So one question for a skill such as golden rule which with a minus gives a rank down to luck. If it has two minuses would it be two rank downs to luck or are we just saying more than one minus is impossible. And for more than one minus in a regular parameter (such as Strength) would that just mean that its even more unstable? I'm really confused now on the whole minus ordeal I feel like someone just shattered my world
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You wouldn't have more than one minus.
Servant Berserker:
True Name: Charles Darwin 'King of Evolution'
Alignment: True Neutral
Alternate Class: Caster
Summoning Catalyst: original manuscript of 'On The Origin Of Species'
Strength- E~EX
Agility- E~EX
Endurance- E~EX
Mana- C
Luck- C
NP- EX
Appearance:
Personality: Reserved and tranquil. Nothing but a peaceful, unassuming old man who enjoys observing animals and nature. Though having studied the "scarlet-dyed claws and fangs of nature" he himself could not be more distant from such things. There is only one thing known to make Berserker truly angry and that is how his theory has become distorted in the popular mindset. He does not care for the villifications he himself has underwent, but as a man of science his heart cannot bear to see the theory he crafted be twisted beyond recognition by the willfully ignorant. If one brings up such topics around him, first he will try to clear up their misconceptions are politely as possible. But if that fails, he will explode with a fury befitting of a Berserker Class Heroic Spirit.
Likes: animals, nature, science
Dislikes: Creationism, ignorance, boat rides (he's easily seasick)
Talents: Biology, great discovery taken through small steps
Natural Enemy: Adam
Class Skills:
Mad Enhancement (E~EX)- Normally sacrifices reason in exchange for raw power. In the case of Berserker, his rank starts off extremely low as he was never known for 'going mad' in life. But it rises progressively as his mind is fractured through the effects of his Noble Phantasm- Natural Selection.
Personal Skills:
Animal Dialogue (E)- Ability to communicate with animals that do not speak a 'language of words'. As a devoted naturalist in life, Darwin naturally found himself attuned to the habits and 'language' of the animals he observed. He can not truly 'speak' their language, but he can 'understand' it to a limited degree.
Innovation: Darwinism (A+)- A unique Skill granted to those heroes who brought about a conceptual revolution in life. In the case of Berserker, the 'revolution' in question was his discovery of the Theory of Evolution, thought to greatly challenge Man's place in the Cosmos as well as conventional religion. Any abilities drawing power from Creation Myths (such as Genesis, Enuma Elish, etc) will find their effectiveness on Berserker reduced by half.
'Yes, this does mean he might be able to tank Enuma Elish.'
Noble Phantasm:
Natural Selection- Nature Red In Tooth And Claw (EX, Anti-Self): Crystallization of Berserker's discovering the Theory of Evolution. Though in truth he was not the only one to whom the idea had struck, it was he that became its most famous promoter.
It seems the man himself and his most famous theory have been confused, almost like a parody of some kind. Evolution, which is embodied in all the natural world, is now localized into his own body as a Heroic Spirit. That body, which bears the concept of "limitless evolution" is Berserker's sole Noble Phantasm.
He starts out with E in every physical parameter and no special abilities, but his body will progressively 'evolve' in reaction to external threats. With each threat he faces, he will promptly 'evolve' a countermeasure to it. If a great boulder is thrown on top of him he will aquire A+ strength to lift him, if he's set on fire he'll gain a fire-proof outer layer of skin, if he's thrown off a cliff he'll sprout wings, if about to drown he'll grow gills and so on.
The true nature of this Noble Phantasm is that his body is made into a microcosm of the natural world as a whole, a Reality Marble simulating the course of millions of years of evolution at a hyper-advanced pace. Thusly, his body only grows more fractured as he 'evolves', becoming a twisted amalgamation of countless animals. Scales, wings, claws, fangs, arms, legs, of all different creatures all begin sprouting from his body without reason. From an extremely weak Servant that poses next to no danger in the War, he can eventually become an unmatched monster that even the three Knight class Heroes in unison would have trouble putting down.
His mind is increasingly fractured as well, torn between the conflicting survival instincts roaring inside him. These overwhelm his reason, and the only part of his mind remaining is 'survive, above all else.' In gameplay terms, his rank in Mad Enhancement (originally at E-) will rise progressively as he continues 'evolving'.
As it is Berserker's body itself, this Noble Phantasm is constantly active and cannot be turned off regardless of his wishes. Berserker himself greatly dislikes this Noble Phantasm, considering it a symbol of how his theory has been distorted beyond recognition in the popular mentality.
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Update: Switched his Natural Enemy from the extremely silly choice of Ken Ham (infamous promoter of Creation 'science') to the marginally less silly Adam. 'Hero of creation' versus 'hero of evolution'. Also works better since I actually have an Adam amongst the sheets I've completed.
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Don't be so negative.Originally Posted by Mcjon01
Interesting. I've never seen a Darwin sheet before and it's ironic he's been summoned as a Caster considering his contribution to science. I like your variation of 'Innovation' and your Natural Selection Noble Phantasm as they're suitable for him and the constant adaptation is rather intuitive. Personally I'd reduce his Mana stat to E as he's a modern scientist but that's the only criticism I can offer.
(Whats this? Not a Genderbend? I'm astonished.
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Go through the historical and mythological sections of this site and you'll find a bunch of worthy characters
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He's not, though. He's summoned as Berserker, with Caster as an alternate Class that he could have been summoned into. As Caster his Natural Selection NP would more then likely crystallize as "summoning familiars (preferably finches or tortoises) that adapt to the enemy's attacks over time" or something of that sort, rather then the Berserker version of "Turn into a giant monster through POWER OF EVOLUTION!!"
The somewhat high (for a modern Servant) Mana stat is because of how he's eligible for the Caster Class, though.
For the faceclaim, I literally looked up "Crazy beard guy anime" in Google Image and went for the first thing that caught my eye (some guy from Shiki, I think).
Badass Of The Week link sounds like it could be helpful. I remember using it as a source for details on my Judah Maccabee sheet a while ago.
BTW Hermes, whaddya' think of my Nameless Crusader sheet on the previous page? I'd been hoping to hear your commentary on that one.
Ah, must have missed that one. I'm in the uk, so a lot of the activity on here tends to go on while i'm asleep for the most part.
I like the idea of the amalgamation of all the crusaders combined into one (that was actually my idea for what Saber of Strange Fake was before it was all but announced it was Richard I.)
The skills are most suitable and I did like Nameless Hero. Its like a better version of Uncrowned Martial Arts. Gladius Godfreius is a continually growing stat boosting sword so its nice to see you didn't go for just the laser sword (which I sorta did with Cao Cao) and you made it separate to the blade itself buy Sanctis Peregrinatio weakens after use, so its more than balanced. Honestly, i'm not sure Jerusalem is necessary as a third noble phantasm, but it was a nice touch. Probably Avalon-esque in that it was used at the end of a story.
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And before she gets sniped, here is the most Audatious Saber ever.
Servant: Saber
True Name: Julie d'Aubigny 'La Maupin'
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Place of Origin: France
Strength- C
Endurance- C
Agility- A
Mana- D
Luck- A
NP- C
Height/Weight: 173cm/52kg
Likes: Herself, Beautiful women... and men
Dislikes: Predictability, Consistency
Talent: Singing, Acting
Natural Enemy: Boredom
Class Skills:
- Magic Resistance (C) - Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against Magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals. Julie is a modern servant who encountered no magic in life, as such had Magic Resistance unbecoming of the Saber class.
- Riding (B) - Most vehicles can be handled with above average skill. However, cannot ride the likes of Phantasm Races such as Monstrous Beasts. As a former noblewoman, she would have been taught how to mount and ride a variety of things.
Personal Skills:
- Alluring Nightingale (B+) - A mesmerising-kind of Skill possessed by those with a beautiful and a alluring voice that charms people; it is also a declaration of exercise of power by the royalty. Although infamous for her duelling skill and sexual escapades, she was best known as an utterly flawless singer.
- Bardic Inspiration (C) - Through stirring words or music together she can inspire others and grant them temporary bonuses. The power of these bonuses is directly linked to one's ability to perform. At this rank, one can inspire a large audience big enough to fill the Paris Opera House.
- Eye of the Mind (True) (B) - Capable of calm analysis of battle conditions even when in danger and deduce an appropriate course of action after considering all possibilities to escape from a predicament. So long there is even a 1% chance of a comeback, this ability greatly improves the chances of winning.
- Duellist (A) - Measures ones talents in fencing and marksmanship. Provides bonuses when fighting at close range with either a rapier or firearm. Julie was a masterful duellist and undefeated in life.
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When I first came across her, I thought she seemed like a far more sexual Nero who could actually sing. Turns out I was right for the most part.
Anyways, feedback would be great, this is my first low-tier saber.
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Well, her personality is absolutely hilarious for one thing. I'm sure loads of shenanigans would accompany any War featuring her (and Fanservice, can't forget that). Certainly a far cry from the usual knightly, honorable characters associated with the Saber class. Also, I love the part in her lore where she thinks "Hey, maybe that guy wasn't so bad..." after having stabbed him multiple times. And then went on to have a freaking relationship with the very same guy (who's clearly not one to hold grudges).
Though a Saber, her stats are more Assassin-like all around, and even her NP is more optimal for the tactics of that Class. Speaking of which, said NP is nice. Reminds me a bit of Imperial Privilege in a way (since you compared her to Nero), though it can't copy Skills. Given Julie's personality, that shape-stealing aspect is sure to be exploited for some rather less then decent ends...
Rank C Mana seems a bit high for a pretty modern Heroic Spirit without any associations to the supernatural. Keep in mind, Arturia had rank C Mana under Shirou with a freaking Dragon Reactor powering her.
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ArcherAlignment: Neutral Good
Lakshmana, the Prince of Ayodhya
Appearance
Place of birth: Ayodhya
STR: B
END: B
AGI: A
MAG: A
LUCK: A
NP: A++
Class Skills
Independent Action (C-): The ability to remain independent even when rejecting the prana supply from the Master. At the higher ranks, it is also possible to remain for extended periods of time in this world without an established contract. It is both useful and troublesome depending on the disposition of the Servant and the rank of Independent Action. Acting in autonomy from the Master's prana supply, the Master can concentrate their own prana on large spells, and the Servant will be fine even in the case they cannot supply prana due to injury. The downside is that they can be harder to control and keep by their side, making the only true way to command them by utilizing Command Spells. It is possible for Archer to theoretically stay in the world for one day without a Master, however his loyalty and devotion weaken the effects of this skill.
Magic Resistance (A): Grants protection against magical effects. Differently from the Resistance effect that merely rejects prana, this ability cancels the spells altogether. This rank is capable of cancelling spells of A-Rank or below. In practice, the Servant is untouchable to modern magi, so it would not be an exaggeration to title the Servant a "Magus Killer".
Personal Skills
Divinity (B-): The measure of whether one has Divine Spirit aptitude or not. At high levels one is treated as a mixed race of a Divine Spirit, and the level declines when the Heroic Spirit's own rank as a Monster raises. It can also decrease due one's dislike for the gods. It also has an effect which reduces special defensive values called "purge defense" in proportion to the Divinity's Rank. It can break through Skills such as Protection of the Faith and Enlightenment of the Sacred Fig. Archer is the avatar of Shesha, the king of all nagas, a Divine Beast rather than a god outright.
Eye of the Mind (False) (A): A natural talent to avoid danger on the basis of an innate 6th sense, intuition, or prescience, where accuracy of instinct has been augmented by experience -- somewhat overcoming the problem of visual obstructions that appear in the course of combat. This rank allows for calm analysis of battle conditions, by which competent grasp of the status of the self and the opponent are obtainable even in the midst of danger; and utilization of such to deduce the appropriate course of action that permits escape from a lethal predicament. In addition, this rank grants an effect of offering resistance against penalties caused by visual obstructions.
Clairvoyance (B): Connotes superior visual perception and dynamic occipital capture, such as to supplement the long-range aiming of projectile weapons. At higher ranks, it is possible that the bearers of this skill have acquired such abilities as precognition ("future vision") and other forms of perception beyond standard eyesight (X-ray vision and so forth). By combining this with the Eye of the Mind skill, limited future sight is possible.
Astra Avoidance (A+): A (limited) variant of the Protection from Arrows skill. Rather than allowing for the ability to dodge arrows by tracking their movement and acting accordingly, it is a skill that works with Luck: arrows will naturally avoid the Servant without them having to act on it. The luckier the Servant is, the more shots will miss.
Devotion (A+): A skill that is possessed by those who have bound themselves to fight for the sake of another, above all else. When acting on the behalf of one the possessor owes loyalty to, parameters are raised; when acting treacherously or against interests, parameters are lowered, with the degree of penalty tying into the degree of deviation.
Noble Phantasms
Brahmastra – Brahma, Pierce Through All! (Anti-Unit, A+): The Brahmastra, possessed by a vast number of heroes in Indian legends, it is the weapon Lakshmana used to slay one of the sons of Ravana. As he possessed armour that only the Brahmastra could destroy, Lakshmana’s version of this ability lets him fire a massive arrow that destroys all defences. Before this shot, shields and armour are treated as though they didn’t exist.
Indraastra – Indra, Rain Down Your Wrath! (Anti-Army, A++): The ability that Lakshmana used in his greatest feat: the slaying of Indrajit. Upon invocation the skies cloud over, and a torrential hail of arrows rains down from the sky with incredible force. As this is the weapon of Indra, the storm god, the arrows are charged with lightning, only increasing their power.
Garudastra – Garuda, Protect Me! (Anti-Self/Shield, A): The mighty wings of the great bird Garuda, which Rama and Lakshmana used to shield themselves from Indrajit’s relentless attacks. It takes the form of a whirling shield of wind that drives away attacks and projectiles. The violence of the windstorm means it can also be used as an offensive weapon in a pinch, though it has a short range and isn’t particularly powerful. Its true power is revealed against serpents, or those with a snake attribute, against these attacks a counterattack formed of a powerful blast of wind and heat will be produced.
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Since his brother's a thing now, I figured it'd be nice to do him.
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>Charles Darwin tanking Enuma Elish
Dank meme.
F/GO SUPPORT
Well, I already wanked Darwin to at least Spartacus levels so why not go whole-hog right?
And it's not he'd be able to shrug off Enuma Elish at max output. Innovation: Darwinism only reduces by half any Creation myth associated attacks, so if Gil really wanted to he could dial it up high enough that even halved it would still crush Darwin like a bug. I added that part in as more of a joke then anything, really.
This is the truest statement I've ever heard. Honestly every single one of them has either a weapon that can destroy the entire world or something as powerful. Because every Hindu Hero is basically Top tier, approaching Gilgamesh levels of OP it makes me terrified to make servant sheets for any of them. Some of them even have multiple anti-world/country weapons in their arsenal.
Thanks for the feedback. I boosted Strength and Endurance and reduced Mana.
Yes she may seem more suited for the assassin class but her personality is not by any means whatsoever, hence the saber class
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The number of shits the Grail gives about whether a Heroic Spirit's personality 'suits' the class/container it's put them in is so low it's about to form a black hole.
It only cares abut a) their abilities, b) whether that class/container is available and c) what their legend is.
If the grail decides "Yeah, she's suited for Assassin" and the Assassin class is available, that's where it'll put her.
Except, you know, the Hassans override that and she'd probably be moved to the second most suitable class for her abilities.
And don't get me started on what the Moon Cell thinks about Servant personalities conflicting with their class/container. (Hint: take a look at Tamamo and tell me whether her personality is suited for her class, eh?)
Okay, ignoring everything else, what exactly does personality have to do with class? Tamamo shoots fire and makes magic poison and stuff, so she's a Caster. Why is more than that needed?
What about that time tamamo was a cat.
Main reason I made Julie a saber I because she never did anything even remotely stealthy in life. Her noble phantasm just comes from her acting ability and although she may seem more appropriate for the assassin class for it, she isn't. She was known for being a duellist, fighting out in the open and making as big a scene as possible.
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Fair enough, I wasn't saying she wasn't suited for the Saber class. I was just making a point.
As for the Tamamo thing... I'm not sure what you're saying?
Well, actually, I do. It's more like I don't know why you said it.
Personality has nothing to do with class. Her abilities (even if she doesn't want to use them) make her suited for Caster. I never claimed they didn't.
Okay, then what exactly is this supposed to mean? Because if you didn't mean she lacked a Caster like personality and that this is terrible then I'm lost.
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