Hammurabi: I like the Divine Law skill, also the NP is very detailed. Of course, Law would be associated with chains. Overall a really good sheet.
Hammurabi: I like the Divine Law skill, also the NP is very detailed. Of course, Law would be associated with chains. Overall a really good sheet.
Dang royd you beat to hummerabi, eh well I got Ajax.
Ajax: Well, not bad, but there some things i'd like to comment, aside from the inconsistent font and the spelling errors:
The 3 skills, Berserk, Bloodlust and "Strength>>Skill" seems unnecessary, I suggest to merge them into a single skill instead, or just boost his Mad Enchantment with more description instead.
The NPs are nice-ish overall, if a bit too common.
Edit : after further examination, the 1st and 2nd NP are good, while i think the 3rd is a generic "powerful thrust" spear
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Blood lust doesn't boost stats, and only activates when face ing Odysseus so I did as a separate skills taht is only activate when face ing against Odysseus.
and I would the NPs more complex and interesting buuuuut berserker. And plus rio ais I can't help but it be common since it technquelly exists already in the nasu verse but as copy used by archer which doesn't get the benefits of thousands of years of over exaggeration.
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Also strength that overcomes skills is a skill that only activates when face ing an opponent who was more skilled then he was in life, the only skills for him that are constantly activated are berserk and battle continuation.
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BTW, any thought on my Soekarno sheet?
It's pretty good, it's nice and fleshed out, thou I think riseing is a little high for a fairly new servant, so you w out, rank it down to C. Those everything else is really good.
Ajax: Pretty good sheet as a whole, and I do like the idea behind his first NP (though the third is a little generic). The rank in Battle Continuation is far too high for his feats (just B would be enough), and saying he fought Hector despite "lethal" injuries seems blatantly wrong. Seeing as he did not in fact die from his wounds after that battle, they by definition weren't lethal injuries. His last Skill also strikes me as unnecessary unless there's any actual mention in the myth of Hector being more skilled then him, and Bloodlust seems far too overly specific to be its own Skill. I'd just give him a conditional bonus to Mad Enhancement when fighting Odysseus, sort of like Penthesilea.
Also, given you mentioned a sash that gives him "incredible" resistance to magic I'm a little surprised you didn't include that anywhere in the sheet itself. Sure he's not in the Knight Classes but even Lancelot had low-ranking Magic Resistance as a Berserker due to that amulet he had, so I could easily see him having it for the same reason. Only if you scrap an existing Skill first though, since he has more then enough already.
He gave it away to hector, and the idea is that even if delt lethal wound it won't kill him. And also his hatred for Odysseus is essentailly what killed him, so I'd say it's ok, plus I just want anted to try out a fleshed out blood lust skill and saw his hatred of Odysseus, also hector is way more skilled then he is but he filled that gap with strength, but yes both Achilles and hector are way more skilled then he is, Ajax is just more that monster that no one could take down permanently in the Trojan war. He wasn't intelligent nor was his skills anything like hectors or Achilles.
Yeah. Originally I had the idea her NP would let her create conceptual "laws" similar to the effect I later chose for her Skill, but basically every other Hammurabi sheet I've seen had done the same thing so I wanted to go with something a little more unique. I was thinking of stuff conceptually associated with the law, and once I decided upon chains the rest pretty much wrote itself.Originally Posted by ThirtyFour34
Just curious, what do you think of my Soekarno sheet? since he kinda has something with 'chain of law'
Okay. I'm not all that familiar with the myths so I'll take your word for it here (since you are a professor and all), though I don't know if it's fair to characterize Ajax as an unintelligent brute (I mean, obviously he's like that as a Berserker but still...). And I understand what you mean about Battle Continuation but the description now says he fought Hector despite "lethal" wounds, which is clearly not true.
You don't have to change the actual effect, just the lore flavor-text.
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I noticed that before posting my sheet up, actually. Though we went with opposite ideas where Hammurabi's NP becomes more powerful the more faith the opponent puts in the law whereas yours is more powerful against Chaotic enemies. Both could be argued for, and I considered doing it your way too when brainstorming the NP, but I decided the former take would be more conceptually interesting.
The Soekarno sheet is cool. Skills are well fleshed-out, and I admire your dedication in basically giving him five separate NPs in one.
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Also whisk he did sustain lethal wounds, it really depends on the myth, in some variations of the myth eh was given lethal wounds and by lethal I mean grevuise I just got tired of atou correct turning it into pair use, I'll fix that latter, althou in his shielder form he does gain that sash back. Plus third NP is obviously not ganna be wonderful since you know the gods gave it to him on short notice, it's not soposed to be flashy or complex just something that could kill hector, also yoru forgetting all the restrictions, I mean he litterly CAN only use the spear to attack and block he can't sue him self or his legs to kick oppenetens or other such things.
Also any good victor Von Frankenstein's stein servant sheets, I'm just completing my halloween sheets right now he's my last one(halloween is kinda my favorite holiday.) also anyone have any links to a picture of a girl in a American flash bikini suit for my summer servant I kinda can't use imgar for some reason.
Nobody's going to go picking out a faceclaim for you. Besides, there's more then enough American flag bikini pics to look through, so it's not like a fitting one should be hard to find. If you really can't use Imgur then, once you find an FC you're satisfied with, you can link to it here and I (or someone else if they so desire) can put it through Imgur for you.
I guess it's dramatic but goodness me that's a mouthful
I feel like Battle chants should be no longer than the "Rend" chant from Noragami
If you think that's bad, you should remember Obsidian's Akhenaten sheet...
@Royd
You just had to genderbend....
Genderbend is good civilization
I wanna say I did it because the FC was the best I could find, but I pretty much know what FC I would've used for a male Hammurabi (this dude from Medaka Box) anyways so... *shrugs*
Hah. I had the same thought.
But yeah, it's a bit long and the last bit is somewhat anticlimactic. And I mean, I know it's literally a quote, but still. That's what you get for using legal documents as a basis for your attacks, I guess.
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