The prompt is for non-standard Classes like Avenger, Shielder, Foreigner etc. So Macbeth definitely wouldn't qualify unless you could finagle him into fitting another Class (like maybe Alter-Ego given the Lady Macbeth thing).
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Class: RulerQuote:
Duration: momentary. Nature: changeable. Perception: dim. Condition of Body: decaying. Soul: spinning around. Fortune: unpredictable. Lasting Fame: uncertain. Summation: The body and its parts are a river, the soul a dream and mist, life is warfare and a journey far from home, lasting reputation is oblivion.
Then what can guide us?
Only philosophy.
Other Classes: Caster
True Name: "Marcus Aurelius Antoninus Augustus"
Nicknames: Marcus Aurelius, the Philosopher King, the Last of the Five Good Emperors
Alignment: True Neutral
Place of Origin: Roman History
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This took me a bit. I got started on this idea when I read Hays' translation (hence why I'm quoting from it basically everywhere) but it wasn't really easy going. The dude is basically not specced for combat, let alone big flashy swordbeams and whatnot, and the problem is that makes it kind of hard to write about him. Powerlevels are easy, philosophy is hard.
It obviously fits the theme now. Though I'd maybe rename their Alter-Ego Skill so it's not exactly the same as their Class (call it Fractured Persona or somesuch), which is a little redundant to my eyes (then again, Avengers have a Skill literally named after their Class so maybe that's just my sense of aesthetics speaking rather than anything objective). Also maybe add a line in the description clarifying that Skill is the reason they can be summoned as Alter-Ego.
I was think in on those lines for the skill (the class name thing). I'll add the clarification
Greetings, Master. Allow me to begin by thanking you for summoning me. I swear here and now that I will aid you in any way I can to grant your wish. In turn, I only ask the same of you.
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Class: Avenger
Other Classes: Saber, Berserker
True Name: Vortigern
Alignment: Lawful Good
Place of Origin: Britain
Height: [ERROR]
Weight: [ERROR]
Likes: Britain, Phantasmal Beasts, Objects of Mystery
Dislikes: The Destruction of Mystery, Needless Death, Humanity (Britain)
Natural Enemy: Artoria Pendragon
Parameters:
STR: A
END: A
AGI: B
MGI: A+
LCK: D
NP: A-?
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance (A):
Avenger’s unique existence makes it impossible to harm him with nearly any form of magic. As though in a twist of irony, one of the only magics capable of harming him is Unholy magic ranking A or above, as his body will attempt to incorporate it within himself.
Self-Replenishment (Mana) (A):
Being a “Hole in the World”, Avenger is constantly drawing in Mana from his surroundings rather than fueling himself on his hunger for revenge. He is perfectly capable of sustaining himself without his master, only needing to draw on nearby Leylines to remain anchored. However, he does not seek out this path.
Avenger (EX):
As an embodiment of Britain's rage, Avenger carries all the resentment and hate Britain has accumulated since the time of his death. As it was his failure that led to Britain’s fall, he can never feel at rest until it has been restored to its former glory.
Oblivion Correction (A):
Unable to forget his failure to save Britain, Avenger strikes at the forgotten weaknesses of other Servants, upping the value of his critical attacks.
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Mana Burst (Void) (A):
A result of becoming a "Hole in the World", Avenger is capable of consuming Mana from the world around him and expelling it with reckless abandon, never fearing becoming drained unless Gaia suddenly lost all Mana. These bursts enhance his already considerable strength and defense to levels beyond even the strongest of Servants.
Dragon Reactor Core (A):
Having consumed the blood of a White Dragon, Avenger has gained power similar to that of the King of Knights and equal to that of the Phantasmal Beast. His circuits form into a Magic Core, becoming a factory that constantly generates magical energy. This, however, leaves him vulnerable to weapons with an anti-dragon attribute, as it gives him the characteristics of a Dragon.
Devourer of All Things Holy (A):
Filled with a darkness not even the Holy Blade Excalibur could pierce, Avenger is a being of consumption, absorbing any aspect that has ever been considered “Holy” into the abyss of his body. While there is a limit to the amount he can hold within himself, it is high enough as to be considered nonexistent. Objects drained of “Holiness” will revert to little more than simple tools lacking power.
Noble Phantasm
Vortigern: The Hole in the World (A)
Anti-Unit/Mana
Though Avenger wielded Hildeleoma in life, he gave up the weapon alongside his claim to the throne to Uther, the sword being melted down and reforged into Caliburn. However, upon his ascension to the Throne of Heroes, a Noble Phantasm was gifted to him in its place. This blade of pitch-black steel is an extension of his own power and will, its form capable of being changed according to his whims, though he prefers to wield it as a sword.
The weapon drains the magical energy of anything it comes in contact with, absorbing it into itself to strengthen its strikes. It also pulls in the Mana from beings composed of magical energy, forcing any Servant he faces into a battle of endurance.
Avatar of Britain: A Paradise of Darkness No Man Can Set Forth in Forever (?)
Anti-?
The supreme incarnation of the dragon blood coursing through Avenger’s veins. Activation of this Noble Phantasm transforms Avenger into a being capable of accomplishing his goal of wiping humans from Britain, manifesting as a Dragon of immense magical power.
As the size of the task increased with every new human born in Britain, the power needed to complete his task also increased, actively increasing the power of this Noble Phantasm. In modern times, the staggering power he held in life to wipe humans away from Britain has multiplied even further, the power required to even activate this Noble Phantasm being enough to kill Avenger’s master instantly even with the inclusion of all three Command Seals and drain any nearby Leylines dry. While this form is feasibly unstoppable, using it would lead to a pyrrhic victory with Avenger fading shortly thereafter, unable to fulfill his goal. As such, he will not use it, even capable of resisting a Command Seal to prevent it
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The only thing this guy could be is OP. I was actually really surprised I hadn't seen any Avenger Vortigerns. Then again, I may have just missed them.
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That's a pretty good Vortigern sheet. I like that you actually managed to make him somewhat sympathetic personality-wise and gave him a reason for opposing Arturia beyond just being a card-carrying villain (which is kind of what he comes off as in canon for lack of a fleshed-out backstory). Though for Magic Resistance, I don't think NPs like Rhongomyniad or Ea count as spells in the first place, so there's really no need to specify they'd bypass his defenses.
I realized how much freedom I had in deciding what his backstory was, so I just followed my heart. A bit of a theme with me. I was originally making a Saber, then at some point decided to shift gears to Avenger, which led to his Class Skills, which led to me interpreting his backstory in such a way. Same with Macbeth and Lovecraft's backstories. Macbeth only became Alter-Ego for the sake of being viable (which fit surprisingly well), and Foreigner was originally a Caster. I never seem to go in with an idea fully mapped out, but it all works out in the end the more I build on them.
There are two Vortigerns in this prompt and I don't know which one is cooler, but one thing is sure and it's that both of them are much better than my take on him as just a final boss light-eating dragon
Obviously his. Mine doesn't have Yu-Gi-Oh abridged references. It pales in comparison.
"Screw the rules, I'm Britain!"
Lostbelt Berserker isn't bad. I just think that one's more fit to be a Ruler. Doesn't mean he couldn't have Mad Enhancement, and it would've give him a couple Class Skills that might have been interesting to tailor for the character. That's just me, though. Is good.
"Ah it is you, I think. Something tells me I know you. Ple-Please! No step further! I...aaahhh...I dont want to hurt you, stay away. Even as a Servant I cant escape pain and I can not control my power! If you just leave me alone I will likely disintegrated by myself, so just...why are you doing this? You dont know what terrible demon is inside me!"
*after a night in the Servant ER*
"Master, I am so sorry...and thankful. Let me start anew. I am Foreigner of the Colored Dust. My true name is...it is complicated. But I am Edvard Munch, pleased to be with you. Pray I dont let the other one come out and greet you..."
The one who paints to depict his changing life and the one who changed his life after being painted. The one that feared life, yet welcomed every woe of it as part of it's beauty and the one that feared death, welcomed beauty and feared the loss of it as the woe of life. The one who viewed death as a part of living like the frame of a painting that enshrined the colors of life and the one who was like beautiful colors in the canvas and seeked to destroy the frame to extend it's beauty beyond the boundaries. The one who valued human life and every aspect of it regardless if perfect or ugly and the one, who saw no worth in imperfection and only valued beauty. Both are inheritely incompatible, but forced together to be be tools for an Evil God. An imperfect Vessel, Selfdestructive, Selfpreserving. A pitiful Existence.
Class: Foreigner
Other Classes: Caster, Berserker
True Name: Edvard Munch / Dorian Gray
Alignment: Lawful Neutral / Chaotic Evil
Place of Origin: Norway / England
Parameters:
STR: D
END: D~A
AGI: D
MGI: C
LCK: D
NP: C
Height: 182cm
Weight: 70kg
Likes: Art, quiet life, beach, his siblings, his paintings, Selfies, VR painting, HOLI festivals / fine wine, himself, beauty, art
Dislikes: his Servant abilities, Dorian Gray / Edvard Munch, ugliness, old age, morality, restrictions
Talent: painting emotions / ...
Natural Enemy: themselfes
Attribute: Earth
Catalyst: Paintings or brushes of Munch, Dorian Gray's knife
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Obviously, I'd like you to describe his Divinity and Existence, but this one's pretty good. I like the duality of him with Dorian and Munch, though I'm curious about the reason they would be fusion-summoned. Also, you say Dorian was disgusted by his personality, but he also doesn't show that when he's summoned. This is due to him just deciding to stop lying to himself and do what he wants, correct?
I really love the creativity of the NPs, using Dorian's dusting away at the end of his story to create a pretty frightening ability, especially when mixed with tethering a painting to another being to do the same to them (with the knife, that is), but I wonder how effective that would be. Does it bypass a target's armor. piercing through it like the canvas of the picture, or would the armor stop the knife on the actual person? Also, would a high enough Magic Resistance negate it, or would someone just require Battle Continuation to survive?
Final thing. I just really like the Skill name Mental Schism. I've just really always found schism fun to say, especially since it specifically works here because it relates to division founded on differing beliefs, like Dorian and Edward.
thanks for your kind words.
Well I thought not all Class Skills need particular notations, but cant blame you, looks kinda missing and out of place to not describe it. Divinity is the class skill of Foreigners and I decided the rank arbitrarily. Existence is rank B and therefore at the same level like Summer BB. Her rank is B because she and Nyarla "saw" each other. If Dorian was alone he would have A, because they interacted in my story, but upon fusing with someone that never had to do with that stuff it watered down. And EX would be for Foreigner who have mightier entities from the mythos and/or actually house them. My Foreigner here just got powers from Quachil Uttaus.
The reason, well i can refer to my Creator Notes, it is part of a story I have in mind. Something else forced them together, it was needed because Dorian is just a wraith and not prominent enough to be a full Servant and Munch's Innocent Monster (Self) makes him a potential vessel for all kinds of demons. Like with Freud I already have a vague idea for Alts of him. A Festival version of him would make him Caster of the Colored Powder, but this time Dorian/Uttaus are gone and he hosts Holika, the demon responsible for the now famous Holi Festival from India. And due to his christian background he would likely be able to host a dark angel or demon as well, maybe completing his imagination of the three angels that folowed him in life, but now in his afterlife.
Yeah you cay say that. After his "change of heart" the picture just looked more cunning, i belief it is because he was able to fool himself that he wanted to change for the better, but actually his obsession with beauty expanded to such a degree, that he couldnt accept that a part of himself - the picture- is ugly af. He understood that when he saw it, still his rage blinded him and led to his demise. He is like a spoiled brat in a sense.
I think you misunderstood a small part of Dorians end. In his original story "The Picture of Dorian Gray" he stabbed the picture, screamed and he was later found as an old geezer with a knife in his chest. He did not dust away, that is the core ability of Quachil Uttaus he can now use as a Servant. If you know the great movie "The league of extraordinary Gentleman" with Sean Connery you may think that way, there he dusted away.
Regarding the effect, the act is "Inflicting yourself with harm". The Double stabs himself, that act happened and then the already happened wound transfers to the origin. I think most special armors let harm from oneself through, like the lance of diarmuid could break just because he wanted it to. What happens afterwards, i dont know, thats the realm of crazy fateverse, like Rama could run around the continent with just half a heart, despite not having Battle Continuation.
I cant claim ownership of the name, it is a FGO skill name of Ivan the Terrible :D
"Good day, Master. A pleasure to meet you. Servant Foreigner has answered your call. You may call me Count von Cosel, and this is my loving wife, Elena. Why don't you introduce yourself, dear?"
"..."
"Ahaha, do excuse her, she's rather shy around strangers. No matter, I love you all the same."
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"Tch, so even summoning can only do so much... No, this won't do. This is far from enough! Please wait just a little longer, dear. I'll save you for sure, and one day, we'll-!"
Class: Foreigner
Other Classes: Caster, Berserker
True Name: Carl Tanzler von Cosel
Alignment: Chaotic Good
Origin: Germany (19th Century)
Parameters:
STR: D
END: C
AGI: C
MGI: A
LCK: E
NP: EX
Likes: His wife, wholesome couple activities, saving others, humanity, immortality
Dislikes: The fleeting nature of human life, death, tuberculosis
Talent: Medical procedures, preservation, waltz
Natural Enemy: Underworld deities
Armament: Magecraft, undead familiars
Catalyst: A preserved dead body
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I like this one. Nothing really profound to say or criticize. It's a good sheet with a fun concept. I love the use of Elena, and his interactions with other Servants (I even recently added relationships to my sheets). I remember, though, before I got far into it, I read "Curiously enough, perhaps due to the limitations of his own body, Foreigner shows no sign of possessing this Skill. Rather, this Skill is seemingly possessed by Foreigner's partner, "Elena"." and thought, "So, he picks up his girl and smacks people with her? That's awesome!" I read further to realize I wasn't far off.
Nice to see that one of my suggestions worked for your sheet. Very nice sheet, I like it.
And if you need some macabre jokes, i can offer this . I can imagine how he uses deprecating jokes at his final ascension
Yep, thanks. His fighting style is kind of similar to Ryouma/Oryou and Castor/Pollux, except using magecraft. On 3rd ascension, he would also utilize more of Zo-Kalar's authority to summon undead familiars. Then again, since "Elena" still possesses decently high parameters thanks to Zo-Kalar, she still packs a pretty good punch.
Yeah, thanks for your ideas. Tanzler went through several changes in Skills, NP, and characterization, but things feel much clearer once I connected him to Zo-Kalar. Self-deprecating jokes at final ascension sounds like a good idea. The quote I have in mind is basically him acknowledging that he did several unruly things in life, but he did it for the good of mankind, for Elena, which is why he refuses to stop at any cost.Quote:
Nice to see that one of my suggestions worked for your sheet. Very nice sheet, I like it.
And if you need some macabre jokes, i can offer this . I can imagine how he uses deprecating jokes at his final ascension
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Should MCaS be actually monthly instead of bi-monthly or should MCaM be resurrected, is the current order of things fine as it is? Just curious of what people think.