Bloodless Sins

[Arch-Magos Winter]

Yes... Yes... Delicious Archer/Rin snark...
Also, Bazzet. Delicious, delicious Bazzet.

[Elf]

Yeah, Archer and Rin snark is a hell of a lot easier to write than Archer and Saber being all nervous with each other.

[Arch-Magos Winter]

Yeah, Archer and Rin snark is a hell of a lot easier to write than Archer and Saber being all nervous with each other.

I can see that.

Hell, I get that. Much easier for me to write a whole bunch of non-dialogue stuff than it is for me to write anything WITH dialogue. Even little pieces of it.

[Aiden]

I can see that.

Hell, I get that. Much easier for me to write a whole bunch of non-dialogue stuff than it is for me to write anything WITH dialogue. Even little pieces of it.

I have trouble writing anything that doesn't peer at least a little into a minimum of one character's internal perspective. Does that count?

[Elf]

I can see that.

Hell, I get that. Much easier for me to write a whole bunch of non-dialogue stuff than it is for me to write anything WITH dialogue. Even little pieces of it.

Ironically I can write dialog forever. I'm more comfortable with dialogue honestly.

[Aiden]

Ironically I can write dialog forever. I'm more comfortable with dialogue honestly.

hours and hours of dialogue

[Arch-Magos Winter]

Ironically I can write dialog forever. I'm more comfortable with dialogue honestly.

How I envy you. If I could write a story without dialogue I would.

Hmm. Maybe I should try that sometime.

[Elf]

How I envy you. If I could write a story without dialogue I would.

Hmm. Maybe I should try that sometime.

There was an awesome issue of the GI Joe comic book that was COMPLETELY silent.

And of course "Hush".

[Arch-Magos Winter]

There was an awesome issue of the GI Joe comic book that was COMPLETELY silent.

And of course "Hush".

The Batman comic?
I'm pretty sure that had dialogue Elf.

Unless you're talking about a different Hush. Or I'm wrong. Which shockingly happens.

[Elf]

The Batman comic?
I'm pretty sure that had dialogue Elf.

Unless you're talking about a different Hush. Or I'm wrong. Which shockingly happens.

I'm talking about the episode of "Buffy the Vampire Slayer" where half of it had no dialogue.

[Mike1984]

. . . I thought the Emiya house did have wards, but they weren't oppressive like the Tohsaka ones.

No, it has a field which warns Shirou of intruders, but nothing more. It doesn't warn people off or anything like Rin's wards do.

[Altima of the Gates]

The wards hummed in this chapter, but they didn't do anything else.

Bazett is fucking hot man.

I'd have liked to hear more of Cu's gushing in the dialogue, and I wonder how she'll deal with Kotomine at this point, that would be interesting as well.


And the boundary field reacts to intruders with hostile intent. The bones you hear were likely from Caster's dragon tooth warriors ransacking the house, since iirc, Shirou says it gives off a ping, like the Alarm spell in D&D.

[Aiden]

I'd have liked to hear more of Cu's gushing in the dialogue, and I wonder how she'll deal with Kotomine at this point, that would be interesting as well.


And the boundary field reacts to intruders with hostile intent. The bones you hear were likely from Caster's dragon tooth warriors ransacking the house, since iirc, Shirou says it gives off a ping, like the Alarm spell in D&D.

Could have sworn it gave off that sound when Lancer invaded the first time too ... might be remembering incorrectly.

[Elf]

I just remember Lancer like roundhouse kicking Shirou across the yard.

You know, Shirou got kicked a great distance by two Servants. One by Lancer, and the other by Archer.

[Tobias]

Rider kicks him out a window.

[LunarLegend]

Interesting concept. Sane Herakles? A chance for Archer to Big Brother it up with his cutesy-but-surprisngly-wise older sister? The chance for all Servants to have a chance at resurrection?

I'm just a little concerned about the conflict. Gil is humbled? Bazette is alive and well? Shirou is alive/sane/not being reckless? (I was kind of hoping he'd have dun goofed, because "Onii-chan is an idiot" and all that). I see no reason why Illya summoned Fuyuki's Greatest Heroes if there is no cause or conflict beyond "Rin is a little bloodied and needs to be patched up."

I'm curious where this goes, but -for once- I'm not sold.*

*Unless Illya's massive resurrection was simply a plot device to bring together a bunch of the characters for fun dialog and characterization. In which case, that's cool: but Illya shouldn't be selling this as “I’m bringing you back to life because Onii-chan is an idiot and I guess I owe Rin.” Casting Raise Dead on every Servant in the war is no mean feat, and other than she's feeling nice is a little hard to swallow.

[Hymn of Ragnarok]

Ironically I can write dialog forever. I'm more comfortable with dialogue honestly.

Recent events certainly back up that claim.

hours and hours of dialogue

At the very least I know Elf can do this.

And I agree with Altima, I wanna see more Cu/Bazett interaction! The fallout between Cu, Bazett, and Kotomine promises to be...interesting.

[Mike1984]

Interesting concept. Sane Herakles? A chance for Archer to Big Brother it up with his cutesy-but-surprisngly-wise older sister? The chance for all Servants to have a chance at resurrection?

I'm just a little concerned about the conflict. Gil is humbled? Bazette is alive and well? Shirou is alive/sane/not being reckless? (I was kind of hoping he'd have dun goofed, because "Onii-chan is an idiot" and all that). I see no reason why Illya summoned Fuyuki's Greatest Heroes if there is no cause or conflict beyond "Rin is a little bloodied and needs to be patched up."

I'm curious where this goes, but -for once- I'm not sold.*

*Unless Illya's massive resurrection was simply a plot device to bring together a bunch of the characters for fun dialog and characterization. In which case, that's cool: but Illya shouldn't be selling this as “I’m bringing you back to life because Onii-chan is an idiot and I guess I owe Rin.” Casting Raise Dead on every Servant in the war is no mean feat, and other than she's feeling nice is a little hard to swallow.

Erm, Sakura...? That's a pretty damn big source of conflict right there.

Still, I think it's mostly just for the purpose of fluff. Also, I believe it was Shirou who wished for them to come back to life, not Ilya.

[Elf]

Rider kicks him out a window.

Oh yes, I forgot about that. And doesn't she either kick or throw him towards Sakura to protect Sakura in HF?

Interesting concept. Sane Herakles? A chance for Archer to Big Brother it up with his cutesy-but-surprisngly-wise older sister? The chance for all Servants to have a chance at resurrection?

Don't forget Rin romancing her Servant and getting out all of that pent up sexual frustration.

I'm just a little concerned about the conflict. Gil is humbled? Bazette is alive and well? Shirou is alive/sane/not being reckless? (I was kind of hoping he'd have dun goofed, because "Onii-chan is an idiot" and all that). I see no reason why Illya summoned Fuyuki's Greatest Heroes if there is no cause or conflict beyond "Rin is a little bloodied and needs to be patched up."

Oh, trust me there will be conflict. Think about it, Ilya just brought back the dead Servants and the Masters who died in the war. Like Shinji and Kotomine. One of those is a Counter Guardian with a whole mess of issues. Plus this is Rin's story. So we have to deal with the 400 pound violet haired elephant in the room.

Gil's humbled for now. He's not the Big Bad, but Saber beating him was a learning experience for him. One that he needed.

*Unless Illya's massive resurrection was simply a plot device to bring together a bunch of the characters for fun dialog and characterization. In which case, that's cool: but Illya shouldn't be selling this as “I’m bringing you back to life because Onii-chan is an idiot and I guess I owe Rin.” Casting Raise Dead on every Servant in the war is no mean feat, and other than she's feeling nice is a little hard to swallow.

I won't deny, there will be some of that here obviously. However Rin's mess of issues are different than Saber's and Sakura's.

Recent events certainly back up that claim.

Indeed they did. Also, even though while I LOVED writing Saber's dialogue, after awhile it became a major challenge. My natural mode is SNARK.

At the very least I know Elf can do this.

*Bows* Thank you kindly.

And I agree with Altima, I wanna see more Cu/Bazett interaction! The fallout between Cu, Bazett, and Kotomine promises to be...interesting.

Once Bazett gets over her confusion, oh it will be.

Erm, Sakura...? That's a pretty damn big source of conflict right there.

And Bingo was his name-o!

[Mike1984]

Oh yes, I forgot about that. And doesn't she either kick or throw him towards Sakura to protect Sakura in HF?

Not quite. In the school scene, she is ordered by Shinji to beat Shirou up (with Shirou not resisting) whilst he's holding Sakura hostage, and she deliberately goes easy on him and lets him get at Shinji to free Sakura. I don't think she directly kicks him in that direction, though.

And Bingo was his name-o!

Well, I was assuming you wouldn't just forget about her (if I didn't assume that, then I wouldn't even be reading the fic), and her situation is a massive problem for Rin. Although, how you intend to differentiate this from Steel and Cherry Blossoms I'm not sure, at least in terms of the Sakura-saving aspect of it.