depends on the fighting scene
depends on the fighting scene
Originally Posted by FSF 5, Chapter 14: Gold and Lions I
Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.
Could you go in a little more detail please You?
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Different fight sequences all have their own rhythm. A fight scene for the sake of frightening is never a good idea imo, just like how sex for the sake of sex in writing is the same way.
If there's any general advice, what iIve heard a lot is not to go into too much detail since it slows the pace; your reader will inevitably fill in the details themselves.
Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.
http://forums.nrvnqsr.com/showthread...=1#post2322779
http://forums.nrvnqsr.com/showthread...=1#post2446550
previous fight scene discussions that show up when I search "fight" dunno if there are more
Localizationing stuff
don't think of it as just a fight scene
What helped me a lot was visualising the entire thing before writing it, then putting an appropriate* soundtrack while writing.
Also, I'm sure others have already said it, but aim for a good mix of general and specific descriptions.
* Which isn't necessarily a kick-ass metal song or something similar. For instance, while writing "The Gift", I had Celtic Woman's "Tir Na Nóg" on repeat.
http://forums.nrvnqsr.com/showthread...=1#post1315271 has an older discussion about battle scenes with quite a few more people giving their two cents.
took a while to find
probably more around, currently searching "battle"
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A bit of a question related to here, actually.
So I started writing a crossover, and I want to post it in this forum so it will get more attention. Now, I've been holding off on doing that since I first wanted some more chapters in the story, and now it has got 7, with an eighth on the way. It's all on FFnet, so I was wondering if it was okay to just post the first chapter here, and then link to the FFnet page for easier viewing.
My other question though is this: One reviewer stated that I am a bit too verbose in the story, and it caused him to skim over some sections. That's fine in my opinion, but I do want to ask how to avoid writing too much, while still getting the point across. How do I know which paragraphs and sentences are not required and the story could flow better without them?
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If you wanted to post your story here, go ahead. Much easier if you post all in here since some people did not bother going there. If you want reviews, then not so much. If haven't notice yet, fanfic section pretty much a dead place. Ok, not completely but almost.
As for latter question, can't help you there
Kentucky Fried Kirei, nah i'm joking. Nothin here
Even ▆▆ end up on that place again
The special hell on hill full of swords ---------------------------------------------------------The hill of bloody battlefield
Theoretically, whichever lines don't serve a purpose can be cut.
That being said, an FFN reader's definition of verbose might not match up to the reality.
fanfics section it not dead, it just mutated into the create a servant sectionIf you wanted to post your story here, go ahead. Much easier if you post all in here since some people did not bother going there. If you want reviews, then not so much. If haven't notice yet, fanfic section pretty much a dead place. Ok, not completely but almost.
As for latter question, can't help you there
Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.
In a way that's a fate worse than death.
Fanfics degenerated into Grail Wars distilled into their purest form, fanmade Servant powerlevels.
badass versus (create a servant edition)
Yeah, exactly. I only say almost dead, which still counts as alive.
Kentucky Fried Kirei, nah i'm joking. Nothin here
Even ▆▆ end up on that place again
The special hell on hill full of swords ---------------------------------------------------------The hill of bloody battlefield
i think even create-a-servant is losing steam
To some degree, yeah. Hermes is working on this Grail Quest thing, so presumably he has made or is making 5-6 sheets that haven't been posted there. But that brief period where like 15 people were working on sheets at any given point has died down a bit.
There are still plenty though. There's Royd, you (Ymir), Ail Don, Zh1212, the two newish guys Diablo Interceptor and Sherlock, Spartacus, Funderfulness, asterism42, Hermes (though like I said less than before, for understandable reasons), and Venomking I suppose. Am I forgetting anyone?
Zikari, WhatShouldNotBe, and Adlet were all super active, but they haven't posted in a while. Part of why it feels like it's slowing down just a touch I suppose.
Adlet never posts at all anymore, which is a shame since his sheets were seriously amazing (I have to give him major credit for inspiring me to make mine so much more detailed).
Has my lack of presence really weakened the thread that much? I think you're giving me too much credit...
But yeah, after making like over 100 of the darn things, I figured I may as well do something with them - hence a grail war writing thingy. Also as I'm not the best writer and have too many conflicting ideas which either wouldn't work together with an inability to decide on which to do, letting other people make the decisions ended up working out best for me.
That's basically how QoF became a thing.
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That is not dead which can eternal lie, and after strange aeons even death may die
Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.
so what did everyone write today
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