It's a catamaran.
It's a catamaran.
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Hate to say it, but you really need to work on your spelling. The entire lore section is an utter mess (to use a mild example- you spell Angra Mainyu 3 times, with a different wrong spelling on each occasion), and not just because it's presented in the form of an ugly wall o' text. Also to be honest, this is verging on belonging the Modern Fiction thread given how little the backstory you provided has to do with either real-world mythology or TM canon. He's effectively your fanfic OC who happens to share the name EMIYA and wield broadly similar powers at this point, no offense.
There's other comments I could give (for instance, Riding is a Class Skill of Sabers you forgot to include, "Master of all skills" should really be Expert Of Many Specializations and his NP has just about the blandest name imaginable) but until you work out your spelling, grammar and formatting properly, it really isn't worth the effort to muster a proper critique, as much as I hate to say this.
Eh, I'll just delete it then.
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Ok, just raised the catamaran joke, I'm gana fix that.
"Oh, Master, would you like some tea? Sit right there and I'll prepare it--I SAID SIT RIGHT THERE."Source: https://www.pixiv.net/member_illust....st_id=58804982
Class: Saber
Alternate Class: Berserker
Alignment: Neutral Good
Origin: Historical
Region: Japan
Epithet: Neat-Freak Snapping Turtle
Parameters
Strength: C
Endurance: C
Agility: C
Mana: E
Luck: D
NP: C
Height/Weight: 6’0”/170lbs
Gender: Male
Likes: Gracia, Nobunaga, Ieyasu, Hideyoshi, tea ceremony
Dislikes: Akechi Mitsuhide
Talents: Tea ceremony
Natural enemy: Those who defile the tea ceremony
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance: (E)
Magic Resistance grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether.
Because he was alive during a time when Mystery was very thin--and actively getting thinner from the actions of a certain warlord--a naturally bottom of the barrel rank in Magic Resistance shouldn’t be any surprise. He possesses it simply because of his Class.
Riding: (C)
Riding is a Class Skill of Rider and Saber class Servants, denoting the ability to ride mounts and vehicles. Rider-class Servants will typically possess a high rank. It is said that dragon type mounts are an exception, requiring a different ability other than Riding.
Most vehicles and animals can be handled with above average skill. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasmal Species such as Monstrous Beasts. Because he does not have an anecdote of riding anything special or worth mentioning, he receives a low rank in this Skill for a Saber.
Personal Skills:
Berserk: (C)
Berserk is a composite Skill of Bravery and Mad Enhancement. Grants the user the ability to negate mental interference such as pressure, confusion and fascination. It also has the bonus effect of increasing melee damage.
A cantankerous individual throughout his life, Saber’s fury however isn’t directionless or without cause...most of the time. The mysterious death of his beloved wife Gracia threw Saber into the pits of despair. But rather than fold inward on this crushing depression, Saber instead channeled it outward, making his temper even more uncontrolled and his mental state even more precarious. The Bravery aspect of this Skill comes from Saber’s actions during the campaigns of his lord Oda Nobunaga. During his very first battle at the ripe age of 15, Saber’s face was scarred by shrapnel from an enemy catapult. Nobunaga herself allegedly told the lad that those scars were a sign of [bravery], so that’s how they came to be remembered by history.
Eye For Art: (B+)
Eye For Art is infatuation with works of art.
The son of “the walking dictionary of Ashikaga”, Saber was taught the value of art at a very early age. Famous for bringing home artistic souvenirs after a battle just to place carefully in his tea garden, Saber had a habit for collecting only impressively ornate weapons rather than paintings and the like. A disciple of the tea ceremony master Sen no Rikyu, Saber became a certified tea ceremony master at some point; an honor that delighted his sense of infatuation with the ceremony. A gentleness that doesn’t match the rest of his personality at all.
If he happens to see a Noble Phantasm that possess artistic anecdotes, there is a high chance that he might be able to figure out its true name. Bonus modifier is applied if the Noble Phantasm in question has anything to do with the tea ceremony, or tea in general. Somehow.
Yagyū Shinkage-ryū: Swallow Takes Flight: (C)
One of the oldest Japanese schools of swordsmanship that came about towards the end of the Sengoku period that strayed from the previous methods that focused exclusively on the concept of duels. With the advent of muskets, and the changing style of war in general, the school of Ichi-no-tachi (sword that only cuts once) was no longer feasible. In addition to changing the stances and the overall length of the swords used, the strategy of the Shinkage school takes into account the geography of the terrain, the hour of battle, and other parameters.
At its core, Yagyū Shinkage-ryū expresses the “power of adaptability”. Similar to Eye of the Mind (True), it is a practice refined through intense experience. Saber is thus able to grasp the flow of battle through a variety of variables, including most martial techniques of the enemy (should they have one). After grasping the technique of the enemy and the specifics of the terrain, Saber is able to adapt his actions to its greatest effectiveness in order to return to the offensive. If Knowledge of Respect and Harmony makes one’s moves impossible to follow, Swallow Takes Flight makes it impossible for others to gain a stylistic or territorial advantage over Saber. Most of the time.
Also functions as Projectile (Sword) of the same rank, allowing Saber to throw either of his swords with fair accuracy. They don’t come back when called, unfortunately.
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That's how we do the front-page markup. As to trying to further organise that, I think we've probably passed the point of being able to usefully sort Servants beyond their cultural category.
Keeping an eye on this, but waiting another day or so for any other disputes to come in before I update.
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I don't think i fully understand whats going on with Tadaoki's first Noble Phantasm.
Let's say he attacks someone with the Katauta pattern?
He attacks five times, then attacks even more time and finishes with another 7 attack combo while his opponent is distracted by how nice the sword is?
Basically, yeah. I just put the meter numbers down without really explaining what the numbers mean. He can then repeat the Katauta pattern of five slashes, seven slashes, and seven more slashes since it's unique to Katauta.
Just a small correction. On the Servant list you have Black Knight as British. She's actually French.
https://pastebin.com/FUiYgnw6
I could sort by alphabetical order, Daneel, if you wanted. It just requires some simple regex, so it's not like it takes a huge effort. I don't know if it'd actually be useful, though. Sorting based on something else would require a lot more time, I think, I'd basically have to go over everything again.
There is another Olga sheets and she is categorized as a Christian Servant instead of Scandinavian.
Also, if they are Mythological Heroes, I think they should be categorized on their respective legend instead of nationality, just like Medea and Astolfo.
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By nationality and letter of the alphabet, I believe.
https://pastebin.com/qmRCgt7s
There we go. Everything's (previous index + update) now been sorted by nationality, then class(es), then name.
That's look good and orderly.
I'm still gonna suggest that my Olga should be in Christianity and Judaism for consistency sake with other Olga and saints.
But you doing a job that you are not obligated to do, so I can't exactly complain about it.
Me and a few buddies are hosting a bit of a Fate RPG channel on Discord. Where would I go about making a (proper) recruitment post? Fanfic sextion of the forum or general?
After some in depth scourging, only fault is that venomking's Meleager is in the British section when he should be in classics.
Anyways, thank you.
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