster. Monsters do not belong in this world, and getting a moral lesson from you is complete bullshit! So, excuse me, but I don't care what you think Archie. If you can't stomach the job any more that's fine, go live with Rin, get a body, have babies and retire. I, on the other hand, will continue through these world lines cleaning away the filth until this crystal called Gamma shines brighter than the sun. Unlike you and grandpa, I know the truth about humans, so being morally superior or original holds no weight with me."

    At first it seemed no one had an answer to the blond haired man's reply, until Saber relinquished her armoured form.

    "I can see my contemporary self taught you nothing of her history. I have lived a life of duty, it is lonely. Are you certain you can keep your resolve up through eternity?" she asked.

    Satoshi turned his back on the four. "Three daughters, two brothers, countless friends and loved ones. I have spent much of life alone and when I do meet others I only lose them. Lonely is OK with me. Now I plan on killing Zouken Matou, Kirei Kotomine and Gilgamesh. Any objections?"

    No-one spoke up, and so Satoshi left. At that moment, Rin's legs finally gave out and the three came to lift her. Despite his outrage, Archer was relieved that his Master was safe. And, at least for now, the group would stay put.
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    I... I am confused. This looks like a scene taken from a random chapter of a much longer fanfiction. Is this supposed to be an "in medias res" beginning?
    (also, what do you mean with "the answers I found missing in every bubble headed plot concept in fanbooks"?)

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    This is a sudden beginning. Simply put, the details of the story up until this point are of no consequence to the actual story being told.

    The answer I have found missing in fanbooks is the resolution. Take for example a book wherein Saber surrenders to Gilgamesh in order to save Shirou's life. Disregarding the obviously broken premise since the threat is empty as Saber would just disappear if Shirou were killed, the resolution of the story is that Saber, in the span of days is broken into a fuckdoll who betrays Shirou, Shirou who simply gives up.

    the resolution doesn't obey character or momentum. It's not always porn that does this either. With this work I'm launching a response to these uselessly inept resolutions. Audience members are encouraged to participate by cheering for these brutal and logical resolutions seen in my work here, or by raising my attention towards other bubble headed works of similar design.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Entelecheia View Post
    I... I am confused. This looks like a scene taken from a random chapter of a much longer fanfiction. Is this supposed to be an "in medias res" beginning?
    (also, what do you mean with "the answers I found missing in every bubble headed plot concept in fanbooks"?)
    Basically, Lantz has a fiery inexplicable hatred for the Material books because they debunk and utterly destroy his headcanon.

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    That, and looking for "cracks" in canon he can shove his OC into.

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    Shinji and Archer bashing all in one. Wow.
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    why is this allowed

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    Quote Originally Posted by Entelecheia View Post
    This looks like a scene taken from a random chapter of a much longer fanfiction.
    That's all Lantz ever does. The best answer is to ignore him so he'll go away.
    Ragnarok, come day of wrath
    That fallen souls might bear our plea.
    To hasten the Divine's return.
    O piteous Wanderer.

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    Firstly. I'm not referring to the character material. Secondly I never refuted the character material books as a resource. Thirdly I'm bashing neither Shinji nor Archer here. The work I'm opposing with this story has conceptual landmarks I need to draw attention to. One of which is the helpless nature of the heroes, often inexplicably so. Archer actually gets a pass because he's a Servant and couldn't attack Shinji for obvious reasons.

    Finally, I'm not looking for cracks to insert characters period.

    now, if anyone has any further comments that are legitimate points about the story then please, feel free. If not then please leave, I'm not interested in buttmad crap.

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    Quote Originally Posted by lantzblades View Post
    Firstly. I'm not referring to the character material. Secondly I never refuted the character material books as a resource. Thirdly I'm bashing neither Shinji nor Archer here. The work I'm opposing with this story has conceptual landmarks I need to draw attention to. One of which is the helpless nature of the heroes, often inexplicably so. Archer actually gets a pass because he's a Servant and couldn't attack Shinji for obvious reasons.

    Finally, I'm not looking for cracks to insert characters period.

    now, if anyone has any further comments that are legitimate points about the story then please, feel free. If not then please leave, I'm not interested in buttmad crap.
    The confusion here, which I share somewhat, is that 'fanbooks' is most commonly used to talk about material books. Fairly bad of them to jump to that assumption where it clearly doesn't make sense in context, but what have you, one uses the same terminology everyone else does in order to be understood.
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    That time they checked out that hot guy they were just admiring his watch, yeah?


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    Who uses fanbook for a material book, the first thing that comes to mind with that term is a doujin.
    [04:55] Lianru: i3uster is actuallly quite cute

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    Hell if I know, I'm reverse engineering from Chris. He would know this terminology more than I do.
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    That time they checked out that hot guy they were just admiring his watch, yeah?


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    I thought he meant material books because who calls doujins anything but doujins

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    whole lotta people
    [04:55] Lianru: i3uster is actuallly quite cute

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    Isn't that like that phone game, what the hell?
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    That time they checked out that hot guy they were just admiring his watch, yeah?


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    Quote Originally Posted by @Leo View Post
    Isn't that like that phone game, what the hell?
    Never underestimate Japan, leo.
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    Has waifus, enough for porn.
    [04:55] Lianru: i3uster is actuallly quite cute

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    The character material books are official resources (as much as I see them as original trilogy special editions) and therefore as they were (presumably) written by Nasu are by that measure not fanbooks. They would be guides or supplements.

    Doujinshi as I recall translates to fan comic or similar and I used a tangible example of an existing book (filled with NTR and stupid) to make my point.

    Thus I fail to see how I was misunderstood.

    Also, I do write more than partial stories. I'm just big on inter continuity

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    NTR tends to be stupid, but with your own work "Black Cherries" you have also written NTR, so there's definitely hypocrisy going on here.
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    While the book may indeed be extant, it would be a lot easier for everyone to realize what you're doing if you also posted a link to the piece you were interacting with.
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    That time they checked out that hot guy they were just admiring his watch, yeah?


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