CROWNLESS (OOC)

[Rafflesiac]

C A N O N

[Tobias]

Fun fact btw, on the edge thing, I dunno if I should mention this, but um...

i actually literally ally was not trying to be edgey. It just kinda happened.

next time I will really go all out!

[Kirby]

I'll probably get the decision up by tonight, so revisions won't help unless you plan on filling up the backline, a.k.a the purgatory where you hope the players in-game die for you to fill in

[arkturus]

Isn't that life already.

[Bird of Hermes]

I'll probably get the decision up by tonight, so revisions won't help unless you plan on filling up the backline, a.k.a the purgatory where you hope the players in-game die for you to fill in

I'm 100% ok with that. I'll get on it now.

EDIT:

Done and sent!

[Kirby]

Independent feedback:


Bloble (1) - Your strongest sheet. Oozes personality, with a solid powerset that complements itself. Serious without going overboard, with just enough quirkiness to keep it charming. Overall, the personality is the carry of the character, which you can feel in pretty much every corner of the sheet. There’s not much more to say about this that I haven’t already said before.


Bloble (3) - Decent, but not really as interesting as your other sheets. A character whose background is revealed by the GM as gameplay goes on is an interesting idea, but it does feel a bit sparse for that.


Draconic - Your powerset is the strong suit of this sheet— distinctive enough on its own and not too convoluted, overall good— nothing much more to say about that. However your backstory seems a bit overwrought and almost cartoonish, and it seems to try too hard to make someone who is “good”, which in the end doesn’t seem too interesting.


Frantic (1) - If I had a gripe with a lot of your previous sheets, it’s that they try too hard to be “protagonist-y”, so as this one avoids this problem, it’s probably my favorite of yours yet. Refreshingly without the usual seriousness or angst a lot of sheets tend to lean towards, and fun without going into territory that’s outright dumb or ridiculous. Leans more toward the cyberpunk aspect, which is good.


Frantic (2) - 2D’s better.


Katie (2) - The stronger of your two sheets, and probably has one of my favorite backstories of what I’ve gotten. Not too long, distinctive, and gives a good idea of the type of sheet this is. Has the benefit of a more focused character built around one idea, rather than a grab-bag that ends up making a kit. As for your custom Strain, it’s unique enough that it doesn’t feel redundant to existing ones, but not overpowered enough to be dumb.


Palad1n - Solid, if simple skillset, and it was nice to see some make a Knight of a Noble House. However, the backstory’s a bit long. Overall, it’s good and without any real flaws, and there’s not much more to say about it.


Race (1) - The use of your King’s powers make your melee build stand out quite a bit more from a lot of other similar builds, and I think this is maybe the only sheet that actually took a vehicle. Plenty of personality, distinctive combat style, and overall a very solid contender. Personally, I think this sheet’s stronger than your Sector one.


Raffles (1) - Of course, your original sheet is your strongest. You tend to give your sheets nicely flawed personalities, and surprisingly the powerset you took was comparatively rare for what it is, compared to most of the other common powers. Not much more to say about this one, other than that it’s good.


Raffles (3) - ばか


Snow - Funnily enough, the first thing I noticed was that your character had a family without being like a hundred years old, which was actually relatively rare compared to most sheets. Good, cyberpunk-y and setting-appropriate backstory, and pretty unique applications of your powers. Overall, very solid sheet.

With that done, decisions will probably come sometime tonight.

[Draconic]

The moment of truth…

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Actually… never mind no it's not. At least not for me.

Kirby, I'd like to resign in favor of being shortlisted, if you're actually doing that. If I'm being honest, I think your critique was actually generous in saying my character was boring and cartoonish. I found four plot inconsistencies since the deadline, and I can honestly say that he just doesn't reach the standard of quality that I managed with my Fort 2 character. I'd rather just back out for now and overhaul a chunk of the sheet for the opportunity to get in at a later date.

[Typhous]

Same here. I'll probably end up using the other sheet if given the chance.

[Frantic Author]

Wtf I love 2d now

[Kirby]

Meet the roster.

Plue, as ARBALEST
Lace, as EGLANTINE

Frantic, as 2D
Prix, as LILITH

Bloble, as VIDOFNIR
Katie, as PENANCE

(Apparently Fran thought he was in Underworld so we switched him over). Congratulations on everyone who made it in, and a big thanks to everyone who applied! We got a lot of good sheets, so it was a tough decision. If you didn't make it in, but I said I liked your sheet, pick a god and pray that one of these dudes gets themselves killed.

[Rafflesiac]

i-it's okay

i'm still there in spirit

and in memes

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(Also congrats winners, write interesting posts, do cool things, good luck and godspeed)

[Tobias]

I have said it before, and I'll say it again. Kirby and my sensibilities just do not mesh.

[Frantic Author]

What the fuck I LOVE 2D NOW

[Prix with a Silent X]

Wow, I am actually surprised. Thanks, Kirby! And congratulations and consolations to everyone else.

For the record, I have little to no idea what I'm doing, so I might die if you're holding out for that.

[Katie]

you don't need to know what you're doing at all

[Draconic]

Well, congrats guys.
That said, I'm expecting people to die with all the angst that's gonna be taking place here. On the other hand, I'm assuming a bunch of you took Reform, so first death forecast is sometime in mid-to-late-2018, followed by conspiracy to cover it up.

Character formerly known as INTERDICTOR will be undergoing maintenance for some time. I'll let you know when he's ready. He'll be more interesting the next time you see him. And a lot less contrived.

[palad1n]

Grats on those who got in. Have fun!

[Draconic]

I finally feel happy for people getting in even if I didn't.

Thank god I strangled Murphy's Law. I won if I got in, but if I get rejected I still win.
Honestly, it's kind of a relief. I don't want to play my character the way he is now.

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Like, it's really bad. I'm serious about Kirby being generous on his critique. Aside from being boring, the backstory is ridiculously contrived.

[Frantic Author]

“Fuck, fuck, fuck! Aren’t any of you goddamn units slightly fucking useful!?”

[Tobias]

Having trouble with your unit Fran?


i hear there are pills for that now