Seriously though venomking, if you want some actual feedback you need at the very least to use more coherent formatting. Skills should go after parameters and before NPs, not awkwardly jammed in the middle. You should also include descriptions of the Skills you include, both generic and preferably for the particular rank as well.
There's a lot of other things that need to be fixed up as well, but that's one of the first.
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