Create your own Modern Fiction Servants

[Spinach]

@Norris
Whoa, Kotonorris Oyakoto-sama does original Servants? Do you have any others?

@I3uster
It seems we're both mostly on the same page here, and this has been a most pleasant and civil exchange of opinions. I do believe anything that could be said about Hei as a Servant has been said, and it was a pleasure my good man.

/Monocle

[Fingolfin]

"Bow down to Toyotomi, and you shall be rewarded; oppose us, and...You'll be slaughtered like the bandit you are!"

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True Name: Toyotomi Hideyoshi

Alignment: Lawful Neutral

Class: Berserker

Master: Ilyasviel von Einzbern

Statistics

Strength: EX

Agility: B+

Endurance: A

Mana: ?

Luck: B

Noble Phantasm: A++

Class Skills

Mad Enhancement: F

A complication in the summing ritual has rendered it completely ineffective, Hideyoshi wasn't the hero that was intended to be summoned.

It affects neither his mentality nor his abilities.

Personal Skills

Charisma: B

Natural talent to command an army. Increases the ability of allies during group battles. A rare talent.

At this rank it can be said that one can rule a country.

Bravery: A+

The ability to negate mental interference such as pressure, confusion and fascination. Bonus effect of increasing melee damage.

Military Tactics: B+

Tactical knowledge used not for one-on-one combat situations, but for battles where many are mobilized. Bonus modifiers are provided during use of one's own Anti-Army Noble Phantasm or when dealing against an enemy Anti-Army Noble Phantasm.

Noble Phantasm

A Warlord's Conviction: A++

Hideyoshi's determination given an abstract manifestation in the form of a passive ability. Attacks of any kind at A+ rank or bellow are utterly useless against him. The only way to pass through this defense is with an attack of an A++ rank or above, and even then -- it may not kill him.


An example of his god-like physical strength.

[Larekko12]

Br0k0n! Over pawned.

[qsurf]

Christ almighty Ogodaka...I'm getting SB2 like now!That makes me wonder if the generals in SB ever started off as one of the average joes.

[I3uster]

Oh god. Go for the Master.

[qsurf]

Right, as promised Apple:

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Spirit: Ce'Nedra / X'Nedra

Class: Caster (???) / Rider (???)

Strength: E
Endurance: E
Agility: C
Magical energy: D
Luck: D

Noble Phantasm:
Beldaran's Amulet (C rank) (One of the best tools for spying, the Amulet allows Ce'Nedra to listen to anything happening within a certain radius (maybe 500 metres?) regardless of measures against scrying / spying)
Queen of the World (B - A rank, Marble Phantasm) (When it comes down to it, Ce'Nedra completely redefines the term charismatic, she managed to gather an army to serve as a distraction for her beloved husband-to-be so that he would face his Purpose. This Noble Phantasm is the crystallization of that one moment she let herself fulfill her Purpose, for with it, she can call forth that Legendary Army en masse or the squads that make it up at anytime. The World itself would support them for its Queen.)
Beloved (E-A rank) (For as long as she could remember, after meeting those who would become her boon companions she was never alone, every time her companions separated, she would feel the effects most keenly. Ce'Nedra must never be alone, the World itself would never allow it. The moment Ce'Nedra is summoned, she is accompanied by one of her boon companions, from her husband to her husband's wonderful and terrible Aunt, she could change who accompanies her at her whims. The Companion's stats and abilities are limited to the rank of this Noble Phantasm, the rank indicating just how well she knew them and how much time she had spent with them.)

Class Skills:
Independent Action (EX) (The World itself will always support its Queen when her Master can no longer do it on their own)

Personal Skills:
Charisma (A+)
Dryad Heritage (B) (While she can communicate with the Trees, she is still partially human, so the gifts of her non-human heritage are somewhat limited)
Imperial Privilege (C)
Monster (C) (She is not human...well, partially, she is part dryad)

[DB-L]

Br0k0n! Over pawned.

I bet he'd still get his arm broken in an arm wrestling match with Arc.

[Master of Chaos]

It has been a while.

Class: Lancer (Rider, Berserker)
True Name: Achilles
Gender: Male
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral

STR: A
END: C
AGI: A+
MGI: B
LCK: A+
NP: B

CLASS SKILLS

Magic Resistance: A
Protection against magical effects. Cancel spells of A-Rank or bellow. In practice, he is untouchable to modern Magi.

PERSONAL SKILLS

Charisma: D
The talent to command a large group of people. Increase the abilities of allies in group battles. A rare talent. At D-Rank, it is also possible to increase the morale of allies.

Divine Protection: A
A blessing from Divine Spirits, provides bonus modifiers to all saving throws. Furthermore, at A-Rank the Servant becomes immune to all sorts of curses, save those on the level of Divine Spirits.

Eternal Arms Mastership: A+
Mastership of combat arts has reached the point of being said to be unrivaled in one’s era. By complete merging of mind, body and technique, it is possible to make use of full fighting skills even when under the influence of any sort of mental hindrance.

Mixed-Blood: C
Measures one’s aptitude as a non-human. The higher the rank, more one’s quality as a human being decreases.

Weapons

Armor of the Gods (Second)
An armor forged by the Blacksmith Deity Hephaestus. Not only it is richly ornamented, but its performance as a defensive item is also high thanks to being made with divine skill. This is actually the second of such armor. As part of a set, it comes with a shield furnished with enchantments that expand a strong defensive bounded-field.

NOBLE PHANTASM

Lost Death – A Mother’s Blessings
Rank: B+
Type: Anti-Unit (Self)
Achilles immortal body. A conceptual charm that rejects the flaws known as death imbued in his very flesh. This auto-activation-type Noble Phantasm that restores Achilles to a state of full health every time he receives an injury. Not a high-speed regeneration ability that magically repairs wounds, nor a Curse of Restoration that forcefully returns the body to the point prior to being wounded by turning back time, but rather, this is a top-class divine mystery that rejects the very event of being injured to being with. Because carrying the damage of an injury that he never received is a paradox, the world corrects that contradiction by recovering Achilles body. Furthermore, Lost Death also grants immunity to all sorts of physical alignments.

There is a famous anecdote on how Achilles gained his invulnerability by being bathed in the mystic waters of the underworld (Styx River) right after birth. That same anecdote tells about a weak point on his heels, and while Achilles was indeed killed by an arrow that hit that spot, Lost Death’s protection actually extends itself for his whole body. There is no vulnerability on his heels. The true weakness of this Noble Phantasm lies elsewhere.

Pelias Hasta – Fragment of Chaos
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Unit
A large polearm with one spearhead at each end. It originally belonged to Achilles’ father, King Peleus. According to legend, during the marriage between Peleus and Thetis, the wise centaur Chiron presented the King with a stout, ash-colored staff that he found at the top of Mt. Pelion. Athena then gave the staff a polished form and Hephaestus furnished it with spearheads. What nobody knew at the time was that ash-colored staff was something that branched off from the primordial deity (Protogenoi) Khaos. As a result, this spear is a weapon that carries opposing attributes of creation and destruction.

The main, large spearhead (Pelias Omega – Spear of Final Destruction) carries a blessing (curse) of death and inflicts unhealable wounds when its true name is called. Even if medical treatment is used to cure the injury, damage will continue to be dealt at the end of every turn so long the blessing (curse) is not lifted. Meanwhile, the secondary, small spearhead (Pelias Alpha – Spear of Primal Creation) is imbued with a curse (blessing) of life that returns the target to perfect conditions when its true name is called. Not only it recovers damage, but also negates all sorts of negative alignments (including the blessing (curse) of Pelias Omega).

Achilles’ weapon-of-choice, but it surprisingly played little part on his legend. In fact, many modern accounts of his story fail to mention its existence altogether. It was only during the incident involving King Telephus of Mysia that it ever had a significant role.

BACKGROUND

The great hero of the Trojan War, Achilles was a Mixed-Blood of Elemental that lived in Ancient Greece. Son of King Peleus of Aegina and the Nereid Thetis, because his beauty and capacity, he was loved by men and gods alike. His abilities were so outstanding that he was widely regarded as the strongest of the Achaeans who participated in that conflict.

Blessed from birth, his mother brought him to the Styx River as a baby to wash away the mortality from his body and make him invincible. Then, a few years later, his father sent him to be educated by the centaur Chiron at Mt. Pelion. There, he learned not only about the arts of combat, hunting and riding, but also music and fundamental sciences.

Around that time, a certain oracle made a prophecy that Achilles would “either have a long a long and ignoble life at home or a short but glorious one away”. Knowing this, when Thetis heard that the Achaeans wanted her son to participate in the war against Troy, she decided to disguise him as a young girl and hide him at the court of King Lycomede of Skyros. However, the hero Odysseus used a clever scheme to expose the disguise and Thetis was left with no other choice but to allow Achilles depart to war.

However, that was what Achilles wanted. Since early, the young warrior had an unrestrained thirst for glory. In his own words, his objective in life “was to surpass all heroes that came before and immortalize my name as the greatest of legends”. The dedication that he showed back in his lifetime towards that single dream of his was something that bordered a fanatical obsession.

Incidentally, this notion of “glory found in legends = immortality of men” was something that he learn from the story of a certain Babylonian king.

Achilles participation in the Trojan War was marked by rage. It was a common sight to witness him lose itself to wrath. When combined with his superhuman strength, this overwhelming fury turned him literally into beast of destruction.

But, while he was the Achaeans greatest trump, his personality also made him the greatest torn in their flesh. Achilles excellence also made him quite aloof and somewhat incapable of empathizing with others. Furthermore, he was also known for being selfish and owner of great pride, who would go to the last consequences when it came down to cleaning his honor.

The most famous incident of that sort was the feud between him and Agamemnon, supreme commander of the Greek forces. After a disagreement between the two, Agamemnon imposed a minor punishment over Achilles by taking away from him Briseis, a beautiful woman that the hero had taken for himself as a spoil of war and concubine. Insulted, Achilles withdraw himself and his men from the frontlines in reprisal.

The absence of Achilles and his Myrmidons was disastrous for the Achaeans. The Greek army soon started to pile up defeat over defeat and the Trojans gained a clear advantage in the conflict. Recognizing once again that the war could not be won without Achilles, Agamemnon attempted to make amends with the warrior, going as far as sending Briseis back to him together with many other gifts. But blinded by rage, Achilles refused to concede. Not even his closest friend – Patroclus – was able to make him change his mind.

One day, after pushing their enemies all the way back to the beaches, the Trojans mounted an assault to Greek ships. Upon seeing that hopeless crisis, Patroclus decided to disguise himself as Achilles by wearing his prized armor and then rallying the Myrmidons to support the Greeks. The Trojans were successfully repelled, but Patroclus himself was killed in combat by Hector, prince of Troy.

The news of his friend’s death filled Achilles with sadness and desire for revenge. He went after Hector and took his life after an epic duel. But not satisfied with just killing him, Achilles dragged Hector’s body back to his camp with his chariot in order to prevent that the prince from having a proper funeral. The desecration of Hector’s body was a sin too heavy to be overlooked by the gods, and Achilles would eventually lose his life to a divine curse because of it.

By that point, Achilles had successfully turned himself into a living legend. However, the loss of his only friend turned him into a bitter man and he no longer cared about his dream like before. Rather, he started to look back in sorrow at the sacrifices he made for the sake of that dream and became filled with regret over the way of life he took.

[Ergast]

Very nice (and credible) version of Achilles. People tend to overwank him or make him weaker that he was in the legend (being the second greatest greek hero ever isn't exactly a small achievement). I'm going to make three guesses about Lost Death:

One, if he is completely anihilated in one shot he won't regenerate (there is no body whose blessing would negate the death of the body)
Two, his own spear is his weak point, as it makes wounds that even when healed would open again.
Three, magic can somehow surpass this blessing, if the mystery behind it is strong enough.

Did I guess right with one of them? If not, was I close?

[Daneel Rush]

being the second greatest greek hero ever isn't exactly a small achievement

Well, according to Homer, Achilles is the greatest hero of his generation, period. However, he also states that nobody in the generation of Troy's heroic warriors had a thing on the heroes of the "strongest generation": Heracles, Perseus, etc.

[Ergast]

Well, Herk and a hundred of friends conquered Troy like bosses without the need of giant horses if I remember my greek myths right, so yeah, Achilles doesn't have anything on Herk when it comes to facts. He is still pretty awesome, though.

[Master of Chaos]

Very nice (and credible) version of Achilles. People tend to overwank him or make him weaker that he was in the legend (being the second greatest greek hero ever isn't exactly a small achievement). I'm going to make three guesses about Lost Death:

One, if he is completely anihilated in one shot he won't regenerate (there is no body whose blessing would negate the death of the body)
Two, his own spear is his weak point, as it makes wounds that even when healed would open again.
Three, magic can somehow surpass this blessing, if the mystery behind it is strong enough.

Did I guess right with one of them? If not, was I close?

Three (and, in a sense, two as well) is close, but not quite the way you're thinking.

The thing is Lost Death works by rejecting death, and not properly restoring life. So while it is really good in terms of healing wounds, it cannot recover prana (life-force/ magical energy). Also note that Lost Death is a self-activating Noble Phantasm that works regardless of his will, and will turn on whenever he is wounded, no matter how minor of an injury it is. So in a prolonged fight where he ends up getting hit a lot, there is a risk of Achilles literally becoming an empty shell after Lost Death exhausted all of his prana. Even if the body is intact, there is no energy inside to keep him alive anymore.

In my head, Achilles death during the Trojan War went like this: while he was battling against the Trojan, Paris came up and shot him with an arrow given by Apollo. By dumb luck (Paris was not that much of an archer to begin with), the arrow carved itself in Achilles' heels. The wound itself was no big deal, but the arrow had a powerful divine curse in it that drained away the life-force of the target once it hit (if you search around, you will actually find a few legends of Apollo shooting arrows that could kill with one hit; I based this idea on those). Almost immediately, Lost Death activated and used up the little energy that Achilles had left, thus killing him.

[qsurf]

*frowns a little*

Honestly, I'm very skeptical of Achilles' luck stat there, from the way his mother tried to stop him from going to Troy, to his defilement to Apollo's Temple and Priestesses, to his death years before the sacking of Troy while he was praying to the gods...he reads as a hero with low luck. After all, everything he had accomplished was all a part of his Fate.

It looks to me like he has at most C- Ranked luck, the minus there is a modifier when the situation involves Divine Mysteries (since he did piss off a small number of gods and refused to follow several very important traditions).

[Five_X]

Yeah, Achilles certainly isn't lucky, especially not A+ rank.

[Yog]

Achiles is one eitgth human. I would say that Mixed-Blood should be something like A. You can't get much less human and still be considered a part of humanity. His mother was a nymph, his father was a child of an oread and a half-god hero.

[Lycodrake]

Achiles is one eitgth human. I would say that Mixed-Blood should be something like A. You can't get much less human and still be considered a part of humanity. His mother was a nymph, his father was a child of an oread and a half-god hero.

I don't get why "Mixed Blood" is being used at all. There's "Divinity" that *could* work, though it would be a low Rank for him... ^^;

[Yog]

I don't get why "Mixed Blood" is being used at all. There's "Divinity" that *could* work, though it would be a low Rank for him... ^^;

Again, why? He is 7/8 divine. Yes, Zeus is only his great grandfather, but both his mother and paternal grandmother are minor goddesses. He is as close to a god as it comes, really, without actually ascending to godhood. Or am I wrong here and don't understand how this works?

[Lycodrake]

Again, why? He is 7/8 divine. Yes, Zeus is only his great grandfather, but both his mother and paternal grandmother are minor goddesses. He is as close to a god as it comes, really, without actually ascending to godhood. Or am I wrong here and don't understand how this works?

...you can have "Divinity" without it meaning you are able to ascend to godhood, IIRC. And some Servants that should have it don't. ^^;

[Five_X]

Technically, Divinity would be the appropriate tag here according to how Nasuverse rules work. "Divinity" refers to Divine Spirits and the like, not just typically recognized "gods."

[Master of Chaos]

Ok, lets go in order:

*frowns a little*

Honestly, I'm very skeptical of Achilles' luck stat there, from the way his mother tried to stop him from going to Troy, to his defilement to Apollo's Temple and Priestesses, to his death years before the sacking of Troy while he was praying to the gods...he reads as a hero with low luck. After all, everything he had accomplished was all a part of his Fate.

It looks to me like he has at most C- Ranked luck, the minus there is a modifier when the situation involves Divine Mysteries (since he did piss off a small number of gods and refused to follow several very important traditions).

In my views, Achilles' high Luck is a direct consequence of his strong divine protection. Time and again during his lifetime, he managed to survive dangers that should have killed thanks to the intervention of the gods. Despite everything, Achilles was well loved by most of the Olympian deities. He only died when they arrived on a consensus that "it was time for Achilles to go".

Achiles is one eitgth human. I would say that Mixed-Blood should be something like A. You can't get much less human and still be considered a part of humanity. His mother was a nymph, his father was a child of an oread and a half-god hero.

Mixed-Blood is one of my original skills and, according to my standards, C-Rank is the highest that you can have and still be treated as a human. At B-Rank you get Kishima Kouma-levels of Inversion Impulse and A-Rank you start to be classified as something like a Phantasm Race.

Just to have an idea, of all the fan-made Servants that I am currently working, the only one who has A-Rank of Mixed-Blood is Morgan le Fay - who abandoned all her humanity to become a pseudo-fairy/Elemental.

Edit: At the very least, I am classifying Thetis as an Elemental rather than a Divine Spirit. Even during her time, she was only loosely regarded as a goddess and, in accordance with Nasu-rules, gods that are not worshiped by humans become Elementals instead.