Made to Break [Kara no Kyoukai] [lemon]

[Prix with a Silent X]

So the followup where he's trying not to cry as she pulls his pants down??

I did say 'coaxing,' not 'raping.' Geez this took a darker turn than I intended lol

[SeiKeo]

Oh so just walking around in her underwear.

[Prix with a Silent X]

You really think that would work on Mikiya?

Also, please note, the 'her' was ambiguous as to whether I meant Touko or Shiki coaxing Mikiya to get over guilt about getting laid.

[just Beamu]

You really think that would work on Mikiya?

Well I doubt it would hurt​ her chances!

[SeiKeo]

You really think that would work on Mikiya?

Also, please note, the 'her' was ambiguous as to whether I meant Touko or Shiki coaxing Mikiya to get over guilt about getting laid.

Well, eventually you'd think it'd work. And while I can see Shiki maybe not havingn strong feelings about it, especially early on, I wouldn't be so sure about her encouraging it.

[Snow]

I wouldn't peg Mikiya as a guy who'd feel guilty about getting laid. He seems to be the type to just kinda accept things quickly and with an open mind. Might be just me, though.

[Historia]

I wouldn't peg Mikiya as a guy who'd feel guilty about getting laid. He seems to be the type to just kinda accept things quickly and with an open mind. Might be just me, though.

It's not just you.

[SeiKeo]

He's so hung up over Shiki he got her flowers for two years straight, I don't believe he wouldn't feel at least a little weird about it after. It's not like he strikes you as a particularlyl liberated sexual personality.

[just Beamu]

He doesn't strike me as having any kind of sexual personality.

[Mattias]

What can I say, I like me some Touko, and you delivered some Touko. Commendable work.

[Prix with a Silent X]

Well, eventually you'd think it'd work. And while I can see Shiki maybe not havingn strong feelings about it, especially early on, I wouldn't be so sure about her encouraging it.

I don't think she would encourage prolonged polyamory or an open relationship otherwise why didn't she just handle the Lio situation that way... right, but I don't think it would bother her if Mikiya wasn't-a-virgin because of Touko. And I sort of feel like if there was any scale that maybe it would be less distasteful because she knows Touko and has observed their relationship after the fact. I can kind of seeing her being like "well, you had no reason to expect I was going to wake up anyway, but you didn't give up on me, so." Or something like that. Like I can see her seeing some type of nuance in it that would sort of relegate it to a shrug and a footnote in their weird little arrangement that wouldn't make her feel particularly jealous or anything?

I wouldn't peg Mikiya as a guy who'd feel guilty about getting laid. He seems to be the type to just kinda accept things quickly and with an open mind. Might be just me, though.

I think less about the getting laid itself and more about what it 'means' in retrospect in any kind of transferring action into emotion or meaning kind of way on a philosophical or psychological level. Like, I don't think he had all that much of a problem consenting and he allowed his concerns to be very quickly assuaged, the way I wrote it. But I think maybe looking back on it, it might start to be something that would bug him, not because it's sex necessarily but because of the fact that he loves Shiki and she seems so initially non-receptive to touch in general. It might make him feel 'weak' or something or that he let her down as a result of that, once she was awake. And, like, in the seventh movie he didn't want Shiki to kill and said he wouldn't forgive her and so on, but it turns out that while he believed "murder is wrong" as a principle, this wasn't why. Instead, it was because he wanted her to be happy and as whole as she could be and he knew that if she killed someone, she would never have that not-having-killed-anyone state back and that she would not have as much of a chance to be happy for it. It's kind of indirect, abstract, in spite of any other surface level considerations that might exist. I would tend to think that any hypothetical guilt about non-Shiki sex would tend to fall along the same lines were it to develop, if that makes sense.

It's not just you.

See above if you would like the meta.

He's so hung up over Shiki he got her flowers for two years straight, I don't believe he wouldn't feel at least a little weird about it after. It's not like he strikes you as a particularlyl liberated sexual personality.

Ye. That.

He doesn't strike me as having any kind of sexual personality.

He's just polite and patient.

What can I say, I like me some Touko, and you delivered some Touko. Commendable work.

Thank you! New commentator whose signature I have always wondered about. It was more fun than I expected to write from her POV.

[Mattias]

Thank you! New commentator whose signature I have always wondered about.

Oh? Which part? The list of constant delays, or the naked blonde in high heels?

[Prix with a Silent X]

Oh? Which part? The list of constant delays, or the naked blonde in high heels?

To be honest, this is the first time I've ever noticed she was naked. Something about pornography versus art, I guess. If that answers your question.

[AkaiNeko]

Sigh. One of these days you're going to write something I actually want to read and I'll get to comment all positive like and it'll be great. Figured I should start commenting anyway for the sake of socialization. As it is I hate Mikiya so I hate the pairing so I didn't enjoy the story. But it was good, I think. Thoughtful handling of Touko - like, it felt like some of her darker impulses and her more positive side meeting in the middle or something. Neat stuff.

EDIT: And Mattias' sig is about a long delayed (surprise! trilogy of) movie(s) that finally started coming out this year. I'm genuinely surprised to see someone this deep in the nerdy, Japan-related part of the internet who doesn't recognize Shinobu Oshino.

[Snow]

Plenty of people don't care about -monogatari (me included) and even if you do recognize the characters despite not caring, chances are you'll recognize only her child form.

[Prix with a Silent X]

Sigh. One of these days you're going to write something I actually want to read and I'll get to comment all positive like and it'll be great. Figured I should start commenting anyway for the sake of socialization. As it is I hate Mikiya so I hate the pairing so I didn't enjoy the story. But it was good, I think. Thoughtful handling of Touko - like, it felt like some of her darker impulses and her more positive side meeting in the middle or something. Neat stuff.

EDIT: And Mattias' sig is about a long delayed (surprise! trilogy of) movie(s) that finally started coming out this year. I'm genuinely surprised to see someone this deep in the nerdy, Japan-related part of the internet who doesn't recognize Shinobu Oshino.

Thanks, I guess? The only comment I can make is that I write what I feel like writing and knew for a fact that my first major time commitment to TM fanfiction was going to be disliked by a fair number of people. I mean I certainly appreciate commenting acknowledging that you'd like it if my work were more to your taste and comments in general, but it's also not a constructive criticism I can really respond to. I read something in passing recently about how fanfiction is "shared with" its audience rather than being "written for" its audience. I think that's pretty true, even though I actually frequently write in response to prompt letters I volunteered to receive. That's controlled, though, so it can't throw too much at me that I just don't relate to at all. I'm sorry you didn't enjoy the story, but I enjoyed its subject matter or I wouldn't have written it. Can agree to disagree, though.

And I'm not really that deep in the nerdy, Japan-related part of the internet by being very involved in deep-nerdy Japan or anime-related media. I liked your standard American-known anime as a kid and a teenager, wasn't really into it at all during college, then watched Madoka when I was snowed in in February 2015 because a friend nudged me into it because it was short. I've seen approximately five anime over the last year, and I don't really keep up with anime news. I try to write well, and I like learning about other cultures, and I try to be mindful to do at least cursory research for what I'm writing if I don't know something. However, it's free labor put into a pastime, so, there's a limit to the time I can or will invest. That said, I spend hours writing each fic I produce. So I'm a very casual anime fan, wound up here because Fate tumblr was too casual and picky for me and I was looking for translations of stuff, and have learned more about Type Moon since I've been here.

Plenty of people don't care about -monogatari (me included) and even if you do recognize the characters despite not caring, chances are you'll recognize only her child form.

No pressure but I hope my meta about the fic didn't put you off. I wanted to know what more you had to say after the hnnng you mentioned. It's okay if you forgot, though.

I don't even know what -monogatari is?

[just Beamu]

The hnnng may not have subsided yet.

[SeiKeo]

Monogatari is a hentai series.

[Snow]

I've had a few days of phoneposting and am a people failing scatterbrain lately. I'll get to it at once.

[Raylen Cypher]

I don't even know what -monogatari is?

Joke response: It makes your prose consistent and easy to read.

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Monogatari is a major successful hentai franchise.

Fixed.