Er... Kieran, I think you might want to fix the last sentence you typed in your previous post, because I'm having trouble reading and understanding it.
As for the rest of your comments... those are all valid points. I'll definitely have to make note of what I'm thinking about to make these all make sense.
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I'm sorry, I have no idea how that happened - should be clearer now.Originally Posted by Xamusel
“Love will be cruel to who it entices — love will have its sacrifices.”
— Carmilla Theme
"Evil isn't the real threat to the world. Stupid is just as destructive as Evil, maybe more so, and it's a hell of a lot more common. What we really need is a crusade against Stupid. That might actually make a difference."
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Much clearer... and I was intending on the out-of-context power being within context as per an Origin Story for the SI. Should I write the Origin Story first, then, to make it clearer?
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That's usually a good idea . . .?
“Love will be cruel to who it entices — love will have its sacrifices.”
— Carmilla Theme
"Evil isn't the real threat to the world. Stupid is just as destructive as Evil, maybe more so, and it's a hell of a lot more common. What we really need is a crusade against Stupid. That might actually make a difference."
―Jim Butcher, Vignette
Okay, I'll write the origin story, then. It might take me a few days to get it all done, mind you, but I plan to have it done by the end of the next month (I hope).
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Hey, Kieran, question... would you agree with the current comments I have in the Google Doc I linked up above at this time?
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I can't say they're giving you bad advice - is there anything in particular you're thinking of . . .?
“Love will be cruel to who it entices — love will have its sacrifices.”
— Carmilla Theme
"Evil isn't the real threat to the world. Stupid is just as destructive as Evil, maybe more so, and it's a hell of a lot more common. What we really need is a crusade against Stupid. That might actually make a difference."
―Jim Butcher, Vignette
What I'm thinking of is what I can possibly do to make it make more sense for those who are not as familiar with the works of fiction I'm referencing as you and I are. Does that make sense to you?
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That's something you should always be aiming to do - and one of the reasons I keep telling you to keep things simple.
“Love will be cruel to who it entices — love will have its sacrifices.”
— Carmilla Theme
"Evil isn't the real threat to the world. Stupid is just as destructive as Evil, maybe more so, and it's a hell of a lot more common. What we really need is a crusade against Stupid. That might actually make a difference."
―Jim Butcher, Vignette
Yeah, well... simplicity and I are not friends, sad to say.
Anyway, could you please confirm something for me? I need to know if I am keeping Rin and Ilya in character for the first scene, and I need to know if I'm describing the setting enough for the interior of the headquarters.
Actually, I would like to make sure the entire first prologue is done with enough descriptive setting detail, so...
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. . . As I originally read it, I'd say no (in fact, I did, as I recall), but if you've altered the Google Doc . . .
*Sighs* I'll check it out tomorrow, sorry - it's been a long BAD couple of days.
“Love will be cruel to who it entices — love will have its sacrifices.”
— Carmilla Theme
"Evil isn't the real threat to the world. Stupid is just as destructive as Evil, maybe more so, and it's a hell of a lot more common. What we really need is a crusade against Stupid. That might actually make a difference."
―Jim Butcher, Vignette
Sorry to hear that, man... yes, I've altered the document in question. That's why I was asking about this.
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Kieran? You read the alterations yet, I hope?
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Apologies - I was distracted yesterday as things somehow managed to go from BAD to WORSE . . . But now that I am looking, I don't actually see any . . .?
“Love will be cruel to who it entices — love will have its sacrifices.”
— Carmilla Theme
"Evil isn't the real threat to the world. Stupid is just as destructive as Evil, maybe more so, and it's a hell of a lot more common. What we really need is a crusade against Stupid. That might actually make a difference."
―Jim Butcher, Vignette
Okay, maybe I should be more cognizant of what makes for an alteration. My mistake, man.
Also, I feel bad that you have a bad real life situation now, to be honest.
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Note that I don't wish to be seen as an idiot any longer. I can't always promise better works than before, but I can sure as hell try, alright?
Real life does take priority, and what you're describing sounds rough. Take as much time as you need, we can wait.
It's always possible that Google ate it, or that you altered something later on that I didn't see - I just focussed on the Works aspect of the document.
Thank you - I appreciate it.Also, I feel bad that you have a bad real life situation now, to be honest.
I appreciate that, as well - but I still feel bad about it.
I may end up trying to write just to distract myself, the way things are going, but I don't like making promises I can't keep . . .
“Love will be cruel to who it entices — love will have its sacrifices.”
— Carmilla Theme
"Evil isn't the real threat to the world. Stupid is just as destructive as Evil, maybe more so, and it's a hell of a lot more common. What we really need is a crusade against Stupid. That might actually make a difference."
―Jim Butcher, Vignette
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