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    Maria Mozart: What does the "Divine Right Of Kings (Music)" Skill she gains in her first NP do? I'm pretty sure it's not one that exists in canon.

    I'd also suggest raising Territory Creation's rank to A+ or even EX (with the same justification as Semiramis), as being able to create an entire kingdom is far greater then just building a temple.

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    Maybe its okay to turn her into a child, but diminishing her music ability does not make sense since she was a child genius .


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    Needs more Amadeus references

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    Divine right of king(music) makes so that people feel a compulsion to obey her, as long a her orders are fit into songs.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Express View Post
    Needs more Amadeus references
    She is worth more then that.


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    Servant Class: Saber

    Alternate Classes: Lancer, Rider, Berserker

    True Name: Geffroi de Charny, Flower of the Golden Sun

    Alignment: Lawful Good

    Place of Origin: France (14th Century)

    Parameters:

    STR - B
    END - C
    AGI - C
    MAG - D
    LUK - E
    NP - B (EX)

    In spite of the stoicism, there's a warming sense about his presence.

    Info

    Height/Weight: 170cm/51kg

    Likes: King and Country, God, Writing

    Dislikes: Turncoats, “Courtly Love”

    Talents: Knightly duties

    Natural Enemy: Lancelot, The Black Prince, The Hassans

    Attribute: Man

    Traits: Humanoid, Male, Servant

    Armaments: Sword, Armor

    Catalyst: Eight-pointed star badge


    Skills

    Class Skills:

    Magic Resistance - A
    Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the developed resistance that merely rejects magical energy, this Skill cancels the spells altogether.

    Cancel spells of A-Rank or below, no matter what High-Thaumaturgy it is. In practice, the Servant is untouchable to modern magi, so it would not be an exaggeration to title the Servant a 'Magus Killer'. Although born in the Age of Man, Saber’s utter dedication to both King and the Lord rendered him impervious to hostile magecraft. However, even faith alone cannot divert spells of such magnitude.
    Perhaps, there are other factors at play...?

    ---

    Riding - C
    The ability to ride mounts. While this Skill covers all beasts and vehicles, dragons are en exception.

    At this rank, most vehicles and animals can be handled with above average skill. However, Phantasmal or Monstrous Beasts cannot be ridden. Although knights are proficient in mounted warfare, Saber is mostly shown carrying the royal standard for the King of France. As such, his maneuverability -- and ranking -- is lowered.

    Personal Skills:

    At the Boundary - E
    A Skill for those who walk within the Valley, are as one with Death, and are familiar with its ways.

    At such a low ranking, Saber still receives a minuscule chance to resist death’s instantaneous imposition, and as well as the effects of charm. In Saber’s lifetime, to live a life of knighthood is to be a witness to human mortality; a "Passion of Suffering and Danger," surpassing even those of God's priests. As everyone is more than likely to die at any moment, a knight must accept Death as would a friend.
    For even in battle, one must never retreat more than four steps back.

    “Our livelihoods are a path paved with myriad hardships. Nevertheless, we must march onward -- even if it is towards our own demise.”

    ---

    Innovation: Chivalric Correction - A
    A special Skill given to Heroes who brought innovation to their respective eras. A conceptual revolution which subjugates the old with the new. Based after Saber's written reform upon the behavior of knights, denouncing many of what he perceived to be disgraceful behavior. Targeting against those of the Knight Classes, Saber is capable of weakening his opponents with every "slight" they possess: be it adultery, irreverence, indulgence, or simple dishonor. Should a flaw be identified, they will suffer a demerit in their Skills should they fight Saber. However, this will not affect the other Classes unless the Servant in question is of knightly origins.

    In Saber’s eyes, the ideal knight is one who achieve worth through valorous deeds and self-discipline. No longer is knighthood about romance or excess, but only ironclad faith and martial glory. In a fashion, Saber's values of chivalry was a main base from which future knightly orders based themselves off of -- including the Order of Saint Michael and the Order of the Dragon.

    A knight’s worth is defined by perfect prowess. A single deviation is unacceptable.”

    ---

    Knightly Paragon - A
    The ideal image of what all knights strive for, one that of courtesy, honor, and charity. A balance of principle and order, this Skill denotes one who truly upheld the chivalric code. As worthy of a knightly figure, Skills like Guardian Knight and Knight Tactics are available at B-rank. However, this Skill shares effects similar to Curses of the Readers, where the audiences’ expectations has warped the user’s personality to be aligned with that of a “Perfect Knight.”

    In a time where war was rampant and honor was battered upon, Saber clung onto those fading ideals. Aside from his prowess and kindness, Saber was also known as a man of principle; even when imprisoned by the British, he was allowed to leave just so he would pay for his own ransom. To this day, he is referred to be a “Valiant and Perfect Knight” for his complete adherence to the chivalric code and loyalty to both his King and God. However, this comes at a cost of his "Self," as he had removed all desires -- of taste, of touch and so on. What is left is a will: to uphold ancient honor.

    "Many strived for the path of true knighthood. Very few reached this apex -- Percival, Galahad, Godfrey de Bouillon, to name a few."


    Noble Phantasms

    Suaire de Turin
    Shroud Recovered from the Ages

    Anti-Unit (Self)
    Rank: B

    "O Holy Mirror of Christ, lend me your blessings, even for just a moment...! Suaire de Turin!"


    The holy relic from the Crucifixion of Christ, the burial linens which was wrapped around the Messiah's corpse. As it was a item that had eluded many for centuries, the shroud has been infused with great amounts of mystery. The strongest of all Holy Shrouds, it has become something of a minor Divine Construct. Tales of miracles about the relic were plenty, ranging from healing the wounded and sick -- some even claim it can revive the dead. Being a member of its long line of protectors until 1356, it was natural that Saber would have it.

    Upon donning Suaire de Turin, the relic bestows superb defensive blessings upon its wearer. First is the effects that keeps the body at its "Purest," which the Noble Phantasm records a memory of its wearer at their most unscathed; so whenever they are harmed, Suaire de Turin activates and would gradually repair its wielder to that moment in time. As this works passively, it can be compared to the Dead Apostles' Curse of Restoration. The secondary effect is the denial of malice; as all curses, sorceries and other trickeries are weakened before the cloth's radiance. Functionally, this grants a rank-up to the user's Magic Resistance but are rendered moot regarding physical attacks.

    On another note, it was after Saber's death did the Holy Church finally retrieve the shroud from the family.

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    Oriflamme
    Radiant Oath: Seraphic Designation MICHAEL

    Anti-Unit (Self)
    Rank: EX

    This isn't over... From my own ashes, I shall be reborn anew."

    The royal banner of the Sun, one that all but assures the enemies’ annihilation. Said to be from the times of Charlemagne, this standard now serves as the battle flag of royalty. It was said to rally the army into a state of righteous fury, overwhelming the enemy until nothing remains. That said, its bearer was said to be a constant target for the enemy army due to immense morale it provides. And as one of the few who was given this honor as its bearer and survived multiple battles with it, Saber naturally possess this standard. Originally a banner under any other classes, this Noble Phantasm manifests as a blessing -- a blessing from the Heavens above.

    As this banner depicts the Sun, it symbolizes the absolute power of the Monarchy, which none would stand in their way. But in Christian lore, the Sun is also the dominion of Michael, the Head of the Angelic Hosts. As an Archangel who smites evil and preserve balance in the world, Michael was also the patron of Chivalry and warriors. As a rare individual to have reached the pinnacle of chivalry, it is only natural for Saber to become an applicable vessel for the patron of Chivalry itself.

    Just as Saber's Spiritual Core reach critical conditions, Oriflamme will activate in the form of Suaire de Turin dissolving into golden light. Said light envelops Saber's body, before wings burst out from his back. As the light disperses, out emerge the Saber in a whole new form; one that is not the knight, but the Archangel of Fire and Chivalry himself -- Michael. From this Noble Phantasm, Saber's entire being has changed; parameters, Skills, even his personality. In a fashion, it is akin to receiving a new Servant entirely.

    But great power begets great danger. Aside from the appearance, all opponents within vicinity will be compelled to target Saber. Based upon his final stand in the Battle of Poitiers, in which Saber fiercely defended the King along with the royal standard with resolve. However, those of strong will (or Magic Resistance of B and above) can resist this compulsion.

    Curiously, the existence of this Noble Phantasm cannot be perceived by anyone -- be it Masters or Rulers. Perhaps due to the secretive nature of Saber's other side, just so their Master won't abuse the ability right away.

    MICHAEL

    "Master, we've never truly introduced ourselves properly, did we? I am Saber no longer, but-hmm... I see. For the time being, call me MICHAEL."

    An existence that is the Archangel Michael, yet isn't. Because of his nature as a non-human entity, Michael is forced to rely on a "human vessel" to bypass the Servant summoning system. However, with Michael being merely a vehicle of Authority than an actual Divine Spirit, the fusion is imperfect. As a result, Saber is a gestalt of the 14th Century knight and the First Archangel. That said, the Servant's sense of honor hasn't diminished a single bit...

    Parameters (Redux):


    STR - A​+
    END - B
    AGI - A
    MAG - C
    LUK - B
    NP - B

    Class Skills (Redux):

    Magic Resistance - A
    Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the developed resistance that merely rejects magical energy, this Skill cancels the spells altogether.

    Cancel spells of A-Rank or below, no matter what High-Thaumaturgy it is. In practice, the Servant is untouchable to modern magi, so it would not be an exaggeration to title the Servant a 'Magus Killer.' Known as the one who felled Lucifer in both sorcery and might, Saber has a natural resistance to all but the strongest of spells.
    Due to the circumstances of Saber's summoning, the ranking of the Skill is restricted to A-rank.

    "Useless, your foul sorceries will never lay even a scratch upon my person!"

    ---

    Riding - (-)
    The ability to ride mounts. While this Skill covers all beasts and vehicles, dragons are en exception.

    Saber has no need for mounts, for God has provided him and other angels with majestic wings. Capable to covering leagues for short amounts of time, those limbs work just as well as any other vehicles. However, as he is unable to use them during Spirit Form he is severely limited outside of combat.

    "...Sorry Master. To the subway station, then."


    Personal Skills (Redux):

    Angelic Divine Core - B
    A Skill that expresses one being a perfected angel from birth. A composite Skill that comprises the Skill Divinity, preserves the absoluteness of the mind and the body, repels all mental interference, prevents the body from growth and prevents the figure from change no matter how much calories are absorbed. As angels are simply the vehicles for a higher being’s power, the rank of this Skill is half that of the divine presence in question it draws power from. Unlike the Skill’s Goddess counterpart, rank can be influenced by an angel’s nature, such as being a Fallen or Guardian Angel.

    Normally, Saber would've possessed this Skill at A-rank; for he is the First of the Archangels, God's Vengeance, Defender of Israel and so on. He was also responsible for defeating Lucifer, whom was considered second to God himself. But due to the state he is summoned in, it only manifests at a lower rank.

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    Likeness to God - C+
    The origin of Saber's "Authority," the permission to command over the Heavenly Host. Derived from his hebrew name מִיכָאֵל, "Who is Like God?" Aside from being a rhetorical question, this is also interpreted as Saber being the "Face" of the Lord -- one who issues His commands.

    Manifesting as a supernatural charm, Saber is able to induce entire hosts into a perpetual state of fearless confidence. Invoking this Skill along with the Gematria equations in his wings, he can "broadcast" his voice to his allies. At this rank, Saber's inspiring words allows his allies to perform 40% better than they usually do. When used upon Servants of the faith, the effects are strengthened even further. Taking command of the Heavenly armies, Saber crushed Lucifer and his followers. It was even said that his name alone was used as the angels' warcries.

    "We shall cast them down, for they defy the Lord's decrees!"

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    Mana Burst (Storm) - A
    The capability to store magical energy that imparts a magical effect similar to wind and electricity. At this rank, a barrage of wind and lightning can be conjured with a flap of Saber's wings. Should Saber feels appropriate, he is capable of infusing his weapon with said elemental effects.

    A Skill that came from an Islamic anecdote, where God had granted Saber dominion over rain, snow, thunder, lightning, wind and clouds. Along with an entourage of angelic helpers, he has the knowledge whenever to send rain or snow without effort. Only when they are "truly needed," does the effects of this Skill display its full power. On another note, Saber's Islamic name, Mīkā'īl, can be interpreted as "Rain."

    "Be swept apart by the divine maelstrom- Hm!? A-ah, Master, it seems you've caught me reciting. ...I-If you don't mind, I will take my leave now..."


    Noble Phantasm (Redux):

    Solis
    May the Light Cleanse Through All Corruption

    Anti-Army
    Rank: B

    "Flaming vigilance, vivid strength. Wrought in fire, I cast all evils away. With this, I shall shine a light upon the endless night! Burning bright, Solis!"


    Saber's sword of fire, one that was by his side from the beginning. A Divine Construct from a distant past, this weapon was considered to have cast Lucifer out from Heaven and used to ward Adam and Eve away from the Perfect Paradise. The flames glow in a reddish-orange hue, similar to that of dawn; for it is his duty to ensure mankind lives to see another day. In spite of its existence, it never possessed a real name of its own. To make up for it, Saber gave an impromptu name at the cost of a lower ranking.

    Once its "True Name" is uttered, Solis will disperse into particles of light. Soon, the light envelops Saber turning him into a miniature sun. With the Noble Phantasm's concept of "weapon" imbued within Saber, he is now capable of causing great damage via collision. Anything in contact of Saber will be cut, along with a severe burn. As this light smites all evils, it deals additional damage to enemies of demonic origins or Evil alignment. Combined with his flight ability, Saber is essentially a soaring kill zone. A special move Saber can execute is to channel his power into a sword-shaped bolt, with its impact capable of razing one or two city blocks. Based upon the Book of Revelations, it is said Saber personally threw Lucifer down to the earth.

    However, the use of this Noble Phantasm will prohibit the use of his sword, meaning Saber is forced to close in onto his opponents if he were use Solis effectively.




    Lore

    Pt1

    The Flower of Chivalry, whose heart remained pure and just. In a time where the knightly virtues have lost nearly all meaning, Geffroi de Charny stood strong and honored the code to his last breath. Even the knight’s dedication surpassed his life, as his written works gave those after him the path to become a true knight.

    Although the sole son of Jean de Charny, Geffroi was trained to become a knight in service to both God and France. In time, the young man grew to despise the current state of chivalry. The needless pomp, the borderline lack of adherence to the code -- all this left Geffroi disillusioned to the idea of knighthood. Instead of giving up, however, the young man chose to define his own mean of chivalry. Following his own ethos, Geffroi undertook a journey to steel his body and mind. When he returned, the newly appointed knight outshone others not in prestige but in power.

    Soon the Hundred Years War erupts across the lands, and Britain’s superior military tore through the fair fields of France. Soldiers march towards death, Peasants slaughtered, and villages razed to the ground. And like many lords and nobles, Geffroi took up arms to defend his land. Unable to overlook the injustice done to the innocent, the knight eagerly pledged fealty to John II. With lords and peasants alike, Geffroi aided the King's army to drive out the British army.

    Throughout the bloodshed, Geffroi was met with both victory and defeat. From the Battle of Crécy to Lusignan, he charged along with soldiers and knights alike into the war zone. Sometimes he prevailed, others he was captured; but nonetheless, Geffroi continued his quest to end the war. Although witnessing the war at its most lowest, the knight pressed on: for the people cry out for a just soul, hoping to save them.

    To Geffroi, it mattered not if the King was weak. It mattered not if they were to fight an unyielding tide. To serve King and Country is the greatest honor of them all, and as a knight, he carried this duty with reverence. With the royal banner in hand, he will bolster his fellow countrymen to victory.

    His dedication led to the decisive battle of Poitiers, where the French faced unfavorable odds once more. Despite opting for a much less bloody alternative, his words were cast aside by both King and Enemy alike; for the former's honor lay on the line, and the latter simply had no reason to. Nevertheless, Geoffroi rallied the troops, the Sunlight Banner high in the sky. Whether it be arrows, spears or the Black Prince himself, the knight never retreated. Even when riddled with arrows and lacking an arm, Geffroi only stopped when the enemy inflicted a fatal blow.
    A hero of chivalry to the end, Geffroi was indeed the Truest Knight of France.

    But as he laid on the bloodied grass, he heard a voice. With authority, it spoke:

    "You performed admirably. Even in a time where He is ignored, you still fought for the welfare of others."

    The knight caught an outstretched hand.

    "Come, upholder of honor; let us go together."

    For the first time in a long while, the skies were clear and bright.


    Pt2

    Somewhere, up in the Heavens, a figure oversaw the world. It wasn't the first time it witnessed great destruction, and it won't be the last.

    Sometime in a period before humanity's rise, a system required "envoys" to carry out its Authority. From mere messengers to overseers, they serve as His eyes and actions. To enforce a system of divine operators, a concept of "Authority" must be created. A being whose purpose is to lead, to be an ideal example for all.

    And so, it was born. The vessel of Authority, made to oversee other vessels. The Face of His authority, the one who will enforce His will.

    With that, he did; he watched as the Perfect Paradise was created, along with the First of Man. He was unflinching when he cast down many of his former compatriots, condemning them to the land below. Later, he guided prophets and saints, granting them visions of the future as well as defending them from evil. Even serving as the angel of destruction, he smites legions of demons, preventing them from trespassing upon the world. In due time, this vessel was revered as a divine protector and warrior of the Heavens.

    To humans, he was not a mere vehicle of His Authority, but a guardian spirit -- ​Mīkāl, or Michael.

    Forseeing the eventual end to Human History, Michael attempted to seek out a worthy body to face the adversity. However, many proved to be unsatisfactory; one mired in an affair, another already taken by the Grail, and several committed great dishonor in war. But it was on a bloody battlefield did he spy a single figure: insignificant when compared to those before him, but the prowess and virtue within his heart shown above the rest. But now, he laid on the field, awaiting death. This time, Michael cannot save this soul -- for the Age of Gods is long past.

    But he can give the soul something else. A blessing, so that the knight may call upon him during trying times.

    And so, it was then fellow chevaliers met face to face.



    Personality

    Geffroi's mind has been mostly warped by the Skill Knightly Paragon, so most of his original personality is lost. An "Ideal Knight" in a certain definition, Geffroi is practically unflinching. Terse, pious and loyal, Geoffroi is a soldier to rely on, but serves as a terrible conversationalist. Seeing his Master as another Lord to serve, the knight would dedicate himself to accompanying them around; whether in physical or spirit form, Geoffroi will never leave his Master's side. But in battle, he would throw himself into a duel, regardless of the enemy's strength. Pray the opponents won't rely on underhanded means to fight.

    Once Geffroi has become MICHAEL, his entire disposition has lightened to some degrees. Because of Michael is the patron of Chivalry itself, Saber has lost Knightly Paragon. As such, most of Geffroi's personality has been returned... sort of. Because MICHAEL borrowed a portion of Michael's Spiritual Core, some of the Archangel's personality had also melded with the Saber.

    Instead of an autonomic disposition, MICHAEL carries a degree of emotion behind them. Although somewhat authoritative, the Saber is equally supportive of his allies. Even when admonishing someone else, MICHAEL would drive them into improvement. In a manner, it's no stretch to say that MICHAEL is a manifestation of the "Ideal Authrority." However, the Saber's display of so-called perfection are usually offset by the occasional blunders and somewhat embarrassing moments; ranging from unable to keep a secret to privately practicing his speech, he would always lower his head in shame. What a dork.

    If there was a single flaw in Saber as a whole, it would be his Black-White morality. Believing their fight is just, both forms view all their enemy as an absolute obstacle -- one that must be eliminated. And once they accept the fight, Saber expects a fight to end in death; no matter what, only one shall leave alive. Even Saber's faith and chivalric code can pose a problem, as he is instantly hostile against the Evil opponents and may even prioritize their destruction.

    After all: Honor is All, Chivalry is All.

    Extras:

    (If there were any semblance of Geffroi's original personality, it would be his love for hearing fantastic stories. For an accomplished warrior must have an equally impressive tale to their feats, Geoffroi would be more than happy to listen to other Servant's tales. However, he can tell genuine stories from fakes, so try not to pull one off.)

    (Because of his chivalric views, Geffroi believes women should abstain from direct combat. In detail, their roles should be to support their knight/loved one, and serve as the reminder to the knight's duties. No doubt that this belief would earn himself enemies from the fairer sex. That said, the knight does give impressive fashion advice.)

    (MICHAEL is often seen admiring the sunrise. The simple idea of the world living another day, to live life to the fullest, is a wonderful thing to him. Perhaps, this is what the original Michael felt in his existence; fight on, to ensure the world can witness another dawn.)

    (Strangely, MICHAEL never smiles; he is fully capable of laughing, but that face never made a single grin.)


    Craft Essence

    Onto Paradise

    Divine Authority.

    It was their mistake to follow the Serpent's poisonous words.
    Consequentially, they left the Eternal Garden He had granted them.
    Along with the expulsion, He denied them passage to Paradise.
    It was their faults, but this brought distress in the Vessel.

    When the First Man finally breathed his last, he drifted down to the Inferno.
    However, the Vessel swept him upwards towards Paradise.
    He admonished the Vessel, but the latter spoke words of mercy.
    Softened by those words, He allowed the First Man past the gates of Paradise.

    It was a trivial action, even the Overseer himself knew this.
    But this spark in its chest, it felt... strange; it was tingling, invigorating, ...refreshing.
    This spark stayed with it, and grew, and grew,
    and grew.



    Notes

    Totally not Proto-Jeanne

    Life is going quickly right now, probably post the Relations later.

    A rather ambitious take on an idea that I had, not sure it worked or not. I initially thought of a plausible way for Michael to manifest, and thought doing it normally would be a tad unimaginative. So I took a leap at this.

    Based Saber's 2nd form format on Express's Samuel. Thanks.

    There was an attempt to cut back on the usual fluff, so feedback on that would be greatly appreciated.


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    @Bloble: In regards to Christian VII, how will he fare if his Master is confident in the Berserker's decision making from the get-go?
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    The Act of dozing off in the afternoon is a luxury indeed.
    Coffee would be nice, though.

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    Okay greate sheet.

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    Quote Originally Posted by SleepMode View Post
    There was an attempt to cut back on the usual fluff, so feedback on that would be greatly appreciated.
    simple is good, simple is best

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    Quote Originally Posted by SleepMode View Post
    @Bloble: In regards to Christian VII, how will he fare if his Master is confident in the Berserker's decision making from the get-go?
    Should Berserker see greater value in working honestly with his Master, then he'll take that option. If that were the case, then it would be an amiable, albeit unreliable partnership, much like the one Struensee and Christian VII shared in life. Berserker would insist on being in charge, and the Master would be relegated to an advisory role at best.

    Though, that's only the beginning. Much like an otome game heroine, it's the Master's job to then challenge Berserker's established points of view and teach him what true love is - or something like that. The bad boy route is fraught with peril, but a Good End does exist! Probably!

    Nice job with the Geoffroi sheet. I could swear I've seen Angelic Divine Core before - perhaps a test run? Considering the theme of the current CaM contest, it might serve as good inspiration.
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    At first I was extremely skeptical on the idea of Geffroi becoming MICHAEL, but after rereading the various lore bits and Oriflamme's description a few times, I think you pulled off what you were going for quite well. It seems almost coincidental that French Servants seem to draw a lot of their power from pure symbolic imagery like Marie and her horse just being the national symbol of French royalty, but you were able to convince me that something like a battle standard being so powerful is something feasible.
    As for Geffroi himself/herself? Does Geffroi change sex upon becoming MICHAEL or was he always male? Is he just an extreme prettyboy like Bedivere? I'm so confused. I only ask because GBF Michael is female and it'd fit far more cheekily than Lucio.
    Anyway, Geffroi feels very much like a kind of Saber you don't generally see, except maybe D'Eon. And filling that niche is a good, if difficult accomplishment. The two forms have very distinct personalities without being cartoonish polar opposites. I get a Sieg/Siegfried vibe with their overlap too.

    Very good job. I think this "lightened" lore is easier to digest with the rest of the sheet illustrating on the historical lore.

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    Way to overshadow my servant sleepmode.
    But really, Saber is cool as heck, which is also probably why i am salty.


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    Is it possible to fall in love with a sheet? Because I'm in love with this Saber (I thought for a moment they were Bedi with that faceclaim, though).
    I'd wish that my Ghatotkacha sheet becomes remotely close in quality to this when I finish it, but it's hard to nerf someone who needs mf Vasavi Shakti to die and isn't obliterated into nothing even so (also I'm not so good at sheets)

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    Geffroi is easily my favourite Saber of yours.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Express View Post
    As for Geffroi himself/herself? Does Geffroi change sex upon becoming MICHAEL or was he always male? Is he just an extreme prettyboy like Bedivere? I'm so confused. I only ask because GBF Michael is female and it'd fit far more cheekily than Lucio.
    Geff's a really Prettyboy.
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    Great sheet for Geffroi there, though I'm curious about a few things.
    Since Oriflamme compels opponents to focus on Geffroi (or Michael at that point), does it have the same effect on Saints and other highly religious opponents? And does it maybe have a greater effect on opponents that have a history of blasphemy, going against God and so forth?
    Second, can Suaire de Turin be passed onto/worn by others (kinda like Avalon)? And would the working of the Noble Phantasm change in any way if, say, Geffroi's Master managed to get a hold of the actual Shroud of Turin and pass it onto Geffroi?
    I'm also wondering why King Hassan is one of his natural enemies (not complaining, I'm sure there's a reason).

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    Quote Originally Posted by the god of world-0 View Post
    Way to overshadow my servant sleepmode.
    But really, Saber is cool as heck, which is also probably why i am salty.
    Exqusite profile my friend! Its refreshing to see a personality from my homeland!
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    Exqusite profile my friend! Its refreshing to see a personality from my homeland!
    Before i make /post my Saladin profile here which abilities would you (on everyone) atest
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    Caster of the Empire Reborn
    "Justice shines with a light of its own, Master. Shall we go mete it out?"

    Servant Class: Caster
    Alternate Classes: Saber, Ruler
    Alignment: Lawful Neutral
    Origin: Greece (5th century)
    Armament: Sword

    Parameters:
    STR: E
    END: D
    AGI: C
    MANA: B
    LUCK: C
    NP: A

    Skills
    Class Skills:

    Territory Creation - Rank A: Having restored and expanded the Hagia Sophia during his reign, Caster can create a ‘Temple’ superior to a ‘Workshop’.

    Personal Skills:

    Weak Constitution - Rank B++: Thanks to the combination of being a survivor of the bubonic plague as well as the strangely frequent natural disasters and plagues that accompanied his reign, Caster has been accorded a unique version of this Skill.
    Caster looks sickly at the best of times, and is accompanied by a risk of a sudden status drop at any time. Rather than the result of a simple disease, the effect is more along the lines of a curse.
    However, this status drop has a chance of spreading to others, inflicting upon them a lesser version of Weak Constitution. It can also spread to areas, which grant a rank-down on the Luck of anyone within them for as long as Caster remains alive.

    Imperial Privilege - Rank EX: Due to the insistence of the owner, Skills that are essentially impossible to possess can be obtained at Rank C or below for a short period of time. In cases when the Rank is А or above, even the "burden to the body" can be acquired (such as Divinity).
    For Caster, the relevant Skills are Innovation, Sacred Mysteries, Charisma, Magic Resistance and several others. Caster can also gain swordsmanship skills, but usually doesn’t use them due to his low physical parameters.

    Divinity - Rank D: As an Eastern Orthodox Saint, Caster possesses aptitude as a Divine Spirit.

    Noble Phantasms

    Corpus Juris Civilis:
    Code of Justinian
    Anti-Army, Rank B++
    As someone responsible for the uniform rewriting of Roman Law, Caster can manifest Corpus Juris Civilis to issue a rewrite of the Holy Grail War’s rules. This manifests as a mental interference attack, with effects such as forbidding unprovoked attacks, guaranteeing safety for Masters and so forth. The more far-fetched and unjust these effects are, the lesser the compulsion to follow them will be.
    The effect of these rules is limited to those capable of witnessing Caster’s announcement, and Caster himself is also beholden to the rules he creates. Should these laws be broken, the lawbreaker will suffer great damage in the form of a mental attack.
    Corpus Juris Civilis is vastly more effective on Servants with a Lawful alignments. Conversely, it is less effective on Servants with Chaotic alignment.

    Hagia Sophia:
    Church of Holy Wisdom
    Barrier, Rank A
    A Bounded Field Noble Phantasm manifesting as a grandiose basilica. While within it, Caster and his allies have all of their parameters ranked up, except for Luck. Caster can also manifest a variety of supernatural effects within Hagia Sophia’s confines, including healing wounds and illnesses, creating defensive Bounded Fields and even summoning angelic guardians.
    However, should Justinian be forced to abandon Hagia Sophia while another Servant is still inside, the Noble Phantasm can be captured. This is easiest for Servants with connections to religion as well as Caster-class Servants. Once captured, Hagia Sophia must remain manifested or ownership will revert back to Caster.

    Rejuvenatio Imperii:
    The Ephemeral Rebirth of Rome
    Anti-Unit (Self), Rank A+
    A Noble Phantasm based on Caster’s dream, the rejuvenation of the Roman Empire. In life, he came close to succeeding, but the dream faltered in the end. As a Servant, however, Caster can bring his dream to fruition. For a single, shining moment, the glory that was Rome will live again.
    As the living incarnation of Rome itself, Caster will receive a massive boost based on his fame in Roman territory. The area of his Territory Creation will also receive a vast increase. With Rejuvenatio Imperii’s effects, Caster can sustain himself with the mana of his surroundings in a very large area and can even engage the Knight Classes in physical combat when using his Imperial Privilege to gain combat abilities.
    Eventually the effect will fade, as did Caster’s would-be empire. Once Rejuvenatio Imperii’s effect ends, Caster will lose access to it and will have his Imperial Privilege significantly reduced in rank.


    Description
    Likes: Justice, Rome
    Dislikes: Barbarians, political scheming
    Talents: Legislation, architecture
    Natural Enemy: Belisarius, Khosrow I

    Caster’s true identity is Saint Justinian the Great, one of the few granted the title of “the Last Roman”.

    The core tenet of Justinian’s personality is his identity as a ruler. Not only did he seek to rule with justice during his own reign, but also made legislations that would ensure the just rule of emperors after his time. This inevitably means that he will treat his Master as a ruler would treat a subject. He also possesses a strong respect for laws and rules, and looks down on anyone breaking or bending them.
    As a Servant, Justinian remains as ambitious as he was in life. Though of sound mind, he has a tendency to overreach, putting him in situations that he can’t handle. In these situations, he has a tendency to blame others for his failures.
    Despite having a reputation as a defender of Christianity, Justinian doesn’t see himself as a particularly devout person. His motives had less to do with God and more to do with gaining fame and recognition. He looks at his life and motivations with a hint of shame, as though feeling that he should’ve been better. Justinian also finds his status as a Saint ironic, given his failings.
    His wish to the Holy Grail would be to realize his dream of reviving the Roman Empire.

    Justinian manifests as his younger self, the age where he had most of his great successes. His appearance is still pale, sickly, and marred by plague scars.
    He dresses in resplendent imperial garb topped by a mantle of Tyrian purple. The mantle is inscribed with liturgical and legal texts and symbols in gilding and is attached at the shoulder by an elaborate, jeweled clasp. Justinian also wears a circular crown decorated with three rows of gems and pearls.
    He carries a simple, well-made sword, not truly designed for use in battle but as a symbol of justice.


    Notes
    Thought about making Abraham van Helsing (as someone who had managed to slay an incarnation of the Night of Wallachia and been saddled with the identity of “Dracula’s killer” from then on - kind of a natural fusion of Phantoms), but went with this instead.
    As a side note, I imagine Sacred Mysteries as basically the Eastern Orthodox version of Baptism Rite in effect. Although I guess that it might as well be Baptism Rite anyway (or not, I’m too lazy to research the subject more deeply), since the whole break of communion thing between the Catholic and Orthodox faiths hadn't happened at that point.

    To be perfectly honest, I wasn't really sure about Corpus Juris Civilis’ effect. It's a major part of his legend, but the ability write (or rewrite) laws can only have so many interpretations. Another idea I had for it would’ve been punishment based on past misdeeds, but that seemed a little vague.
    With all the tricks Caster has, he might be a teensy bit powerful. But then again, I guess one of the greatest emperors of the Byzantine Empire ought to be. It would be neat to see a byzantine emperor (probably Basil II) with some Varangian guards though. Vikings everywhere!

    But man do I suck at writing character descriptions.
    Also, after writing this I suddenly regret not making him more justice-obsessed. He could’ve made a great sentai-style character.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Shiki-pon View Post
    Great sheet for Geffroi there, though I'm curious about a few things.
    Since Oriflamme compels opponents to focus on Geffroi (or Michael at that point), does it have the same effect on Saints and other highly religious opponents? And does it maybe have a greater effect on opponents that have a history of blasphemy, going against God and so forth?
    Second, can Suaire de Turin be passed onto/worn by others (kinda like Avalon)? And would the working of the Noble Phantasm change in any way if, say, Geffroi's Master managed to get a hold of the actual Shroud of Turin and pass it onto Geffroi?
    I'm also wondering why King Hassan is one of his natural enemies (not complaining, I'm sure there's a reason).
    To answer your question:

    No matter how faithful the opponents are, they are all equally compelled to attack MICHAEL. The only saving grace is their Magic Resistance; this is because in real Oriflamme was considered a major morale-booster for France's enemies, and would commonly try to remove it for strategic purposes.

    And as for the Shroud, it is possible, but given how weak Geffroi is when compared to other Sabers, it's best to let him hang onto it. And should the Master somehow possess the Shroud beforehand, it's healing effects will be amplified in Geffroi's presence. That aside, the Shroud also serves as a good Catalyst in summoning the knight.

    The reason behind King Hassan as Natural Enemy is on the basis of the Assassin's modus operandi. As his beliefs is against such "underhanded" methods, Geffroi would despise working with him. On the other hand, MICHAEL would be neutral about it; as the real Michael also took upon the role of judging and guiding souls onto Heaven. As such, he would regard The Old Man as would a co-worker.
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    That's a pretty cool Justinian Servant Shiki-pon. After my absurdly wanked and indulgent Justinian Alter sheet, it's nice seeing a more grounded take on the guy. That said, I do have some minor critiques. First, if he has Divinity from being an eastern orthodox saint then wouldn't just giving him Saint make more sense? I know St. George had the same thing, but I'm just curious why you made that choice.

    Also, is there any particular reason he doesn't have Item Construction as a Class Skill? At the very least I'd imagine he could summon various holy relics from the Hagia Sophia...

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    Quote Originally Posted by RoydGolden View Post
    That's a pretty cool Justinian Servant Shiki-pon. After my absurdly wanked and indulgent Justinian Alter sheet, it's nice seeing a more grounded take on the guy. That said, I do have some minor critiques. First, if he has Divinity from being an eastern orthodox saint then wouldn't just giving him Saint make more sense? I know St. George had the same thing, but I'm just curious why you made that choice.

    Also, is there any particular reason he doesn't have Item Construction as a Class Skill? At the very least I'd imagine he could summon various holy relics from the Hagia Sophia...
    Because I forgot that Saint was a skill. I guess I was looking at Martha a bit too much as far as inspiration goes (even though she too has a version of that)...
    I guess another angle at it would be that the Saint skill (at least based on its effects) is very much the Catholic kind, as the skill grants miracle-ish effects. The Orthodox church, as far as I can tell, doesn't have this particular stipulation for their saints, and thus the ability to cause miracles wouldn't be reasonable either, soooo... (There's also the note that the Catholic church makes people saints, whereas the Orthodox view seems to be acknowledging saints - this is coming from a cursory glance at their doctrines)

    As for Item Construction, in my opinion the Servant has to be capable of actually making the items instead of just possessing them (although I guess that that would be Item Construction (False)). Justinian mostly has a reputation for architecture, which I wouldn't consider worthy of Item Construction.
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