Yes.
Please compare the powerlevels with other Servants first.
Yes.
Please compare the powerlevels with other Servants first.
Caster Artoria: For starters, Double Summon is strictly restricted to granting attributes of the Cavalry classes and Extra classes. At least, that's what I've heard. Keep the Magic Resistance, yes, but you can go without Riding. Also, Artoria's Magic Resistance states that she has it because of her dragon blood, so naming it Magic Resistance (Dragon) is unneeded. Secondly, Mage Craft should be Magecraft. One word, not two. Thirdly, EX-Rank Charisma just rubs me the wrong way too. And no Artoria variant has ever had that Skill any higher than B-Rank. Honestly, you could have just left it at A-Rank because EX-Rank seems excessive. Fourthly, Prath-Ddraig and Caledvwich are something I feell would be better combined into one thing. And finally, use the spoiler tag for the background information.
But since you are new here, I feel a little bad about tearing your sheet apart like this. Firstly, the backstory for this "if" Artoria is fairly interesting. Secondly, your Noble Phantasms are fairly solid, they basically amount to magic staff, beam-sword, army summon, and summon castle. But to your credit, they aren't OP. However, some clarification on what the False Life duplicates of the Knights of the Round Table can do would be appreciated.
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Lambda-Nu: For starters, I don't see why their can't be exceptions to that Double Summon rule if its real, especially since this is all in good fun. I was going to give some reason for me keeping riding, but then I thought of something better to replace it with, thank you for that. Sorry about the Magecraft thing, I started this on Word, and it said it was wrong, and so on and so forth. I already addressed the Charisma thing, twice, also I think I ended up mistaking the A in instinct, on the wiki, for being for Charisma, hence the extra extra effort. With Prath-Ddraig and Caldvwich, they are different weapons, with different effects, albeit ones that work in conjunction. Prath-Ddraig is basically the reason behind many of her high paramaters and skills, without it her Mana would go down to B, as well as all her skills save Magic Resistance, Charisma, and what was formally Riding (now Respect of the Dragons). As for the sword, it's power is enhance with the help of Prath-Ddraig, and was designed to be used with it, but can act without it.
Thanks for the criticism, and I'm glade you liked what you did of my servant Idea. Feel free to expand on this versions story if you like.
From the wiki:
But do whatever you feel like.Double Summon (二重召喚ダブルサモン, Nijū ShōkanDaburu Samon ) is a rare Personal Skill possessed only by a few select Servants, it permits a Servant to simultaneously possess Class Skills from two distinct classes. It is limited only to some of the extra classes, the cavalry classes, and 'modern classes' like Gunner.
I was actually working on that critique for quite a while, so I couldn't see that it was already addressed. But as for your explanation of Prath-Ddraig and Caledvwich being different NPs, fair enough, I guess.
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So, unfortunately, Stan Lee has passed away just today. Someone's gonna make the obligatory "hypothetical-Class-class-Stan-Lee" sheet, and by God, it's gonna be me. Though, I might hold off on making it if you guys think it's too soon. What do you guys think?
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Name: Sarah Winchester
Class: Archer
Gender: Female
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Height: 147 cm
Weight: 51 kg
Source: Historical Fact
Attribute: Man
Parameters
STR: D
CON: E
AGI: D
MGI: B
LCK: E
NP: C
Personality
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Magic Resistance: C
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Independent Action: A
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Henry
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Adam Coons
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Winchester Mystery House
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Personal Skills
Golden Rule: B-
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Marksmanship (False): D+
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Victimized Shell: A
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Originally Posted by FSF 5, Chapter 14: Gold and Lions IThough abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.
Speaking off, I'm trying to come up with a Skill that references the copious amounts of cameos Stan's made in Marvel properties, but I'm not sure what the effects would be. I'm thinking something like creating a duplicate of himself that shows up whenever "something important" happens, but cannot interfere, referencing the theory of MCU Stan being one of the Watchers. Or would that be better off as a Noble Phantasm?
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Olav: First of all, the background section is too small and gives very little information. Most of what I could say about it has already been covered by Royd, though. But your grammar is still horrid. Whatever you did with your Fenris sheet in the contest, that is what you should stick to because that is by far the best your grammar has ever been. I can understand if English isn't your first language, but the fact that you have shown that you can improve on it but you choose not to is infuriating. While you did do a good job of keeping the sheet focused around a single concept and grounded in his actual lore, your grammar is still lacking.
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I remember that happened to me once with my Lady Sun sheet. Royally sucked.
Yeah, that's what I was thinking about after I typed it. He could actually use it to do some Tsukishima like things, though to a lesser extent.
Also, Servant Stan Lee and Servant Shakespeare would get along real well or be the greatest rivals in a Grail War.
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Actually, it'd be even cooler with Servant Dumas.
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