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You're welcome. Admittedly, I watched the KnK anime once years ago and enjoyed it, but I don't know much about Touko, which is why I don't have much commentary.


After looking it up, yes, I...

I deeply enjoy your prose! On a purely technical level, reading this gives me dopamine. The only (minor) detractor is your use of past participle verbs for past-tense events given that present-tense...

In the memo Sakura is named in Eastern order whereas I would think this presumably Western organization would write her name in Western order—and indeed, they do within the paragraph. I like the chat...

I was unprepared for the choice memes among the angst in Nupta Contagioso.

Oh, it's being written a volume at a time! I'm glad it's not dead.

[Applause] Fantastic. Full characterization, good closure. I like the Nasuverse-style logic to the paranormal powers. I was confused at first when Mashima claims he was the one who encountered Mary,...

I'll answer here instead of PM-ing you because my answer supplements my original post:

I mean that the verbs used to narrate events as they're happening are mostly in present-tense but sometimes...

I know I did.

Angra Mainyu is surprisingly sweet here. No lifelong curses for Shirou? Also, did the grail's power get used on holding time still so Shirou could find a defense? The adaptation of...

Whoooo! Great update. I'm glad to see this isn't dead! I like Shinji's methodical, magus-like approach to learning how PSI works and developing it. I wish you didn't fluctuate between past-tense and...

Reading this again was a real treat. Thank you for the Christmas present, belated as I am in receiving it. I remembered it on its own, not as a contest entry, so I thought the picture was a legit...

I remember this. Good shit.

I miss reading contest entries. Also, I finally bothered to put the title in Google Translate, and I like the extra touch.

"Pompous beacon" amused me.

"I don't have time to watch her win."
"Why would I consider an impossibility?"
Damn, this Shirou is quick.

I like the vs. Kirei fight. It's choreographed without...

This is glorious and LOL-tastic.

Haha, I like that juke. I can appreciate "Will they/won't they" tension as long as, in this case, in the end they don't.

I see. That helps. Thank you for the insight.

I think the setting descriptions are pretty hammy. The dramatic language could stand to be toned down.

I like the catalyst for potential character development in Saber when Shirou says his line...

I briefly had the thought I had just because, at least in the U.S. where I am, we're primed by oversaturation of the plot development market, if you will, to see romantic tones in anything intimate,...

Does Sakura ever call Shirou by his name? I guess we wouldn't know what she calls him in her mind given all the media we have are from Shirou's perspective, but it seems odd to me.

The fight is...

* I don't get why Shirou would have that dream when Archer’s not his servant. I don't think resonance covers it. I've only seen the anime adaptations, but surely Shirou canonically sleeps at Rin's...

I appreciate your skill in orchestrating the plot such that some canonical events still happen despite the AU, but for new reasons that are plausible and don't feel contrived; namely, Caster pulling...

I didn't think about it too hard. If I had to conjecture, I would assume Shinji had Rider attack Shirou because he's jealous of Shirou's close relationship with Rin, and maybe because this Shirou...

My thoughts:
* I don't think Shirou would be able to so deeply and eloquently read into the look on Kirei's face when he's a little kid who's barely conscious.
* I'm entertained by this more...

I was surprised, then quickly assumed it was a necro-post because the story is a completed one-shot.

....^