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    He was in the Meiji era what Saitama or Goku can be right now: an absurdly OP character that looks invincible because he's as strong as the author wants him to be. So it's not really my fault that he's wanked, he was already wanked when I started writing the sheet. I can change PC's rank, but Ninjutsu at EX rank is practically the basis of Sasuke's character, I can't really make it lower
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    Quote Originally Posted by Criarino View Post
    What do you think?
    That you've posted this is in the wrong thread.

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    Gally is so grumpy

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    I think they are very cool, even if they are a little OCish, i just like connected sheets for some reason. the different Awakened origins for each one are really nice, And alter's NP seems the more interesting of the three.

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    What do you think about my last profil ?
    Have i improved myself /has it become better as the last?

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    Full-power Ea level NP. Dafuq
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    Quote Originally Posted by the god of world-0 View Post
    Gally is so grumpy
    I would have to agree with Gally here actually, should be in the other thread.
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    Quote Originally Posted by King of Padoru View Post
    Full-power Ea level NP. Dafuq
    ist not at the begining as strong as full Ea ,and every Seal must be seperate broken and so all Pharaohnic Servants i made are high-class Top-Tier..
    And i tend to overpowered Charackters .How do you find the Profil beside that ?

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    From what I could understand (your grammar is still painful, sorry) and what I've read about Sethos, you've made up practically all of his background, and that NP is excessively OP. I mean, the restraints don't really have any purpose since he could just hold back and fire a weaker blast like practically every beam Saber does. There aren't any conditions that prevent him from breaking all the seals consecutively and become a god-tier because of yes, and that power scale is insanely high for a Pharaoh that isn't relatively famous.

    Summarizing, it's not an enjoyable profile, at least for me
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    Too many skillz, for one. It's still really hard to read because of the bad formatting and you should really improve it.

    Still not good and pretty much reminds me of venomking's sheets.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Gally View Post
    That you've posted this is in the wrong thread.
    Yeah, yeah, they already told me this, but as the other two parts before was posted here, I though that would be better to post that last part here too.
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    Would the people who are having trouble with formatting on here like it if I uploaded a blank sheet/the sheet format I use (or, well, the one I'm planning on using from now on)?
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    Its not very good. In fact, I'd go so far as to say that its bad. It offers very little to the Fate franchise in terms of quality - in fact, I'd argue that its content actually diminishes the quality of the franchise as a whole. A lot of its problems can be put down to the 'mobile game' format it uses, but that was a conscious decision on the part of its creators so it can't be used to shuffle off blame. And GO's problems that don't stem from it being a mobile game... I'm being polite by calling it a piece of trash. But... Nasu clearly had a blast writing/making it that I can't quite bring myself to hate it. Loathe it, sure, but not hate. That's too strong of an emotion. Only just, though.

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    There’s a blank sheet format in the OP of the contest thread
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    Servant Class: Caster
    Alternate Classes: Rider
    True Name: Zenobia, Queen of the Palmyran Empire
    Alignment: Neutral Good
    Origin: Middle-East (3rd century)

    Parameters:
    STR: D
    END: E
    AGI: C
    MGI: C
    LCK: C
    NP: D

    Skills
    Class Skills

    Territory Creation - Rank D++: Instead of a conventional workshop, an ‘Enlightened Court’ can instead be created. Zenobia was not inclined to magecraft herself, but fostered scholars and philosophers in her court.
    The court she creates has no benefit for Zenobia herself, but those she has acknowledged as her allies can utilize the court for their own benefit as they would a conventional workshop. In addition, the more talented individuals gather in Zenobia’s court, the stronger the beneficial effects become.

    Item Construction - Rank D: Based solely on her restoration of monuments, Zenobia’s Item Construction primarily grants her the ability to repair and enhance low-grade magical items.
    By conjecture, she may be able to create low-grade magical items by herself.

    Personal Skills

    Imperial Privilege - Rank C: Due to the insistence of the owner, Skills that are essentially impossible to possess can be obtained at Rank C or below for a short period of time.
    Zenobia attains this Skill by virtue of being acknowledged as an empress and an equal by one of Rome’s emperors. However, as she was an usurper and her empire short-lived, the rank of this Skill is low.
    The relevant Skills are ‘Charisma’, ‘Military Tactics’, ‘Magecraft’ and others.

    Innocent Monster - Rank D+: Due to the influence of Roman propaganda, as well as later accounts, Zenobia appears as far more masculine than she was in life.
    Besides the effect on her appearance, this Skill also influences her behavior as well as increasing her physical abilities slightly.


    Noble Phantasms
    Canticum ex Colossi: The Two Singing Colossi
    Anti-Army, Rank D+
    In the Palmyran Empire there existed the Colossi of Memnon, one of which reputedly sang. Zenobia was not responsible for their construction, but rather their restoration, the act of which silenced the statues’ song.
    As the singing stopped by the Empress’s order, so shall it resume again. Upon activation, a pair of animated, golem-like statues appear. The Colossi will then resume their song, blasting Zenobia’s enemies with a torrent of sound. Any allies of Zenobia’s will be unharmed by the attack, and instead they (as well as Zenobia herself) will have their Luck parameter ranked up for a short duration.


    Description
    Likes: Scholarship, prudence
    Dislikes: Tyrants, irresponsibility
    Talents: Wrestling, philosophy
    Natural Enemy: Aurelian


    Known by the Roman Empire as a usurper to their empire, but celebrated by her people as a heroic figure rebelling against Rome’s tyranny.
    Not having been a magus in life, Zenobia attains qualifications for the Caster class thanks to her efforts of fostering philosophy and the arts as well as the restoration of several monuments inside her Empire. However, through the use of Imperial Privilege, she has access to minor magecraft. Oddly for a Caster, she has some talent in melee combat, although her low parameters limit the usefulness of this talent.


    A responsible ruler by nature, Zenobia is kind and accepting, with a great love for art and culture. She treats the Holy Grail War as she would a war from her era, expecting certain formalities before the onset of battle. As for her Master, she sees them as a benefactor/subject, necessary for her continued existence but ultimately subservient to her.
    Thanks to the effects of ‘Innocent Monster’, Zenobia sometimes displays stereotypically masculine traits, such as aggression and a strong desire for independence, as well as a masculine way of speaking.
    Zenobia idolizes Ptolemaic Egypt, as well as Cleopatra in particular. She styles herself after her idol to a significant degree.


    As a Rider, her mount would be a camel, reputed to be faster than any horse.



    Lore
    A third-century queen of the Syria-based Palmyrene Empire. Her husband became king in 260, elevating Palmyra to supreme power in the Near East by defeating the Sassanians and stabilizing the Roman East. After Odaenathus' assassination, Zenobia became the regent of her son.
    Eventually, Zenobia annexed Egypt, coming to hold sway over most of the Roman East. While nominally subservient to the Roman Empire at the time, she eventually declared her empire an independent equal of Rome. This did not stand with the current emperor, Aurelian, and the Palmyrene Empire was conquered by his armies.
    Zenobia herself was captured, perishing en route to Rome, supposedly by her own hand, as her idol Cleopatra had done centuries prior.



    Notes
    As my first attempt at a created Servant, I hope this passes muster. Her background section feels a bit lacking…
    I also wonder if giving her Item Construction was a bit of a stretch or not.
    As for her Noble Phantasm, I had considered a Noble Phantasm based on her rebellion against a great empire, but couldn’t think of anything cool for the effect of something like that. I figured that since she qualifies as a Caster in part due to her restoration of monuments, the Colossi of Memnon might be a good basis for a Caster’s Noble Phantasm.
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    Quote Originally Posted by 34 View Post
    Too many skillz, for one. It's still really hard to read because of the bad formatting and you should really improve it.

    Still not good and pretty much reminds me of venomking's sheets.
    What formating im just writing it normal here and dont paste it from a other Programm,can you eventually explain me what you mean with it and is a difference in the better direction noticeable?

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    Alright dude, I'll show you a simple one.

    Character Image/Faceclaim: (Optional)
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    Class:
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    True Name:
    Alignment:
    Place of Origin:

    Parameters:

    STR:
    END:
    AGI:
    MGI:
    LCK:
    NP:

    Height:
    Weight:
    Likes:
    Dislikes:
    Talent:
    Natural Enemy:
    Attribute:
    Traits:
    Armament:
    Catalyst:

    Class Skills:

    Personal Skills:

    Noble Phantasm(s):

    Noble Phantasm Name
    Noble Phantasm Title



    Type:
    Rank:
    Range:
    Max Targets:

    Lore:

    Personality:

    Relationships:

    Creator Notes: (Optional)




    It would be a good idea to type it up in word or a google doc or whatever before posting rather than doing it all in one go because that never ends well.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Bird of Hermes View Post
    Alright dude, I'll show you a simple one.

    It would be a good idea to type it up in word or a google doc or whatever before posting rather than doing it all in one go because that never ends well.
    I agree, i had to learn that the hard way.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Criarino View Post
    Yeah, yeah, they already told me this, but as the other two parts before was posted here, I though that would be better to post that last part here too.
    So, you're ignoring the rules for a stupid reason. Because, honestly, "I've already broken it, so why bother following it now?" just makes you sound like a jerk.
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    He is not breaking the rules, the character inspired inspired by Shu, but is a original concept . The "gentle king" is also a real world concept, just look into the "forrest king" on Nier: Automata.

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    Uhh... Wouldn't that still belong in the thread for Servants from modern fiction instead of here? I mean, if he's based off of (or inspired by) an anime character, doesn't have an actual legend attached to him and has no connection to the Nasuverse in any way (other than being a Servant), then what is he doing in this thread?

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    Quote Originally Posted by the god of world-0 View Post
    He is not breaking the rules, the character inspired inspired by Shu, but is a original concept . The "gentle king" is also a real world concept, just look into the "forrest king" on Nier: Automata.
    It’s still based on another IP and as such belongs in the modern fiction thread.
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