You could just... give him Item Creation as a personal skill.
You could just... give him Item Creation as a personal skill.
yeah maybe I'll make the factory thing as another NP
Class: Caster
Master:
True Name: Dido, the Queen of Tragedy
Sex: Female
Height/Weight: 160cm/51kg
Alignment: True Neutral
Appearance: I suppose this will have to do.
Stats
Skills
Noble Phantasm
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I feel like I may have overwanked her terribly... oh well.
Blah blah blah constructive criticism blah blah blah.
No, seriously. Tell me how to make this better.
Dido: Her NPs are both quite cool, and her overall sheet gives the impression of 'powerful, but balanced'. Certainly she'd be a high-level Caster in most Grail Wars, but certainly not undefeatable. I don't know enough about her historical/mythical significance to say whether that level of power justified, however.
Second NP reminds me a fair bit of Jeanne's La Pucelle, though still different enough to be unique.
Rider
Theme
True Name- Paul Revere
Alignment- Neutral Good
Place of Origin- America
Likes- His Family, Smithing, Industrialization, Doctor Joseph Warren
Dislikes- Friends Dying, "Dirty Reds", Being Falsely Accused, Past Mistakes
Weapons- Flintlock Rifle with Bayonet, His Pocket Pistol
Faceclaim
Stats-
Strength- D
Endurance- C
Agility- C
Mana- B+
Luck- B
Noble Phantasm- B
Class Skills-
Riding- B+
Most vehicles can be handled with above average skill. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasm Races such as Monstrous Beasts. The speed of any mount is boosted further during 11:00 PM - 1:00 AM
Magic Resistance- D
Cancels Single-Action spells. Magic Resistance of the same degree of an amulet that rejects magical energy.
Personal Skills-
Son of Liberty- B+
A unique skill granted to those that were members of the Sons of Liberty. This Skill grants Bravery- B, Nature of a Rebellious Spirit- C, Subversive Activities- B
Uniform Production- Innovation- B
Rider was one of the first to use Uniform Production in America, and paved the way for Standardization becoming the norm in America. Rider is able to create a Factory that can mimic the effects of the Skill Mass Production- A. All weapons made in this Factory are on the same level as if a Caster with Item Creation- C had made them. Rider's personal weapons and guns he makes in this factory deal bonus damage against those wielding Noble Phantasms that are considered to be the "Original". Rider can make weapons ranging from flintlock rifles and pistols, to artillery, and the ammo needed for such weapons.
Familiars (Minute Men)- C
Rider is able to summon multiple familiars of Minute Men. They are armed with the weapons Rider creates in his factory. They can be used in more complex ways such as setting up ambushes in certain areas. Those that are able to use Rider's artillery cost more to create than the regular rifle wielding soldiers. The number Rider can summon at once is only limited by his mana.
Expert of Many Specializations- B
This skill allows for Rider to use skills ranging from artisan crafts and medical skills, to military tactics and marksmanship. Rider was a master of many skills, even becoming a dentist at one point during his life.
Noble Phantasms-
Intelligence and Alarm System
One, if by Land, and Two, if by Sea- C+
Anti-Unit
Rider has the ability to set up lanterns all over the current city he is in. Each lantern will alert Rider if a servant is within 500 meters of it and what class the servant is. These lanterns are able to be destroyed by other servants. This is a crystallization of his Intelligence and Alarm system to watch over the British army, and was used to alert the Patriots of incoming British attacks.
A Signal To Alarm the Country
Midnight Ride- B
Anti-Army
Rider summons his mount and immediately all enemies without anti-mental interference are drawn to Rider and forced to attack and follow only him. This effect lasts an hour. While active Rider gains a rank up to Agility and Endurance, the damage of all of the weapons created is increased during this time. Rider can use this to lead the enemy into a trap he set up before hand, using his Minute Men. Rider's artillery created by his factory also have the bonus of increased accuracy during this time period, and are able to hit most servants dead-on dealing massive damage. However after using this Noble Phantasm, all of Rider's Familiars, and weapons created in his factory, disappear. Paul Revere's horse was never named, because of this Rider's mount is simply a servant level mount.
Listen, my children, and you shall hear
Of the midnight ride of Paul Revere,
Lore (Poem is not entirely historically acturate)
Personality
(I really wanted to give him Presence Detection but I had too many skills already. I'll leave the story here.
Revere's friend and compatriot Joseph Warren was killed in the Battle of Bunker Hill on June 17, 1775. Because soldiers killed in battle were often buried in mass graves without ceremony, Warren's grave was unmarked. On March 21, 1776, several days after the British army left Boston, Revere went to the battlefield and found a grave containing two bodies. After being buried for nine months, Warren's face was unrecognizable, but Revere was able to identify Warren's body because he had placed a false tooth in Warren's mouth, and recognized the wire he had used for fastening it. Warren was given a proper funeral and reburied in a marked grave.)
Last edited by ZSB1999; April 21st, 2016 at 09:35 PM.
I don't really have much to say on this one.
The only thing of note is that you seem to have seem to have mixed up Librarian of Stored Knowledge and Expert of Many Specializations.
Paul Revere looks good overall, as for presence detection you could always lump the minutemen familiars as either an additional perk of the Sons of Liberty skill or as an NP (Though I has a feeling you're trying to not have an IH clone yes?)
Yeah, split the Aegis and Gorgoneion mostly because no one in the records seems to agree what it is exactly, so I just went for the etymology of the word Aegis which was basically "goat-skin". I originally thought of giving Athena two spears, one that is her regular fighting spear called Pallas and Dios as the throwing spear but I had to nix it because I had a lot of NPs already.
As for her reasons, yeah got the general Idea of what I'm going for. Though I also planned her wanting undo what she did to Medusa and Arachne as well. I'm following I more modern interpretation that Athena gave Medusa's powers as a blessing after the latter got raped in the former's temple. As for Arachne, I'm thinking of either Athena was forced to punish her because she knew the other Olympian would treat her far worse or her pride got the better of her.
@The Bird of Hermes and Lycodrake
Thanks and I fixed all those artifacts from the old sheet. My bad.
Quick question: Are embodiments of a group allowed here? Like say a Servant a Roman Legionnaire representing the Imperial Roman Legions as a whole?
Last edited by NightEye; April 21st, 2016 at 04:21 AM.
Dido - She's quite powerful and very versatile. Nice job on the Noble Phantasms. The only criticism I have is that I'm not keen on charisma being B++. I'd either remove one of the modifiers or just round it up to A.
Paul Revere - Not as much to say here though I'd nerf him a little. I'd reduce innovation and familiar by one or two ranks and remove the two pluses from his second noble phantasm.
Night eye - Royd did that with the crusaders, so go ahead and do what you like.
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Okay, so I'm thinking of making a Nimrod sheet, but I have multiple ideas on how to make him. So I'm gonna ask for opinions here. Should I:
Make him a devotee servant of the Lord, who was attached to the legend of the Tower of Babel after his death? I.E. Should I give him Innocent Monster and then base him around that?
Make him the guy who actually did decide that he/humans were equal to God/the gods and built the Tower of Babel? I.E. Should I give him stuff like the Godslayer skill?
Make him a her, because I haven't done any genderbends yet?
Make him older or younger than Gilgamesh?
About the image thing; Those aren't images they're wikipedia articles. If you were referring to the actual image link I made... yeah, I don't actually know how to do that and I haven't bothered to learn yet. Maybe next sheet...
About the 'trap'; that's also an option.
Ultimately it depends on what you find more interesting. When I made Jonathan, I made him a humble servant as that what he reflected in life, personally if you take the likes of Solomon and Gilgamesh (as he could be around their level) someone who knew humans could eventually eclipse the gods would be more interesting to me.
As for the gender swap, only do it if you can work it into the original legend or add some extra depth to the character- for find a decent excuse for it like with Mordred, Arturia or Drake.
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Why learn when the instructions are literally on the bottom of every page on this site?
You're right, it is very easy and there's no real reason for me not to do it (other than possibly not being able to find good faceclaims). Like I said, maybe next sheet...
Class: Lancer
True Name: Dian Wei
Titles: The Coming Evil
Sex: Male
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Not really a faceclaim as this IS supposed to be him
Personality:
Lancer was known for being a loyal, prudent and responsible man. He often stood guard outside Cao Cao's tent from morning until dusk, and even at night he would sleep beside Cao's tent, and he rarely returned to his own quarters. He was also a heavy eater and drinker, eating in huge mouthfuls and drinking in long gulps. Because of his enormous appetite, several men were required to serve him whenever he sat down for meals.
Strength: B
Endurance: B
Agility: C
Mana: D
Luck: D
Noble Phantasm: A
Class Skills
Magic Resistance: C
Grants protection against magical effects.
Though magic was present in Lancer’s life, he was not known to have had a direct encounter with it.
Personal Skills
Battle Continuation: B-
The strength of vitality for predicaments. Also, the ability to withdraw from combat and reach allied territory alive after being defeated.
At the battle of Wan, even after his men had fallen and Lancer himself had sustained several wounds all over his body, he continued fighting the enemy at close quarters and held them back as his lord made his escape. Just before his death, he was still glaring and swearing at the enemy. Only after confirming that Lancer was dead did his enemies dare to come forward and decapitate him.
Stalwart Protector: B
An ability that makes those who have it become more powerful as they are inflicted more pain and temporarily raises defensive power when protecting others, mental interference is negated when either state is activated. The cost used to heal injuries via Magecraft or similar methods are reduced.
Lancer took to his duties of protecting his lord very seriously. The thought of him in danger was enough to conjure a dormant strength within him to carry out his duty and being injured only seems to help bring out the ferocious beast within Lancer even more.
Dignity of the Rearguards: B
A skill that displays more power the more disadvantageous the situation (such as defensive battles and military withdrawals) is.
When his weapons broke as he fought to death covering his lord’s escape, he grabbed the bodies of two enemy soldiers and used them as weapons.
Projectile (Ji): A
The expertise for throwing projectile weapons; in this case, Ji (Halberds).
Lancer is known to have such skill with the Ji that he is able to use them as throwing weapons with remarkable accuracy.
Noble Phantasms
Banner of Elai: Acclamation of Strength: B
A banner held up by a bronze staff bearing the name of Lancer’s current Master. As long as the banner is planted on the ground, enemies within 200 meters of the banner will lose one rank to their strength, speed and endurance. This noble phantasm commemorates an event in Lancer’s life. When a large banner was swaying in the strong wind and the soldiers of the camp could not stop it from swaying despite their combined efforts. Lancer used only one hand to grab the banner pole and succeeded in keeping it upright. His lord, very impressed with Lancer's strength, declared that he was Elai, a bodyguard of King Zhou of the Shang dynasty who was known for his immense physical strength.
Defiant Stand: Glory of the Coming Evil: A
When severely wounded, Lancer will gain 3 “+” modifiers to Strength and Endurance as well as the ability to yell threats and taunts that, if his enemy is unable to shake off this mental interference, will instill a concept of fear or at least caution into them. This also allows Lancer to nullify non-ranged attacks of rank A or lower and ranged attacks of rank B or lower regardless of it being magical or physical. If Lancer dies and Banner of Elai is planted on the ground, any Servant within Banner of Elai’s area of influence will gain a 2 rank de-buff to his/her strength, agility and endurance that will last for 5 days. This Noble Phantasm commemorates Lancer’s last stand in the Battle of Wan, where he held off the soldiers of Zhang Xiu long enough for his Lord, Cao Cao, to escape.
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This one's a bit raw from my brain, so I may have neglected balancing him correctly. As always critique and such is appreciated.
Last edited by NightEye; April 22nd, 2016 at 02:21 AM.
For Dian Wei maybe give Battle Continuation a minus that makes it so he can't retreat, other than that a good sheet. Lancer seems really powerful, but it makes sense as almost everyone from the Romance of the Three Kingdoms was crazy powerful. His skills are very powerful but his stats balance him out (Like Cu). If you wanted to you could mix Guardian Knight, Honor of the Battered, and Bravery into one skill like I did for my Three of Thirty skill. Nice job on your sheets, I only had just noticed that this was only your third servant sheet, it seems like you've been doing this forever. Far better than my first three (However I did have a puppy Noble Phantasm sooo...)
I seriously flipped a coin between that and Bravery. Bravery won out.
Yeah I might just merge those 3 together, good idea, thanks. And good point on that minus on Battle continuation. As for balance, yeah Cu has always been my benchmark when doing lancers. My concept for Dian Wei is that he's an excellent defensive Servant with below average mobility due to his average agility and the Banner of Elai,
And thanks, I've been doing this since '08 here and there. (Puppy NP??? Was it an actress or something?)
Last edited by NightEye; April 21st, 2016 at 02:59 PM.
I like my Dian Wei bald, but this is a fine sheet.
Though i feel like some parts of the last NP seem better fit for Zhang Fei than Dian Wei.
Also on John Revere.
What is his mount? a regular horse?