Since I actually have some extended time, I just gave my Liu Bang a major makeover as well as a hint to my upcoming sheet. Feel free to lay down the predictions~
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Also forgot to add the BGM, should be in the updated profile now.
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Since I actually have some extended time, I just gave my Liu Bang a major makeover as well as a hint to my upcoming sheet. Feel free to lay down the predictions~
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Also forgot to add the BGM, should be in the updated profile now.
Fairy Tale: First, congratulations on posting your first actual sheet.
Its concept, almost all of his skills and his second Noble Phantasm are pretty obviously derivative of Nursery Rhyme, but your intention to put a spin on her concept. Unfortunately, that spin isn't developed at all.
First of all, I must say that reducing fairy tales to "a hero's journey" is painfully narrow-minded. There is a lot of different types and classification of fairy tales and saying that they are all about heroes is horrifyingly innacurate. The Hero's Journey is really vague on what it actually does: what sort and bonuses and maluses can he get? How do they relate to the concept of "pattern to a story"? The only example you posted is rather generic (hero beats bad guy) and not really helpful. More exemples would have been nice for such a broad concept.
His first Noble Phantasm also suffers from a lack of details. How does rewinding time helps fullfill the dream of a child? And how did that particular child affect Saber? Nursery Rhyme is all about her relationship with the child that summon them and how it affect their being and their abilities. If you want people to be interested in your variant of them, then you need to explore and explain those concepts. Because if you don't do that, all we see is Nursery Rhyme with another skill and a random ability given to their Noble Phantasm.
I admit that most of my concepts weren't completely thought out, but they were full sheets, and I did edit most of them after hearing criticism.Quote:
First actual sheet.
Anyway, on to each of the other issues, I know fairy tales are about more than a hero's journey, but I kind of liked the thought of a servant litterally being the concept of heroism, and Fairy Tales seemed like a prim candidate. On top of that, Fairy tale is suppose to be one aspect of a larger servant "Stories", that's how hes able to fit into all of the other classes (even Saver and Beast). Here's another example of a servant that is a lesser form of "Stories" Nursery Rhyme, she represents not only her name sake, but also child like innocence, and a Berserker version of "Stories" would represent horror stories, and fear, taking the form of a monster. So on and so forth.
As for the Skill Heroes Journey, that's based on a literary concept of the same name, that basically says all stories follow a particular pattern. This includes everything from receiving a magical mcguffin, to getting aid from an old person, and any of those things have an affect on Fairy Tale. Honestly almost everything that Fairy Tale and his master does will have some sort of effect on Fairy Tale. As another example, say that Fairy Tale's master gives him a lucky charm, now Fairy Tales Luck has increased, there are some limits, but that's the basic concept. If that still not enough for you, will make up some stuff of your own, that's part of the reason its vague, to let others have their own ideas of how it works.
"My body is your tool, Master. Use me however you see fit."Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Rider
Antinous
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STR: C
END: D
AGI: A
MAG: A
LUCK: B+
NP: A
Class Skills
Riding (B+): A Class Skill of Rider and Saber class Servants, denoting the ability to ride mounts and vehicles. Rider-class Servants will typically possess a high rank. It is said that dragon type mounts are an exception, requiring a different ability other than Riding. Most vehicles and animals can be handled with above average skill, even vehicles that did not exist in the time period one was alive in, for they are no exception. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasmal Species such as Monstrous Beasts. Even though Antinous is classed as a Rider, his rank in this Skill is lower than expected. However, it can be raised by using his Noble Phantasms.
Magic Resistance (C): Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.
Personal Skills
Charming Adonis (EX): The disposition as a pretty boy who charms people. A fascination magic-like effect that works on both men and women, but one can abate it so long there is a will to resist. Complete evasion by means of a Magic Resistance Skill is possible. A paragon of male beauty, for the unguarded, simply glancing at Rider’s face is enough to fall under his thrall.
Divine Metamorphosis (B): A variant of the Shapeshift Skill in its highest form where one undergoes metamorphosis into a god. A wide variety of buffs are acquired upon activation of this skill, such as a parameter increase, the addition of the Divine Core skill, and invulnerability to effects such as charm and death. However, due to the dissonance of applying a divine identity to a Heroic Spirit, continuous degradation of Rider’s Saint Graph occurs as this skill is active, and overuse may result in it being irreparably eroded.
Golden Rule (Beauty) (C): The beauty of a boy that entranced the emperor of Rome. At the age of twenty, as his youth flourished into manhood, Antinous died. Thus his legend could be compared to the likes of heroes such as Adonis, Hyacinthus, and Narcissus, of a beautiful boy who died young at the apex of his attractiveness. Though he died, legends of his looks spread across the land, and his handsomeness will never fade.
Noble Phantasms
Ru Nu Peret Em HeruThe Book of the Dead
Anti Unit (Self, A+): A Noble Phantasm, manifesting in the form of a papyrus scroll, which allows Antinous to fuse himself with the divine Authority of Osiris, the Egyptian god of death and rebirth. After his death and deification, the centre of Antinous’s cult was the city of Antinopolis in Egypt, who worshipped him as Osiris-Antinous. It is said that part of the reason of this association is because Antinous died during the festival of Osiris.
Upon activation, Rider becomes able to freely cast and manipulate the spells of the Egyptian funerary texts, containing spells which allow him to preserve bodies and spirits of the dead, protect against animals and monsters, bestowing power over air and water, and the creation of magically protective amulets. With his authority over the dead, he is able to raise embalmed corpses of humans and animals to fight for him, and he can summon divine beasts such as the Ammut. Rider can only activate this ability if he is using his God Metamorphosis skill, and the pressure of an additional Divine Power will only hasten the destruction of his Saint Graph.
Even without activating this ability, he is able to use heka, the system of Egyptian magecraft.
Orgia BacchanaliaRevelry of the Mad God
Anti-Unit (Self, B): A Noble Phantasm that manifests as a jar of wine, which allows Antinous to take on aspects of Dionysus, the Greek god of alcohol, insanity, and revelry. It bestows upon him the equivalent of an A rank in Mad Enhancement and Sadistic Constitution while it is active, giving him a great boost in physical strength and allowing him to ignore physical pain and mental ailments while it is active. Eschewing weapons, and in the divine frenzy of the maenads, Antinous charges at his enemies and rips them to shreds with his bare hands. While this Noble Phantasm is active, he exhales the wine god's maddening, intoxicating mist, with his breath capable of eroding one's reason and inhibitions. The divine alcohol that laces his breath is capable of transforming into wild beasts, serpents, and maidens that form Dionysus's entourage. With the area around Antinous transforming into a wild orgy of violence and fornication, this is truly a dangerous and troubling ability.
As with Osiris's power, using this ability will degenerate Antinous's Saint Graph. As a god who was both and neither Dionysus and Osiris at the same time (amongst others), he is capable of activating both Noble Phantasms at the same time, though he refuses to do so, as Tthe combination of ecstasy and death can only bring about a calamity.
Background
Personality
Interesting sheet Asterism two qestions,first how is his battle style magecrft based or more melle orientated and has he a specific (martial) style? and why is he a rider ?
Servant Lancer:
Appearance:
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True Name: Polydorus
Armament: Root-spears he forms with his Noble Phantasm.
Alignment: Neutral Good
Strength- D++
Agility- C++
Endurance- C++
Mana- C
Luck- D
NP- D+
(Variability in parameters is accounted for by his Self-Modification Skill.)
Personality
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance- D
Confers protection against magical effects. At this rank only Single-Action spells are negated. Magic Resistance equivalent in degree to an amulet that rejects magical energy. Despite being born in the Age of Gods, Lancer never encountered Magecraft in life and hence merits only a low ranking in this Skill.
Personal Skills:
Golden Rule- C-
Measures one's fortune to acquire wealth. Having inherited a vast amount of wealth from the fall of Troy, Lancer is promised a lifetime untroubled by money, even if he died before he could make use of it. However, as Lancer was killed by those who desired his wealth for themselves, this Skill also ranks down his Luck parameter.
Abnormal Physiology (Mandrake)- C
Denotes that the Servant possesses a physiology differing from normal members of their kind. Due to the legend of his death, Lancer's body is closer to a plant than a human. He can potentially regrow destroyed limbs and even organs given sufficient Mana supply and gains accelerated healing and Mana generation when under direct sunlight.
However as a demerit, Lancer's floral physiology has made him extremely weak to fire-based attacks.
Self-Modification- B++
The aptitude to remold one's own body or merge one's own flesh with body parts of others. The higher the ranking in this Skill, the further away one is from being a proper hero. An offshoot of his Abnormal Physiology (Mandrake), Lancer's variation of this Skill allows him to assimilate various forms of plantlife into his body.
Lancer gains the unique characteristics and abilities of any plant he grafts onto himself. For instance, should he merge with a poisonous plant Lancer would gain Poison Resistance and be able to produce the same type of poison from his body. If Lancer were to assimilate an unusually fast-growing plant (like the mile-a-minute vine), he'd gain a boost in Agility and could heal and replenish Mana at a faster rate. Fusing with a sturdy great tree would grant Lancer an Endurance boost and the ability to grow a layer of armor-like bark over his skin to defend against blows.
If he can get his hands on them Lancer can also assimilate legendary plants like the soporific Lotus of Greek Mythology, the man-eating tree of Madagascar and the mistletoe that slew Baldr in Norse epics. In these cases, the demonstrated boons may even reach the level of Noble Phantasms.
This Skill synergizes excellently with Lancer's Noble Phantasm, allowing him to grow any of the plants he's assimilated from his body.
Noble Phantasm
Key Words/Craft Essence
Is today the day of posting guys lying sensually?
Actually yeah. The Abnormal Physiology Skill you invented for your Hel sheet was a big inspiration for this sheet. So, thanks Koga.:D
He probably would get along with Enkidu quite well now that I think about it. Might write up a Relationships section sometime later if I have the time.
Polydorus: Genuinely felt like a "weak-but-viable" Servant one can rely on. The highlight was definitely the use of Self-Modification, but with the use of plants rather than other people's flesh. However, Polydorus Mandragoras felt a bit underwhelming. Perhaps include an attack that by using the roots to pierce the enemy's legs before attempting to bury them alive by dragging them downwards - - serving as a good means of an ambush.
I actually considered giving Polydorus Mandragoras a trump card that either transforms him into a giant tree-man or pierces the enemy's body with roots and grows a tree inside them, tearing their body apart in the process. But I ultimately didn't think it was necessary given how much he can do already with the combo of his NP and Self-Modification Skill. I appreciate the suggestion though.
Might end up working on a Hecuba sheet sometime to complement this one, depending on how much inspiration I have.
Now Here is the third part of my Loki series who has a more differing skillset and two Mistilteinn non related Noblephantasm.
Loki
(Berserker)
Berserker....Loki has answered the summoning……*reughrrrr*
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Height: 213 cm
Weight: 89~ kg
Alignment: Chaotic Evil
Attribute: Earth
Origin: North Europe
Weapon:
Other qualifying classes: Rider, Lancer,Saber,Caster,Assassin,Avenger,Beast of Betrayal
Likes: His pathetic Children,Attention,pranks and praise.himself.
Dislikes: Being ignored,Odin,Thor,something that goes against his shemes.
Talents: Sinister shemes(tactics),to sow discord
Natural enemy: ???
Parameters
Background
Personality
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Relations
Just finished reading it, and it's pretty cool. His versatile use of plants being balanced by him feeling pain if the plants receive damage is a very good balance. Personality-wise, I think he could get along with Robin Hood. BTW, how OP would he be if he teams up with Romulus?