Create your own Modern Fiction Servants

[Seika]

But first, some comments on Diomedes from two pages ago!

...DIOMEDES IS AWESOME SEIKA WINS.

...No seriously that's the extent of my criticism and commentary because anything further would just develop into squealing like a giddy little fangirl. That's a really clever concept and one that seems like it would play out very well in a variety of settings (RPs, fic, you-name-it). He's at that sweet spot where he's powerful enough to be threatening, but not so much so that you can't have him get eaten by the proverbial bigger fish for drama's sake, and his abilities are genuinely kind of cool. Well played.

Very, very kind of you! Thanks!

Just one thing I'll put out about balance: I particularly enjoyed thinking up Diomedes' combat style (i.e. 'If Diomedes would normally create the illusion of an attack and slay his foe by taking advantage of an exposed area ... '), just because it managed itself quite naturally. Rather like, say, Gáe Bolg, it looks overpowered as anything, but there are an oddly large number of canon skills which seem to moderate its abilities. EoTM (False) allows you to react to unpredicted attacks; Diarmuid's EoTM (True) has him quickly work out how to fight an invisible sword; Instinct is very similar to EoTM (False); Magic Resistance will mitigate the effect at most levels, and cancel it outright at higher ones. Besides the incidentals, a load of skills are actually meant just to screw over people using mental interference: Bravery and Vitrification and Soul of a Martyr. Those three and MR even can hold up one of his Noble Phantasms, the 'powered-up' form of his normal fighting style as it were, which forces him to fight that bit smarter.

All that, and at the same time, it can look really cool in a description - just the idea of Diomedes convincing his opponent that the stab is coming low and then putting his spear through their chest seems like it could work really well as "what the hell is this guy doing?" moment for the protagonists. I enjoy the fact that a good application of one of his skills is enough to make competent warriors look like fools. Diomedes is good, but he makes himself look brilliant by turning the opponent into a stumbling idiot.

And better yet, when we advance it to the Noble Phantasm level, it lets me use one of the Holy Grail mechanics which Nasu tends to pass over (essentially because the Fourth and the Fifth were messed up) - that you ought to be identifying an opponent and his/her weaknesses. If you let Diomedes do that, all of a sudden he's convinced you that the poison which finally killed [you, the mighty hero X who could not be defeated in battle] coats his spear. And then you make it real for him, so he can kill you. Ultimate trolling.

Actually, re: Diomedes - do people think that a Berserker would be more or less susceptible to his style (i.e. they're consumed by rage and tend to disregard most distraction, but they're also non-rational)? My thought, partly going from what happened with Dark Berserker in HF, is that they'd be more vulnerable to convincing illusions. Instead, it's Mental Pollution that works (roughly as the canon description has it) and breaks down his illusions because he's unable to discern how his opponent might see the world. Of course, this is not to say that Berserkers might not have Mental Pollution ...

(Oooh, wow. That turned into wordswordswords. )


And I would comment on yours in return but ...

I feel bad, again, skipping over so many following profiles but- I haven't seen/read/played any of the media involved, so I can't accurately judge how well they're set up.

Sorry.
(I can fulfil a request for some Servant or NP, if you'd like. I do feel bad about getting that sort of praise and not giving anything back).

[ScarletWeather]

Ehe, s'not a problem. The fact that you wanted to return a comment is enough- though if I have a free Noble Phantasm voucher, joke Noble Phantasm for Heracles based on some humorous (or intentionally humorous) classical story he's involved in?

...Golden cup aside.

I feel bad that nobody else on this forum has apparently seen HxH though. That or my profile was legitimately uninspiring XD

Also re: KaryayoinockSHOOTER: ...I'm going to use my "get out of comment free due to unfamiliarity with source material" card. Well, except to ask if the idea is someone went Shirou after meeting Karna, wouldn't she get Phantasms based on her own abilities and not watered down/changed up versions of his?

And where is Hatsune Miku during all this? Why do none of Hachi's songs make sense? WHO IS SASAKURE-P?

(This spot reserved for potentially throwing up a Killua Assassin at some point)

[Agailius]

Name: Uriah the Hittite
Class: Lancer
Alignment: Lawful Good
Gender: Male

STR: B
END: C
AGI: A
MANA: E-
LCK: E-
NP: B

Legend: Uriah the Hittite was one of the mightiest warriors under the service of King David, ruler of the kingdom of Israel, and was known for his steadfast devotion to his lord and inflexible adherence to honor. During the early reign of his liege, Uriah's wife, Bathsheba, committed adultery with David, and the resulting affair left her heavy with the king's child. To hide his transgression, David time and again tried to convince Uriah to go down and be with his wife. However, Uriah refused each time, believing it to be his duty to remain by his king's side, as Israel was, at that time, beset by war on all sides.

When his subject proved too stubborn, and his ruse soon to be revealed, David conspired to have Uriah murdered on the field of battle, by ordering his men to retreat from Uriah's position, in the heat of battle. Though he fought valiantly, and slew many of the enemy, Uriah was ultimately overwhelmed by the enemy, and was struck down, not knowing that his own king, a man he would have readily given his life for, had betrayed him.

However, after Uriah's death, for the sin of betraying his loyal vassal, David and his entire household was cursed by God, and the remorse of murdering his friend would haunt David for the rest of his days.

[ScarletWeather]

....That's a short profile.

No personal skills, no listed Rank in his class skills, you ranked his Noble Phantasm in his parameters but didn't bother providing an actual description of it- though given this is Uriah I'd imagine said Phantasm would really have to amount to "Everybody betrays me- Rank B- Anti-Unit (Self)- manifestation of a harsh destiny where everyone in a position of a authority betrays me to bang my wife."

Seriously there's not really much to go on with this profile, and the history you provided, while accurate according to the Biblical accounts I've read, isn't really all that inspiring to make up for the lack of actual content here. Uriah was a soldier who was a minor character without his own legend who got killed due to the machinations of a major character who does in fact have his own legend- several in fact. I feel sorry for the guy but I don't really think there's enough material to buff him into a true HS, even if you do what I did for King Saul and wank the little we do know about him into something resembling a workable phantasm.

[TetsuoS2]

True Name: Dean Winchester
Class: Rider(False)
Alignment: Neutral Good

Stats:
Strength: E
Endurance: D
Agility: E
Magic: E
Luck: EX

Class Skills:

Riding: --
See Noble Phantasm.

Personal Skills:

Expert of Many Specializations: B
Many different skills ranging from tactics, espionage, assassination, swindling, rhetoric and others can be used with proficiency of Rank B or below.

Instinct: B
Dean has faced danger all the time, his reflexes have been honed to nigh-precognition levels. Has no bonuses against sensory obstructions.

Pioneer of the Stars: EX
As someone who has stopped the world's destruction, twice, all difficult voyages and challenges which are considered "impossible" turn into "events that can be realized".

Divinity: --
The angels' fated vessel for Michael, The Arcangel. Due to him rejecting Michael, this skill has been terminated.

Noble Phantasms:

'67 Chevy Impala: The Hunter's Armory
Dean's favored car. As Dean has lived most of his life in the car, it can be said that it is a part of him. What is special about this Noble Phantasm isn't the car, which can not be used as a weapon, but the contents, which contains conceptual weapons against most supernatural creatures. Depending on the enemy's luck, Dean can randomly acquire the needed weapon and the weapon will be the equivalent of an A-ranked Noble Phantasm, though Dean will need to hit with it first.

This car has lost, the EX-ranked Scythe of Death, the A+-ranked Colt, that could kill almost any creature, and an A-ranked angel-killing blade.

Other servants and masters can not realize the car and its contents as a Noble Phantasm until Dean's true name is uncovered.
Rank: E - A
Type: Support Noble Phantasm
Range: --
Maximum Target: --

Spiritual Traveler: One Who has been Everywhere
As Dean has been to Heaven, Purgatory, and Hell. Dean has a form of protection from attacks that come from at most, three dimensions. Dean will be able to deal with it separately, though how much damage Dean will be able to nullify will depend if he's physically able to dodge/block it.Endurance increased by one if attack comes from said dimensions.
Rank: C
Type: Support Noble Phantasm
Range: --
Maximum Target: --

Hunter: Against The Supernatural
Dean's experiences against the supernatural give him an edge. If he has fought the opponent's kind before, Dean will receive stat boosts in endurance and agility, based on the difference between Dean's and the opponent's magic stat.

Limited up to three stat boosts.
Rank: B
Type: Support Noble Phantasm
Range: --
Maximum Target: --
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Last NP's example,
Dean's MAG stat: E
Opponent's MAG stat: A
There is a difference of four ranks, but because it's limited, Dean will get three-ranks up both in endurance and agility,
Endurance: D ----> A
Agility: E ----> B

Again, this only works on opponents whose kind Dean has faced before, i.e. some of the gods, ghosts, angels, demons, vampires, witches, etc.

[Seika]

Ehe, s'not a problem. The fact that you wanted to return a comment is enough- though if I have a free Noble Phantasm voucher, joke Noble Phantasm for Heracles based on some humorous (or intentionally humorous) classical story he's involved in?

...Golden cup aside.

I have two candidates. Do you want me to play the ridiculous story straight(-ish) as I did with the chalice, or just go flat-out silly?

Last NP's example,
Dean's MAG stat: E
Opponent's MAG stat: A
There is a difference of four ranks, but because it's limited, Dean will get three-ranks up both in endurance and agility,
Endurance: D ----> A
Agility: E ----> B

Again, this only works on opponents whose kind Dean has faced before, i.e. some of the gods, ghosts, angels, demons, vampires, witches, etc.

Aside from the boost, how far does it go? Is it limited to the opponent's stat, or could you go above it?

Also a bit sceptical about Pioneer of the Stars, because one of the reasons given for there being no modern Heroic Spirits is that the world is always being saved, implying that this is something a Heroic Spirit might be expected to do. My interpretation of Pioneer is that you radically change human history, as with the foundation of empires or some great invention. Saving the world just keeps everything going on as it did, more or less. Do you see where I'm coming from?

[TetsuoS2]

Aside from the boost, how far does it go? Is it limited to the opponent's stat, or could you go above it?

What do you mean? It's only limited to the magic stat and the number of boosts it could do.

Also a bit sceptical about Pioneer of the Stars, because one of the reasons given for there being no modern Heroic Spirits is that the world is always being saved, implying that this is something a Heroic Spirit might be expected to do. My interpretation of Pioneer is that you radically change human history, as with the foundation of empires or some great invention. Saving the world just keeps everything going on as it did, more or less. Do you see where I'm coming from?

I do, but thing is, in Supernatural. This is the verse where all the angels, demons, and God is real. They basically threw off what Heaven planned, for, like, forever. Dean was born to be the vessel of Michael, their parent's marriage was also arranged by Heaven. There was this episode where one of the Fate Sisters got so pissed because they didn't follow what should have been. One of the angels went as far as leaving Dean in the future once, to show him that he should follow the Grand Design.

Basically, they changed the future's history. Am I making sense?

[gothic_dolly]

Revised Haruhi [AU heroic spirit version]

Class: Ruler/Brigade Chief


True name: Haruhi Suzumiya


Master: Kyon

Alignment: Chaotic Neutral

Strength: D

Endurance: D+

Agility: C+

Magic: A+

Luck: A+++

Noble Phantasm: C+ ~EX

Background. :A mysterious young girl who was the focal point of a cult that existed several centuries ago during the beginning of the Meiji era. Her followers, who considered a goddess with the power to change the world with a thought, based this reverence on her supposedly being the cause of the various odd happenings in her home town, including various plants blooming out of season, snow in the middle of summer, and the appearance of many animals thought to be long extinct or known only from myths and legend.. Dressed in various finery and given anything her heart could desire, Haruhi took full advantage of those who revered her in order to make her life more interesting. Sadly, she and the most of her followers were killed or jailed following the crackdown on “cults” during the beginning of the reformation of the Imperial government.
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Class Skils:

Magic resistance [B]: A being of great power, Suzumiya's magic resistance repels or dampens most offensive spells.

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Skills

Divinity [B]: Possessing the powers of a god, Suzumiya is something close to a divine being, despite having a human body.

Jack of all Trades [B]: Suzumiya is quite capable of being good at anythings she puts her mind to, though she often tires of any one activity after a short while. This ability lends the user natural talent in a variety of fields. All skills gained via this trait are treated as if they were of [C] rank and once a skill has been gain via Jack of All Trades, it cannot be invoked again for a set period of time.

Reality Alteration [EX]: An ability that is always on and cannot be turned off, Suzumiya's powers will alter the world around her to fit her current whims. Alterations to reality made by this effect can be negated by creating a contradiction in Suzumiya's mind between how the world is and how it should be. Even while unaware of her powers, this trait raises Haruhi's luck attribute to extremely high levels allowing her to avoid harm in even in the most extreme of circumstances.

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Noble Phantasm:

Brigade Chief's Armband [C-]: A simple red armband with the word “Goddess” written on it given to Haruhi by her followers as a token of their affection. Filled with the hopes of not only Suzumiya but her followers as well, the formally powerless object has become a NP that embodies all of her hopes and dreams for a more fun and interesting world. When invoked bestows upon its user a [A+] rank in Charisma.

True Reality Alteration: The Truth of Miracles

[EX]

While Haruhi's power to alter reality creates changes in the world that are often subtle and a bit silly, when angered and depressed enough it is possible that the entire world could be altered effectively destroying the existing universe and replacing it with one more suited to Haruhi's whims. This power, here channeled with extreme focus by Haruhi in an heightened emotional state, rewrites the rules of the present situation as to give her the upper hand and lessen any and all feelings of frustration or depression. While in use the impossible may become possible. There are no set limits as to what this skill may accomplish, though it is entirely possible it could produce disastrous results if not kept in constant check while active.



However, this effect cannot be consciously used by its owner and is only activated without warning when Suzumiya's emotional state reaches a certain state.

Regarding Haruhi's second NP, while it horribly overpowered in the matter of what it can do. I think it is limited enough in the fact that she cannot consciously use it and the amount of mana it takes to maintain it is far more then her master can actually provide, leading it to only last for a few seconds before incapacitating him and ending the effect.

[Iseal]

Just thought of a good char to write up.

"To die for the sake of the world, to die to protect others, who would accept such stupid excuses?!! They are unacceptable! The reason you fight is not to let those waiting for you to not be able to do anything other than cry!!"

Class: Rider
Name: Hamazura Shiage
Alignment: Neutral Good

Background: A veteran of WWIII, this Level 0 formerly of Skill-Out is known for being a wrench in Aleister Crowley's plans. Has survived many attempts on his life and defeated the 4th ranked Level 5 in combat.


Parameters:
Strength: D(+)/C(+) Members of Skill Out train more than professional athletes to be able to keep up with those with supernatural powers.
Endurance: D/C/B(+)
Agility: D/C (A+)
Mana: E Normal human, no supernatural skills
Luck: D Originally a throwaway character, Hamazura managed to become one of the mains.

Class Skills
Riding: A- All creatures but those of Phantasmal Beast and Divine Beast-rank can be used as mounts. Specialized in mechanical mounts.
Magic Resistance: E At this rank the ability is more for avoidance than actual blocking or negating. Aids in the detection and dodging of simple magics/ESP attacks.

Personal Skills
Disengage: C Bonus effect of returning battle conditions to what they were at the beginning of the match.
Guardian Knight: B Rider is commonly seen trying to save someone. Boosts Strength/Endurance by one rank. Increases accuracy when falling long distances to rescue someone.

Noble Phantasm
HsSSV-01 (Dragon Rider): A Said to be the most powerful motorbike created for military use, this vehicle was capable of a top speed of 1050 KPH and said to be able to freely fly across the wastelands of Russia at over 1000 kph and to climb cliffs with a slope of 70 degrees at over 300 kph. Designed as a powered suit that included a bike, this vehicle is impossible to operate properly without the suit. The powered suit interfaces directly with the users mind and helps overcome human limitations to drive the bike, as well as protecting the body from high speeds. Includes a gatling gun able to fired one-handed while riding. Boosts base Agility to A+ and Endurance to B, allows access to EotM (true) B rank through AI interface.

Landmine Grenades: B Portable landmines modified to be used as grenades. Pull the pin and throw!

"AK-something-or-other": C An outdated rifle in comparison to the weaponry of his time. Infinite Ammo.

Techslayer: A Gains a + modifier to Strength, Endurance, and Agility when facing technological-based constructs, attacks, weaponry, etc.

[Lycodrake]

http://forums.nrvnqsr.com/showthread...l=1#post805848

[Agailius]

Say, is there a limit to ho many NPs a Servant can have?

[Master of Chaos]

Technically, there should be one. But... >.> (looks at EMIYA and Gilgamesh)

[Agailius]

Technically, there should be one. But... >.> (looks at EMIYA and Gilgamesh)

Just how many would SB Date Masamune have?

[Lycodrake]

Just how many would SB Date Masamune have?

At the very least, his 6 swords would probably count as one NP.

[Agailius]

At the very least, his 6 swords would probably count as one NP.

What about all of his calling attacks?

[Lycodrake]

What about all of his calling attacks?

Except for JUMPING JACK BREAKER, I'd say they're more Skills than anything.

[Agailius]

Except for JUMPING JACK BREAKER, I'd say they're more Skills than anything.

Then he must be EX at prana bursts.

[Daneel Rush]

Then he must be EX at prana bursts.

Hahahahahahahaa-no.

[Agailius]

Hahahahahahahaa-no.

Well, how else would you classify his attacks?

[Daneel Rush]

They're just that: special attacks he has. Is EMIYA's Crane Wing Three Chains a NP/Skill/whatever? No. Same with Medea's spells and each and every single variation of Nine Lives--it's the foundation of the attacks which acts as Herakles's NP, not the individual forms of attack themselves. Tsubame Gaeshi is a Skill, and its technical quality is incomparable.