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    He doesn't have his memories from age 10 and before. He's in high school now so he's gone through his most formative years, middle school.
    But is that view of the world fleshed-out and sophisticated or does it seem like something about it all that isn't all that right sounding?

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    Also, was Heracles in a very clumsy, sexist way....shipping Chris and Nadine?
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    I figured it'd be a very Herc thing to think "I like person A for weird reasons. I like person B for weird reasons. They should have babies. I bet person C will be great."
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    Dumas flashed a fearless grin at Flat and Jack as he rattled off odd turns of phrase.
    "And most importantly, it's me who'll be doing the cooking."
    Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
    Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
    Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.


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    I've neglected to comment on quite a few updates, so let me throw out some solidified thoughts after a reread.

    First up, I really like your prose. It's straightforward when it needs to be, highly immersive with a knack for observations and insights that enrich the interiority which defines the two main PoV characters, and knows how to be evocative of the weirdcool brand of Nasu narration without veering into excess. Instances where I came across a single sentence which encapsulated the core emotion of a scene perfectly were especially :ok_hand: All this is evident in your Servant sheets and previous works, but has a lot more room to flex in a first person narrative.

    Reading the fic as it updated I was given the feeling of slogging through an uninteresting section only in the second infodump to Nadine, owing largely to an unconscious reaction originating in how badly a lot of fics bungle it up. There is, of course, a need to relate this information to her in order for an active interest in pursuing magecraft and fighting in the HGW to be incited, and it goes without saying that you know your stuff, what is relevant and what can be developed further, and how to present it without reading like a reddit post, but I have to agree with a previous review from Bugs that there's something artificial in the setup for that scene. Sure, the character delivering it is embedded in the web of intrigue in ways that will be relevant later on, but what currently shows in the text itself is a contrivance of circumstance in almost getting run over by the resident cool old magus - which kind of repeats itself soon afterwards when Nadine once again stumbles into information with the Einzbern tuner. Additionally, her being such an incorrigible withholder of shits makes most of her interactions with other people seem a bit pointless in terms of how they affect her.

    I'll also agree that Nadine's attitude towards others, in conjunction with her sustained passivity, is at times irritating, and that should be attributed in how you've characterised the undue belligerence, overdramatisation, and fickle opinionation of a teenager so well I'm wondering if you're using an actual teenage girl's diary as a reference. Then again there must be some other element yet to be seen; her reactions to the extraordinary situations she finds herself in are way too subdued, and at times pointedly suggestive, to be the result of something as mundane as depression. Or at least I think so. It might be a byproduct of your generally undramatic narration, but I like to speculate for the best. It's not like she hasn't been served well by these rejections so far, with how people want to manipulate her and play at the insecurities they perceive even though Nadine's overwhelming negativity keeps her from getting to carried away with ideas of being special after all - so far.

    Chris is a more interesting character to me. Some of his establishing scenes were really well crafted and that impression continues to resonate even as he's still spinning his wheels in the present. I like the way you've placed him parallel to Shirou as a person constructed around an idea of what he should be, except instead of a more or less definable directionality inherited from someone else he's trying to impart meaning to the death of his former self without having really known what he was, or how he could do such a thing. His reaction to the vampire threat is credible precisely because it is clear that exacting revenge against the thing that killed "himself" along with his parents is the only way he knows to make amends for/by existing. His unique PoV as an outsider hasn't been lost along with his overseer status, so he remains the preferred narrator for me so far.

    On the Servant side, I like how you've given nuance to a woefully memetic FGO character with Nightingale. Berserkers are especially tricky, but you wove history and perception with the Class and its characteristics quite neatly indeed. I'm sure it will be the same, though in all probability even funkier, with Meari-san. So far Herk has naturally stolen the Servant spotlight, and you've done well to put him halfway between transcendental hero and weird guy from a completely different era. His echoing of Gil's judgment for modern humanity from the viewpoint of a hero that protects instead of a tyrant that rules was particularly inspired. Maybe he isn't the Archer Herk that people expect, but to be fair no one actually thinks of him out of the context of powerlevels anyway. In a way, exploring that side only briefly hinted at by Alkeides - a Good Character - feels refreshingly unorthodox.

    In other compositional matters, your interplay of the familiar and the unfamiliar is deft as ever. I'm confident/suspicious that any detail embedded even offhandedly is liable to come up as an important component of the plot and staying on my toes while reading is a considerable part of the enjoyment. Naturally I approve of canonical or community memes heartily if not wholeheartedly, because that would mean accepting FGO nonsense like Throne of Heroes hijinks along with the elephants and the dead hyuupostles. Regardless, well memed, my dude.

    I'll PM some speculations I have, since the validation of a correct deduction does not take precedence over the enjoyment of a mystery. Good job creating the freshest take on a cup fight since, fuck, I don't know, probably Nails, and doing it in style too.
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    16/ Stay In My Arms

    “Feels like prom night.”

    “What’s prom?”

    “I was going to prom with Krista, but she’s going with my stupid brother now. Prom’s stupid.” I look over at Mary on the other side of the back seat dressed in her cook’s apron. “Sorry, we didn’t have time to get you anything.”

    “I would have liked a dress like yours, dearie — with less leg showing of course. But you are the one who was invited.”

    This Nordstrom Rack red-spotted, spaghetti-strapped, one piece was the only thing in my closet that mom thought was appropriate for a charity function. Then she made me put this denim jacket over it because she remembered it was a church charity function. “All these clothes, Nadine. All these clothes and nothing nice for an occasion like this. What do you even do with the money I give you to buy nice clothes? Do you need me to start buying your clothes again?”

    “Don’t kid yourself, Mary.” I look out the tinted window. The rows of streetlights become more and more sparse. We must be reaching the border of the suburb, about to sink into the dark maw of the Open Space. “If that priest’s going to be there, this is about the Holy Grail War. Servants are more important than Masters, you do all the fighting.”

    “The Servant may fight, but it’s the Master who calls upon the Servant. We are tied to our Masters through this
    line
    fate
    . In fact, you could say the Servant is a reflection of the Master unless a very specific catalyst is used. But that choice only highlights the Master’s influence.”

    I think the question we’re both getting at is ‘What sort of person is Nadine Craig to have summoned Mary?’ Most of the time Mary can’t stop talking, but it’s always about her impressions of our modern world and how terrific it is compared to when she lived. I don’t have the heart to break it to her and half-hope she’ll get it on her own. This world isn’t beautiful, it’s awkward and cringy like the feathery masks they put on at fancy charity functions like the one we’re going to attend. I really don’t see how Mary and I are similar. She doesn’t talk about herself. I know her name, but I’m not sure who she might be. Most importantly, for someone who is supposedly a Heroic Spirit, she doesn’t seem much of a hero — unlike Archer or Rider. She gets easily flustered when things don’t go her way and takes offense to almost everything and everyone who disagrees with her. If you were to ask me what her good parts are, I would say that she listens and isn’t afraid to say when she doesn’t know something. There are too many people today who are scared of being wrong; they might not act like they know everything, but sure act like they can’t make a mistake. Whenever they do make a mistake, it’s a ‘just kidding’. No, you weren’t ‘kidding’, you were wrong. Own that mistake, please. I think it has to do with this generation’s obsession with constructing the perfect identity for themselves, which is why ‘having bought your Insta followers’ passes for an insult now? Doubting someone’s authenticity when your own intentions are suspect as fuck is wow, I don’t know how to describe it. I believe the correct vernacular is ‘Yikes.’

    The limousine stops as the divider descends, revealing the driver. He tells us that this is where he was told to drop us off and then shows us on the map on his phone. We quickly thank him, then exit onto a dirt road in the middle of nowhere. At least the moon’s pretty big tonight so I’ll be able to see my attacker. Fun. Last night was a vampire, are we going Frankenstein’s Monster or Mummy Remake tonight?

    As the limousine pulls away, we start to hear the constant clicking of horse hooves and the squeaking of a carriage out of a Disney movie. With one hand holding his lantern at eye level, the driver tips his top hat in deference to us like it’s St. Patrick’s Day.

    “Miss Nadine Craig and her Servant. I’ve been asked to escort you to the house,” before motioning to the open door.

    I look at Mary who looks at me. Without much of a choice, we enter the unlit carriage and the doors close behind. I take out my phone and turn on the flashlight, but the moment we start moving, little tetrahedral bulbs fixed to the carriage start to glow. Each offers as much light as a candle. I can’t imagine they’re battery-powered, so could this be the magecraft Laurent and Rich were talking about? Moreover, as the horses climb up this dirt road, the carriage itself does not sway. In fact, if we’re talking comfort, this carriage beats the limo.

    “Do you know much about this area?” Mary asks.

    I shake my head. I don’t think anyone around my age pays any attention to the local news. . . wait —

    I snap my fingers, “That’s right, there was a big commotion over this area a few years… the Ferrari Open Space I think they called it. It’s an access point for Cardinal’s Peak, the tallest of the Sisters, so when developers wanted to buy a piece of the land, some people blew their tops.”

    “It’s larger than any of my employers’ summer houses.” She looks outside the window at the dancing lights decorating a rustic mansion. No, it might be large enough to call a gaudy, rustic castle. “Those ‘developers’ must have been Caster’s Master.”
    *****

    Two doormen greet us after we get off the carriage and Mary thanks the driver. Instead of following the path, the carriage and driver melt in the darkness. After confirming our identities, one of the doormen rushes into the building to find our host while the other begs our pardon before collecting something behind us. Neither of them seemed human. When I whisper this to Mary, she simply shrugs. Right, I had forgotten, Mary isn’t exactly human either. This is normal. Nadine, you’ve got to think like you’re normal.

    “Nadine, thrilled to see you again.” The voice belongs to the tall, platinum blond priest with a bowl cut who might end up as my mother’s boyfriend. Do all priests take a vow of chastity? Whatever. Today he’s wearing full vestments with a rose-patterned stole trimmed with gold. He looks almost dignified, but it's so excessive that he’s a joke.

    “Thanks for having us.” We cross the threshold.

    “And of course, dear Mary. Good to see you again.” To which Mary curtsies.

    Looking around the lobby, anyone with taste could instantly tell how much of a mockery it would be to call this a fairytale palace. I understand why they were looking for a new interior designer. When we moved to this town there was a wave of gentrification happening in Paso Robles up north as the Central Coast aimed to topple Napa as the wine capital of California. For the next few years, my mom’s firm advertised themselves as pioneering the ‘California Style.’ She could never stop gushing about it during dinner. Her clients would always rave about that modern Spanish colonial style — it was like having a piece of the Romantic Mediterranean right in America. She would even force me to go to the Mission with her for inspiration. Luckily, Krista would always come along because her parents needed any excuse, they could to get her out of the house while they were ironing out their divorce settlement.

    The interior designer must have done her best to imitate a Mediterranean castle, possibly taking inspiration from Hearst Castle. That was another place my mom kept taking Krista and me. Never my brother, he was too important for that. Either way, converting this old farmhouse into a Mediterranean fairytale castle was a feat that would make any interior design question just how much they were getting paid. This one was too nervous or OCD about her work. This place is too cold. My mother is a melodramatic, flighty girl-child who fills her loneliness with disposable high spirits, accessories, and ‘nice’ men. That unbearable, stubborn warmth that smothers every word is evident in all her work no matter how much she tells her clients she’s just a house whisperer and ‘This is just what the house wants to be.’

    This. . . this high-ceiling hall filled with ‘solemn’ light, this ‘lush’ carpet that your ankles sink into is nothing more than a gilded veneer for what this place has always been, an old farmhouse. Too cold, too precise, the imperfections become too obvious — like an illusion that shatters at midnight.

    Then, this man must be the king of this fake Mediterranean Castle.

    “This, Nadine, is Byron Valueleta Iselma, the current head of the Iselma family. Lord Byron, may I have the pleasure of introducing Nadine Craig, Master of....” he looks over at Mary. “Nadine Craig and her Servant,” he finishes.

    So, this is Lord Byron. I’ve never met anyone from a noble family before, but if this vermillion suit with an almost too conservative posture doesn’t say fancy, the cane seals the deal.

    “Thank you for inviting us to your home, sir. It’s the grandest home I’ve ever seen.” Mary almost squeals with excitement as she curtsies.

    I try to curtsey as well. “Thank you for inviting us to your lovely home,” I manage to spit out despite myself.

    “Ho, little lady, fortuitous that you still live.” It turns out Lord Byron’s conversation partner was the bowl cut priest’s Servant, Rider. “I seem to recall a similar situation when our troop left a squire in enemy territory during an annual raid. At the season’s curtain call and we marched home, we found him, chief of a small village.”

    What do I do in this situation? Am I supposed to just say ‘hello’ to you? Okay, but what if I say it too formally? Are you going to be offended? Fuck that, I’ll say it how I want. Yeah, no one’s going to remember this two weeks from now. I’ll just —

    “Hey —!” I familiarly tap his pauldron with my fist. I don’t know what I did. God, you’re stupid. You could have done anything else.

    Mary smiles in my place, “Thank you, Sir Rider. Good to see you as well.”

    He bows to both of us and inclines his head at his Master.

    “Milord, what’s the casualty count, tonight?” He boyishly winks at the priest. That was a joke? It was terrible.

    The bowl-cut priest turns his head as his eyes sweep the room. It goes without saying our eyes all follow his as he counts out everyone in attendance. Examining the band playing some marching? music are Rich easily pulling off the classic black-tie look escorting his mistress, that silver-haired beauty who belongs in an overhyped show everyone talks about. If they’re here. . . Why is Archer wearing nothing but board shorts and a lei? I thought I was underdressed.

    Archer takes a step forward and I want to let go of everything I didn’t eat for dinner in my stomach. Why is he missing an arm of all of a sudden while acting like it’s no big deal?

    I manage to wrench my eyes from that divine trainwreck. All alone in a corner, staring intently at a wall is Berserker. She let her hair down tonight. I should ask what shampoo and conditioner she uses. You can’t get that shine with Youtube-recommended beauty products. Otherwise, she looks like a mafia boss with that suit and skirt combination, not to mention the leather jacket fashionably but unethically trimmed with fur. I don’t see her Master.

    “It would seem we are missing the Saber and Lancer camps. Berserker’s Master sends her regards, she wasn’t able to make it tonight. Berserker let me know that her Master had ‘patients’ to see.”

    “Absent two knight classes,” Lord Byron narrows his eyes. “Did you even expect them to heed your invitation, Father?”

    “The Church hasn’t been able to confirm Lancer’s Master. As for Saber’s Master, I have my own suspicions,” he smiles. “With one of Fuyuki’s founding families and five Ghost Liners present, no one in high magus society would dream of disparaging this party.”

    “This is everyone.” The finality in Lord Byron’s words dismisses the priests.

    “Indeed, it would be a shame to waste more of the night. If you can all excuse me, I need a few minutes to prepare.” Phahn bows once again and heads into the next room leaving Lord Byron to stare at Mary and me. Okay, Nadine, don’t be awkward, say something mage — no, remember what Rich said, magus-ey.

    “So, ummm, Lord Byron. Where’s your Servant?”

    He looks into my eyes for a moment before blinking twice in disbelief. His expression keeps darkening as his eyes move from my flats to the crown of my head — like I’m nothing more than a piece of rotten meat.

    “Not even a Spellcaster.”

    “No, I just learned about my magic circuits when I summoned Mary.” I offer the biggest smile that I can as I dramatically gesture at Mary who waves. That’s how you get people to like you, right?

    He looks over at Mary for just a second and then back towards me. “Get out before you die.”

    “What?”

    “Lord Byron?” Rider’s voice breaks my confusion. “Shall we not be too harsh with the little lady?”

    “I’ve met a magus who survived a Holy Grail War… I have also fought against one who did not. The difference in the quality of those two men was night and day, even if they were both repulsive people. You are nothing but a little girl. You do not have the talent, discipline, or the composure to survive, much less win. This is war, and you are nothing but a spoiled brat who has never lost anything in your life.”

    “Hmmmm, that was great advice right there. I especially loved when you —”

    “Girl!” Mary growls at me, but I raise a hand to stop her.

    “I really loved it when you talked about loss? You’re a mega-rich member of British royalty, right? You have tea and crumpets with the Queen and play polo with Prince Harry or whatever. What have you ever lost in your goddamn life? Because the only thing you’ve ever lost that I can see with my spoiled brat eyes is the color of your hair. Yeah, I don’t know what dye or magecraft you’re using, but that brown isn’t natural.” I turn and storm off to sulk as Mary profusely apologizes.

    You’ve managed to fuck it all up yet again, Nadine. You finally found a place where you could be someone else for once, but of course, there are dicks everywhere. God, now you’re stuck next to the crazy lady who tried to kill Mary. The moment she starts talking about cats, run.

    “Hi,” I tap her on the shoulder.

    Wow, didn’t expect her to turn around and give me her full attention like that.

    “Just wanted to thank you for saving us from the vampire, last night.”

    “Doctor’s orders. Do you donate blood?” She changes the subject quickly.

    “Ummm, no. I’m too young. I think you have to be eighteen to donate blood, so yeah that’s something I’m looking forward to doing next year, you know. Along with voting and not drinking. Yay.”

    “False. In this state, the age of consent to give blood is seventeen. I see, there was no personal reason to have saved you.”

    Okay after the debacle with Lord Byron let’s try a different approach, “Thank you anyway. By the way, where is your Master? They couldn’t make it tonight?”

    “Doctor is currently seeing to an important operation.”

    “Wow, operation? Is she like a doctor or something? That’s really cool. I really admire professional women.” I scratch the corner of my eye.

    “Instead of wishing to see more doctors made by women joining what there are, I wish to see as few doctors, either male or female, as possible. Mark you, the women have made no improvement, they have only tried to be ‘men’ and they have only succeeded in being third-rate men.”

    “I’m going to go get some food, would you like me to bring you some?”

    She pulls out a food thermometer from her suit and motions me to follow. When we reach the trays, she forcibly stabs the thermometer into whatever dish, snapping even crackers, narrating why each one is not fit to eat.

    “Ahhh, child, I didn’t see you come in. Come join us, come join us.” Archer waves to me from across the room as I leave Berserker.

    Archer and his Master are a fair distance away from Rich who is next to the mechanical band. From a distance, the band looks human. Each figure plays with the ease you might see at live music night downtown. But as you approach, you can see the wooden and metal joints that make up these mannequins. It’s almost like Lord Byron raided Men’s Warehouse.

    Rich regards each doll with a scornful but also appreciative expression. “When was this silk soaked in the moonlight? January. . . no June. And the bone in this gear. . . Nue? Now, where did they find a plume of siren feathers and how much did it cost?”

    It might be just a trick of the light or honestly magic, but those dolls playing the song seem like they’re sweating.

    “Okay we get it, American Patrol’s a piece of cake, but can you improvise over Coltrane changes?” The dolls start playing a new jazzy upbeat song with an incredible tempo but start to sputter after the first ten seconds. The band becomes out of sync, music lags, and some of the dolls completely stop. They’re unable to work out what the next most suitable note might be.

    “Stop! Stop this at once! Who requested Giant Steps?!” The band grinds to an almost relieved halt the moment they hear their master’s disapproval.

    Rich boyishly scratches his head and goes over to Lord Byron, Rider, and Mary to apologize.

    “That man is more trouble than he’s worth,” Archer mutters under his breath. “Child, I would like to introduce Fillia von Einzbern.”

    The woman in the pure white dress, hemmed in gold, offers me her hand. Naturally, I go to shake it. Her skin is cold and her hand is limp. Handshakes are awkward, but I didn’t know they could be this awkward.

    “Ummm, wow, you’re so pretty. I love that dress! Y-You could totally be on Game of Thrones, hahaha.” She looks at me with blank eyes. Kill me. “Yeah, sorry about rejecting the alliance Rich offered me this morning. I don’t think I’m ready for that sort of commitment.” Geez, Nadine why do you sound like a fuckboy trying to get out of a third date with someone you met on Tinder?

    “Non-aggression pact. It was not a proposal for an alliance. The criteria you must meet for that to occur is to prove yourself worthy, Nadine Craig.”

    I open my mouth but nothing comes out.

    “You must forgive her, child. The Einzbern family consists of beings known as homunculi. Due to their extreme specificity — there are often issues with mental capacity or operating time. To supply enough magical energy to a Heroic Spirit such as myself, certain less functional aspects were disposed of.”

    I nod as Archer finishes and smiles at his Master. She smiles back, but you can instantly tell that not everything is there. Her red eyes take in the information around her which her brain then processes to deliver an answer. But there’s something missing that isn’t an emotion — I think I could only describe it as a soul. But that’s stupid since the way people react to certain things is so idiotic, so fake. It’s a performance that’s built upon social and cultural cues. We praise things when we don’t actually like the thing. We change our opinion based on how aligned the speaker is to our identity and drop our uncertainty into a vat of unwarranted faith to make ourselves feel secure about fiercely defending that point, repeating the same arguments ad nauseam.

    With both this world and the digital world as our stage, we attempt to synchronize our social performances as much as possible, delivering nothing more than ingenuine expressions repeated over and over in the hope of receiving genuine emotion. We don’t realize our audience are also actors on the stage delivering nothing more than ingenuine lines according to the script. Give up already, guys. That’s the most co-dependent relationship I’ve heard of. In comparison, my generation is probably worse off than Filia or the mechanical band.

    “You’re really beautiful,” something catches in my throat. I don’t know if it’s from realizing how pure the things that aren’t people really are or it’s because I’ve once again realized what I lost with Krista.

    As Rich comes back, Lord Byron starts hitting his glass with a spoon. I guess I’ll ask Archer about his arm later.

    “Thank you all, Masters and Servants who have gathered on such short notice. I hope the food and music did not displease.” His deep baritone voice booms even without a microphone. Useful stuff, magecraft. “I need not mention we are enemies in this enterprise; yet at the same time, we are allies ensuring this grand ritual runs its course, proving that the Root can be reached in this era without the need to develop a Sixth.

    However, dear Masters, dear Heroic Spirits, there is a large shadow hanging over this Holy Grail War. The current Church overseer, a position that existed since the Second World War to arbitrate the Grail War is a Master. How can we trust him to moderate this war? That is why I organized this small gathering. For this one night, instead of doing battle amongst ourselves, let us hear from the man himself. But before that, as a show of good faith, let me present to you, my own Servant and my daughter, Servant Caster and Estella Valueleta Iselma.”

    The door opens and two women walk in as the band starts playing a different song. From the pure pressure, magical energy, radiating from the first, she must be the Servant. Every fiber in my body tells me there’s only one word to describe her, but I can’t describe her in one word at all. My vision goes wild at the sight of her.

    MGI: Orange egg.

    LCK: Blue butterfly.

    . . .

    Item Creation: Blue egg.

    . . .

    Golden Rule (Body): Chrysalis.

    The Servant screen goes crazy trying its best to identify each aspect of her and then categorize it accordingly, developing her profile. I want to say she’s beautiful, I really want to just let that be the descriptor that my mind settles on, but I can’t help but think that her existence is ugly, that the dress and her porcelain skin is made with nothing more than the demonic wish of ‘things should be like this.’ Her existence is a pure rejection of my self; it does not heighten me in any way. I do not feel beautiful looking upon her. . . all that’s left is the bitter taste of ash in my mouth. No matter how beautiful the veiled woman at the Servant’s side may be, she cannot be more ███ than the Servant. The Servant mirrors the ███ of the lady and magically transforms it into the mundane with every glance, every step.

    “‘Stay in my arms,’ really?” murmurs Rich, his gaze never leaving the horn section of the mechanical band. “What is that old bastard playing at, making it so obvious.”

    As the women take their place next to Lord Byron, Mary slides in behind me.

    “Did you see that Servant? So glamorous, like a fairy princess in the stories my Nana would tell me when I was a wee girl. Anyway, I’ve smoothed over everything with Lord Byron. He’s an incredible man. Are you having fun?”

    “Ummm. . .” Saying I’ve been to two parties in two nights sounds like a humblebrag. Last night was a pale imitation that could never stand up to the ragers you see in teen movies or CW shows. How Tolosa. On the other hand, we have this party where the noblemen act ignobly and the most powerful dress like we’re going to the beach.

    I’m an outsider. Like always, Nadine doesn’t fit. But if you’ll allow this outsider a word, at least the people in this party know who they are and what they want. Lord Byron may have told me that I was going to die while knowing fuck all about my life, but he said that right to my face. He didn’t ignore me then awkwardly huddle closer to his friends, tightening the circle in a passive-aggressive attempt to exclude. He didn’t mutter some token words about getting a beer with a guilty expression on his face because he wouldn’t come back. I can’t help but think that maybe these magi who are trying to kill each other are more genuine than the people I’m supposed to call my peers.

    “Yeah. . .” For the first time in my life, I feel included. Like I’m part of something bigger than myself and that my abilities mean I can make a valuable contribution to this ritual. “I think I really am enjoying myself.” It’s thanks to that bowl-cut priest and Laurent. . . especially Laurent. Society gives old people too much shit. I should message him.

    “It seems like Caster’s about to talk.” Mary sees Berserker out of the corner of her eye. “What’s that doing here?” she spits out venomously to no one in particular.

    “O’ heroes hailing across the seas of time, I welcome you to this humble ballroom that my dear Master and his daughter, my dearest friend helped establish for us this evening. Truly, what a remarkable event they’ve put together. They deserve all the credit for tonight. And you too, my dear Masters and Servants, give yourselves a round of applause for having the courage to come out from your workshops and stand with us tonight.” She sounds like your typical local event organizer. Ever so gracious in thanking everyone involved no matter the contribution, and always making the focus of her words ‘you,’ and how ‘you all did this,’ ‘you all made this happen.’ These words don’t divert attention from herself but aim to reflect gratitude to come back to her with more grace, with more appreciation. She should host the annual marathon at Madonna. “Now, I have the pleasure of presenting the overseer of this Holy Grail War, Father Sancraid Phahn of the Assembly of the Eighth Sacrament.”

    We all clap as she steps down from the staircase turned stage.

    “She’ll be a fine prize,” I hear Archer murmuring to Rich next to him. I want to shoot them both a look, but the bowl cut priest has already started to speak.

    “Thank you, Lord Byron for hosting this event this evening. I believe about twenty years ago, in a different Grail War in the far-east, a former overseer invited Masters to attend a meeting similar to this — only familiars showed up.” Everyone politely smiles. Rich audibly chuckles. “You are all brave souls, Masters and Servants alike. I do not doubt everyone in this ballroom has the resolve to fight to make their dearest wishes come true. But let it be known, from past experience, even the most illustrious, even the most well prepared may fall depending on the judgment of the Holy Grail. Yet the potency of this Grail cannot be denied. All seven classes have been represented and as further proof of our legitimacy even one of the founding families of the Holy Grail War has graced us with her presence.

    This is not the far-east backwater known as Fuyuki. This is not the counterfeit, heretical battlefield Snowfield. This is Tolosa, a Holy Land named after the boy bishop who selflessly refused his claim to the throne to meet the Lord’s call to service.

    What we seek in Tolosa is not a Grail of the Magi. This Grail is my Holy Mother, the Holy Church’s, sin, and allowing seven Masters to congregate is her atonement. The Tolosa Grail is a mistake.” He takes a deep breath as he launches in exposition. “After the Third Grail War in the Far-East, Master of Assassin, Dioland left a puppet that contained enough information pertaining to the war and the make-up of the 726th Grail for it to be replicated, at least in form. The family and their allies sought the aid of the American government. Their success resulted in a plan to lay the foundations for the Snowfield Grail. I’m sure you all know the strength of the Church in this country: ‘Congress shall make no law respecting an establishment of religion, or prohibiting the free exercise thereof. . .’ Magecraft, which requires the establishment of magical foundations sometimes based on religions and also incorporates certain religious concepts to broaden concepts, is no exception to the law of the land. Therefore, the Church has found much success in its lobbying of the government to deny the mixing of magecraft and statecraft.”

    The magi present gaze on with grim faces. Lord Byron’s mustache twitches at the end of each sentence. Both of Rich’s hands are in tight fists. Why is the priest antagonizing them like that? He’s handing them the sore points of their own history in this land. Just who is he trying to inform? It has to be me. He knows that I’m a Magician’s Egg that I can see through all his bullshit and posturing to get the actual message, he’s trying to send. If that’s the case why all this needless ceremony? Dude, just come out and say it.

    “With the government as an intermediary, the magi who wished to organize a Grail War and a Cardinal, representing the Church’s interest, brokered a deal. The magi formed a secret agency within the government and this Cardinal was given all the information collected by the Dioland family to prove the Snowfield Grail was not a holy relic. The Tolosa Grail is what that Cardinal and his supporters built with that information and a core embezzled from the Church’s treasury. After the debacle that was Snowfield, a single bishop who had also handled the clean-up of the final Fuyuki Grail War investigated the origins of the Snowfield Grail. He uncovered the Tolosa Grail as well as those who had invested their lives in the venture. The Church’s first instinct was to dismantle this Grail as quickly as possible, but the Tolosa Grail was almost ready to summon Servants. It would only need a few years and dismantling a magical furnace with enough magical energy to grant any wish. . . You are all magi, I’m sure you understand the risks. After much dialogue, the answer that my superiors came to was containment. We would let the Grail War run its course under the direction of an overseer. As a sign of good faith, a seat was offered to a member of the Clock Tower to respect our cooperation from the Third Fuyuki Grail War onward. The American government was also given a seat as they hold this land. The other Masters were chosen by the Grail. As this Grail was born from the Church, we believed it would mirror our values. You are those Masters. The Church has faith your wishes shall illuminate the world.

    Shortly before the start of the war, the bishop who uncovered the Tolosa Holy Grail conspiracy passed away. The team that he had left at the Tolosa Mission to oversee this Grail War, whether it be out of ambition, loss, or spite… obtained Command Spells and summoned a Servant. On behalf of the Church, I am sorry. I apologize that we did not select a better overseer. We have failed you. As a Servant can only defeat a Servant, I was given the honor and burden of Command Spells by the Grail so that Rider and I could defeat that rogue Master and Servant. I harbor no ambition for the Grail, I only want to ensure your Grail War proceeds in the manner that it should. Even with a Servant, I am a neutral party. We will neither harm nor aid any of you — all who seek shelter at my church will find it.” He ends his speech with an angelic smile.

    I can almost hear the heavenly trumpets blessing the priest with the righteous fury to make war on those who have committed sacrilege against his faith. . . .

    Too much free champagne, I need to pee.
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    "And most importantly, it's me who'll be doing the cooking."
    Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
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    Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.


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    Once again, Rich is funny in the background messing with the mechanical band, and also, what is striking is how Nadine seems to view magi. She still feels like an outcast, but to her at least, they are at least jerks to her face, and she feels apart of it as a result. Truly, she is a bitch, and that works for this narrative.

    Also, Caster's identity is...confusing to say the least because we know Circe is in this, but she is implied to be the vampire's Servant, but Caster is Lord Byron's Servant.
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    One more thing, so Ms. Craig really is just an overzealous interior decorator who Byron has hired because so much of his magecraft depends on interior design and his current design kind of sucks if Nadine is to be trusted? Also, the fact that Filia is alive and...herself is kind of funny, since Filia!Ishtar fought against Alkeides in FSF.

    Finally, I'm kind of scared to ask what Dr. Levitt is actually doing, considering how cuckoo she is now.
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    I believe Circe was only mentioned in context of what Herk was experiencing in that moment, not necessarily that Circe is an actual Servant in the war. I think. As far as I know Caster is the only class she even qualifies for.
    I agree that Nadine's character is definitely working now. She's a bitch but a bitch I see myself caring about now, and I think this chapter cements that. I can't specifically point to any one event in this update when that happens, which isn't helpful. Maybe it was her childish comeback to Byron? I'll have to read it again.

    Edit: Hm...after reading through again, my feelings are a bit mixed on Nadine's seeming sense of infallibility despite her constant self-deprecation, which creates an uncomfortable paradox. I guess she can get away with blatantly disrespecting the meeting because as a normie she's little more than an animal to the magi, so I'm still hoping she experiences something a bit more physical to take her down a peg and give her a small dose of reality, magecraft style. I wonder what Mary said to Byron?

    The weaving of post-SF loose ends and plot holes into the formation of the Tolosa story continues to be great and flow really well. Not much more I can say on that front since I'm confined to the translations. However, as a California native I have to commend you again how you've captured the Spanish-influenced ennui of the Grapevine and SoCal.
    As for how Nadine processes stats...Chrysalis should be an average score? She shouldn't have any resistance to Golden Rule (Body) even at a low rank, so it'd make sense unless I'm confusing things. But then she's described as being more ⬜ than the Princess of Silver...Hell, Nadine hardly noticed Estella.
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    I dunno, I think the whole not noticing Estella is just a Nadine thing, since she also seemed to not really be taken in by Byron's interior design and noticed its flaws almost immediately. Same with Caster's Golden Rule (Body).

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    Also, I do admit the Circe thing is really only there through tree-induced flashback, so I dunno.
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    17/ Fated Night

    My eyes finish adjusting to the darkness. The old man said good night vision is one of the most important skills in an Executor’s arsenal since most battles in the magecraft world are fought at night in rural areas far away from civilization. Like magi, those of us who have circuits can reinforce our eyes but that would give you away faster than just using your phone as a flashlight.

    Time to make your way up to the old farmhouse, Chris.

    The Ferrini Ranch Open Space. This parcel of land was donated to the county in the mid-nineties to extend Cardinal Peak’s nature reserve. The old Ferrini farmhouse became somewhat of a tourist attraction, but more than anything it’s a status symbol for the privileged of Tolosa who live in Ferrini Heights. Many of their sons and daughters attend my school.

    The farmhouse is built on a leyline adjacent to the fallen leyline at Cardinal Peak. The point they connect is to the east of the farmhouse grounds and must serve as the main axis for any bounded field that can stretch the entire estate. At the same time, containing that point means creating a plug, stagnating the leyline, dismantling any field created to protect it. Therefore, that point can’t be protected with magecraft.

    I know because I met with Lord Byron’s representatives, then helped them survey the area to acquire a temporary co-ownership and file the paperwork necessary to restore and renovate the farmhouse, including an easement to allow for public use when he wasn’t using the estate.

    That was a hard sell. The Mission argued that public access was in his best interest as a magus. A continuous flow of tourists, especially families coming to the open space for a tour of the house before a picnic offers mental constituents that can be captured and then absorbed through the leyline to strengthen the land — much like how the Tower of London functions, just happier.

    I approach the main axis, slip through the bounded field, cross the plain, and start climbing up the mansion.

    Lord Byron’s Iselma is a branch family of the Lord of the
    Value
    Department of Creation
    . Other than the public information, the Church questioned spellcasters who were part of an assault unit for a formerly up and coming middle-eastern faux aristocratic family and a spy from the
    Jigmarie
    Department of Curses
    who owed the Church a favor over an incident in the Bay Area involving the Marble Trading Company to obtain most of his profile. In any case, most of Islema magecraft seems to be based on linking astrology with human engineering. In fact, it’s well known that Lord Byron’s played host to a sealing designated magus specializing in that area. If I can’t take down an automaton there’s no way I could fight against a Dead Apostle. Let’s keep climbing up this mansion. Luckily for me, most of the traps have been deactivated, most likely because they would all go off with that amount of magical energy swirling inside.

    Lord Byron offset those inner defenses by bolstering the ones surrounding the estate. There’s no way a Servant who didn’t attend this meeting could get into position to use an Anti-Fortress Noble Phantasm to mow down the entire estate without being detected.

    I swing onto a second-floor balcony and reinforce my hearing. Any traces of rudimentary magecraft should be hidden due to the Servants inside. I can’t hear the entire conversation, but I can make out snatches of Father Phahn explaining the history of the Tolosa Holy Grail to these Masters — why is that necessary?

    “. . . Just before the start of the war, the bishop who brought the Tolosa Holy Grail to light passed away. . .”

    Why is he telling them about Dilo’s death?

    “. . . The team that he had left at the Tolosa Mission to oversee this Grail War, whether it be out of ambition, loss, or spite. . . obtained Command Spells and summoned a Servant. . .”

    I — what? No. What? I —

    Someone from the Mission summoning a Servant is ridiculous. What is he going on about? It’s our job to protect this city against the Holy Grail War. No team member would actively go against that objective. Everyone in our little team has been vetted by Father Kelsey and sometimes even Cherry. I can’t think of a person who would —

    “. . . I was given the honor and burden of these Command Spells by the Grail. . .”

    Something breaks.

    The overseer of the Holy Grail War that replaced me is a Master himself. More than that, he just announced his status in front of almost every single Master fighting the war. Sorry, I’m not sure I can process this right now. Not because what he said was too outlandish or that it was a betrayal of everything the Church stands for, but because I stepped back in shock onto a toy. A kid probably forgot about it when their family was visiting. That shouldn’t be an issue because I’m on the balcony and everyone inside is occupied with listening to a pontificating priest.

    But. . . what if it turned out that I’m not the only one outside the mansion? What if the moment my foot ground the toy into the stone balcony something moved a few balconies away — a few balconies too far to sense my presence but close enough one couldn’t dismiss what just happened as an innocuous sound. No, if the person on the other balcony is a magus then there’s no possibility they would dismiss something like that. The darkened figure turns towards me and I’m able to get a good glimpse of her face.

    Teach me, Sunao-sensei Chapter Four: Heyo, you Executor-in-training bugs who aren’t even fit for the Asura’s Pit yet. It’s everyone’s favorite holy idol, Sunao. Yosh, let’s get this straight right here, right now. Faces. . . are hecka important if you wanna be a good Executor. Heretics come in all sizes and shapes, so you got to remember all of them as well as the ones they might change into. After today’s exercises, you’re going to be able to instantly recall the face of any cute girl you might come across. If you take longer than that bam, too late she’s already gone, you’re alone forever — got it?

    It doesn’t matter if the only light is from the inside the mansion, there should be more than enough to apply Sunao-sensei’s four rules like you had to do for everyone at school for the suggested extra credit. First, her fair hair frames a high forehead with the beginning of a few wrinkles — mid to late thirties. Second, from the shape of her face and sharp features, she seems as WASPy as everyone else in this town. Next is from her demeanor. . . that doesn’t matter if she just started burning magical energy through her eyes. Okay, come on, the absence of an emotional reaction is always a sign of combat experience. Does that really matter when she’s reaching for a revolver?

    I can hear the audio that plays when you get a failing grade on the online Sunao-sensei course. But I have enough information — a freelancer who uses a gun.

    You’ve trained for this Chris, so come on already. Doesn’t Cherry always tell you magecraft is about finding the core and then swapping it as quickly as possible?

    So, what’s important? What’s important right this instant?

    If either of us were to let our circuits catch alight, the Servants or Masters inside the mansion would immediately sense us. That’s something both of us want to avoid. I’m not sure about her magical capabilities, but neither of us is going to be able to use our circuits to functionally stop our subjective time to perform any complex calculations. I can see it in her reinforced eyes that she knows this as well. These few seconds before we commit to actions will be the only thinking time we’re allowed. The second important thing is the sound of gunfire will draw attention to both of us, meaning, she can’t attack me right now. Her best option is to predict my attack and immediately counter or escape. So, I’ll —

    The beginnings of a thin black blade materializes from the cross-shaped hilt I draw from my robe. In the next moment, I’ll use the ledge of this balcony to propel myself across the gap and use the momentum to subdue my opponent. The magical energy required to materialize a single Black Key is only slightly more than what it takes to reinforce one’s hearing. I hope Lord Byron’s Caster doesn’t have specialized magical energy detection abilities. Right, this is the best option available to me. There’s no going back. My body fully commits, springing into action but —

    My opponent finishes turning around as a silencer materializes onto the barrel of the revolver. I. . . grit my teeth. Combat robes are made with kevlar and lined with protective sigils so they can easily defend against a rain of bullets from a submachine gun. Those are only for experienced Executors heading into a demonic battlefield to extinguish damned souls. As someone whose combat training consisted of mostly using an Ash Lock because he was less than proficient with Black Keys these robes are equipped with the minimum number of sigils. No matter, I’ll sacrifice the use of my off arm instead of taking a bullet to the face and subdue her before she’s able to fire again. But that tattoo on her shooting hand is a Command Spell. The moment the shot misses my forehead, she’ll call for her Servant. I can’t worry about that now; I’ve already committed to the attack. More than that, I’m no longer the overseer so there’s no issue with attacking a Master. As a member of the Church, there’s nothing wrong about killing a heretic.

    She narrows her eyes. Go on, pull the trigger already. If you don’t. . . .

    Her eyes widen as her grip on the weapon slackens.

    “What?” But I can feel it as well. Behind me is a burst of magical energy making whatever was utilized to materialize my Black Key and her silencer paltry in comparison.

    A silver slash.

    Using all my strength, I twist my body in mid-air. Sparks fly as the saber clashes against my Black Key, lighting up my attacker’s face. Its painted features are partly scratched off — you can see the wood fibers splintering off, almost as if a certain someone had stepped on it.

    Oh. . . I was wrong when I said there were no defenses other than the bounded field. There must be toys like this one scattered at key points, acting as sentries. Either my stepping on it or the magical energy from materializing my Black Key must have set it off.

    The arm holding the Black Key trembles. The wooden doll is stronger than a regular human. It wouldn’t be too much of a problem if I could use both my hands, but my off arm was already in position to take that Master’s bullet. Neither would it be too much of a problem if both my feet were firmly planted on the ground because I could divert the attack and retreat.

    My mid-air defense may have saved my back from a nasty gash, but I lose the exchange as well as all momentum. That is to say, I’m thrown away from the mansion towards the ground.

    The moment I’m thrown away I hear a silenced gunshot. By attacking one of the sentries she triggered the alarm or perhaps the alarm was already triggered the moment the wooden doll’s magical formula was activated and she only fired to protect herself.

    Large volumes of chaotically expelled magical energy break my fall. It’s an incredibly amateurish, inefficient technique but there wasn’t enough time to reinforce anything. It’s okay if I’ve only taken this much damage, I’ll just activate the curse of self-healing. Right now, I’ve got to start running because wooden soldiers have started to swarm the foot of the mansion.

    Something filled with magical energy leaps off the second-floor balcony. That must be the other Master. Why hasn’t she used her Command Spell to summon her Servant yet? No matter how strong she is or how powerful of a Mystic Code that revolver might be she won’t last against a small platoon of mechanical dolls.

    I’m no expert in any type of creation, but even I can feel that some of the dolls have been refurbished with pre-17th-century parts. Those I won’t be able to stand up against them with just Black Keys. Even with the Ash Lock, it’ll be a struggle against more than four. That’s the Iselma family for you.

    We both start sprinting across the field down the hill towards the gap in the bounded field. After we slip through the gap, we can retreat into the shrubbery.

    Automatons generally come in three categories: 1) those that are directly controlled by the magus; Lord Byron was inside the mansion, entertaining his guests when the automaton attacked me. 2) Those that have an internal energy source; automatons of this nature are costly. It would take more than a fortune to equip fodder with magecraft engines. 3) Those that are being supplied magical energy from an external source, like a leyline. The land, number, and actions mean the third type is the most likely. If they’re tied to the bounded field and siphoning the magical energy from the leyline, their efficiency should rapidly decrease the moment I get out of Lord Bryon’s territory.

    Proper Executors are capable of maintaining a pace of about thirty miles per hour in bad terrain without the use of magecraft. Not only are we under bad terrain, the slope of the hill means any step could lead to me losing my balance — so almost a minute. Reinforcing myself would increase my speed, but I have a hunch these wooden soldiers are tracking magical energy.

    I take a glimpse behind. . . that’s strange. That Master is running about three fourths my speed. She’s definitely reinforcing herself, but what a weak flow of magical energy. There’s a constant tug of war between Master and Servant for magical energy. Could it be that manifesting her Servant is taking up so much magical energy she barely has enough to reinforce herself? In that case, why doesn’t she call her Servant? I see, it’s because even at her speed she’s still faster than the wooden soldiers.

    The wooden soldiers continue their steady march. The fact that they prioritize their balance over speed is a testament of their maker. These dolls work as a collective rather than individually, intimidating their opponents with sheer numbers. Outnumbered, the target’s only option is to flee.

    In a cock-assured rush, the prey eventually loses their balance and are swept under the advancing line. If they do escape the line of wooden soldiers, they would be met with a bounded field supported by this land. Without knowing about the gap or without a Servant to brute force through the bounded field, one has almost no chance of escaping. It’s almost like instead of trying to keep people out, Lord Byron is trying to keep something from escaping.

    Ceremonial trumpets and the thundering of wooden hooves shake that thought from my brain. The sea of advancing wooden soldiers parts, allowing lacquered horses to break into a mad gallop. Each horse is hitched to a carriage with a single driver. No, the carriage is part of the horse. To make matters worse, the carriages instantaneously magically modify themselves into war chariots carrying two more wooden soldiers armed with muskets. The line of wooden soldiers is the signaling beacon, and the cavalry are the shock troops. There’s no time to ask myself if this is really art and proceed to attempt to break down the mystery. Legs, don’t fail me now. You know this mountain better than anyone else.

    “Damn!”

    The ground in front of me explodes. A spray of hard mountainous soil that hasn’t tasted rain for almost a year cuts half of my view.

    Don’t turn around, Chris. Keep running, you’ll make it. There’s no point in zigzagging. The dolls started firing musket balls, sure. But lead balls don’t make that kind of impact — no, they’re more like enchanted lead bubbles. The moment they pop, they spread their magical payload with the force of a grenade. These musket balls aren’t enough to kill heretics, but they’ll slow them down so they face a calvary stampede. It only looks like they’re firing haphazardly, but they’re just trying to scare you into making a mistake or goad you into fighting back. You’re no match for them. . . for now. That could change the moment you ignite the magical energy into your body. But I know, the moment you reinforce anything is when you die. These are dolls — they can’t see, but they can sense magical energy. That’s why you have to keep running, as is. You can’t die here.

    But what about that Master? With our head start she might make it — fifty-fifty, no… forty-sixty. I don’t want to know if the forty is a success or failure, because can’t you change any probability of her surviving to zero with the Black Key in my hand?

    Executors are professional heretic hunters. She’s a Master attempting to wage war in this town.

    I don’t think there is anything wrong with killing her before she’s able to hurt anyone. Protecting the sanctity of the Grail War isn’t my business anymore, so eliminating as many heretics as possible has become something I should do.

    You won’t throw that Black Key though because you realize it’s not that she won’t summon her Servant, she can’t. The fact that she’s out here means that her Servant is inside that mansion, mingling with everyone else. The moment she summons her Servant with her Command Spell is the moment they realize this Master didn’t attend their meeting because she was too busy breaking through the defenses. It isn’t too difficult to figure out what her aim was. That’s right, the reason I didn’t choose the balcony where she laid in wait was because there was a gap in the curtains where you could actually see the going-ons below and therefore anyone who looked up could see you as well. That was her perch. She was using her Servant as a distraction to create an opportunity to kill one or more Masters.

    Geez, tonight has been a complete failure. Not only have I been unable to find any information about the Dead Apostle, but I’ve also unwittingly become entrenched in this Holy Grail War once again.

    But it’s not your fault, is it? A little voice whispers in my ear. This is just the way that the world works. Interlopers like yourself earnestly search for meaning and end up destroying lives. No one’s truly at fault if both parties are sincere. Equally honest flames, we burn, aiming to merely shed light but before we know it the entire world is razed until we are both no more than effervescent cinders. How could one not disagree,

    object,

    reject?

    Truthfully, Chris —

    All of us, no matter who we are, are merely foam idiotic, pathetic, weak human beings.

    So. . . you. . . just. . . can’t, okay? That isn’t something Chris Frampton would do. His grudge should be against the Dead Apostles that killed his family. Even if the Church teaches that heresy must be expunged, he should be confused about his position because the woman who helped raise him is a magus herself.

    Okay?

    I dash through the gap in the bounded field and continue a few meters to the edge of the small forest between the Ferrini Open Space and Cardinal’s Peak Reserve. The Master manages to clamber through that gap a few seconds after me. I had expected to already be among the trees when she slipped through the gap. It’s not that she became faster. There’s a trail of smoke behind her that sends magical energy detection abilities, mine included, into disarray. She’s a freelancer who uses alchemy then.

    Behind her, one of the carriages reaches the edge of the bounded field and abruptly stops as if all its strings had been cut.

    She raises her revolver as she gets up, but I take the initiative and throw the Black Key in my hand, leaving myself without a weapon. Like an arrow, the black blade draws a slight arc, but the Master’s reactions are too quick. Or rather, she had already predicted that I was aiming for the hand holding the weapon.

    Right, I made it too obvious that I was considering throwing my Black Keys at you when I freaked out on the hill there. I’m too easy to read because I don’t have much combat experience. I know that. That’s why the moment I threw the blade, I scrambled into the forest before you could fire and hid behind a thick tree trunk.

    She slowly approaches me with her revolver drawn, ready to shoot the moment I make a move. In that case, it’s time to play my trump card.

    “I’m not part of this Holy Grail War!” I shout from my hiding place. “I’m an Executor-in-training tasked with exterminating a Dead Apostle in this town. This has been a terrible misunderstanding!”

    Silence for a moment and then, “If that’s true, why were you at a meeting for Masters?”

    Someone told me that one of the Masters might be a Dead Apostle. Say it, say it, just answer her already.

    “Well? Can you answer that?”

    Oh. . . I. . . can’t say those words.

    My heart bubbles. These aren’t bubbles you see at the bottom of the pot when boiling water. This is skimmed beer foam or ephemeral sea foam that continuously piles onto itself until the imaginary friction magically ignites to produce a sooty flame — the switch magi use to convert themselves into machines that produce magical energy. The heat that fills this vessel drives my senses beyond infinity, instantly sending my circuits into overheat.

    “You —!” Her finger is on the trigger, but she’ll be a second too slow —

    Set
    I announce!
    ” I vault from cover to intercept her.

    With that single-action incantation my magical energy sears a magic formula in the broadest foundation in the world. The only mystery allowed for members of the Church is the Baptismal Sacrament, but within the foundation known as The Teachings of the Lord are spells that can be engraved into the hilt of a Key of Providence to create additional effects like burning, petrification, or desiccation. Since this is evidently magecraft, it’s looked down upon by the members of the Church and rarely used — except for this spell.

    Like black lightning running through the night, the Black Key picks itself from the ground and once again aims for the hand holding the gun. Too late, she’ll be too late. The expression on her face tells the entire story. Even if she twists her entire body to dodge the surprise attack, she’ll lose her footing allowing me enough of an opening to subdue her. Her only other option is to. . . wait, really?

    Her sharp eyes narrow even further. She’s going to take the attack.

    She concentrates her magical energy into her hands and then increases its density — the classic counter spell for dealing with point-based magical attacks. The magical energy of both spells will clash and the effect evaporates. But, while the Black Key’s blade might be formed with magical energy, it’s still semi-solid. A technique like that isn’t going to —

    I see. . . That’s insane.

    She doesn’t care if the Black Key pierces her hand because all she needs is a single shot. Then this is just a replay of the events of the balcony. I’ll just sacrifice this left arm so —

    It’s a split second that decides life and death, but a split second was too long for the being that just materialized.

    It lands, sending rippling licks of magical energy throwing both the other Master and me off-balance before our skirmish can conclude. She raises her gun. I pull out another Black Key hilt from my robe, but the instant we look at the monster, the blood is drained from both our faces.

    His pressure isn’t as overwhelming as Archer’s where it seems like you’re constantly trying to hold up the sky in his presence. This is human calamity incarnate — a divinity born from glorious despair, the blood of one’s opponents, and righteous conflict. Servant —

    “— Lancer. . .” the Master next to me finishes my thought.

    In the face of this spirit, basically on the level of an elemental, we can’t remember what our misunderstanding was. Instead —

    Lancer flexes his almost golden muscles that ripple as he poses. He looks at me for a moment and then lowers his eyes so they meet the Master’s Command Spell.

    My shaking legs are on the verge of collapsing. If I wasn’t regulating my body, my heart and bladder would have both exploded. Worst of all, my stomach starts eating itself over and over again. Run. I need to get away right now. This isn’t what I signed up for. This isn’t a Dead Apostle. This is more like a hurricane that made landfall during a junior high sporting event.

    Right, if I run away. . . if I run away, Lancer isn’t going to come after me. He just wants that Master. I’m no longer part of the Holy Grail War so there’s no reason to stay here any longer. There is nothing that I can do.

    The image of a girl crying on a football field flashes through my mind. No, not that.

    “You’re not a lot of things. But, I thought you were at least that type of person.”

    What type of person is Chris Frampton? What reason does he have for holding his old man’s Black Keys? What did that boy who died want to become? Didn’t you say. . . didn’t you vow to at least be true to that boy you owed everything to?

    Words I mumbled to a priest who sat by my bedside a lifetime ago bubble back to mind. That priest might no longer be here, but those words and the feelings that should have been contained in those distant bubbles will always be there as long as I affirm my past.

    I know what Chris Frampton would do.

    I know what I have to do.

    “By the order of this Command Spell —!”

    In the next moment, that Master’s chest will be pierced before she’s able to activate her Command Spell. With a second swing, the leaves of all the shrubs in a five-meter radius are going to be stained with my splattered brains. This ‘fight’ which will last less than a second, solely depends on whether or not I’m able to buy her enough time to complete her
    count
    second
    .

    A spear so large its leaf blade is enough to impale the torso of an entire cow is thrust with ferocious technique that threads the needle between raw power and conditioned finesse. The motion is so fast the spear is little more than a blur to reinforced eyes. There is no other description for the wielder other than a god of war.

    But even a divine attack isn’t difficult to block if you already know where it is going to strike. All I’ve got to do is make sure my circuits which are rotating at top speed don’t burn out in the next second. It doesn’t matter if the magical energy is from my own life force or the air’s because all that matters right now is making sure these two Black Keys don’t break during the exchange.

    “Hm —” Lancer lets a surprised grunt at my resistance.

    The edge of the spear seemingly swallows the two black blades that I swung with all my strength. The alien sound of Black Keys reinforced so they’re almost as hard as a gemstone grinding against and then yielding to the edge of a Servant’s spear half-heartedly thrust rings into the trees. No matter how much supernatural strength I put into these Black Keys, they can’t stop that attack. This a Servant we’re fighting against. So delay it. Delay it for as long as —

    — The keys snap.

    I’m sent flying only to be stopped by the lower trunk of a stray tree. The impact permeates throughout my body. The real damage is my arms ripping and tearing in multiple places as if they had been cut a thousand times — the equivalent exchange for reinforcing a part of your body with more magical energy than it can handle. I can’t feel them; are they broken? That doesn’t matter right now because. . .

    “Come, Berserke —”

    That was the amount of time I was able to buy — not enough.

    The bough will pierce her heart before she’s able to get that last syllable out.

    This entire night’s struggle has been for nothing.

    I. . .

    As quickly as the spear was thrust, a tongue of fire repelled the leaf blade. That tongue, held aloft, is a red, thin double-edged blade with a smaller blade jutting out from the bottom of the golden hilt. It’s swung so quickly that I can only follow the trail of embers. No matter how fast the flame might be, the bough manages to catch and then match each blow. But the embers from each arc of the blade linger longer, their sooty red is now a warm orange. I can even feel the heat from here. I’m not sure if it’ll take ten or a hundred more blows but eventually, the fire will overwhelm the bough.

    The Servants break apart.

    “That boy. . . is under my protection.”

    The feral god of war takes in the opposing Servant and then my crumpled figure before grunting to himself and retreating into the forest. The Servant in front of me makes no attempt to pursue.

    I look at the Master who keeps her eye on the Servant. When she was using the Command Spell, she distinctly was trying to say Berserker. That swordplay is not that of a Berserker.

    The trough of this hill is completely silent, almost as if the clamor of just a few minutes ago never existed. It’s obvious. There does not need to be a wind to draw open the curtain of clouds to let the moonlight filter in. That figure is bright enough to serve as her own moon, reflecting all the distant lights from the suburbs below.

    She turns to face me and time stops.

    Those fervent yet troubled eyes are the centerpiece of a bouquet of features so delicate they look as though a cosmic clockmaker took the time to painstakingly craft each one before binding Its creation in
    mythril
    divine steel
    .

    She bites her lower lip.

    I bite my tongue for the words can’t, won’t come out.

    This scene, it only lasts for a second, but it is as sharp as her demonic sword so it pierces my wavering consciousness and cuts through all the years I’ve been alive.

    This is special. You must remember this.

    Even if you fall down to hell.

    Even if you lose Chris Frampton.

    Engrave this one scene onto your soul so that neither foam may drag it out to sea nor flame may incinerate it beyond recognition.

    Why?

    Because it’s the first time you have ever thought a machine looked beautiful.

    *****

    Presage Seaweed

    ~Interlude~


    The doorbell rang as Cherry entered the cafe. The dimmed light that made reading slightly a chore, the empty plates left on one or two tables, and the coffee aroma that hung like a persistent smog were all so similar to one from her hometown one could say it was the same cafe. Cherry ignored the unwelcome pangs of slight homesickness and made her way to the bar. She wasn’t sure if he would be here tonight — he could be out at an Italian restaurant, flirting.

    The last time they saw each other face to face was. . . a year ago? She went back home to check if everything was okay with the house. But Cherry writes, she writes to him every month. She was old fashioned that way, magi usually are. So what she won’t tolerate is meeting in this
    café
    box
    . It’s a cheat — a singularity that shouldn’t exist in this world or any other world. Say that as she might, she loved their pies.

    Ooops, remember, you’re on a diet. It was your cheat day on Monday. You’re going Keto this year. Last year was Paleo. Cherry’s tried them all. She hadn’t lost any weight long-term, but she’s reached enlightenment. A scale was a woman’s arch-nemesis. Like a
    curse
    prayer
    she scrawls a number in her diary every night. There was a self-mutilating sacredness to it that you couldn’t find with a health app.

    A waitress came to ask her if she wanted anything. Cherry fidgeted awkwardly for a second wondering if she could convince herself on getting an advance on next week’s cheat day but stay strong! You can do this! In your teens, you made the mistake of assuming you could diet before summer to fit into your swimsuit. Naive. Too naive, girl. Every Instagram model you follow regularly posts that the foundation of a swimsuit body requires you to start during winter. Winter is when all the calories pile up. You can’t fall for that trap — not this year.

    Cherry sighed after the waitress left.

    “Heyo Annherbe-deluxe, Cherry.”

    A little girl clambered onto the seat next to her.

    “Who taught you that, Curie?”

    She pointed to a lonely flip phone completely left behind by the times next to the register, “He said it’s the normal greeting here.”

    Cherry gently smiled. Even if it makes no sense to her, that didn’t mean she should let it show on her face. “I’m really happy to see you again, Curie. You’ve grown quite a bit.”

    The little girl jumped into Cherry’s arms. She was cold like crystal, not to mention you could be eaten at any moment and not realize it. No, that’s wrong, Cherry told herself. There’s warmth there, there has to be. We’ve spent so much time together there had to be something beyond —

    “I missed you too, Cherry. The Detective has as well. He reads all your letters you know and stays up thinking about what to write back. He’s not good at admitting it though.” Curie nodded knowingly.

    “How is he?”

    Curie opened her mouth but before she could get any words out, she was interrupted.

    “Well, well, well it seems like someone hasn’t lost any weight at all.”

    That’s his way of saying ‘I’m glad you look healthy.’

    “You look well too, Nii-san.” She slipped in her native tongue.

    He instinctively stroked the tiny scar on the back of his head as he took a seat next to Curie. “Scram, girl. Go play with the cats or annoy the waitresses.”

    Curie poked her tongue out in reply and ran off.

    “I’m glad that you two are still getting along so well.”

    “You call that getting along? That brat’s more trouble than she’s worth. Should have left her in South America when I had the chance.”

    Some part inside of her knows that she can’t forgive her brother for all the things he’s done. But even if they weren’t related by blood, he was still her brother and she wishes for his happiness, so when he says things like that they help unwind the wires in her head.

    “What about the kid you’re looking after? The one with the long, fancy name.”

    “Chris? He’s. . . he’s a good kid.”

    “That’s just a polite way of saying he’s messed up but doesn’t show it.”

    She ignored that, “He comes here often. Have you talked to him?”

    “Yeah. He’s a good kid.” The Detective called the waitress and ordered a nitro cold brew, this time, less cinnamon. “Why are you here, Sakura? If you’re after news about Rider and Emiya, you can call them yourself.”

    “I’m really proud of you, Nii-san.” That stopped him cold in his tracks. “When you dropped out of university, saying it was too easy and everyone was an idiot I was really worried about your future. We all were. But ever since you came back from South America with Curie and started your own private investigation firm you’ve. . . you’ve been doing better.”

    “Haah? Don’t be impertinent. I don’t need your validation, failure. Don’t get me wrong, I love that you decided to let the Matou family die, but a failure is still a failure.”

    Cherry smiled. “If you would let me finish Nii-san. I recently heard there was another up-and-coming private investigator duo from Mifune. A man about your age with only one working eye, and a twenty-year-old beauty rumored to have ties with the Yakuza?”

    The Detective snorted at that dismissively, “You sure love your gossip magazines, Sakura. Fumbling idiots. Could give any Manzai duo a run for their money.”

    “Oh, I heard they were rated as one of the top agencies in Japan?”

    “Did you take the time to check who is rated the top in the country, idiot.”

    “The top-rated private investigator office in the country, wow, you’ve come so far! So that means you’ll be able to find some information about someone for me?”

    “What? I don’t have the time to do something like that.”

    “Nii-san, I’m horrified. The top private detective Japan won’t even help his own little sister?”

    Matou Shinji looked at his sister in disbelief.

    Matou Sakura steadied her determined gaze, offering a forceful half-smile and a wrinkled brow, as if trying to make her brother eat an apple slice.

    “Okay, who am I looking for,” he mumbled before turning away. Like so many before him, he crumbled under that determined gaze.

    Cherry took out a folded printout from her purse. Church profiles were usually small novellas, but this was a single page. At the top left corner was a photo of a strawberry blond woman with a high forehead and sharp features.

    “Amelia Levitt, a pediatrician who worked at Snowfield Central Hospital, patients include. . . Snowfield? Isn’t that the town where that fake Holy Grail War that basically destroyed the area took place?”

    “Oh, it seems like Senpai has been telling you things that he shouldn’t.”

    The Detective looked Cherry straight in the eye. “This woman. . . she’s a Master, isn’t she? And you, Sakura, you’re a Master too, aren’t you?”

    “What? I. . .”

    “Don’t lie to me. Who would use concealer on their hand to hide a Command Spell? I might not have magic circuits but don’t treat me like I’m a fucking idiot!”

    “Yes Nii-san, I’m the Master of Saber.”

    The Detective closed his eyes and rubbed his temples. “This isn’t about Amelia Levitt, is it? Even you aren’t dumb enough to ask me to investigate an American. This about this kid isn’t it?”

    He pointed to the only name that sounds Japanese on the profile.

    Tsubaki Kuruoka.

    “They should learn to write names properly. What’s this. . .” he looked closer at the page. “Well she’d be a teenager now. What this kid got to do with your shitshow.”

    “The Kuruoka family are a family of magi who helped establish the Snowfield Grail. . .”

    The Detective interrupted, “She was a Master, then. What happened to her?”

    “That’s what I’d like you to find out.” Cherry folded her arms on the table.

    “She is. . . was American, you’re in America. I’m in Japan. What do you think I can do?”

    “The Kuruoka family did more than just help establish the Snowfield Grail system, Nii-san. They also took part of the Holy Grail system and magecraft that utilized insects.”

    He immediately broke out in a cold sweat. She knew what she was asking of him. He was told he was the true heir to the family; that was why he was given access to all the grimoires in the forbidden library to peruse at his pleasure. He was given the privilege to learn his family’s secrets because he would pass them down. That privilege was his pride, his assurance that he was better than the masses that sat in the same classroom as he did. Later, it would turn into his greatest shame. And now?

    That young boy who made himself a makeshift robe and wand almost drowned in the mystery he lusted for — a wig saved his life.

    That aimless, bitter young man who couldn’t stand his family’s ruin set forth to retrieve a grimoire his sister sold in an attempt to rid the demonic fog clouding his heart and was almost consumed by the mystery he wished to be initiated into — a crystal trinket saved his life.

    So, the question isn’t ‘and now,’ it must be ‘so now?’

    “Alright, whatever, I’ll check my notes and my contacts for information about this Kuruoka. You. . .” He folded the sheet of paper and placed it in his breast pocket. “If you get yourself killed that’s your own problem. Also, it’s also up to you to tell everyone else you’re part of this magical shitshow again. I’m not your messenger boy.”

    “One more thing Nii-san.”

    “Something else?” he asked grumpily. “You really have no respect for your brother.”

    “Are you still in touch with Sajyou Ayaka?”

    He shivered at the name then protectively stroked his luscious seaweed locks, reassuring himself this was his natural hair. Yet, no matter how smooth, bouncy, or real his wavy hair might be, he can still feel her malicious razor gliding over his naked scalp.

    “No, why? I think she went to Romania or somewhere else in Europe after she graduated.”

    “I got my hands on some security footage of Snowfield. She, or at least someone who looks like her, was present. Do you happen to know anyone who might have her contact information?”

    “I think she used to hang out with that trio of track team girls. That means I have to deal with that idiot Makidera, again. Fine, fine. Anything else?”

    “No, that’s everything. Thank you, Nii-san. Please take care of Curie and yourself.”

    Sakura’s full smile was almost too perfect.

    Shinji knew the shadow lurking behind that smile. It was underneath him when he tried to rape her.

    He couldn’t make up for that day. He couldn’t forget that day.

    The waitress finally arrived with his iced coffee in a mason jar. Shinji grabbed the handle the moment it was set down but put the drink back down the moment he met his sister’s eyes. There was something he forgot to say.

    “Hey, Sakura.”

    “Nii-san?”

    “Don’t get yourself killed.”

    ~Interlude Out~


    Day 3 – End


    Fate/Mythologie Volume 1: Palingenesis/805 – End
    Last edited by You; February 6th, 2021 at 07:21 PM.
    Quote Originally Posted by FSF 5, Chapter 14: Gold and Lions I
    Dumas flashed a fearless grin at Flat and Jack as he rattled off odd turns of phrase.
    "And most importantly, it's me who'll be doing the cooking."
    Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
    Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
    Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.


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    Afterword

    Thank you for reading the first volume of Fate/Mythologie. I’d like to further thank Raff for proof-reading everything and offering ideas as well.

    “To the next ten years…”

    What did those words promise? What did those words actually bring?

    Fate/Mythologie came about in an attempt to fill an empty niche. The romance fiction of Kinoko Nasu has exploded almost a decade ago into multiple spin-offs, the most popular of which is Fate/Grand Order. Yet, at least in the English speaking community, fanfiction consists of the same plots with the same ideas and the same characters. That is to say, in the decade so much has happened, yet so little of it has been used. A lot of this is due to the language barrier which is very understandable. But a lot of it has to do with finding satisfaction in the familiar. I hope you found something thrilling into stepping into Tolosa, a world beyond Chaldea, Fuyuki, and medieval Camelot.

    This story is set after Fate/Strange Fake which takes place in a “world where anything can happen” that includes both the Dead Apostle Ancestors and the Heroic Spirit summoning system. The Strange Fake world is all but confirmed to be from Himuro no Tenchi: Fate/School Life which follows a modified version of Heaven’s Feel, which the author calls HF 1.5. At the time of writing this, Strange Fake is on volume 5. I’m not sure if there are going to be any major discrepancies with the events of later volumes, but considering this is fanfiction, I’m sure those can be brushed aside rather easily.

    At the writing of this afterword, Chapter 4 of Mythologie hasn’t been released yet, but the second POV character Nadine is pretty much taken from the movie The Edge of Seventeen with some modifications. After watching that movie, I felt as her essence or at least the writer/director’s message behind her as a character was something that I needed to use for this project. At the same time, I wanted to address things that I don’t think that movie went in-depth enough due to the limitations of the medium. I hope you look forward to her relationship with Mary and their future development.

    In regards to that as well as the setting and world view of Mythologie, I have always turned to the commentary from the first volume of Fire Girl -
    The relative importance and gravity among novels is generally divided into three segments.
    The story made for the story’s sake.
    The story made for one’s own sake.
    The story made for the reader’s sake.
    How this balance is dealt with depends on the story’s theme.
    Without a doubt, Mythologie is the most selfish thing that I’ve written to date. The setting, the cast, and the themes have all been egoistically chosen and molded. I believe all fanfiction writing attempts to do so. But the most important thing to me is portraying how each character justifies themselves in relation to this setting - their subjective truth that no one can deny no matter what’s written in the glossary of a materials book. That is the story I want to create for the reader’s sake.

    Once again, thank you very much for reading this work of mine. I hope you were able to enjoy it. I’ve supplied a form for any feedback and questions.

    06-23-2019

    Note:
    I know there are a lot of readers who aren't members of BL. If you want to put in feedback for this volume follow the link below:
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    No estimated time on Volume 2 but its being worked on.
    Last edited by You; September 26th, 2019 at 09:53 PM.
    Quote Originally Posted by FSF 5, Chapter 14: Gold and Lions I
    Dumas flashed a fearless grin at Flat and Jack as he rattled off odd turns of phrase.
    "And most importantly, it's me who'll be doing the cooking."
    Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
    Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
    Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.


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    Well, this is quite a cliffhanger to end this volume on, and of all the possible twists, I did not expect Cherry to be Sakura and Shinji to be the detective. Then again, I haven't read School Life, so...I dunno.

    I must say this though. This fic feels so authentic to the TM spirit, that if showed me just the chapters and nothing else, I would have been convinced this WAS a new TM LN or something.
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    Really, all 3 of the romances in F/SN are 'for want of a nail' kind of situations.
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    You mean because Shirou winds up falling for the first of the three that he Nailed?
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    I've only been loosely following this (a bunch of things came up in my life at the time) but I second Gau that this really nails Nasu's style of writing and atmosphere. Even the after-word reads like the kind of thing Nasu himself would write. It's rare to come across a fanfic that I can really say captures the original's spirit so thoroughly, so color me impressed.

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    Also, I cannot believe I couldn't see the twist coming, now that I think about it. "Cherry" is just Sakura, she's with Dilo's mission, and just, OMG. Also, never thought Sakura would be that concerned about maintaining a beach body, but I guess that's a good thing considering everything she's been through.

    Finally, am I just too dumb for not having figured out what's necessarily wrong with Chris or what the whole point of Nadine is? This whole fic has made me question my own ability to read literature as a whole, and honestly, I feel anything I try to write will suck.
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    Really, all 3 of the romances in F/SN are 'for want of a nail' kind of situations.
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    You mean because Shirou winds up falling for the first of the three that he Nailed?
    Quote Originally Posted by Tobias View Post
    I speak for the majority of important people* *a category comprised entirely of myself

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    Quote Originally Posted by SirGauoftheSquareTable View Post
    Also, never thought Sakura would be that concerned about maintaining a beach body,
    The beach is Sakura's territory. Never gonna let that go, never going to give it up.


    Quote Originally Posted by FSF 5, Chapter 14: Gold and Lions I
    Dumas flashed a fearless grin at Flat and Jack as he rattled off odd turns of phrase.
    "And most importantly, it's me who'll be doing the cooking."
    Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
    Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
    Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.


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    The Matou revelation hit me like a freight train, but it is so obvious in hindsight. A sweet, nurturing, domestically inclined woman with ties to Dilo... damn, man.

    You've earned the right to be selfish with A-grade stuff like this and Moon's Corral, You. This is the best thing going in Type-Moon fanfiction right now.
    Spoiler:
    Originally Posted by You
    when all the evils have given up their waifus, all the greats have left for med school, and there are no more at least 3 day battles to be fought what is left is

    not Tsukihime 2
    not DDD3
    not even Girl's Work

    but f/go

    and now f/go english

    that is what is waiting for you at the end of schadenfreude


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    I think I've said before about all I want to up to this very update, so I can really only reiterate what I said in my form submission.
    A really great job, You. I wasn't around when HGW fics were probably the bane of everyone's existence, but Mythologie has absolutely set a golden standard.
    Counting down the days to Vol 2!

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    First response from the Q and A!
    What's an Ash Lock? Is it something original to this story or something mentioned in a canon story or mats entry? I haven't gotten around to watching Case Files yet.
    They're a conceptual weapon introduced in the TMACE Cavern King short story and will later appear in the Contract of Atlas story if they decide animate that.


    Quote Originally Posted by Black Keys
    No, not the black keys on a piano. The throwing swords wielded by Ciel.
    As for why they’re called black keys, refer to the entry on purification.
    Ciel carries a large number of these concealed on her person, but what’s under her robes is actually just the hilts. She materializes the blades by passing magical energy through pages of the bible. The maximum number she is able to conceal at one time is close to 100. Also, since black keys are designed specifically for throwing and not for swordplay, in a way they could be considered a kind of bullet. Though they are counted as one of the basic weapons of the Church, the fact that they’re relatively hard to use means that very few executors favor them.
    Black Keys are ubiquitous when they kind of shouldn't be. The Ash Lock was created as the answer to that - its the conceptual weapon that Executors usually use.
    Quote Originally Posted by FSF 5, Chapter 14: Gold and Lions I
    Dumas flashed a fearless grin at Flat and Jack as he rattled off odd turns of phrase.
    "And most importantly, it's me who'll be doing the cooking."
    Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
    Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
    Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Imperial View Post
    The Matou revelation hit me like a freight train, but it is so obvious in hindsight. A sweet, nurturing, domestically inclined woman with ties to Dilo... damn, man.

    You've earned the right to be selfish with A-grade stuff like this and Moon's Corral, You. This is the best thing going in Type-Moon fanfiction right now.
    You want to know how I figured out Cheery was Sakura? From the fact Chris admitted at one point in his to having only ever eaten Frosted Flakes at school, because Cherry always cooked breakfast, and Cherry mentioning she had a good English teacher but Chris doubted it.

    As for Shinji, I guess "Curie" did something akin to what was done eith post-HF Shirou and one of Touko's puppets?
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    Because it’s the first time you have ever thought a machine looked beautiful.
    i knew some essential element was still missing from the fic :ok_hand:

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    Quote Originally Posted by You View Post
    The Ash Lock was created as the answer to that - its the conceptual weapon that Executors usually use.
    So how does the Ash Lock work?

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