A cute girl who can summon a harem of all the heroic olympic athletes that ever participated in her games.
There you go Royd, some inspiration for your next servant.
As Uther was my very first sheet ever made and now that there is a new thread, I thought I'd make another Arthurian knight but for a change, not one you've seen before.
Class: Saber (Alternatively Lancer and Berserker)
True Name: Sir Balin le Savage "The Knight of Two Swords"
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Place of Origin: Camelot
Armament: Armour, Two Swords
LCK: E (C)
Likes: Violence, Bouts of Rage
Dislikes: Patience, Calm Analysis
Talent: Jumping to Conclusions
Natural Enemy: Vivan, Lady Lile
Magic Resistance: B
grants protection against magical effects. Differently from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. Cancel spells with a chant below three verses. Even if targeted by High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals, it is difficult for them to be affected.
the ability to ride mounts. Rider-class Servants will typically possess a high rank, and A-rank can allow for Phantasmal Beasts and Divine Beasts to be mounted. It is said that dragon type mounts are an exception, requiring a different ability other than Riding.
Most vehicles can be handled with above average skill. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasm Races such as Monstrous Beasts. It's rank has been reduced due to legends that upon his final battlefield he rode his horse so hard it died between his legs.
Battle Continuation: A
The strength of vitality for predicaments. Also, the ability to withdraw from combat and reach allied territory alive after being defeated. Makes it possible to fight even with deadly injuries and can remain alive so long as one does not receive a decisive fatal wound. After performing the Dolorous Stroke, a castle collapsed on top on him where he survived for three days before being fished out by Merlin.
The ability to negate mental interference such as pressure, confusion and fascination. Not usable under the effects of Mad Enhancement. Bonus effect of increasing melee damage. Merlin prophesied he would have been the bravest of all the Knights of Camelot.
A skill that increases the servants's perception. Here, one can maintain a constant awareness of his surroundings, removing penalties of visual and audio obstructions. However this only applies to combat scenarios, Balin himself was able to fight and defeat an invisible knight but not recognise his own brother.
Sword of the Red HiltIll-fated Destiny
Max Targets: 1
The original sword of Saber. It is a longsword with an ethereal beauty that surpasses even Excalibur despite being made by mortal hands. It possessed a red hilt and swaying clasps. Upon the arrival of a mysterious damsel called Lady Lile bearing a sword that only the most brave knight in King Arthur's court will be able to undo the clasps of the swordbelt and draw the sword from its sheath. Balin, despite his low position was able to do so. Similarly to Arondight, the Sword of the Red Hilt was to be gifted to the most brave knight. However, it was cursed by Lady Lile - while it still signifies his virtue, it bears a curse of kinslaying. When he draws the blade, it raises his physical stats by a rank however his LCK stat is permanently locked at E.
This sword has had multiple appearances through legend and taken different forms and names. It was originally the sword of Goliath before being acquired by David and being passed through to Soloman before falling into the hands of Balin. This was the sword that Galahad drew from the float stone. Merlin had sheathed the sword into the float stone after the death of Balin, which was later drawn by Galahad.
Arondight - OverdriveBloody Scream, Holy Sword of Release
Max Targets: 10 People
A holy sword wielded by Balin and later bestowed to Lancelot, the sword that is the counterpart of King Arthur's Excalibur. It bears a similar design to that of Excalibur, carved with Fairy Letters to show that it was a Divine Construct not forged by mortal hands. It is a limitless sword capable of receiving any attack without taking damage that shines much like the water of the Lake. It was given only to someone who could be exalted as the "perfect knight", the strongest, bravest and truest knight of an era. Repurposed into a single attack, it reflects the bloodied waters of the Lady of the Lake whom he slew in a fit of rage, releasing stored mana at the tip while slashing the target. The red and blue light that engulfs the target looks like a clear lake, saturated with blood.
Dolorous StrokeThe Phantasmagorical Blow of Suffering
Max Targets: 1 Person
The most infamous strike in all Arthurian legend. He ignores an "unearthly voice" and strikes the king when deprived of his weapon and thinks his stroke is 'justified'. The single Dolorous Stroke struck down the Fisher king and devastated his entire kingdom, turning it into a wasteland until the king was healed by Galahad. Balin can replicate this attack with any of his weapons but it synchronises with the fabled Spear of Destiny, the Lance of Loginus which Balin would certainly wield in the Lancer class and possibly the Berserker class as well.
Balin can replicate this phenomenon and strike his foe with a powerful curse, ruining the flow of prana almost irreparably. Any magus or servant who has received this blow will be critically weakened, leaving them incapable of performing in combat and in constant pain. The landscape will reflect the state of the wounded party and slowly deteriorate and wither over time. The death of Saber will not stop these effects but they can be healed by a "Truly Virtuous Person".
Balin himself does not even fully understand this Noble Phantasm himself, merely saying "I hit a guy really hard, everyone feels it." Also curiously enough the blow will take effect regardless of where it lands on the opponent but when performing this attack, he will always aim for the groin. It is unknown if this is a conscious decision or not.
In Le morte d'Arthur he was supposed to be even stronger than Lancelot (which is certainly why Mallory killed him off so quick) so I admit he may appear quite overpowered but he doesn't even have access to all his Noble Phantasms in this class, which is why I didn't make him a Berserker. Don't worry, my next servant is going to be really weak to compensate.
Last edited by Bird of Hermes; December 17th, 2016 at 06:00 AM.
Nice work on that Sir Balin profile, Hermes. I'd thought of doing one myself occasionally, but could never think of any creative enough ideas for his NPs. Yours is certainly a good take on one of the more tragic (perhaps comedic, depending on how your dark your preferred blend of comedy runs) of Arthurian knights.
In most of the legends I've read online, Sword With The Red Hilt and Arondight were one and the same (the former becoming Lancelot's sword after he pulled it from the stone). Balin's other sword was a nameless one without any particular legends (peculiarly for one called 'the knight of two swords', only one of his swords was of any special note). Your decision to split them up into separate swords works quite well though. In particular, I like how you alluded to the imagery of Saber!Lancelot's own NP in the latter's description. First darkened, now bloodied. Poor Arondight seems to find itself corrupted quite often for a holy sword.
I can see you went for a rather more negative take on his character then I'd have imagined. I'd have done him as a reckless, impulsive but generally good-hearted person cursed with poor fortune whereas your take on his personality sounds more like just a prideful, greedy idiot with a temper (though he's still Chaotic Good so what do I know). In general, I tend to portray 'ambiguous' figures (Paris, Theseus, et cetera) as troubled romantics whereas you more emphasize the less wholesome aspects of their character.
There's also a typo in the first paragraph of Sword With A Red Hilt's description saying 'When he draws draws the blade' while you obviously meant just 'When he draws the blade'.
By the way, I'm actually working on the silly Heroic Spirit of the Olympics idea AvengerEmiya gave me, which should be completed and up sometime tomorrow if all goes well.
Hmm. Since there's a movie about him coming out, I wonder how someone would go about doing Nat Turner (of the Turner Rebellion) as a Heroic Spirit. He'd probably be Saber (pictures depict him with a ceremonial sword) or Rider with personal Skills being Revelation, EOTM(T) and Rebellious Spirit, but I'm not at all sure what his NP(s) would be. Wouldn't want to go with just the usual Ionian Hetairoi knock-off so... maybe something to do with the solar eclipse, given that he used it as a signal to begin his rebellion?
In any case, I'm curious if anybody has any ideas on the guy. We could use some more Black Heroic Spirits around here.
First of all, Sir Balin is awesome. The Noble phantasms are creative (especially the alternative take on Arondight), and the personality is pretty amusing as well. Always nice to see a saber who isn't a boring perfect knight. As for Nat, I'd love to see a profile, but I'm afraid I don't know enough about him to think of any Noble Phantasms. Interested to see what you come up with, though. (The Olympic Games servant is going to be something as well.)
Magic Resistance (A): Cancels spells A-rank or lower, making Saber untouchable to modern magic.
Despite being from in the 19th century, Saber's unwavering piety vastly increases his rank.
Riding (B): Can handle most mundane vehicles and mounts. However, Phantasmal races are far beyond his ability.
Incitement (A): The ability to sway the masses via words, gestures and charisma. When used against an
individual, it functions as a sort of mental assault. Saber was the spark that lit the fire for a huge
rebellion, gaining tens of thousands of followers in one of the bloodiest conflicts in human history.
Self-Suggestion (EX): A powerful suggestion or delusion that blocks out mental interference. Saber fully
believes himself to be the younger brother of Jesus Christ, and the second Son of God. This delusion is
so fully ingrained into his psyche and the beliefs of the people that he is summoned with legitimate divine
power. Skills and Noble Phantasms based on Christ can be replicated, although they will appear with a Chinese
aesthetic. This includes mastery of Baptismal Rites, an effective rank A in Charisma and Divinity, the
manifestation of several Holy Shrouds and Relics, and a transformation of Saber's body into peak physical
form. Indeed, as God is beyond the comprehension of men, so too is the nature of Saber's unbreakable delusion.
Yang Xiuqing~Voice of God from the Lips of the East King (B, Support)
A golden seal hung on a chain around Saber's neck, it holds within it the power of God's voice. When
activated, it grants the wearer the ability to speak with God's authority, causing a mental interference
effect that causes those who hear Saber to believe and accept anything he says. He can gift the seal to
anyone, usually his Master, so they can properly serve him as second in command. It is named for Saber's
commander-in-chief, Yang Xiuqing, who served as the Voice of God in his army. It was through this control
that won Saber so many loyal, fanatical followers.
Zhan Yaojian~Demon Slaying Swords (C+, Anti-Unit, Anti-Evil)
Saber's main weapons take the form of two giant swords, each one meter long and weighing four and a half
kilograms. Inscribed with his family name and arias of demon-slaying, they are superb weapons against Evil
aligned enemies. Despite their weight, Saber wields them quite easily, striking quickly and heavily. Much like
an earlier famous pair of Chinese swords, wielding them together increases his STR and deals massive damage
to monsters and demons.
Yitianjian~Glorious Heavenly Sword of Demon Purging (A+, Anti-Army)
An attack symbolizing the original holy sword presented to Saber by Christ Himself. The accepting and
drawing of this sword sent Saber down the path of a bloody leader and conqueror. It is activated when
Saber presses his two swords together and merges them into a sword of pure light. From here it turns
into a Divine Construct unleashing massive blasts of energy with every swing, just as he and his followers
carved swaths of blood across China, backed by Saber's God-given power.
Last edited by Funderfullness; August 13th, 2016 at 01:11 PM.
"We don't need martyrs right now. We need heroes. A hero would die for his country, but he'd much rather live for it." -Josiah Bartlet
I make Servants when I'm bored.
Hong Xuiquan is a pretty interesting Saber and character as well. It's not often you see Chinese servant with connotations of christianity. The Incitement skill works better than Charisma in this case due to his nature so good choice there. I'm fond of the 1st and 3rd Noble Phantasms as the first would play out interestingly and the 3rd has rather evocative imagery. It's nice to see it becomes a Holy Sword due to God rather than the power of the sword itself so that is nice to see.
CasterAlignment: Lawful Evil
Anna Ivanovna, Empress of all the Russians
Territory Creation (A+): The skill to build a special terrain that is advantageous to oneself as a magus. Creation of a "Temple", which is superior to a "Workshop", becomes possible. Being the ruler of the vast land of Russia in life grants Caster a high rank in this skill.
Item Construction (B): The skill to manufacture magical items. This rank allows for production of devices that carry magic power. Caster can create familiars of ice and snow, as well as ammunition for her rifle, her main form of offense.
Imperial Privilege (A): An ability that, due the insistence of the owner, Skills that are essentially impossible to possess can be obtained for a short period of time. In cases when the Rank is А or above, even the "burden to the body" is acquired (such as Divinity). Caster’s autocratic rule in life allows her a high rank in this skill.
Return of Slight (B): A skill that allows the user counterattack with curses and grudges. The more damage taken, the more powerful the return shot will be. Empress Anna was known to be a vengeful and spiteful woman to those who crossed her, inventing and enacting cruel and humiliating punishments for those transgressors, to both satisfy her wounded pride and to serve as an example to others.
Riding (D): Normally the class Skill of Rider and Saber Servants, this is the ability to ride mounts. This is a low rank that only allows the user to ride tame beasts, and does not grant the power to drive vehicles. As Caster says, an Empress does not ferry herself around. She is able instead to naturally assume the role of ‘passenger’ easily in any vehicle she travels in.
Lednyanoy DomGlittering Frozen Castle
(Anti-Unit, B): The original ‘Ice Palace’, a glittering folly commissioned by Anna to celebrate the end of Russia’s war with the Ottoman Empire during the frigid winter of 1739. The original palace was 20 meters tall and 50 meters wide. Huge ice blocks were "glued" together with water. The garden was filled with ice trees with ice birds and an ice statue of an elephant. The outer walls were lined with ice sculptures. Before the palace there were artillery pieces also made of ice. The palace was also furnished with furniture made of ice, including an ice bed with ice mattress and pillows. Though a monument of victory, this palace was also designed to humiliate and punish a courtier who had crossed Empress Anna. Forced to marry an ugly serving girl, Anna instated the couple as her jesters and orchestrated a farce of a wedding that was held in the ice palace; the couple was then stripped naked and locked in the palace’s bridal chamber, the transparent ice walls exposing them to the jeers of the court. They only managed to survive by smuggling fur blankets into the castle by bribing one of their jailors. It is therefore as an instrument of humiliation rather than a monument of victory that Lednyanoy Dom represents as Anna’s Noble Phantasm. Rather than a palace, it is a spell that summons a sphere of ice that she uses to imprison her opponents. Inside the cage, the prisoner’s weapons, armour and even clothing are stripped away, leaving them naked and shivering before Anna’s scorn. She is able to summon multiple cages at one time, and she will use them to decorate her territory, tormenting and torturing her prisoners at her leisure. The original ice palace melted away to nothing as Anna died of a painful illness, and thus her cages will last until either she breaths her last she or consents to free her prisoners (she will never do this voluntarily).
That Return of Slight skill is really creative and I must say I do like the Noble Phantasm as well it's an embarrassing and effective equivalent of the 'Naughty Step'. But seriously we don't have enough Noble Phantasms based around imprisonment.
Between the gold hair, red eyes, and blimp-sized ego, I'm getting some serious Gilgamesh vibes. Funny that they're of completely opposite alignments.