The problem is, he is running out of time. Now she was running mostly of adrenaline rush, if you ask me. Being this human Arturia, she can recharge herself, so if you give her between one and three days, she should be at 100%. If I was Alduin (and having the knowledge I have), I would try to get my hands/claws on every powerful weapon, as this seems to be the only thing preventing Arturia from killing him, that the weapon she had couldn't withstand the strain of the flames and the Invisible Air. If she gets the Goldbrand, my bet is that Alduin is nine kinds of fucked. And if Excalibur is here, then tenfold that times of screwed.
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I don't think Atruia would ever accept using the Goldbrand although the dawn/duskfang would be another story.
I haven't played Skyrim, but I'm looking forward to more of this story
Though I do wonder how did Saber get into this universe/realm/setting to begin with...
First, love what you have so far Fish and hope to see more. Second, this and the Fate/Dragon's Dawn thread have inspired me to try and make Saber in Skyrim myself.
Two Handed + Alteration + Heavy Armor.
Enchant a Two Handed Weapon.
I like, I only have 8 hours of play on skyrim but this is too beautiful of a chance to pass by. I can't wait for more.
Also, Arturia would not like the Stormcloaks because from everything I've heard they would remind her too much of the Saxons and other Viking invaders and raiders that she spent her entire life protecting her kingdom from.
Sorry about that. I wrote the fight scene around 3 to 4 AM in the morning while playing the main theme of Skyrim in the background, so it's kind of rushed.
Fantabulous, fishfish.
Understand that Arturia isn't a reliable narrator in this case, because how long has it been that she was truly a human being anyway?
Thats a fair point.
Choose your Guild,
Join the DARK SIDE!!!
I'm sorry to say I've found I can't RP. I just can't trust myself to stick around long enough.
I cannot vouch for the accuracy of any of these corrections. English is not my first language so I'm mostly going by what sounds "right" in my mind. And that mostly involves keeping tenses consistent...
Sudden shift in tenses from the previous sentence here. Should probably be "lest her body gave in and she fainted again."least her body gives in and she faints again.
I believe you meant "the instant".In that instead her eyes opened enough,
Not sure if this is wrong here. It rings right to my ears, but the tenses shift suddenly again. Maybe "wore" would have been appropriate? Honestly not sure if it's appropriate or not.A leader, perhaps, by the furs he wears?
Something in the phrasing here doesn't ring right, but I can't place my finger on it.And the cold chilled her, only when she noticed the ice around her, did she realize that goose bumps rose on her arms.
Ahahahaha, winter wonderland. Funny train of thought there.Everything in her limited sight was wintery, but the opposite of a wonderland.
"She wondered if it was"she wondered if it is because there was a shred of her lasting morality
"touched upon anything"She saw what was going on well enough already from this conversation, but none of this touches on anything in her memories of history
"Thought they were headed"These men all thought they are headed towards an execution.
A headsman meant that she was truly going towards an execution.A headsman means that she truly is going towards an execution.
Sounds better without the comma in the middle there.The thief prayed to his gods, now with a voice full of urgency.
Either "Their skins were pale and yellow" or "Their skin was pale and yellow".Their skin were pale and yellow, a sickly coloration.
Her sight had cleared up enough.Her sight has cleared up enough by now that she could see their expressions clearly.
Huh? That came out of nowhere... Are they lines being spoken by someone? Without quotation marks it makes me think that it's part of her train of thought, but they seem to have no coherence with any part of the previous narration, jumping in out of seemingly nowhere.Thalmor.
Damned Elves.
Is she thinking to herself in third person? Shouldn't it be "So why am I here?" and "I have no purpose here"?So why was she here? She roared in her mind, burning with frustration, ignoring the legate who called for her to exit the cart-wagon. She has no purpose. Why…?
Wrong place at the wrong time.he still did not protest as his superior sentenced her to death, just for being at the wrong place as the wrong time.
I think the proper word here is "scrape" not "scraps".A rage burned within her, for the roughness of the push, for the bleeding scraps her knees suffered
This reads awkwardly. Maybe change it to "All thoughts along the lines of her reason were being dissipated, leaving only her reactions..."?All thoughts along the lines of her reasons for being dissipated, leaving only her reactions.
Thought.For that single moment of clear though,
Snrk. Raped. Hahahahaha. Raped her lands... HAHAHAHAHA.It was a familiar battle cry of a phantasmal beast that raped her lands for many years.
Dawned in fire.But when it finally dawned, it dawn in fire, from the dragon’s very mouth,
Grime.The heat was warm, cleansing her of the grim caked on her.
Be it man or beast.Be it man of beast, she would not turn her back upon it.
Being no match for her power.being no match for the power of her.
Something doesn't ring right here, but I can't put my finger on it.It felt good to hold a real grip, after so long.
So she would thrive in her imperfection.And she will thrive in her imperfection.
Littered with holes, like giant pock marks.she was at the top of a burning mead hall that was littered with holes and giant pock marks.
*She grabbed one of its larger spikes along its spine and grippe tightly as she stabbed again and again with all her might.
Gripped.
The "both" is out of place there.Alduin twisted and turned, now both furious yet his efforts seemed a little more desperate than before.
With that out of the way, I must say I greatly enjoyed reading this. As always, I'm the biggest fan of anything you write and I liked this even when I'm unfamiliar with the second half of the crossover. Enough tantalizing tidbits and descriptions were dropped to make the world feel alive and make one feel curious to learn more about it. Still, I do wonder where this is all heading. It seems to me that, with stripping her of the vast majority of her powers and dropping her in an unknown world, you want her to take another crack at realizing her Ever Distant Utopia? I can see that being a very interesting overarching theme, but one that would get boring real fast if bogged down by too much politicking.
What else? I think it would definitely be interesting to see more of the Fate cast. Maybe not EMIYA, but perhaps other people looking to carve out their own kingdom as humans in a strange land? *nudge nudge hint hint*
Hm... can't think of anything else to say other than that I loved it and would probably give a few more chapters a try before I make up my mind on Skyrim. So far, it seems like it could be an interesting cross, but I'm not entirely sold on the setting. Will have to wait and see
Hmmm... That sounds "right" too, Koto. Now I'm not honestly sure. As I said, english is not my first language so most of those are "by ear"
Yeah in Skyrim summoning the Daedra lord who owns the goldbrand involves human sacrifices so yeah; there is no way she can get it. It makes you wonder how willing those participants were?
If Arturia's based on the historical Arthur, about sixteen centuries, since he's a 5th-century warlord. But given that her legend includes Lancelot and Guinevere in that kind of relationship, I'd say only nine - since that triangle was invented in twelfth-century France to spice up the story.
“Love will be cruel to who it entices — love will have its sacrifices.”
— Carmilla Theme
"Evil isn't the real threat to the world. Stupid is just as destructive as Evil, maybe more so, and it's a hell of a lot more common. What we really need is a crusade against Stupid. That might actually make a difference."
―Jim Butcher, Vignette
Thanks guys, I'll take everything into consideration and make the necessary changes.
Well, while Arturia was a powerhouse while alive...
She needed to do things like breathe and needed proper blood circulation, couldn't astralize (not that she can in F/SN though) or other neat tricks Servants have. Stuff like not caring about cut arteries, that sort of thing.
So yeah, there would be differences in being human again. Even if you were more powerful in life, while you're more of an archetype as a Servant and dependant on your Master's power too, there are advantages and disadvantages to both states.
The telescope at one end of his beat
And at the other end the microscope,
Two instruments of nearly equal hope,
And in conjunction giving quite a spread.
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