It's Artemis basically swapping places with Orion because she was worried about him. So her rank drops but she can be summoned as a substitute heroic spirit, which somehow results in Orion becoming a bear.Originally Posted by RoydGolden
Or something.
Aw, that's cute. So Orion wouldn't normally be a bear?
The priest was waiting for the arrival of the princess, who was only an enemy of all of them.
For the priest, the golden princess was the one and only main heroine.
Everyone else was unworthy of his respect, no matter how strong they were.
Tsukihime 2 Prelude III
This makes Servant #50! Only took a year and a half and about a quarter of my total posts.
Class: Rider
STR: C
END: C
AGI: B
MGI: B
LCK: D
Class Skills
Riding (A+): Can use Phantasmal and Divine Beasts as mounts. Rider can summon a select few species that
are native to the Underworld and command them, but he is restricted from using any other creatures.
Magic Resistance (B+): Cancels spells three verses or shorter. Can be increased via the use of the Psychopomp
skill. Rider comes from the Age of the Gods and is a resident of the Underworld, and has a naturally high resistance.
Personal Skills
Psychopomp (B): Rider is a guide to the realm of the dead, and can use dead souls for various purposes. Rider
gains approximately twice as much energy from consuming a soul as normal. Alternatively, he can guide the soul
to the Underworld in order to increase his parameters and Magic Resistance. Rider also has the ability to commune
with dead spirits, and will guide them to the afterlife in exchange for a small amount of money.
Mystic Eyes (A): Rider possesses Mystic Eyes of Life Perception, allowing him to see and destroy the life of
others, appearing as crisscrossing lines on a living thing. He can also absorb prana by remaining in contact
with his target's lines of life. Rider's eyes are normally a bluish-gray color, but flash red upon activation.
Dread Visage (C): The ability to strike fear into those who behold the Servant. Those who do not know Rider's
true identity perceive him as something or someone that frightens them, and weakens their attacks against him.
Rider's main weapon and implement is a two meter long iron staff. A fine melee weapon, it can shift between two forms:
a double-headed hammer and an oar, which allows him to control his ferryboat. It is on the level of a C-rank Noble Phantasm.
Noble Phantasm
Styx and Acheron~Waters of the Boundary of Life and Death (A++, Anti-Country)
By striking his staff into the ground and rowing his ferry across the land, Rider leaves a rift between worlds in his wake.
The area in the wake of his boat becomes a reproduction of the River Styx, a deep, black flow of water, filled with wraiths
of the deceased who will pull any who enters down to the depths. Though the river appears as water on the surface, underneath
it is an endless void; the boundary of life and death. Humans and Servants alike will see loved ones and people they knew calling
to them, beckoning them to join them in the water. At Rider's direction, the waters surge and the dead will emerge from the water,
trailing small streams of the water behind them, ever expanding Rider's domain. The wraiths' combat strength varies from human level
to D-rank, depending on their strength in life. Rider has an awareness of anywhere the water flows and any who enters, as well as complete
control over the flow of the waters. Raging whirlpools and waves can erupt from the still surface in an instant. The river also merges itself
with any natural bodies of water it comes in contact with, allowing it to quickly grow to miles in size. Rider's ferryboat is the only way to safely
traverse the water, and he will allow people on board in exchange for a few coins. Despite the river's macabre appearance, it is in fact an
aspect of the Divine Spirit it is named after, and is therefore sentient. Though Styx does not distinguish between anyone who enters the river,
she may grant safe passage to those she believes are worthy, such as heroes with a strong connection to the Greek gods.
Background
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"We don't need martyrs right now. We need heroes. A hero would die for his country, but he'd much rather live for it." -Josiah Bartlet
List of Servants I've made
Ey Charon!
Great work there. Pretty simple servant, but the ferryman of river Styx is one of Greek's coolest ideas.
A question, are the waters of the river special? Do they damage humans and servants naturally, or are they just waters filled with spirits that Charon can control.
A mighty fine #50 to chose; Charon is a favorite of mine when it comes to psychopomps.
F/GO SUPPORT
It's sort of both, since it overlays the area rather than just flooding it. Think like that swamp full of the dead from LotR.
I had another idea that I scrapped where someone with Divinity could dip a normal human in the water and give them a blessing, like how Thetis did to Achilles.
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"We don't need martyrs right now. We need heroes. A hero would die for his country, but he'd much rather live for it." -Josiah Bartlet
List of Servants I've made
Some time ago, I prepared a controversial profile about Caesar that was received with critics. Since official material (namely, Fate/Aprocrypha Material) shot down one of the major precepts I had on that profile, I decided to review it and prepare a "second version" of this Servant. Also, any similarities towards the Caesar seen in Grand Order are no mere coincidence.
Class: Saber (Caster, Leader)
True Name: Gaius Julius Caesar
Gender: Male
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
STR: ＊＊＊＊＊ B
END: ＊＊＊＊＊ A
AGI: ＊＊＊＊＊ B
MGI: ＊＊＊＊＊ C
LCK: ＊＊＊＊＊ B+
NP: ＊＊＊＊＊ B
Keywords
CLASS SKILLS
Magic Resistance: B
The capacity to negate or abate the effects of Magecraft. Negates Magecraft invoked with an aria of three verses or less. It is difficult to injure him even with High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.
Riding: B
The technical skill to mount on vehicles. It also displays its effects on mechanized vehicles. If it is an ordinary vehicle, then he can manage it better than an average person. It is also possible to control wild beasts that have never been tamed by humans, but he is unable to drive Phantasm Species of Magic Beast and Holy Beast rank such as Pegasus, Gryphon or the Dragon Species
If a Caster...
If a Leader...
PERSONAL SKILLS
Charisma: C
The natural talent to command an army corps. Raises the abilities of one's own army on group battles. A rare talent. Leadership skills suitable for a great general that leads an entire military force.
In Caesar’s case, it denotes the presence, demeanor to lead・incite the masses. Only when dealing with common citizens, it is possible to temporarily achieve a major Rank UP to this by means of a combination with the Skill Grace of God.
Grace of God: A
The "beauty of royalty". The greatest body and good looks, granted only to those born with the god-given right to rule over people. A composite Skill that combines the effects of "Divine Protection" and "Natural Body". By means of a blessing from Divine Spirits, any and all abnormal conditions (changes) that compromise the integrity・beauty of the body are repelled.
Shamanism (Religio): B
An idiosyncrasy-like mystery. A Thaumaturgical Foundation rooted on local customs and folklore. Generally regarded as a minor school of Magecraft.
In his case, this represents religio, the ancient Roman religion that was based not on faith or dogma, but on the orthopraxy of prayer, ritual and sacrifice. It regarded peace with the gods (pax deorum) as foremost, and viewed the relationship between men and heavens as one of “give-and-take”.
NOBLE PHANTASM
Crocea Mors – The Golden Sword that Delivers Divine Punishment
Rank: B+
Type: Anti-Unit
Caesar’s favorite sword. A gladius with a shining golden blade. The wounds inflicted by this weapon cannot be healed. The target’s health starts to quickly deteriorate from the moment he is injured by this Noble Phantasm, causing his death not long afterwards.
Despite its ominous powers, this is no magic sword・cursed blade, but a genuine holy sword. A divine treasure forged by the God of Craft Vulcan. Later, the goddess Venus gifted it to her son Aeneas – founding-hero of the Roman civilization. Lost during the early ages of the Roman Republic, it was gifted to Caesar during his youth – a clear sign that the gods had great expectations of him as a harbinger of a new age for Rome.
Those that oppose this sword and its wielder are recognized as “an enemy of the gods”, and thus will have their lives forfeit by means of heavenly mandate. What prevents the healing of injury and degrades the health of the body is no poison or disease, but a divine curse that enforces the demise of the target.
Rubicon – The Die is Cast
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Army
Caesar’s many military achievements as a general sublimated as a Noble Phantasm. A High-Thaumaturgy falsely similar to a Reality Marble, it builds up a territory meant not for one-on-one duels, but for the clash of military troops against military troops. Also, circumstances will be conveniently manipulated so that terrain advantage always belongs to Caesar’s army.
A powerful trump card, but as an absolute requirement for its activation, Caesar must first fall into a dilemma where retreat is no longer possible.
This is a digression, but no matter what kind of territory・terrain is built by this Noble Phantasm, there will always be a river cutting through the middle of the battlefield.
Background
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Lancer
Semele, Mother of the Vine
Faceclaim
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Place of birth: Thebes
STR: C
END: D
AGI: B+
MAG: A
LUCK: A
NP: A++
Class Skills
Magic Resistance (B+): A skill that grants protection against magical effects. Differently from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. At this rank, spells with a chant below three verses are cancelled. Even if targeted by High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals, it is difficult for to be affected. Lancer can use rituals sacred to Zeus to temporarily strengthen her magical defense.
Personal Skills
Divinity (A): The measure of whether one has Divine Spirit aptitude or not. At high levels one is treated as a mixed race of a Divine Spirit, and the level declines when the Heroic Spirit's own rank as a monster raises. It also has an effect which reduces special defensive values called "purge defense" in proportion to the Divinity's Rank. It can break through Skills such as Protection of the Faith and Enlightenment of the Sacred Fig. Lancer was raised to the status of a minor goddess after her death, but was already semi-divine before, as the granddaughter of Aphrodite.
Frenzy (C): A variation of the skill ‘Mad Enhancement’. Possessing this skill allows Lancer to enter into a frenzied state in battle. The longer her fights last, the higher her Strength and Agility rise, and the lower her Endurance and Mana fall. After her resurrection, Lancer became the leader of the maenads, the frenzied followers of the god Dionysus.
Affections of the Gods (B): A skill indicating Divine Favour that causes a rank up in perimeters. Lancer’s rank in this skill comes from her relationship with her son, who loved her enough to rescue her from the Underworld after her death. At this rank, all parameters apart from Luck and Mana are ranked up.
Noble Phantasms
Thyrsus of Dionysus – Honey Dripping, Vine Sprouting Spear (D, Anti-Unit): The symbol of authority of the god Dionysus, a long staff wrapped in vines and tipped with a pine cone. Though it technically belongs to Dionysus, he has loaned it to his mother to serve as her weapon in the Grail War. It constantly drips honey with intoxicating properties, and striking it against the ground will sprout grape vines that can entrap and encircle her opponents.
Radiance of Zeus – All-Consuming Divine Thunder (Anti-Fortress, A++): The divine lightning Zeus that burned Semele to ashes when the god revealed himself to her in all his full glory. This ability is activated by a ten-count aria. As Semele recites the poem, her thyrsus is transformed into Zeus’s thunderbolt. Once the spell is completed, the thunderbolt erupts with divine power, utterly consuming Lancer and everything in her immediate vicinity in a vicious explosion comparable to an atomic blast. Needless to say, this is a suicide attack. Though immensely destructive, Divine Spirits are unaffected by the radiance of a god, and as such, high ranks of divinity can reduce the damage of this attack, though it will nearly always be a fatal strike.
Notes
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Solid
Though abandoned, forgotten, and scorned as out-of-date dolls, they continue to carry out their mission, unchanged from the time they were designed.
Machines do not lose their worth when a newer model appears.
Their worth (life) ends when humans can no longer bear that purity.
Semele is definitely pretty cool.
I've edited Charon's NP to elaborate on it a bit more, cause I don't always words good.
"We don't need martyrs right now. We need heroes. A hero would die for his country, but he'd much rather live for it." -Josiah Bartlet
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Servant Berserker:
True Name: Mary Tudor ("Bloody Mary")
Alignment: Lawful Mad (Lawful Good)
Alternate Class: Assassin
Strength- C+ (B+ under Mad Enhancement)
Agility- B (A under Mad Enhancement)
Endurance- C (B under Mad Enhancement)
Mana- C
Luck- E
NP- A
Appearance: A tall, superficially attractive young woman with long flowing crimson hair, cherry red lips and unnaturally pale skin, practically white. Her most disturbing feature are her eyes, which have entirely black sclera and blood-red pupils. She wears a white bridal-like dress that's stained with blood on one side. Her forearms are coated in a layer of blood resembling opera gloves, while her hands are wickedly twisted like claws.
History: It's not every monarch who has a drink named after her nickname. Then again, not every monarch gets the nickname "Bloody".
England's very first Queen Regnant, Mary I of England (18th February 1516 — 17th November 1558; reigning July 1553 — her death) was Henry VIII's elder daughter and his only surviving child by Catherine Of Aragon. As a little girl, she was doted on by her parents, but that changed when Anne Boleyn became queen. With her parents' marriage declared invalid, Mary was declared a bastard, struck from the succession, stripped of her title as "Princess", separated from her mother, and eventually forced into her baby half-sister's service as a lady-in-waiting. She was eventually restored to the succession after her younger brother Edward, although she remained legally illegitimate and was styled "the Lady Mary," rather than "Princess."
Her path to the throne did not run smoothly. Edward unexpectedly changed the succession in a will drafted shortly before his death that excluded both Mary and Elizabeth from the throne in favour of the Lady Jane Grey, granddaughter of Henry VIII's sister Mary Tudor and daughter-in-law of the Duke of Northumberland, the regent.This stunk so highly that a rumour arose claiming that the Duke himself wrote the will and forced the sickly Edward to sign it. An early draft of the will found in Edward's papers, however, shows that the devise was Edward's own idea. Queen Jane took the throne on Edward's death, but Mary's overwhelming popularity with the commons and nobles made her position untenable and she abdicated nine days later. Mary was greeted by crowds of thousands of cheering subjects as she rode into London and took her rightful throne.
Her original intent was to punish only those she saw as responsible for the near-usurpation of the throne - mainly the Duke of Northumberland and his cronies - and release the comparatively innocent Jane and her husband Guildford Dudley as soon as the situation had stabilized. Unfortunately for Jane and Guildford, a rebellion led by Thomas Wyatt with the intention of restoring Jane to the throne forced Mary's hand and led both of them to the block. The execution of frail, beautiful, teenaged Jane Grey afterwards became a popular theme for Romantic painters.
As a devout Roman Catholic, Mary was determined to bring England back into the arms of Rome. She chose a Catholic husband - Philip, King of Naples and the heir to the King of Spain - and brought her cousin Reginald Cardinal Pole back to England as Archbishop of Canterbury. Philip was named King Consort, and as such worked with Parliament to repeal the Protestant laws passed in the time of Henry and Edward and reinstate the Heresy Acts. Mary ordered the burning of many Protestant recusants pursuant to these Acts, including bishops Ridley, Latimer, and Cranmer. These men and women became known as the "Protestant Martyrs". There were 283 of them in all, and it is for their deaths that she's known as Bloody Mary (a term coined well after her death). In reality she killed fewer subjects in her entire reign than her father did in any single year of his. But such is the fate of those guilty of being on the wrong side of history.
She might have succeeded in returning England to Catholicism had she borne a child to carry on her works, but that was not to be. She is thought to have become pregnant once, but although her abdomen swelled she never delivered a child. The most likely explanation is a molar pregnancy proceeding to choriocarcinoma, but some medical historians plump for ovarian cancer. It was once suggested that she might have suffered a "phantom pregnancy", this shows up often in books and shows of the 1950s but modern historians are confident that her condition was primarily physical in nature, as phantom pregnancy is far rarer in real life than doctors of the 1930s realized. Also it isn't fatal.
By the time Mary died in 1558, the crowds who cheered her five years earlier were heaving sighs of relief at her passing. She died unmourned, unloved, and unrepentant to the last. Her great ally Cardinal Pole survived her by only twelve hours; with the two of them died any chance of a restoration of the Catholic faith. She was succeeded by her younger sister, Elizabeth.
Personality: Normally a kindly, generous and motherly individual. Although lacking in the natural charisma expected of a queen, she makes up for it with a boundless ability to inspire loyalty in her friends and allies. She is fairly intelligent, knowledgeable in the arts as well as being fluent in numerous languages such as Italian, French and Latin. However, the numerous failed childbirths she underwent have given her a highly warped mentality which has only been accentuated by the effects of her Innocent Monster Personal Skill. She projects the image of her longed-for child onto any one she encounters, believing them to be her own and their actual parents or guardians to be "abductors". In her madness she will eventually kill the child as part of a misguided desire to "stay with them forever", all the while crying bloody tears and will not stop. This effect is particularly strong towards male children, for she especially desired a son to serve as her royal heir. She also has a strong and somewhat fanatical hatred for Protestants, viewing them as heathens and scarcely even human.
Likes: children, music
Dislikes: Protestants, rebellions, failed pregnancies
Hobbies: riding, hunting
Class Skills:
Mad Enhancement (B+)- Sacrifices sanity in exchange for raw physical strength. Mary's version of this Skill takes form through uncontrollable bouts of grief and rage for her unborn children causing her to lash out in a brutal and unpredictable fashion. Not even a Command Spell can stop her rampages and the only option is to try to calm her down (Very, very carefully mind you) or simply wait them out until her sanity returns.
Personal Skills:
Innocent Monster (A++)- The nature of one who's legend has been distorted by history. Due to her at times ruthless actions, Mary's history has been conflated with that of the popular urban legend "Bloody Mary", a ghoul said to haunt mirrors and to come out if her name is repeated threefold. As a result of this Skill, her appearance is altered to match contemporary legends and her behavior in the Holy Grail War is considerably more unhinged and fanatical then it ever was in life.
Protection Of The Faith (A)- A Skill possessed only by those who have sacrificed themselves for a religious view. Despite being a form of divine protection, it is not a blessing from a higher existence. It is only the absoluteness of one's body and soul, which is born from faith. But if it is too high, it tends to cause abnormalities in the personality. Mary's ownership of this Skill derives from her ruthless persecution of Protestants as part of an attempt of restore Catholicism to England, burning nearly three hundred of them at the stake when they refused to surrender their religion.
Dread Visage (A+)- The ability to inspire fear in others through one's form and presence. At this rank, anyone within the presence of Berserker will begin to feel a great fear and unease, making it difficult to fight at one's full strength. Can be overcome with Skills granting protection to mental interference such as Bravery and Vitrification.
Noble Phantasm:
Bloody Mary- The Mirror That Reflects Past Sins (A, Anti-Mind): A Noble Phantasm crystallizing her legend as "Bloody Mary". Invoked by chanting her own name thrice, a large bloodstained mirror is formed in the air in front of Berserker. The moment anyone looks into said mirror, they will be put under the Noble Phantasm's spell. What the target sees in the mirror is not their own reflection but "their own past sins", their deepest guilt and regrets come to life in the scarlet-dyed glass. While that itself is enough to impose a crippling mental burden on most foes, its the secondary effect that proves most insidious.
Upon determining the opponent's "greatest regret" it will thereby bring that regret into reality as an illusion given physical form through the target's perceptions. The illusion typically appears as a bloodstained doppelganger of someone from the victim's past, usually trying to convince the target to kill themselves in order to "make amends". If that fails, the illusion will then attempt to attack the opponent manually, with parameters comparable to a mid-ranked Heroic Spirit. However its real threat is psychological rather then simply physical.
If the target manages to come to terms with the past then the illusion will be dispelled instantly and the mirror will shatter, breaking the Noble Phantasm's effect (although she can still re-summon it later given sufficient prana). As its a curse-based ability born from past regrets, it will not work on the rare soul who had no regrets in life or those who have already fully conquered their regrets.
So this is my take on an urban legend type Servant (I made a Slender Man one in the other thread some time ago but nobody commented on it and honestly I wasn't too happy with how it turned out). My original idea was for the urban legend Bloody Mary as a Heroic Spirit in her own right, but when I read about the (admittedly dubious, but what the hell) connection to Mary Tudor I decided that was the touch I needed to craft a Servant around. She's similar to Vlad, in that they're both well-intentioned but brutal aristocrats who were turned into monsters by history/urban legends. My original idea for her NP was being able to "jump" between mirrors like the Hanged Man from Jojo's Bizarre Adventure, but I decided that would be too uninspired and tried to go with something more interesting instead (if a bit similar to Apocrypha Shakespeare's First Folio).
I also had found the perfect picture for her (a redheaded Rize Kamishiro from Tokyo Ghoul if you're wondering) but I couldn't get it to load through Imgur (and it turned out ridiculously huge when I tried putting it through the forum's own image software). Whatever, text it is! Oh and the details given under History are from her page on TV Tropes (with a few personal embellishments from myself), a handy source for summarizing historical figures if you don't want to just dump a whole Wikipedia article on somebody. As always, be sure to drop by with your comments and criticisms everyone! Otherwise Bloody Mary's gonna getcha...
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Noice. Someone do Edward so we can get all of the siblings.
Why?
Servant Lancer:
True Name: Adolph Hitler
It's Adolf
Alignment: Lawful Evil
Summoning Catalyst: fragments of his skull from Moscow
Alternate Classes: Caster, Rider, Berserker
Strength- D
Agility- B
Endurance- C
Mana- B
Luck- A++
NP- A+
Justify these stats please.
Especially B-rank agility and A++ luck.
Appearance:
Personality: cruel and intelligent, adhering strongly in the doctrines of social darwinism and openly stating the right of the strong to trample upon the weak. A true sociopath and megalomaniac, to whom the lives and affairs of the common people are absolutely absurd and contemptible. That he loved Germany was without doubt. However, the Germany that he loved so much existed only in his own imagination. Pure and unsullied, his vision was of a Germany that could hold its head high upon the world stage. Germany above all. Above God. Above love. Above justice. For the sake of that ideal he embarked upon a path of bloodshed, slaughtering all those who failed to meet his criteria of an "Ideal Germany". The only logical end for such a course of action would be the destruction of everyone save himself, a lone ruler looking out upon a country of corpses. He considers himself to be the "savior" of Germany, or perhaps something closer even to a God. His wish on the Holy Grail would be to bring back the German Empire of his dreams and bring his mad vision of a thousand-year Reich into final reality.
Likes: Germany, the Aryan race, opera
Dislikes: "Degenerates", modern art
Hobby: painting
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance (B rank)- can cancel spells with an incantation of less than three verses. His rank in this Skill is solely due to the holy properties of his Heilig Lanze Noble Phantasm, and would be merely E rank without it. As it's a form of holy protection, Sacraments of the Church will bypasss it straight-out.
Personal Skills:
Charisma (A rank)- the ability to inspire others and lead armies. Charisma sufficient to lead an entire country and inspire armies of virtually any size. As a skilled demagogue and undisputed expert in manipulating "the will of the people", he possesses the highest possible rank a human can achieve naturally.
Mental Pollution (A+++ rank)- possession of a distorted mentality that grants resistance to mental interference based thaumaturgy at the expense of making it difficult to empathize or come to an understanding with others. Lancer's version of this Skill takes form as a fanatical obsession with notions of "purity". Ethnic, political, even spiritual purity. Everything and everyone that was less than perfect by Hitler's standards, simply had to go. Widely considered one of the most evil and twisted men in the modern era nay, the entire world, Lancer's rank is truly beyond compare. Renders him virtually untouchable to any form of mind-based magecraft.
Rank far too high.
Eye For Art (E rank)- a knowledge of and infatuation for works of art. In his early life, he was a viennian painter who produced and sold hundreds of works. However, his talent in the art is highly questionable at best and he was widely considered to be little more than an amature. Has a very slight chance of identifying fellow Servants if they possess artistic anecdotes.
I really don't think he should have this skill at all
Cult Of Personality (EX rank)- the distortion of one's legend through mass media and other methods. Similiar in principle to the Imperial Priviledge possessed by a certain roman emperor, however this relies on the beliefs and perceptions of others rather than simply personal conviction. Allows for obtainment of Skills beyond what the Servant would normally possess. At an EX rank; Lancer can temporarily grant himself the Skills Military Tactics, Battle Continuation, Natural Body, Animal Dialogue, Divinity, Guardian Knight and Rune Magic.
>Hitler
>Military Tactics
Protection From Assassination (A+ rank)- a unique Skill based on how Hitler repeatedly evaded a variety of assassination attempts based seemingly on nothing more than sheer blind luck. Any suprise attack on Lancer will have a high chance of failing due to unforseen means (such as a bird suddenly flying into the path of a thrown knife, or suddenly tripping under cover just before a bomb goes off). At this rank, assassinating him would take nothing short of a miracle.
Make it a lower rank, it's a fun idea though
Noble Phantasms:
Heilig Lanze- Spear Of Destined Victory (A+ rank, Anti-Army): the "Spear of Destiny" that Hitler was obsessed with in life, supposedly granting victory and world conquest to any who obtained it. Its original identity is Longinus, the spear which pierced the side of Christ and was thusly granted a powerful Anti-Divine attribute. However, this aspect of the spear is sealed due to Hitler not being the weapon's true "owner". Instead, the weapon in Hitler's possession served a merely ceremonial purpose. When invoked, the spear becomes the focal point for a semi-spherical Bounded Field extending 30 kilometers in all directions. Anyone within the field deemed an "enemy of the Reich" will recieve a rank down in all parameters, and any Noble Phantasms below B rank will be sealed other than Lancer's own. The effect can only be annulled if the spear is broken, Lancer is killed or he runs out of prana to sustain it. Although it's the same spear as possessed by Saint Longinus, it has a distinct existence as a Noble Phantasm based on its ties to Hitler's own legend (like how Scáthach's Gae Bolg is different from Chuchulainn's, even though it's still the same spear).
First it's "Heilige Lanze"
Also what do you base Hitler having it on?
Blitzkrieg- All-Purpose Tactical Lightning Spear (B rank, Anti-Unit): a Noble Phantasm based off the type of germanic warfare of the same name, used to great effect during the second World War. The core principle of Blitzkrieg consists in a targetted barrage of short, fast and powerful attacks to break through the enemy's line of defense. Embodying this; Lancer unleashes a rapid series of slashes, stabs and strikes with his spear so fast as to resemble strokes of lightning and serving to utterly decimate the opponent's defenses. A technique-based Noble Phantasm similiar to Kojiro's Tsubame Gaeshi or Heracles's Shooting Hundred Heads. As the attacks are merely closely following rather then truly simultaneous, it is theoretically possible for them all to be blocked successively. However the speed and skill required for such a feat would be truly immense.
Aus Feuer ward der Geist geschaffen,
drum schenkt mir süßes Feuer ein!
Die Lust der Lieder und der Waffen,
die Lust der Liebe schenkt mir ein,
der Trauben süßes Sonnenblut,
das Wunder glaubt und Wunder thut!
It seems I must find Funderfulness and kill him.
Wow, thanks for the in-depth commentary there bud! Been quite a while since I've last gotten something like that (commentary on this thread seems to have turned fairly sparse lately). As always, my own comments are in blue.
Servant Lancer:
True Name: Adolph Hitler
It's Adolf
Adolph does appear to be a perfectly valid alternative spelling, although you're right Adolf is the most dominant one. Its not like Iskander was the dominant spelling of Alexander The Great either though.
Alignment: Lawful Evil
Summoning Catalyst: fragments of his skull from Moscow
Alternate Classes: Caster, Rider, Berserker
Strength- D
Agility- B
Endurance- C
Mana- B
Luck- A++
NP- A+
Justify these stats please.
Especially B-rank agility and A++ luck.
The high Luck was supposed to be because of the Lance as well as how he managed to escape so many assassination attempts on him. I'll probably lower it to something more reasonable though. (Is A too high? Maybe C?) Agility is just as a result of the Lancer class container (if you want I could change it to C++ or something though). The other stats look pretty reasonable to me.
Appearance:
Personality: cruel and intelligent, adhering strongly in the doctrines of social darwinism and openly stating the right of the strong to trample upon the weak. A true sociopath and megalomaniac, to whom the lives and affairs of the common people are absolutely absurd and contemptible. That he loved Germany was without doubt. However, the Germany that he loved so much existed only in his own imagination. Pure and unsullied, his vision was of a Germany that could hold its head high upon the world stage. Germany above all. Above God. Above love. Above justice. For the sake of that ideal he embarked upon a path of bloodshed, slaughtering all those who failed to meet his criteria of an "Ideal Germany". The only logical end for such a course of action would be the destruction of everyone save himself, a lone ruler looking out upon a country of corpses. He considers himself to be the "savior" of Germany, or perhaps something closer even to a God. His wish on the Holy Grail would be to bring back the German Empire of his dreams and bring his mad vision of a thousand-year Reich into final reality.
Likes: Germany, the Aryan race, opera
Dislikes: "Degenerates", modern art
Hobby: painting
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance (B rank)- can cancel spells with an incantation of less than three verses. His rank in this Skill is solely due to the holy properties of his Heilig Lanze Noble Phantasm, and would be merely E rank without it. As it's a form of holy protection, Sacraments of the Church will bypasss it straight-out.
Personal Skills:
Charisma (A rank)- the ability to inspire others and lead armies. Charisma sufficient to lead an entire country and inspire armies of virtually any size. As a skilled demagogue and undisputed expert in manipulating "the will of the people", he possesses the highest possible rank a human can achieve naturally.
Mental Pollution (A+++ rank)- possession of a distorted mentality that grants resistance to mental interference based thaumaturgy at the expense of making it difficult to empathize or come to an understanding with others. Lancer's version of this Skill takes form as a fanatical obsession with notions of "purity". Ethnic, political, even spiritual purity. Everything and everyone that was less than perfect by Hitler's standards, simply had to go. Widely considered one of the most evil and twisted men in the modern era nay, the entire world, Lancer's rank is truly beyond compare. Renders him virtually untouchable to any form of mind-based magecraft.
Rank far too high.
Well, it is Hitler we're talking about here. Anything less than that wouldn't really be doing justice to the sheer cruelty and malevolence of the man (just be glad I didn't give him Mystic Eyes Of Hate ala Captain Planet).
Eye For Art (E rank)- a knowledge of and infatuation for works of art. In his early life, he was a viennian painter who produced and sold hundreds of works. However, his talent in the art is highly questionable at best and he was widely considered to be little more than an amature. Has a very slight chance of identifying fellow Servants if they possess artistic anecdotes.
I really don't think he should have this skill at all
I thought it seemed fitting enough. I mean, he was a painter before becoming a dictator. If it's not appropriate then I might just end up making it one of the (many) Skills that he can grant himself through Cult Of Personality.
Cult Of Personality (EX rank)- the distortion of one's legend through mass media and other methods. Similiar in principle to the Imperial Priviledge possessed by a certain roman emperor, however this relies on the beliefs and perceptions of others rather than simply personal conviction. Allows for obtainment of Skills beyond what the Servant would normally possess. At an EX rank; Lancer can temporarily grant himself the Skills Military Tactics, Battle Continuation, Natural Body, Animal Dialogue, Divinity, Guardian Knight and Rune Magic.
>Hitler
> Military Tactics
I see what you mean haha. In reality Hitler was widely considered a pretty terrible tactician (to the point where some people say it was good he wasn't assassinated otherwise Germany might have gotten somebody more competent). Hence why I only gave him it as an extension of Cult Of Personality, rather then a regular Personal Skill. Or I think that's what you were trying to say anyway. It wasn't exactly clear.
Protection From Assassination (A+ rank)- a unique Skill based on how Hitler repeatedly evaded a variety of assassination attempts based seemingly on nothing more than sheer blind luck. Any suprise attack on Lancer will have a high chance of failing due to unforseen means (such as a bird suddenly flying into the path of a thrown knife, or suddenly tripping under cover just before a bomb goes off). At this rank, assassinating him would take nothing short of a miracle.
Make it a lower rank, it's a fun idea though
Glad you like it! I might consider bumping off the extra +, although I do still want him to have it at a pretty high rank. (I mean, people tried to assassinate the guy like how many times? Yet he got out of all of them unscathed)
Noble Phantasms:
Heilig Lanze- Spear Of Destined Victory (A+ rank, Anti-Army): the "Spear of Destiny" that Hitler was obsessed with in life, supposedly granting victory and world conquest to any who obtained it. Its original identity is Longinus, the spear which pierced the side of Christ and was thusly granted a powerful Anti-Divine attribute. However, this aspect of the spear is sealed due to Hitler not being the weapon's true "owner". Instead, the weapon in Hitler's possession served a merely ceremonial purpose. When invoked, the spear becomes the focal point for a semi-spherical Bounded Field extending 30 kilometers in all directions. Anyone within the field deemed an "enemy of the Reich" will recieve a rank down in all parameters, and any Noble Phantasms below B rank will be sealed other than Lancer's own. The effect can only be annulled if the spear is broken, Lancer is killed or he runs out of prana to sustain it. Although it's the same spear as possessed by Saint Longinus, it has a distinct existence as a Noble Phantasm based on its ties to Hitler's own legend (like how Scáthach's Gae Bolg is different from Chuchulainn's, even though it's still the same spear).
First it's "Heilige Lanze"
Also what do you base Hitler having it on?
Popular urban legend has it that Hitler obtained/tried to obtain the Spear at some point in his career of conquest. He's often depicted with it in video games like Wolfenstein 3D or Persona 2. One of the many occult rumors surrounding the Nazi party and its various members. I'll correct the typo though. (Could have sworn I'd heard it spelled as Heilig Lanze in the past but whatever...)
Blitzkrieg- All-Purpose Tactical Lightning Spear (B rank, Anti-Unit): a Noble Phantasm based off the type of germanic warfare of the same name, used to great effect during the second World War. The core principle of Blitzkrieg consists in a targetted barrage of short, fast and powerful attacks to break through the enemy's line of defense. Embodying this; Lancer unleashes a rapid series of slashes, stabs and strikes with his spear so fast as to resemble strokes of lightning and serving to utterly decimate the opponent's defenses. A technique-based Noble Phantasm similiar to Kojiro's Tsubame Gaeshi or Heracles's Shooting Hundred Heads. As the attacks are merely closely following rather then truly simultaneous, it is theoretically possible for them all to be blocked successively. However the speed and skill required for such a feat would be truly immense.
Why you wanna kill Funderfulness guy? What'd he ever do to you?
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"We don't need martyrs right now. We need heroes. A hero would die for his country, but he'd much rather live for it." -Josiah Bartlet
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Hitler has always been a bit of a touchy subject to be honest.As Ethanes mentioned,you should probably reduce the Mental pollution rank,A+++ is really stretching it.
Well, Extra Vlad had Protection Of The Faith at A+++ rank didn't he? This is sort of a similar thing. Besides its not like I just throw around triple plus signs willy-nilly (my only other instance was Freyja's Luck stat, which was due to her Brisingamen NP).
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It's because you're catching up to me too quickly. I must preserve my position.
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It's because you're catching up to me too quickly. I must preserve my position.
No it isn't.Adolph does appear to be a perfectly valid alternative spelling, although you're right Adolf is the most dominant one. Its not like Iskander was the dominant spelling of Alexander The Great either though.
Adolph is a different name with the same pronounciation
He's from the fucking 20th century.The high Luck was supposed to be because of the Lance as well as how he managed to escape so many assassination attempts on him. I'll probably lower it to something more reasonable though. (Is A too high? Maybe C?) Agility is just as a result of the Lancer class container (if you want I could change it to C++ or something though). The other stats look pretty reasonable to me.
How do you justify 40times the average human agility?
I'd actually rank it lower than Gilles' simply because Hitler didn't do those fucked up things in person.Well, it is Hitler we're talking about here. Anything less than that wouldn't really be doing justice to the sheer cruelty and malevolence of the man.
Maybe A or B
Have you actually looked at some of his images?I thought it seemed fitting enough. I mean, he was a painter before becoming a dictator. If it's not appropriate then I might just end up making it one of the (many) Skills that he can grant himself through Cult Of Personality.
Size
In general I think that skill is bad.I see what you mean haha. In reality Hitler was widely considered a pretty terrible tactician (to the point where some people say it was good he wasn't assassinated otherwise Germany might have gotten somebody more competent). Hence why I only gave him it as an extension of Cult Of Personality, rather then a regular Personal Skill. Or I think that's what you were trying to say anyway. It wasn't exactly clear.
It's like you're just trying to make him stronger without any reason for it.
If you'd make it straight up imperial priviledge I'd still not like it but atleast it would justify Military Tactics etc. since there's a reason the generals called him Gröfaz behind his back
He survived nowhere near the amount of assassination attempts as some others.Glad you like it! I might consider bumping off the extra +, although I do still want him to have it at a pretty high rank. (I mean, people tried to assassinate the guy like how many times? Yet he got out of all of them unscathed)
I mean Castro survived 638 attempts on his life.
Pretty sure that was made up by comic books as a reason why superheroes didn't just win the war.Popular urban legend has it that Hitler obtained/tried to obtain the Spear at some point in his career of conquest. He's often depicted with it in video games like Wolfenstein 3D or Persona 2. One of the many occult rumors surrounding the Nazi party and its various members.
It really doesn't belong on a servant sheet.
Yes by people who have no clue about german.I'll correct the typo though. (Could have sworn I'd heard it spelled as Heilig Lanze in the past but whatever...)
"heilig" is an adverb while "heilige/heiliger/heiliges/ is an adjective
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