1. Ayakashi (Cynthia Beautemps): Intriging character. Personality comes together well. Motivations fall into place. The Servant is even rather fitting. All-round just a really well thought out submission. (tl;dr EFFORT)
2. Dranes (Wilhelm Lund): Fairly standard character with a background that's par-the-course. That being said, it is the first sheet that immediately stuck with me and a decent bit of effort went into crafting his skills. [tl;dr Nice first impression.]
3. Katie (Nishizumi Asuza): Kinda lazy. Really low effort sheet. Character is pathetic. Powers are pathetic. Story is also pretty generic and I can't say I saw anything that stood out about her. Honestly, kind of a lame sheet. Fucking endearing though. [tl;dr Pity party for this scrub.]
4. Vritra (Vajra): About what I'd expect from Vri. Not really impressive just going off of what's presented, but the potential shines through. The sheet presents more of the character as a person and- going off of this- promises an interesting dynamic with the Servant. [tl;dr Vri's chuuni is showing]
5. Verg (Kaimana Kawai): Thought out character with fully fleshed out personality and background. Abilities are carefully considered as is the Servant. All alround a solid sheet. Much kawai. [tl;dr It's a fucking Verg sheet.]
6. RacingeR (Harikawa Nanase): Fairly interesting history, but one that has been done many times before. The powerset is kinda interesting and the Servant choice clashes with the master a bit. So that's a plus. But there's not much presented in the sheet that jumps out and says "root for me". [tl;dr Seems cool in a fight. Not so much anywhere else.]
7. Bloble (Emily Lexington): Much better than the first submission. Honestly enjoyed reading the story... up until about the twist in the middle. Seemed kinda forced. Still, the character itself is very much the star of this sheet. Truthfully, you'd probably be higher if everything else didn't feel so tacked on. [tl;dr Strong start, weak end.]
8. Hero (Arthur Mitchell): Nothing too special, but better than the later submission. Nothing too out of the ordinary, yet a refreshing departure from the street rat orphan character. Well-rounded, I guess. Has some potential as far as interaction goes with a moderately interesting mechanic to boot. [tl;dr A very safe character.]
9. Airen (Ryoko): Kind of a meh sheet. The standard Airen. Not terribly interesting at first glance. The only saving grace is potential interactions with the Servant as well as the other PCs. Just barely manages to beat out sheets with less lasting appeal. [tl;dr Step it up.]
10. Palad1n (Tennouji Asuka): Really hard to rank it at this spot. In my opinion the sheet is a good example of simple done best. Focused, enough room for variation, not too busy. However, at the same time, it does feel a bit oversimplified. The character's motivation- while passible- feels kinda weak and doesn't generate too much interest in who your character would become. That being said, you fleshed out your character well enough for me to like her. Just wish I saw a bit more potential in her. [tl;dr A worthy challenger.]
11. Morm (Amanda Forrest): Love you, Morm. [tl;dr Dafuq just happened?]
12. Janx (Cyä Egha): Honestly when I first looked at this sheet, I groaned a bit and set it aside. But then I took a second look and saw some potentially interesting things. That being said, it's a full-on Janx sheet and is probably edgier than Bloble's first submission. Not much stands out about the character and she becomes more an archetype than an individual. Furthermore it just feels like a bit much is trying to be accomplished here on top of the character herself not lending well to the co-op aspect. Personally, I feel it's a better submission than your first, but it kind of lacks heart and comes across as a presentation of your own memes. [tl;dr Spirit of Louis]
13. Draconic (Collin Sage): First sheet I've seen from you and, honestly, it's not a bad one. However, that being said, it's kinda weak. Even though you went through the trouble of providing your character's life story, it really only amounts to one or two sentences. It seems like you focused less on making your character interesting and focused more on desperately trying to make him useful. You sold him as a healing mage, but then you gave him a spear and a shield- coupled with Final Fantasy Dragoon moves. You even tossed in a utility spell that just feels like it's there to "make him more useful." It's... busy and doesn't mesh too well with the character you presented. But, above all else, it's basic and doesn't really have anything about it that makes it stick out in the crowd. [tl;dr It's just okay.]
14. Arkturus (Nora Blatsky): It's cute, I guess. Low effort. Not exactly a bad thing. Just doesn't offer much. The ideas are there, just not expanded upon. The Servant idea was kinda interesting, but ultimately what's here doesn't build much interest. [tl;dr Last, but not least.]
15. Mooncake (Shimakaze Sekibe): Sheet can basically be summed up as "What if Itami from GATE had a sword." Not a bad sheet, but not really a good one either. The small touches of comedy are nice, but don't really do much to elevate the character or the sheet. Furthermore, once you strip away the sword and the military position, he's just... a normal dude. His own story doesn't really seem to have any real connection to him aside from his name. [tl;dr Itami with a sword]
16. Zagrin (Kojiro): Not a lot to say about this one. I already knew the Servant choice going in, so all that was left was the master. And, to be truthful, he's boring. Practically zero personality and no creativity with... anything, sadly. He's just a skeleton- a template of a character. [tl;dr He's a tough guy. That's it.]
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