Viking of Stamford Bridge: Interesting to get another "nameless" hero as a Servant. He's a little sparse Skills and personality wise, but I suppose that's par for the course for someone whom so little is known about. The Viking Trance composite Skill works well and adds some nice flavor. I'd probably still include a Class Skill section for Mad Enhancement even if only to note that it's been overwritten by that Skill though, just to make the formatting neater.
Thanks for the feedback. I really enjoyed making Viking Trance and the sheet in general, but what did you think about the NP's?Originally Posted by RoydGolden
The NPs are mostly fine. For Hamask, I'm curious how strong the protection against fire and steel is. I can't imagine he'd be able to tank an A++ sword NP just because it's made of steel.
Almost completely immune. It would take a lot of power to harm him with fire and steel even for a A++ NP. The thing is what makes a NP A++ is not it being a really good weapon, but some sort of secondary effect. THe secondary effect can harm him just fine. So you have a steel sword that shoots lighting. He would be almost immune to the sword, but be fried by the lighting.
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See, berserkers changing shape was mostly a poetic description for the berserk rage and the various physical changes it brought (abnormal size, distorted features which could horrify even seasoned warriors, etc.), not literal shapeshifting into beasts. The closest to that would be Bodvar Bjarki's bear form, which was actually his spirit self, not his physical body (which remained behind in a shamanistic trance). More importantly, the Berserker of Stamford Bridge doesn't display anything related to that, literal shapeshifting or not.Berserker of Stamford Bridge
It's also highly doubtful whether the Berserker of Stamford Bridge had the invulnerability displayed by his compatriots of legend, considering he IS killed with regular weapons. He's not invulnerable, he's just really that good at fighting.
Finally, I don't think you need a single Skill, you can just give him all the Personal Skills he needs.
Here are my suggestions, if you don't mind:
1) Give him Mad Enhancement back, at Rank D or C.
2) Give him Battle Continuation C or B, Berserk B or A, Mind's Eye (False) C or B, Guardian Knight C or B (possibly with a + modifier).
3) Do his Stats already include the bonus from Viking Trance?
4) Remove Hamask.
5) Jazz Stamford Bridge up a little! I don't know, make it create a spiritual territory which hinders enemies and aids him in some way, something.
Not the original author, but I think stuff like the bear transformation and invulnerability are based on how he's been conflated with the universal concept of Viking warriors.
They're not stuff like he'd have as an individual, but a consequence of him being basically "Heroic Spirit Viking". Now I can't see that's the most interesting way to write up the Viking of Stamford Bridge as a Servant, but it does explain how he ended up qualifying as a Heroic Spirit despite his true name being lost...
Random thoughts
Snorri and some of the other saga and tháttr authors worked off the premise that the old Norse gods were actually powerful sorcerers who posed as gods, not real deities, so there's already precedent.
But how was he conflated? We don't know who he was, but we do have a pretty good idea of what he did, so this isn't like Semiramis gaining the Hanging Gardens because of popular misconceptions. Even then, we'd still have the issue that the shapeshifting wasn't literal.
Because you seem to be very knowledge-rich in the Norse mythology could you perhaps give me some tipps for a Thor respectively a Tyr servant and what do you say to my Loki series ? >Loki
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Ruler of Forgetful SmokeClass: Ruler
Ruler Caterpillar
Alternate Classes: Caster, Alter Ego, Berserker, Watcher
True Name: The Caterpillar (Violet Liddell)
Origin: Wonderland
Alignment: Neutral Mad
Armaments: Hookah, Hallucinogenic smoke
Attribute: Earth
Traits: Female, Servant, Phantasmal, Liddell, Weak to Enuma Elish
Wish for the Grail: As a Ruler Caterpillar has no wish, though this is mostly because she is too forgetful and not all there mentally.
Appearance: Couldn’t think of anything for her human form myself, so here’s a good pic I like here, credit to the artiest feel free to leave your own suggestions if you have your own ideas. Her dragon form has smooth blue scales across her body, save her stomach which has many different colors, looking similar to a stain glass window (and symmetrical). Her claws (for both her arms and legs) have four talons, and her from her back come out two Dragontail butterfly wings, antenna like forms arching over the top, the wings themselves shine with many different colors.
Bio: Sister to the famed Alice Liddell, like with many of the girl’s siblings Violet has been forgotten to time, eclipsed by the girl whom traveled wonderland. Despite this, or even because of this, she lived a happy life, an unimpressive life, a life she has now forgotten. An abnormality occurred, allowing the world of wonderland to manifest and impose itself upon the world.
Violet like all the other Liddell siblings was swept up, absorbing the phantom spirit of one of its characters, she manifested as a servant. Said servant was the Caterpillar, a hookah smoking insect with a pension for forgetting, and forget she did. Little is left of Violet’s memory fogged by the smoke of her Hookah. For unknown reasons the Greek goddess of the soul Psyche has blessed this Caterpillar. Perhaps pity? To spread her influence? Maybe the simple whims of a goddess, we may never know, Violet certainly doesn’t.
Parameters:
-Strength: D+ (After NP: A+)
-Endurance: C (After NP: B++)
-Agility: D+ (After NP: B++)
-Mana: A (After NP: B)
-Luck: A (After NP: C)
-NP: A+
Class Skills:
-Magic Resistance A+: A skill offering protection from Magecraft, earned mostly as a function of Ruler’s class, however it is further increased by the blessing of Psyche. This skill nullifies all magic of A rank or lower, as well as lessening the effects of magecraft of higher rank.
-True Name Discernment D: A skill which allows a servant to see the true name, skills, Noble Phantasms etc. of other servants. Ruler has earned this skill in part as a function of her Noble Phantasm but remains at a low rank due to her forgetfulness. At this rank Ruler is able to see all of a servant’s general information (Name, Skills, NP’s, etc.) but little else. Furthermore this information can be easily concealed by certain skills and Noble Phantasms.
-God’s Resolution D: A skill which grants a servant a number of command seals for every servant within a greater grail war, Ruler has earned this skill solely as a result of her class, thus it is at a low rank. At this rank Ruler receives two command seals for every servant within a greater holy grail war. These command spells can only be used for the servants they are assigned to, they cannot be transferred to a master under any condition, however they otherwise function the same as command seals would.
-Wonder Origin A: A skill denoting both one’s origins within Wonderland, and having the mindset typical of this world, Ruler has earned this skill originating from said world as well as having a mindset which mostly aligns with the role she takes. As a resident of Wonderland Ruler has earned this skill which is further increased to its current rank by how well she has come to embody her role (though this is mostly because of the drugs). This skill allows Lancer to can resist most forms of mental attack and manipulation, in addition she is able to perform actions which defy the laws of physics with little to no use of mana.
Personal Skills:
-Oblivion Creation B: A skill which offers a servant the ability to cloud or even erase another’s memories, ironically Ruler has earned this skill because of her own forgetfulness. Since it is earned as a result of her own forgetfulness rather than her ability to make others forget its rank is lowered but remains at B due to both how forgetfulness and the power of her hookahs smoke. At this rank Ruler is able to erase all but the most emotional and powerful of memories, and even those may be forgotten if the individual wishes them to be. Additionally this skill is also able to overcome the Avenger class skill Oblivion Correction, negating said skill if C rank or lower, and decreasing the power of higher rank Oblivion Correction skills.
-Mystic Mushrooms (Size) C+: A unique skill denoting a servant’s ability to create a special type of mushroom which is able to alter one’s size, Ruler has earned this skill from living near such mushrooms. As she merely lives near them and neither grows them nor have any particular power over them, this skill remains at its current rank. At this rank Ruler is able to grow a particular type of mushroom able to alter one’s size, the setting and method of growth is not defined, and thus can be any conditions in which mushrooms can grow. Additionally individual mushrooms can alter size in different ways, from one able to grow and another to shrink, to one able to do both depending on which side you eat from, to even only growing certain body parts and not others.
-Quothe this Poem (Corruption) A: A skill used to alter another’s mental state, it allows Ruler to compel another to quote a poem, song, phrase etc. only for it to always come out wrong in some way. In addition to acting as a distraction it also allows Ruler to subtlety alter one’s mental state as the conversation continues. At this rank other servant’s well have an almost instinctual desire to state the poem, song, etc. they are asked to quote, which well be said in its entirety even after they notice their doing it wrong, unless they are interrupted. Ruler will be capable of altering the other’s mental state in a manner similar to subliminal messaging but stronger. This will not be stopped by skills which resist to mental attacks unless it is noticed by the individual.
Noble Phantasms:
-Oracle of the Mushroom Valley: Hookah of Forgotten Knowledge D:
A unique Noble Phantasm added as a result of a recent trend in adaptations of “Alice’s Adventure in Wonderland” which turn the Caterpillar into an oracle like figure of knowledge. It allows Caterpillar to foresee the future and gain new knowledge from smoking the drugs in her Hookah. As this was at best a minor part of the original version of Caterpillar’s story, and has yet to build greatly enough, she only able to occasionally see the future, often in a disjointed and hard to interpret visions, and only general knowledge of things she asks or is asked shall be learned. Additionally this smoke has a function which can cause others to forget, including Caterpillar herself.
-Divine Metamorphosis: Gift of the Goddess of Souls A+:
The divine gift offered to all caterpillars by Psyche, this allows Caterpillar to incase herself in a chrysalis and transform herself. Normally this can only be used to turn into a butterfly or mouth, however a further blessing from Psyche has allowed Caterpillar to use this Noble Phantasm to transform into almost anything. This transformation takes time, how much being dependent on what it is she choices to become, with something such as altering appearance or gender taking only a few minutes, while something such as a dragon requiring weeks or even months. This process can be speed up by expending stored mana, or having it infused with mana from an outside source.
-Butterfly Dragon: Divine Symbol of Metamorphosis A+++:
On of many possible forms Caterpillar is able to take when using her first Noble Phantasm Divine Metamorphosis: Gift of the Goddess of Souls. It is a massive beautiful dragon with the traits of a butterfly, her scales blue, claws sharp, and wings those of a butterfly shining in many brilliant colors. In this form Caterpillar is no different from a dragon, which of course means her very breath is a weapon brimming with Mana of a particular element. In this case said element is smoke, specifically a hallucinogenic smoke which can cause visions, warp the mind, and make people forget many things, even reality.
Interactions with others:
-Alice Liddell: “Such a familiar name, do I know you?”
-Queen of Hearts: “Queen? I’ve forgotten we had a Queen. Now what was your profession again?”
-Marie Antoinette: “A diamond or a coal?”
-William Shakespeare: “Quothe me this Bard. “Shall I compare thee to a summer’s day?”
-White Rabbit: “Such a tiresome thing time, that is why I leave it forgotten. Then again, I think her good company, most of the her.”
-Aion: “Now I remember you. Are you in good spirits? Spending your you well?”
-Any Avenger: “Why bother holding onto hate? Let us forget it together.”
Other’s interactions with:
-William Shakespeare: “Shall I compare thee to spring’s morn? Thou art more blo… wait a moment that isn’t how it goes.”
-White Rabbit: “I can’t forget about time, because if I do-*realization* I’m late!!!”
-Saint George/Siegfried/Sigurd: “I’ve never seen a dragon like you before.”
-Hessian Lobo: “*Looks dazed and distant*”
-Edmond Dantes: “I feel like I’m forgetting something? But I like it.”
-Antonio Salieri: “I feel like myself again, thank you, um… Who are you again?”
-Jalter: “Damn my head’s all foggy, are you, uh… DAMN STOP YOUR SMOKE OR I’LL BURN YOU ALIVE??? W-WHO EVER YOU ARE!!!!”
Authors Notes: So this was an interesting one, perhaps one of the hardest parts was the NP but I’m happy with it. As for where this came from, I’ve recently been coming up with servant for a Wonderland Singularity/Lostbelt idea I had, and thus I made this servant sheet. I intend to do one for each of Alice Liddell’s siblings, so expect more (or go find the others I did, they’ll all get done… eventually.)
Servant Saber:
Appearance:
Source is here
True Name: Rene Descartes
Alignment: Neutral Good
Alternate Class: Caster
Armament: Rapier
Strength- C
Agility- B
Endurance- D
Mana- C
Luck- B
NP- B
Personality
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance- C+
Confers protection against magical effects. At this rank, spells with a chant below two verses are nullified. Cannot cope with the likes of High Thaumaturgy or Greater Rituals.
Having no anecdotes of successfully resisting Magecraft in life, Saber sports a C-rank in this Skill as an artifact of his Class Container. Due to having overturned Aristotle's theory of the four elements in favor of a thoroughgoing materialism where all matter has the same fundamental constituents, Saber attains a + modifier while defending against elemental Magecraft.
Riding- B
The ability to ride animals and handle vehicles. At this rank, most mundane mounts can be handled at an above average level of skill. As a noble alone Saber would be expected to know how to ride a horse. Having served as a knight in various battles throughout his life, Saber's proficiency has been further increased.
Personal Skills:
Methods Of Doubt- A+
The rigorous method of doubt Caster refined in his famous meditations, sublimated into a technical Skill. In the Saber Class this becomes a "battle methodology" similar to the Eye Of The Mind (True) Skill. In combat Saber can study his opponent's defenses to uncover openings for him to strike, as well as see through feints and deceptive tactics used against him.
In the Caster Class this Skill would grant a more generalized resistance to mental influences, but lack a specific application for battle.
Duelist- C
A Skill measuring one's prowess as a duelist. Lends + modifiers to Saber's physical stats while fighting at close range and using his trusty rapier. As well as a philosopher and scholar, Saber was a skilled duelist who fought in many battles over the course of his life.
One of Saber's most famous anecdotes as a duelist was when he was riding down the countryside of Touraine one day and came across an old sweetheart of his with another man. The jealous man challenged Saber to a duel, arrogantly believing he was no more than a pampered aristocrat. Saber instantly disarmed the man, knocking his sword out of his grip with a single flourish and pressing the tip of his own rapier to his throat. Saber looked at his old girlfriend and said to the man "The lady has beautiful eyes, and for that I will spare your life". Then he rode away on his horse, leaving both parties astonished in his wake.
Weak Constitution- C
Connotes a weakness born of ill health. Caster was a notoriously frail and sickly child, which is part of why he decided to devote himself to philosophy. During any strenuous action, there's a random chance that he'll suffer a temporary debuff to his parameters. Not that he let his sicknesses deter him from his martial exploits later in life...
Noble Phantasms
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I was going to take a break from Servants for awhile, but inspiration for this guy popped into my head and I couldn't help but write him up in a few days. I originally planned on doing Descartes as a Caster (with some Innocent Monster-like effects conflating him with his famous thought experiment of the Deceiving Demon) but I decided making him a Saber based off his anecdotes as a duelist and soldier would be more interesting.
As usual, comments and critiques would be welcome. Thanks for reading!
Last edited by RoydGolden; August 27th, 2019 at 02:17 PM. Reason: Added italics
Man, you finished this mass production of Servants in a great way. It's a pity you decided not to add anything about the Deceiving Demon, but this is a great Servant I'd love to summon.
By the way, I wonder what would his reaction to Fran be. Since she has "exotic eyes" (heterochromia counts?) and her name is similar to Francine, I think he could become Moriarty's no. 1 rival as her Papa.
Her being an artificial lifeform would give her extra daughter points for the anecdote of Descartes' automaton
Oh yeah, he'd get along great with Fran. She'd definitely be included in a hypothetical relationships section for this sheet if I felt inspired to write one. And I'm glad you liked the sheet!
Twins of Wonderland Forest
Rider Tweedle Dee Tweedle Dum
Class: Rider
Alternate Classes: Caster, Avenger, Alter Ego, Brawler, Watcher
True Name: Tweedle Dee & Tweedle Dum (James Liddell & Albert Liddell)
Origin: Wonderland
Alignment: Chaotic Mad
Armaments: Boxing, Poems
Attribute: Earth
Traits: Male, Servant, Liddell, Weak to Enuma Elish
Wish for the Grail: To live a long life.
Appearance: Being “twins” Tweedle Dee and Tweedle Dum are identical in appearance, only difference being small things such as clothing. Both are teenage “Girls” wearing Victorian style suits, Dee in red Dum in black, beneath the over coat a creamy tan vest (beneath which is a whit dress shirt). Around their necks are ascot ties Dee in black Dum in red, their pants and shoes same color, with top hats red for Dee and Black for Dum atop their heads, their names emboldened on them. Their hair is long, wavy, and blond. (Inspired by this with some changes)
Bio: Henry and Lorina Liddell were nothing famous, not entirely forgotten by history but not remembered they are more famous for knowing the author Lewis Carroll and giving birth to Alice Liddell, the basses for the character in his book. Of course Alice was not their only child, the eldest Edward Liddell, eldest daughter Lorina Liddell, young sister of Alice Edith, each equally as forgotten as their parents. In total there came to be ten Liddell children born by Lorina, but only eight lived full lives.
Two tragedies struck the family as James Liddell perished not even three years of age truly, years later joined by his brother Albert Liddell who lived not even a year. Though their bodies died, their lingering will allowed the two to continue as wraiths, eternally wishing they had the opportunity to live a long life. Despite dying years apart, the two wraiths became joined by their shared desire and family, helping both to last longer, last long enough for a miracle.
An abnormality occurred, one which manifested the world of Carroll’s book to impose itself upon the world, with the Liddell children coming to manifest as servants within, absorbing the phantoms created by the book. Despite not being twins in life, the deep connection they held in death made the Phantom they absorbed an easy choice, and thus they became Tweedle Dee, and Tweedle Dum. Wither by accident or design the two would fuse with other wraiths and phantoms of various other twins.
Parameters:
-Strength: C
-Endurance: D
-Agility: B
-Mana: B
-Luck: A
-NP: B++
Class Skills:
-Magic Resistance A: A skill offering protection of magecraft, Rider has earned this skill in part due to the unusual world they call home, and further increased by their skill Blessings of Gemini. At this rank magic of A rank or lower is negated, and those of a higher rank has a reduced effectiveness.
-Riding C: A skill denoting a servant’s ability to ride mounts and vehicles, Rider has earned this skill mostly as a result of their class, though it is increased in rank due to another skill. At this rank Rider is able to ride most mounts and vehicles with above average skill.
-Wonder Origin A: A skill denoting both one’s origins within Wonderland, and having the mindset typical of this world, Rider has earned this skill originating from said world as well as having a mindset which mostly aligns with the role they take. Rider’s willingness to play this role and having little else to distinguish themselves have earned them this skill at a high rank. This skill allows Rider to resist most forms of mental attack and manipulation, in addition they are able to perform actions which defy the laws of physics with little to no use of mana.
Personal Skills:
-Storyteller (Poem) B+: A skill denoting a servant’s ability to tell stories, poems in particular, this skill transforms any act of storytelling into a form of Magecraft, with poems being extra effective in this regard. Rider having part of their fame come from telling a story, in the form of a poem, to another has earned this skill, however as they’ve only told one story to one person this skills rank is decreased substantially. At this rank this skill allows Rider to produce effects described or reminiscent to any story or poem they recite the latter being more effective. This requires mana, with the amount dependent on the effect.
-Mana Burst (Speed) B+: A skill allowing a servant to increase their speed, or the speed of another, by infusing Mana into themselves or another. Rider is known for performing various acts of speed, such as dancing, running, and speaking fast, earning them this skill, further increased by other skills abilities. At this rank Rider is able to increase their speed and agility by as much one rank with a small amount of mana.
-Blessings of Gemini EX: A skill denoting a servant’s fame as a pair of twins, Rider has earned this skill as they are a well-known pair of twins, additionally they’ve absorbed many other twins into their saint graph further increasing it to its highest degree. This skill increases Rider’s strength and abilities while they are together. At this rank all of Rider’s parameters and skills are increased by one rank while they are together.
Noble Phantasms:
The Walrus and the Carpenter: Tragic Tale of a Feast C+:
Born of the poem the Tweedle’s told Alice, this Noble Phantasm allows them to replicate the events in the poem by simply reciting it. The strength of the recreation is determined by how closely it follows the poem, if the poem is told exactly as written than it shall create a perfect recreation, a Reality Marble where the poem plays out as though it were a movie. If it deviates it shall weaken in strength, but also the recreation shall deviate allowing them to weaponize it. Lastly it is possible for the Tweedle’s to trap other’s with in the poem, forcing them to play the roles of the Walrus and Carpenter.
The Red King: You Are but a Dream A:
Another part of the story of the Tweedle’s where they take Alice to see the Red King, a large man wearing a red night cape, sleeping beneath a tree. Within the story they tell the claim that Alice is but the Red King’s dream, and should he wake up she shall disappear. This Noble Phantasm summons the Red King and ties his dreams to an enemy, should he wake up there it shall severely harm the target, potentially killing them instantly. This ability is more effective against servants and phantasmal species, taking advantage of their nature as beings made from mana to disperse said mana.
Interactions with others:
-Queen of Hearts: Dum: “Are you the red Queen?” Dee: “Contrariwise, the Red King sleeps too much to have a Queen.” Dum: “Your right, probably a fake queen.” Both: “Definitely a fake queen, definitely.”
-Alice Liddle: Dum: “You are but a dream.” Dee: “Contrariwise, not a dream. A happy dream.” Dum: “Yes happy dream.” Both: “But a dream is but a dream.”
-William Shakespeare: Dum: “If you’re a bard than sing, sing bard sing.” Dee: “Contrariwise, he doesn’t sing, so he is no bard.”
-Aion: Dum: “If your time, then can you waste yourself?” Dee: “Contrariwise, if she wastes herself than she is less herself.” Dum: “If she’s less her self then she is not herself.” Dee: “Yes thus she is not time.”
-Astolfo: Dum: “Are you a girl who’s a boy.” Dee: “Contrariwise, he is a boy who is a girl.” Dum: “Well I say he is a girl who’s a boy.” Dee: “No, no, no, she is a girl who is a boy.” Dum: “Exactly she is a boy who is a girl.”
Other’s interactions with them:
-Alice: “You lived such short lives. I’m glad to see you having fun.”
-Astolfo: “Well I shall ask the same. Is she a boy who’s a girl, and is he a girl who’s a boy, or are you a boy who’s a girl and you’re a girl who’s a boy?”
-William Shakespeare: “Well Bard’s do more than sing, besides it was always more a nickname than anything else.”
-Caterpillar: “I don’t remember you, but you are familiar. Makes me want to cry, well I’ll forget soon enough.”
Authors Notes: Yet another Wonderland servant, this one was a little difficult as there were no twins among the Liddell siblings, so I got creative. I also considered adding aspects of Castor and Pollux, among other twins, but eventually decided to simply leave it at “absorbed other twin wraiths and phantoms.”
Last edited by DracoFay; August 28th, 2019 at 09:18 AM.
Sorry, but I didn't think they were very good. My advice is to go back to formula and tighten up the whole thing.
Here is my newest servant which is no Heroic spirit nor a Divine one…
"Enigma"
(Berserker)
Personal Data
Height: depending on the apparition
Weight: depending on the Apparition
Strenght:~
Endurance:~
Agility:~
Luck:~
Mana:A~EX
NP:EX (?)
Other Qualifying Classes*:Saber,Archer,Lancer,Rider,Assassin,Caster ,Shielder,Saver,Ruler,Avenger,Foreigner,Watcher,Re mainer
*is aplicable for every class as it is entirely depending on the circumstances and condition of its summoning due to it is a crystalized anomaly
Backstory and Personality
Skills
Noblephantasm
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I'm honestly trying to understand what this Enigma is, but well, it's enigmatic and not in a good way.
It appears to be the "Enigma tornado outbreak" of 1884. Not the first thing I'd imagine having a soul, the requirement for being a Servant.
As an extension of Gaia possibly?
It's actually a very interesting idea from Koga, and I'd like it quite a bit if the backstory and everything was cleaned up (extension of the planet/something with the Wild Hunt, perhaps?). Right now it just reads as almost wholesale taking Pale Rider's summoning.
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