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Surtalogi Ravioli Ravioli don't lewd the Jutenoli.
Surtralogi is Surtr's flame that he brings to the End of the World Party to engulf the world with, and his sword is just a sword of light and he's so fire his skin is charred black.
Basically he's a big, dumb, masochistic, pyromaniac and no, stop, please don't make him into a Servant before you think about it more in-depth without A+++ and EX parameters flying everywhere.
No, this is Jehanette.
Last edited by Historia; March 30th, 2018 at 07:43 AM.
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I don't really get it this is supposed to be AU Jeanne or something. But as far as I remember, St. Catherine sword is the same sword as La Pucelle, or this is the same sword with different effect because different experience or smth.
But as a sheet, this is really good.
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Ignoring TM terms and make it simple, yes. The Lostbelt Servants come from timelines that supposed to be pruned/destroyed. Because their timeline harsher than the main timeline, they are naturally stronger than ours. Not really sure if that means they simply stronger or literally have different abilities from the main timeline or similar case with Arthur and Musashi.
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The current info is just Lostbelt>main timeline. The last bit is just my speculation.
Last edited by Spartacus; March 30th, 2018 at 09:11 AM.
I really like the sheet but it feels very disconnected from the Jeanne we know, to the point where it feels more like a different character entirely rather than a different aspect brought on by a different class.
If your intention really was ignoring Ruler completely than no problems there, my only criticism is that her sword Noble Phantasm is very uninteresting when compared to the ring, it feels weird to have a Saber whose sword isn't the main NP.
Gally’s depiction is more historical based than waifu pandering.
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Nah, I was just messin' with ya.
This is Lostbelt Jeanne, so to speak. You were correct. When more info is released I'll make changes accordingly. As for the sword:
St. Catherine isn't La Pucelle.Originally Posted by fate apoc mats
St. Catherine = a sealed Durandal.
The reason its broken in half is because Jeanne actually broke it in half herself.
Originally Posted by jeanne d'arc biography siteYou know, where she broke it.Originally Posted by from her trials
Yes, she is. Because she's Jehanette, not Jeanne. The only way that might be plausible or feasible is in Grand Order. In Lostbelts. At least that's how I see it.
Last edited by Historia; March 30th, 2018 at 12:09 PM.
I feel like A+ Charisma is a tad too high for Jeanne. I understand she was beloved and all, but A+ is the level of Gilgamesh who ruled the entire world in his lifetime. If you want to keep the A+ rank, I'd suggest swapping Charisma with some more specialized Skill specifically based on inspiration, like I'm pretty sure you had in past versions of this sheet.
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I agree with RoydGolden. Canon Jeanne's Charisma is C, A+ seems too high.
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I'm bad at this.Originally Posted by Historia
Weird, because they mentioned it here:
https://fateapocryphathetranslation....l/glossary-ra/
To be fair tho, it just uses St. Catherine sword to activate La Pucelle, not the actual ability of the sword itself.
Oh, and I never doubt you about the whole broke the sword thing and other historical descriptions. It just I'm being nitpicky there is no mention of it at all.
For those who don't like links:
Now,Originally Posted by glossary ra, apoc
I have no idea what the actual ability of the sword itself is. Really, it has no ability. It was just found in perfect condition and was regarded as magical because of that. I tied it to Durandal because St. Catherine's sword is speculated to be Charles Martel's and Charles Martel = Charlemagne's grandfather. Also, see below:
Sword of St. Catherine Durandal - in perfect condition - never loses its sharpness - very high quality - indestructible - given by an angel - granted by an angel - five crosses - three miracles - symbol of faith - symbol of power - sword of a martyr - sword of a martyr
Errrr, by not mentioned at all, I mean that St. Catherine being the same sword as the one used on La Pucelle. Never did I doubt you about the lore bits (I mean, I did say the sheet is good). My fault for merging different sentence on the last paragraph.
To make thing more clearer because I'm really bad at English, my only problem I have from the start till the end is: no mention on La Pucelle???
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Things like when to use the proper tenses; when to use 's' or not on non-quantifiable words such as feel/feels, thought/thoughts, etc; limited vocabulary making my sentences not as effective as I want them to be; 0 sense at reading between the lines; spell checking numerous of times manually and grammar checkers still leave my sheets as grammar mess; constant typos and many more. Which resulting in failure to express myself the way I intend to be, and generally trying to explain my intention make things more confusing than solving them such as the case above.
I don't have the right to complain about grammar, so no comment on that (I believe others already mentioned it numerously). The sheet I remember is your Goliath and I find him unjustifiably wanked. I generally very open with wanks because those are my favorite things, but things need to be explained why they get the wanks to make them works and limit the number of NPs they own.
Makes sense. Well, like I said it's a good sheet and my only problem with it is the lack of focus on the sword, though what others have said about Charisma being too high is true as well.
I was going to say that being Lostbelt I would have expected her to be even more different from the Ruler we know than she is now, but we haven't seen any Lostbelt servants besides Anastasia so who knows how different they'll be.
I'm mainly reaffirming this for myself in written form. I never wrote any of this down and most the details and justifications are in my head.
By no mention of La Pucelle, you mean in the sheet itself? Well... it says it right there: the sword is a catalyst. This Jeanne abandoned her faith in favor of her fate. There's nothing to mention about La Pucelle because, for this Jeanne, invoking the name of the Lord wouldn't really do anything for her.
If I were to delve deeper about the sword (again, just jotting down random thoughts): St. Catherine was also a martyr and followed a road eerily similar to Jeanne's and kinda somewhat not really to Roland's, so you could also spin it as the sword actually being a crystallization of faith and (often tragic) fate itself. To highlight:
St. Catherine Jeanne Roland visited by angels at young age visited by angels at young age in service of a man regarded as a saint at young age went on journey of faith went on journey of faith went on journey of faith imprisoned and tortured; never relented imprisoned and interrogated; never relented outnumbered and mortally wounded; never relented executed by the sword burned at the stake died of his injury soul sent to Paradise soul sent to Paradise soul sent to Paradise martyr martyr martyr
Though Hector and Penthesilea probably don't count... both had tragic fates, too.
So, as Excalibur is the crystallization of the wishes of humanity, Jeanne's sword is its faith? Its fate? Desires?
But all that is just me reaching more than I should be and can be taken with a grain of salt. I have no idea what I'm talking about anymore, I'm just rambling nonsense at this point to be honest.
In any case, I'll probably add more to the sword in the future once I have a clearer understanding and can put it into better words. Oh, and as for the sword healing people: Jeanne was said to have healed people with her presence (as had St. Catherine herself). So there's an explanation for that.
Everything is subject to change.
Note: Berserk music.
Note: appearance.
Note: bio.
See: Lostbelt.
She's basically a female Griffith without a Guts to make her forget her dream and turn Femto.
Last edited by Historia; March 30th, 2018 at 04:47 PM.
Now i understand why i found the sword which Jeanne drew in apocrypha (Anime) somehow familiar...!
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Servant Class: Lancer of Jiangsu
Alternate Classes: Saber, Caster, Berserker
True Name: Han Xin, Peerless General of Western Han
Alignment: Neutral Good
Place of Origins: China (Qin Dynasty)
Parameters:
STR - B
END - B
AGI - A
MAG - D
LUK - D
NP - B
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