Oh my, my contribution this time doubled from one sheet to two! :umu:
Better slow down so I don't overwork myself. :roman:
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Oh my, my contribution this time doubled from one sheet to two! :umu:
Better slow down so I don't overwork myself. :roman:
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Unfortunately it still crashes when I try to edit.
Here is my second part of my Loki series ,please everyone give me your oppinions
Loki
(Assassin)
The Devil of the norse has appeared before your eyes !
https://i.imgur.com/EPlzfxT.jpg
Height: 193 cm
Weight: 70~ kg
Alignment: Chaotic Evil
Attribute: Earth
Origin: North Europe
Weapon: sickle,One-hander
Other qualifying classes: Rider, Lancer,Berserker,Saber,Caster,Avenger,Beast of Betrayal
Likes: His pathetic Children,Attention,pranks and praise.himself.
Dislikes: Being ignored,Odin,Thor,something that goes against his shemes.
Talents: Sinister shemes(tactics),to sow discord
Natural enemy: ???
Parameters
Background
Personality
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Relations
i am for every Feedback thankfull.
^Formatting seems a bit off from your usual Koga. What happened to the bold-text for Skill and NP names?
Has nobody some comments ?
“My name is Jeanne Darc! Once more, I have returned by the grace of the Lord! Just kidding~”
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Lancer
Identity: Claude des Armoises
Also known as: Jeanne Darc, La Pucelle
Height: 159 cm
Weight: 44 kg
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Attribute: Man
Origin: France
Armament: Flag
Natural enemy: Jeanne Darc
Parameters:
Strength: C+
Endurance: B
Agility: A
Mana: D
Luck: A
NP: C+
Background
Personality
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Relations
Not really convinced about the final result, specially the way I described the personality. The NP is based on an idea I had some time ago for a Lostbelt Gilles that used a combination of discount Luminosité Eternelle and Saint War Ordee , but feels meh. Anyways, here's the second faker Servant, who would fit the Faker class, as shown in one of her skills.
I feel so disappointed to have made absolutely no contribution during the past 50 pages...
Loki (Assassin): Doesn't seem that much different compared to your Lancer Loki, other than the different Class Skills and lacking one of his Lancer version's Noble Phantasms. If you can't come up with enough to differentiate him from the other version you've created, why bother? I mean, look at Cu; he has a Lancer version and a Caster version (not counting the Proto and Alter versions of himself). While they do seem to have the same Personal Skills, their parameters and Noble Phantasms are different. Lancer has good Agility and Strength with moderate Mana and Endurance and notoriously bad Luck, whereas Caster has weaker physical stats, better Mana, and slightly better Luck. And while Lancer has two variants of Gae Bolg for his Noble Phantasms, Caster has Wicker Man and Ochd Deug Odin. Meanwhile yoiur Assassin Loki simply just trades Magic Resistance for Presence Concealment and drops Hringhorni veizla.
Mary Seacole should be in Britain, or Jamaica and Louis Cyr should be in Canada. I mean, I can accept Louis Cyr in America since he's the only Canadian servant, but Mary Seacole should be in Britain, she was proud of being a British.
There isn't a Canada or Jamaica section, that's why Seacole and Cyr are in America. Although Jamaica geographically belongs to America, I'll change Seacole to Britain
The compilation is of all the sheets from here, not from page 650. You made some sheets, like Liz Alter, remember?
Claude is interesting but my gripe is the class, Lancer feels forced. Maybe Assassin would work better?
Assassin feels more forced than Lancer IMOQuote:
Originally Posted by the original Jeanne
The Hero of the Story
Saber Fairy Tale
Class: Saber
Alternate Classes: All of them
True Name: Fairy Tale
Alignment: Variable but always good
Armaments: Anything, most commonly Swords
Appearance: Due to this servants unique qualities, its appearance is altered depending on whom summons him, however he does carry over certain characteristic in each. He is always young, anywhere from 8 to 14 years old, he is always a swordsman of some kind, and he is almost always male, though recently, it is possible for him to be summoned as either gender. Additionally, while hair and skin color normal change, his facial structure is almost always the same, for unknown reasons.
Bio: Fairy Tale is not a heroic spirit with it's own story, but instead one of many lesser manifestations of "Story" an entity that represents all stories. Specifically Fairy Tale is the manifestation of not only his name sake, but of the concept of heroism.
Parameters
Strength: B+
Endurance: C
Agility: C+
Mana: E
Luck: D
NP: A
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance C+: Being the manifestation of the concept of heroism within stories, Saber gains the same resistance to magic of such heroes in these stories, as well as their weakness to it.
Riding B+ : As a manifestation of the stories of heroism, Saber has the capacity to ride what ever any other hero has, however, as a result of being an existence with no basses of his own, the skill is demarked.
Personal Skills:
Self-Modification B+: As a result of being an existence without a story of his own, Saber has the unique ability modify and alter his body. Due to him having a clear basses in Fairy Tales and Heroism, this skill is demarked.
Shapeshift A++: As a hero without a defined story, Saber also has no defined shape, and can thus take on many a form. Being the concept of Heroism, this skill is increased, as anyone can be a hero, but also kept from the highest rank.
Meanwhile B+: Many stories have more than one tale, this skill allows Saber to easily enter and leave a battle.
The Heroes Journey C: Every story has a pattern, and a progression, this skill will provide varies benefits and debuffs, to Saber depending on what of varies conditions meet. For example, strength and luck increase when Saber faces an Anti-Hero.
Noble Phantasms:
The Infinite Journey of a Heroes Story: Perpetual Engine of a Knights Dream C
One of the many possible Noble Phantasms that can manifest as a result of the desires of Sabers master. An Anti-World Noble Phantasm that can reverse the flow of time and return to a previous moment in time, "Repeating the Story Again."
Fairy Tale: A Tale For Somebody's Sake B++
In truth, Saber's form is not the swordsman but a book, kept safe within the Reality Marble created by this Noble Phantasm (or with the master). The shape and abilities of this Noble Phantasm is altered depending on the Masters values and personality. This Noble Phantasm can also be extended, creating a world based on the masters psyche.
Interactions with other servants
Authors Notes
Other servants I've done, Mary Seacole, Artoria Pendragon Shilder, Artoria Pendragon Caster, Gilgamesh Brawler, and Louis Cyr
Mhm this is a quite good servant Dracofay compliment well done ? but could you give on or two examples for better understanding ?and Anansi is who again and why does he call Gilgamesh Father !?
ps:How do you find my both Lokis ?
I don't exactly know what you mean by Examples. Do you mean examples of the concept?
Anyways, next question, Anansi is a Jamaican trickster god, who is common in a lot of African and Caribbean stories. In one of these stories Anansi is bored and figures its because there are no stories. The reason there are no stories is because another god (forget his name, but I think hes the god of storms) owns all of them and is basically hoarding them all to himself. Anansi wants them, the other god says he can have them if he does these three (or so) impossible things, and Anansi uses trickery to do these things, and ends up the owner of all stories.
Last question, Why is Gilgamesh Father? Its because The Epic of Gilgamesh, is the oldest story, the very first story, and in being the first story, that makes Gilgamesh, in a sense, the father of stories. Hence, Fairy Tale calls him papa.