IIRC Shirou was minding his own business, trying to take a bath, and out of no where Illya shows up flirting with him. Then Saber shows up and Illya plays innocent causing Saber to think Shirou was going to take advantage of Illya. It felt really forced.
This was just the beginning scene.
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It was actually so bad that I had to skim through it
I can't really say anything negative or overly positive about fanfics, as I take what I can get, but Chaos Theory has lost its pizzazz.
Did you all make sure to give your feedback in reviews to the story? Did you make sure of telling the Author about the flaws and giving some helpful suggestions, it would be beneficial to the story.
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Yeah..... the Ilya factor is getting significantly more..... pronounced.
Also, the story really has slowed to a crawl.
It's not enough to make me go to a neutral or negative rec just yet, but it is enough to for me to say that one should exercise caution when reading past the Gilgamesh fight.
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I'll second these. The first IllyaxShirou scene had that love-it-or-leave-it Moczo-brand comedy. Littered with. The bonus of. Sentence fragments. All throughout. And topped with a healthy dose of Pseudo-Alter at the end. It wasn't irredeemable, but I sure think it could've been done better.
The second scene felt like more of an emotional payoff for what had been building up over chapters, which made it stand out and up above even more in an otherwise lackluster chapter. Considering that those developments are what I originally came/stayed for and they delivered, I'm still okay with it.
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Actually I'll accept Christemo because otherwise I wouldn't be able to latch onto Rafflesiac's review as well.
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Because everything he says is 100% true and CT has been sucking quite a bit for the last few chapters.
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Actually no that'd make me a hypocrite.
Caster is a plot tumor that needs to die already, with crappy forced yuri, the whole Saber situation is really really damn cliche, Shirou is both useless and a unfunny buttmonkey to the whole Ilya situation, Rin is completely lacking her other qualities, the story feels increasingly padded out and it keeps piling up shit to the point just resolving the plot feels like it'd break SoD.
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It's got the same problem as the nanoha fic where his pet characters get shoved front and center no matter how grating they are and it keeps piling increasingly ridiculous AND THINGS GOT WORSE developments to the point you stop caring because things got so ridiculous any possible dramatic tension is now gone.
This was the easiest allusion to it I could be bothered to find, since searching all of Kyte's posts requires me to care more than I do. Esepcially when the forum software won't recognise a search for "-1".
Oh, sod it, that's a lie. I can always be bothered to spend excessive time on minor things of very little discernable value.
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I wouldn't say nobody likes it, and to our knowledge Moczo doesn't have plans that are anywhere near as crazy as Neoalfa's.
The recent chapters, especially since Sakura's yuri with Caster Alter started, have been less quality than the previous chapters, thus we have criticism.
Like Bloble said, the previous chapters are good enough to hold up my recommendation, but I really hope he can turn the story around somewhere soon.
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