Originally Posted by
Dullahan
to be clear, I'm not following this fic; Clock Tower intrigue doesn't intrigue me, I think Luvia's only good point is her character design, and no force in heaven or on earth could make me like Waver.
but I smelt history
The very first thing you have done, Dullahan, is to admit that you have no actual investment in this story at all. Not only that, but it is phrased in a way that indicates that you find its entire premise uninteresting and its characters "bad." You are entitled to these opinions on your own time, but there is no reason to come into someone's fic and to tell them that you are
not invested in any way in what they have written except to respond to a particular aspect of it that you have molded to your own purposes. Your interest in history is also, on its own, fine. But what you have done here is neither helpful to promoting respect for historical fiction nor is it at all respectful of another person's work or writing. The factual information that you have presented is all well and good, but it is presented as a caustic and honestly pretty mean-spirited critique of a story that you have from the very start of your post admitted that you have no stake or investment in. No matter how "right" you are, there is no changing that this is rude. In fact, I am reminded of something you said a while back:
Originally Posted by
Dullahan
look, I've been pretty frustrated and unhappy IRL for the past year or so
so I just don't like new things or other people having fun
I'm sorry you feel that way, but that is no reason for you to try and make other people's experience of writing and fandom as frustrating and unhappy as whatever your personal problems are. I'm glad you know stuff about history and that it pleases you. I'm sorry something in your real life sounds pretty not-fun. But that doesn't change the fact that this post comes across as incredibly rude and centered pretty much entirely on your above-expressed attitude.
Ancient traditions, eh? Later you refer to mage weddings as 'pagan'.
Now, as it happens, I have studied the influence of Christianity on pagan (specifically Norse, but there are broad continuities among northern european cultures with this sort of thing) customs of marriage. What customs might those have been?
This inherently suggests that there was no thought or research put into this. There was extensive thought and research that I was there for and frequently discussed. The fact that Glow didn't do a dissertation on the influence of Christianity on pagan customs of marriage to be submitted to a university before this fic was written and published is an entirely unreasonable critique. It completely misses the point of this story thus far, which you have already admitted that you don't care about.
Practical folk, these pagans. Hard-headed, you might say.
Allow me to confess a personal bias. For better or worse, when I read something like "rooted in ancient traditions and called upon natural forces and sacred ritual to create ties of blood and belonging running into the fabric of the earth itself" my first thought is "New Age pseudo-paganism", which is a polite way of expressing my gut reaction, which is "goddamn hippie bullshit". The idea that people in pre-Christian times were closer to nature in some doubtless profound but perenially-hard-to-clearly-articulate way is a horrendous oversimplification which proliferates in garbage like The Da Vinci Code and by rights should stay there.
Again, you are entitled to your personal opinion about "goddamn hippie bullshit," but once again you are leveling your personal bias against a story that you have no interest in giving a fair shake in the first place. Also, you might know a lot more nasuverse trivia due to your length of stay in the fandom, but Glow has absolutely done her due dilligence to learn and absorb absolutely everything she can to make this fic work the way it is supposed to as a narrative. It isn't as if nasuverse magic and the traditions surrounding it are ripped from the pages of history.
I have been trying to fight my instinctive aversion to that all the way through this interlude, because I actually do think you're on to something. This is because Magus marriage customs being rooted in pagan customs actually makes a whole goddamn lot of sense.
Bold added for emphasis. The traits desirable in one's descendents were the traits to be desired in one's wife. Consider that Magus marriages are basically eugenic before anything else. Property rights no doubt play a role, but before all else, the line must go on. The family work must be continued by someone with, hopefully, more natural talent than the generation prior. Why'd Tokiomi marry Aoi? Eugenics! I don't have the glossary entry on me right now, but the story was she came from a family known for good quality circuits or something. And it worked - they got two superchildren by mage standards. Given the chance to stack the gacha in their favour before rolling, any self-respecting magus would be insane not to take it. There's also room for the flipside of pagan marital eugenics: infanticide. Sure, in the modern day magus children who get born without circuits get to hang around - vide everyone's favourite seaweed - but in the bad old days, what a waste that would have been. Considered as a breeding population, Magi are pretty much always gonna be more K-selected than muggles; they'll live longer, have fewer children and invest more in their upbringing. Education, for instance, is key, and it takes a lot in time and energy. In resource-abundant modernity, free-riders like Shinji can perhaps be supported, but in medieval times? Nope. A baby gets born without circuits - it gets killed by exposure, Spartan-style. Reroll, try again. Pagan marriages were also far more tolerant of endogamy than Christianity, though this is probably a result of Christianity having an unusually strong incest taboo, even among Abrahamic religions. The seven degrees of consanguinity and all that.
If you actually wanted to write a comment that involved constructive criticism of this piece, you might have limited it to this topic. In this case, you actaully engaged with what Glow was trying to do in spite of your reservations about it and offered information about why you thought she "might be on to something." However, because you have already complained about every part of this in spite of your admitted lack of investment until now, it comes across as condescending. If I had just read this on its own, I wouldn't have thought this was a bad comment. It is not you bringing into the discussion what you know based on your interest in history that is the issue but rather that you didn't come here to discuss anything. You came here to lecture in a place that is Glow presenting her work -- not yours. So, good observations might exist here, but the overall tone of this is disrespectful.
You're presenting the Christianisation of northern Europe as if it was a Crusade
avant la lettre. This is a misrepresentation. Certainly we can point to instances of Christianity being spread northward by the sword - the Livonian Crusade of the later 12th-early 13th century, for example (note that that is
very late in the timeline; by then, all Scandinavia had been on Team Jesus for centuries, no Swedish Crusade required) - but by and large it didn't work that way. We are speaking, broadly, of a time in which things were sufficiently unreconstructed that a king could convert and take his kingdom with him. Christianity could be propagated top-down by royal fiat. It took time, yes; IIRC Iceland had to be Christianised twice, since they just tore down the churches once the royal envoys from Norway went home. At the same time, like any new fad, it could - and did - obtain popularity at a grassroots level, for a variety of reasons. A reason that has been put forward for the religion being adopted early among Scandinavian women is, in fact, directly related to my comments on infanticide above. Christianity criminalised infanticide, and was in general a better deal for small children.
If I may put my historical-materialism hat on for a moment, the conflict between pagan and Christian values was actually a conflict over private property. The Skyrim-belongs-to-the-Nords position aimed to maintain the traditional hold wealthy families had on their property, while good old Christian marriage-between-individuals-in-the-eyes-of-God was aimed at securing those sweet, sweet tithes and donations. It's not a situation in which good-hearted pagans have their naturalistic traditions uprooted by heartless, authoritarian Christianisers - it's a situation in which ruthless pagan landowners and ruthless Christian clerics fight over money.
I'm not an expert on the English Reformation, so the specific involvement of Henry VIII I won't comment on. But the horizontal transfer of culture from magus to muggle that you've outlined here is something I have difficulty swallowing. Pagan vestiges can be found damn near anywhere in the Anglo world if you look hard enough, but the 'ancient tradition' of Western marriage is Pauline. Handfasting in the sense of making an engagement between consenting individuals is Christian; pagan handfasting would be more like that case in the
Njals saga, like two family heads shaking hands on a business deal. Veils go back to the Old Testament, if I'm not mistaken (?).
The point I am trying to make is that it is not ritual aspects of pagan marriage that are important when treating it as a logical model of magus coupling, but rather the ruthless pragmatism of the business - the primacy of eugenics and family control of inheritance. This is the 'paganity' of magus marriage. For this reason I don't agree with setting up magus weddings as a secret cultural antecedent of modern Western marriages; the history, in my view, does not support that conclusion.
Once again, it is not your apparently avid engagement in history that I take issue with. It is the way it is presented in this comment as an attack on what the narrative has suggested. This portion of the fic is in the headspace of a particular priest who is there to observe a wedding ceremony for worldbuilding reasons that have been established
within this fic and narrative. Regardless of what you know about history, the nasuverse is
not a full and true representation of history. There are gaps of things about mage culture that everyone admits that Nasu has not seen fit to
care to elaborate upon. Fanfiction
usually occupies negative spaces in a canon and engages with questions that can be posed but cannot be answered. Furthermore, this fic has already made extremely interesting use of character-specific representation of reality and the truth. Maybe this priest simply has this view of history, maybe he doesn't, and aspects of the nasuverse are riddled with artistic license and revisionist history. But again, you admitted from the beginning that you are
not interested in this story but rather in the "history" that you think should motivate every aspect of people writing a narrative that they enjoy within the context of a
fictional universe. This caustic insistence that people take no leeway, have no fun, and devote years-worth of passionate, intrepid historical research to produce
free entertainment that is
for fun is an unrealistic charge to put at someone's feet when you have actively admitted to not
caring about what they are offering as said free entertainment.
There have been positive responses to this fic. People enjoying it for its narrative who are interested in what it is going to accomplish in with its plot between these characters. Those responses have not been without critique and dissenting opinions. This does not qualify as a response of that nature, though. Its only intent seems to be to call someone out for producing something with love, care, and yes, research to a reasonable degree, for not meeting your standards which are harsh, high, and which were already unreachable from the very first paragraph of this reply. All this does is increase hostility, negativity, and stagnation in your fandom. You may or may not care about that, but other people do. Everyone starts somewhere, and I think this is an excellent and painstaking start to what I hope will be a long and beneficial stay in the creative part of this fandom. I cannot imagine what possible purpose you could have in so stringently critiquing a
fanfiction story for its historical content in a one-off, admittedly revisionist historical interlude when you have no room in your interest in this fandom for this narrative in particular. I don't understand why you wouldn't just read things you like and disregard things you don't, whether your reasons for that are valid or invalid to you or anyone else.
Christ
I need to go back in time and prevent myself from ever writing that gazebo thing
I'm honestly not sure why you're insulted that someone has adopted a clever phrase you produced. Typically, people write in fandom circles for the purpose of positive affirmation?
I don't know if this is you being
le ironic or what, but this is really not a good attitude to have.
As she said, it is not a bad thing to remind people that feedback is a good motivator for creativity that otherwise offers no reward beyond the creativity itself. That said, Glow already responded to that for herself, but I really do have to wonder if this comment was presented with a good attitude since we're talking about those.