Chillax my dude.
Yeah, I have agree, that was way too harsh. No matter the quality of one's sheets, this is just a place to have fun, we shouldn't shun him. However, I do believe that since he does ask for advice, and seems to seek inprovement, being blunt with him is the best way to go. And the reason I quoted you, Royd, is because while I am new to post here, I have been a lurker for quite a while. I do believe you're wrong with your claims of improvements, they all seem to be equal levels of low quality since the get go, with no signs of even acknowledging the critiques he's given, except for when he whines about them in an attempt to make people feel bad.
Well I mean, I can't even look up the guy, because all of his name's and titles have been butchered, at least on that sheet. I k ow that you found a post where it was written at least correctly enough, but I don't want to sift through things. So it still seems pretty unreadable to me.
Okay i thnk i should also say something here , it will be right that with my last Avenger-profile i was a Little bit stubborn but a with "Gladios" i want to start being more cooperable or acknowledging as you said because this i wanted to hear the ideas or suggestions of the others here before i start to make them ,and even if i make only slightly improvements it is atleast A Improvement. and i know that about my profiles i have as much Problems to hit the break like a Berserker restrain his Rampage on the Battlefield,maybe i make later like Criarino a "Selv" sheet and there where definetely a Mad Writher skill Ex Rank but to come back at the subject which suggestions for his Skill or Nobelphantasm would you have ,Crithit ?
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Okay, so, this guy Crairino started the self sheet craze I'm guessing? Thanks for the clarification, Royd.
And hmmm, Kabalisto, I will think on that. Not too sure right now. Of course, you could always give yourself a NP that wanks your stats to ridiculous levels for a time. And since self sheets aren't usually taken as seriously, you could give yourself misfit NPs for days.
And I hope that I didn't seem mean in my earlier posts, I'm sure the communication barrier was partially on me as well. You seem like a good guy, if not a bit stubborn on taking advice. Stubbornness could also be a skill of yours. XD
Posting another sheet I made. Hopefully the formatting doesn't get murdered to heck like the last one. Spent like, half an hour having to fix that.
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Faceclaim
Class: Caster
True Name: Mizukume (Tamamo Lily)
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Source: Japanese Mythology
Region: Japan
Attribute: Sky
Parameters
Strength: E
Endurance: E
Agility: C
Mana: B
Luck: D
Noble Phantasm: C
Class Skills
Territory Creation: D
The ability to build a special terrain that is advantageous to oneself as a magus, such as for the purpose of collecting mana.
Her older self already has issues with this due to it not really suiting her personality, and in Caster's case, she lacks the patience and maturity to even make a basic Workshop.
Item Construction: -
This skill is lost, replaced instead by Fox’s Promise
Personal Skills
Divinity: A
A 'bunrei,’ or mortal avatar of the sun goddess Amaterasu.
Witchcraft: C+
A form of Dakini heavenly arts, that uses materials of one's own body to enact phenomena, rather than normal magecraft which uses materials of the external world. It includes methods to determine one's time of death and secret arts to obtain influence.
As she's alot younger than her original self, she lacks a lot of the knowledge on how to use these, and seems to be filling the gap with shrine maiden skills. Rather than use it for trying to gain favors and affection, she seems more content to pluck petals from flowers and constantly ask 'Do they or don't they love me.’
Innocent Monster: C
An attribute possessed by Servants whose history and existence have been distorted by the monstrous reputations and gossip they accrued across the course of their life and thereafter.
A skill given to her because of the legend of her older self, which called her a demonic nine tailed fox. She herself never originally had these traits until later into her adulthood, but this skill causes her to have a pair of fox ears and a foxes tail anyway. She seems to be a bit obsessed with grooming the latter.
Fox’s Promise: EX
A unique skill that replaces the effects of Item Construction. By getting someone to make a promise to marry her once she's of age, she can prepare a vast swath of items in preparation for their wedding day. A cheat skill that perfectly suits this young fox's personality.
Grow up already, Amaterasu!
Noble Phantasms
Jewelstone of the CoronaUnleashed Warriors of the Sun Rise
Type: Anti-Army
Rank: D (Dropped down from EX)
A Noble Phantasm in the shape of a Magatama jewel, this is the temporarily released form of a Noble Phantasm that the young Caster does not know the proper name of. Biting the jewel and spitting out parts of it, it is possible to make an army of warriors composed of Phantasmal Beasts. In its original form, it would create new gods to be born, but as is, it's just a super powered army of dragon tooth soldier-like fighters.
Also, it hurts her teeth to bite into it, so she much prefers to use it to act as a conduit to boost her witchcraft’s effectiveness, and maybe make her look a lot more mature than she actually is.
Lore
Mizukume: When I saw her true name I wondered for a second whether this was going to be another "write a BL user up as a Servant" sheet.
Seriously though, this is quite good. Her personality manages to be, if possible, slightly more adorable then regular Tamamo, which is no mean feat.
Tamamo is my favorite character, so if I couldn't succeed in at least making a variation of her that was as cute as her, I'd feel like a failure of a human person. So I'll take that as high praise.
I had a heart attack reading the profile of a fox loli. Are those sirens I hear an ambulance or the police?
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Well, those 2 aren't always exclusive.
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