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    Quote Originally Posted by King of Padoru View Post
    PS: Is there anything worth mentioning about my Bodhidharma? I'd personally like to give him another NP, since the one he has isn't exactly worthy of being his only one.
    Should've given him Kalaripayattu. He is a master of it and it is the basis for Shaolin Kungfu. That way you can also give more flavor to his interaction with Buddha. Or just mention it in the martial art description.

    As for a 2nd NP, I suggest the Yijin Jing. It's a real martial art book said to be his creation after staring at the wall for 9 years straight (and I have this book lol). The book teaches you how to breath, train your body and mind to strengthen your muscles. In many wuxia novels, those who master the Yijin Jing is capable of utilizing chi freely, allowing them to use it to attack and defense. Maybe you can make it so that when he activate it, he is able to utilize natural chi (magic energy) freely to boost his attack and defense to extreme for a limited time. Something like that.


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    Flavius Belisarius (Alter)
    Nicknames: Belisarius, Last of the Romans, the Beggar General
    Origin: Greece and Anatolia

    Alignment: Lawful Evil
    Class: Avenger

    Strength: B+
    Endurance: B
    Agility: D-
    Mana: C
    Luck: A(+)

    Likes: Conquest, Glory
    Dislikes: Defeat, Procopius, Nobles, Justinian
    Talents: Conquest, Generalship, and Begging
    Natural Enemy: Justinian, Procopius

    Class Skills-

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    Avenger: B
    Belisarius, the greatest general of his time and conqueror of Carthage, Rome, and Ravenna. Falsely charged with corruption by nobles who despised Justinian’s reforms and convicted in court by Procopius, his own secretary. His sight was taken from him, and he was thrown into the streets stripped of titles and dignity. His resentment, his feelings of betrayal, they could not be understood by any but himself.

    Oblivion Correction: B
    Belisarius will never forget the faces of the nobles who accused him. Even when he is blind he can still
    see them. Their smiling faces, their twisted minds, their fancy clothes, and their soulless eyes. Among them he sees Justinian. His friend, his brother, his greatest betrayer.

    Self-Replenishment (Mana): C
    The world itself seems to give Belisarius alms just as the peasants and soldiers of Rome. So long as Belisarius lives, so long as he continues to resent those who brought him to the level of a beast, his magical energy shall continue to surge.



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    Military Tactics: A+
    Belisarius is, no doubt, the greatest general of the 6th century. His defense of Eastern Rome in Zara, his military campaigns in North Africa, Sicily, Italy, and the Far East, and his knack for doing the impossible won him victory after victory. Even while blind the great general still has a mind fit for conquest and warfare.

    Last of the Romans: C
    Belisarius was called the “Last of the Romans” numerous times by historians after his death and by barbarians during his life. He was one of the scant final few true Romans who continued to uphold the sacred traditions of Elder Rome. As the Last of the Romans Belisarius is granted a mantle of power that gives him a defensive buff when he feels he is defending the very traditions and legacy of Rome itself.

    Imperial Privilege: C
    540 AD, outside Ravenna. Justinian wanted peace, he wanted Belisarius to deal with other military matters in the empire. But Belisarius was so close, he could taste victory in the air and yet at the cusp of his greatest conquest he was held back by his friend, his emperor. Belisarius refused to sign the peace treaty. His army sat outside the gates of Ravenna and did not budge. The nobles of the Ostrogoths, seeing the Roman they honored, the only True Roman in their eyes, refuse the peace treaty was powerful. They began to think, to scheme, and soon Belisarius was offered the crown of Western Rome by the Ostrogoths. Belisarius, always given so little time, so little resources, so little manpower, betrayed by his own officers and now, in his eyes, by his own emperor, took the crown with shaking hands. But he betrayed the Ostrogoths in the end and gave his conquests back to Justinian. Still, Belisarius had mantled imperium even if for a short while. Imperium is something that is not easily taken, nor is it ever forgotten. Relevant skills: Charisma, Independent Action, Swordsmanship, Item Construction

    Restitutor Occidentis: B
    Although Belisarius was the main reason for the great success of the reconquest of the western provinces of the Roman Empire, the luck Belisarius was shown to have throughout his campaigns was the main reason for his victories. Although Hispania, Gallia, Britannia, and many other provinces still alluded Justinian and Belisarius upon their deaths, the legends of Belisarius’ conquests still stood strong. This skill temporarily increases Belisarius’ luck during battle.

    Blindness: -
    Belisarius, after conquering an empire’s worth of territory and helping his best friend achieve his dream of restored Roman prestige and honor, after giving his life in service of the crown and in the service of Rome, was accused of corruption by the nobles of Constantinople and blinded by Justinian. Left as a blind beggar he sat at the Pincian Gate of Rome begging for alms until he was pardoned, then roamed the streets of the city for the rest of his life until he died alone in the muddy streets of Rome while his old friend continued living in his opulent palace in Constantinople.



    Noble Phantasms-

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    Date Obolum Belisario: A [Anti-Unit]
    Giving Alms to the Beggar of Rome
    “I stand here at the gates of Rome,
    The city I won, the city I conquered.
    I stand here a beggar, a senile and blind old man.
    So, won’t you please,
    Date Obolum Belisario?”

    562 AD. Belisarius is brought before a court of nobles and charged with corruption. These were false charges, Belisarius was a man of virtue and charity. He had never taken bribes nor did he extort others. And yet the nobles brought out phony evidence and phony witnesses who all accused Belisarius of the same thing. Shocked, appalled, Belisarius shouted for his innocence, argued with all he had. But the nobles were not there for a true trial, they were there to tear down the star general of Justinian, they were there to take their revenge for their curbed influence. Belisarius scanned the room looking for someone, anyone who could help him. But the only thing that stared back at him were soulless eyes of men who sold their lives to gold and power. Belisarius resorted to pleading, begging, anything. He was innocent, he had done no wrong, but all fell on deaf ears. A judge was brought in, and it was Procopius, his own secretary! He felt hope return to his chest but in an instant Procopius condemned Belisarius and he was convicted. Belsarius’ heart sunk. He was old, sixty two, but never before had he felt such hopelessness. Suddenly Procopius stepped aside and another man took his place at the judge’s seat. It was Justinian!

    Belisarius nearly cried with joy, his old friend would see reason, his old friend would pardon him, surely. He was an ancient monarch, five years older than Augustus was at his death, and with a voice still powerful and still filled with imperium Belisarius’ oldest friend and practical brother sentenced Belisarius to blindness and poverty.
    Belisarius could not feel anything but unbridled rage as Justinian got up from his seat and left the court. He had been betrayed, in his final hours and at his greatest need his friend abandoned him to the wolves. He was dragged away to the confines of the pitch black rooms of the palace dungeons. Here his eyes were torn from his skull with a hot poker. Oh how Belisarius screamed, how the old general wailed in agony as his very sight was taken from him. He was then loaded onto a boat and shipped to Rome where, under orders from Justinian, he was forced to stand at the Pincian Gate and ask all who passed by “date obolum Belisario”. “Give an obolus to Belisarius”. Within three years the great general was dead. He died in the streets of Rome blind, in rags, and without anyone to mourn him.

    Date Obolum Belisario is the manifestation of all the anger, the indignation, and the feelings of betrayal that Belisarius felt in the final three years of his life. He was a hero, the man who saved Rome countless times and expanded her borders to the level that he was compared to Alexander and Caesar. And yet in an instant he was accused and convicted of crimes he was innocent of and damned by his oldest friend to a life in darkness and in squalor. This injustice is one that the world itself felt. Not since the assassination of Julius Caesar in the Theater of Pompey had such treachery been seen. Therefore, the existence of this Noble Phantasm, and the existence of Belisarius Alter, has come to pass.

    When activated Belisarius will transform from his normal battle attire into a smaller, weaker version dressed in rags and hunched over with age. In his left hand a wooden staff used to find his way is gripped. Belisarius will raise his right hand, palm up, and gently, in a parched and elderly voice, say. “I stand here at the gates of Rome, the city I won, the city I conquered. I stand here a beggar, a senile and blind old man. So, won’t you please, give an obolus to Belisarius?”A black void then engulfs the nearby area leaving nothing but Belisarius and his target. From behind Belisarius black hands emerge slowly. They curl around the elderly man like wings until bursting forward and seizing the target by all their extremities. These black arms are limbs of hatred. They are the manifestations of the absolute fury Belisarius felt every time he stretched his hands outward to receive alms from the very men and women he once held imperium over. And now, with his target gripped by these hands of wrath, Belisarius will take him alms.
    Their arms, their legs, their head, their stomach, their chest, their heart, their eyes, their brain, their toes, their fingers, their very soul all are taken as alms for the poor, alms for Belisarius the Blind. The target is ripped asunder by the hands of the Beggar General and consumed by the black void of Belisarius’ anger. Nothing will remain of the target save for a puddle of blood and scraps of loose flesh.



    Weaknesses-

    Spoiler:
    Belisarius is blind.


    Personality-

    Spoiler:
    Belisarius is a bitter and blind old man who holds little compassion for anyone other than his master and the downtrodden. His hatred of the rich is large and his hatred for nobility even larger. When against servants of noble blood Belisarius will be far more fearsome and reckless in his pursuit of victory. His blindness doesn’t affect him as much as it did in life due to his heightened senses as a servant but still keep him from his full fighting potential as he relies mostly on sound and touch to locate his enemies.

    Desire: Belisarius desires justice for himself in whatever form it may come in.


    Relationships-

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    Edmond Dantès: “Such a vengeful presence he has. Could he possibly...understand?”

    Justinian: “...I can feel you, snake. You with the aura of Judas and Brutus alike. Tyrant! Despot! Apostate! Imbecilic Fool! My old friend I can not see your form but I swear upon the very stones of the world that I will leave nothing of it but your name!

    Any Servant with the “King” trait or Similar: “I spit on thee, monarch. No matter your honor, your grace, you always end the same. Betrayers, tyrants, dragons in human flesh. You disgust me.”



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    Kinda struggled with this one. First he was an alt-history alter saber then he was just a normal alt-history saber then he was an alter avenger. In the end I think it worked out but who knows.
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    That's a really cool Belisarius sheet. I wrote up Belisarius as someone loyal to Justinian almost to the point of fanaticism, so this contrast is certainly interesting to see. And holy crap, that NP is freaking brutal with the ghostly hands ripping the target apart. I'm imagining it as kind of like the ghost alleyway from JoJo's Bizarre Adventure part 4.

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    Realm of Countless Bloody Nights
    TATARI – 1470? AD
    “The Night of Wallachia"


    “I am Servant Avenger, Dracula. Offer up your blood to me.”


    Class: Avenger
    True Name: Vlad III
    Gender: Male
    Alignment: Lawful Evil
    Origin: Romania (15th century), Wallachian Lostbelt

    Strength: B++
    Endurance: EX
    Agility: A
    Mana: A+
    Luck: E
    Noble Phantasm: A+

    Class Skills
    Avenger A

    A Class Skill of the Avenger class, representing the state of an Avenger as one that gathers people's hatreds and grudges onto oneself. It is easier for one to accumulate hatred and resentment. The rate of mana generation becomes higher when receiving damage.

    Memory Correction EX

    A Class Skill of the Avenger class. People are creatures that forget many things, but an Avenger never forgets. The critical effect of Avengers who attack from beyond one's memory is strengthened.

    Self-Replenishment (Mana) B
    A Class Skill of the Avenger class. One's magical energy endlessly surges until their revenge is accomplished. Recovers a minuscule amount of magical energy every turn.

    Personal Skills
    Demon of Mutation A

    A Skill that denotes how a hero or god was transformed into a demon in life. A Skill that considerably strengthens one's abilities as a Servant by emphasizing a fact from the past.

    Vlad III has achieved a Rank of Strength and Endurance that is absolutely impossible for a normal human body.

    Bloodsucking A+

    The act of absorbing another's blood to replenish their own health and physical and/or magical strength. It is one of the powers of a vampire. As the Rank raises, the power of absorption increase.

    Additionally, this may apply the detrimental status effect of Seduction (Confusion). It has a medium chance of being applied and affects both men and women. Those who were sucked are dead while still alive, and are fundamentally subordinate to the one who sucked them as they are turned into one's manservants through the sipping of their blood. Also, because this deed is not an attack but an act of affection, one cannot defend against it even with "a body that pushes aside all sorts of attacks".

    The One Who Wears Death A

    A skill that scatters disasters towards the user's surroundings as an existence of demonic nature which brings about death.

    Noble Phantasms
    Galip Kazikli Bey
    Bloodstained King Demon of Impalement

    Rank: B
    Type: Anti-Army
    Range: 1~99
    Maximum Number of Targets: 666
    A superior version of the Noble Phantasm possessed by Vlad III’s Pan-Human History counterpart.

    Galip Kazikli Bey is tied to Vlad himself. Not only is he able to create stakes from his own body, he can also create stakes from his own shadow. While the ability to create stakes from one’s own shadow may seem impractical at first, Vlad has the ability to manipulate his shadow at will and thus expand the area where stake can appear.

    The furthest that he can extend his shadow is 1.5 kilometers with the maximum number of stakes he can create being 30,000. Additionally, each stake can be used as Vlad’s “fangs”, allowing him to drain blood from a skewered victim.

    Noaptea Valahei
    The Night of Wallachia

    Rank: EX
    Type: Anti-Unit (Self)
    The consumed power of the thirteenth Dead Apostle Ancestor, the Night of Wallachia, providing the basis of this version of Vlad III. Vlad now has control over the Night of Wallachia’s Reality Marble, TATARI, which allows for the materialization of fears and rumors of a specific region to manifest as physical entities.

    Unlike with the normal variant of TATARI, it has this Lostbelt’s version of Vlad III at its core as opposed to “nothing”. Due to Vlad acting as TATARI’s new core and dominant personality, it can only manifest rumors and fears of Vlad III as opposed to rumors and fears in general. Whenever there is a significant concentration of these within a given area, Vlad will be able to manifest there and wreak havoc. Vlad’s physical form has all of the abilities and limitations of a Dead Apostle. He is capable of drinking blood, exposure to sunlight hastens his body’s degeneration, holy sacraments and other holy weapons are greatly effective against him, and he can raise his victims’ bodies as the Dead, among other abilities.

    However, Vlad becoming the core of TATARI has come with a major flaw; every time Vlad manifests in the physical world, he effectively causes TATARI’s core to become exposed. But, Vlad’s physical manifestation as a powerful Dead Apostle and drawing strength from rumors and fears means that defeating him is an extremely difficult task.

    Lore:
    The divergence point for the Lostbelt that Vlad originates from is the first time that the Dead Apostle Ancestor known as the Night of Wallachia appeared. In this timeline, Vlad went to intercept the Night of Wallachia and after a long struggle with the thirteenth Dead Apostle Ancestor, he emerged having consumed his power and becoming the dominant personality of the curse known as TATARI.

    Vlad’s next move was to use his newfound powers in Christendom’s war against the Ottoman Empire. He massacred the Ottoman Empire’s army, impaling them on the numerous stakes that emerge from his body and extendable shadow. Eventually, the Ottoman Empire crumbled under the weight of Vlad’s overwhelming power and Christendom’s war against them was finally won.

    However, many Christians were appalled by the incomparable brutality of Vlad’s bloody rampage. Even the Pope himself found his actions repulsive and issued a papal condemnation, expressing complete and utter disdain for Vlad’s violent crusade against the Ottoman Empire. This infuriated Vlad, who vowed to avenge himself and his downtrodden family name by slaughtering the Christians just as he slaughtered the Ottomans.

    Thus began a vicious cycle caused by TATARI no longer manifesting mere rumors and fear but repeatedly manifesting Vlad himself instead. Every time Vlad physically manifests, he begins to butcher the people in the surrounding area, impaling them and leaving their bodies impaled and drained of blood as a testament to his power and malevolence. Every new rampage is worse than the ones preceding it and making Vlad even more infamous, sparking rumors of him being on the move and causing yet another outbreak of TATARI.

    In this Lostbelt, the people fear the darkness and night, knowing that Vlad is out seeking vengeance against both Christianity and mankind, and the Church has risen to become a major authority figure, being one of the few things that can counter Vlad and keep him at bay. Even the smallest shadow is able to fill one with an overwhelming sense of fear. Whenever Vlad appears and perpetrates a new massacre, the Church will mobilize and act to stymie the flow of rumors concerning Vlad.

    However, Vlad has learned to get around this by brainwashing people into becoming cultists serving him by spreading rumors so that he will be able to manifest again and again. Additionally, the Church has also taken to mobilizing secret police to spy on the people and using Vlad as an excuse to justify the persecution of those that they deem “heretics”.

    This has caused the progress of mankind to grind to a halt in this Lostbelt. Not only does the Church ruthlessly persecute those perceived to be heretics, but Vlad’s increasingly bloody rampages render mankind unable to explore and develop new things.


    Personality:

    Likes: Small acts of vengeance
    Dislikes: Loneliness, the darkness of night
    Natural Enemy: Vlad III
    Vlad III is driven by a burning desire to seek vengeance upon Christianity because he views them as ungrateful for condemning his merciless slaughter of the Ottomans. During the time spent between manifestations, Vlad starts to brood over his contempt for the Church and the crushing loneliness he feels within the void that is the TATARI Reality Marble.

    He no longer displays the modest and considerate personality displayed by his Pan-Human History counterpart. In fact, his personality has become considerably closer to the version of him summoned during the Moon Cell Holy Grail War. Unlike his Pan-Human History counterpart, he embraces the name of Dracula. To him, the man who was Vlad III is long dead and he has taken Dracula as his new name. This earns him the ire of his Pan-Human History counterpart, who sees him as a monster disgracing the name of Vlad III. Meanwhile, this version of Vlad III does not really care for his Pan-Human History counterpart, viewing him merely as someone who died long ago.

    All appears to be is a heartless monster obsessed with destroying Christianity and mankind. But despite his fixation on avenging himself on the Church, he longs for something that could stave off the crushing loneliness of eternity, even if acknowledges that no one ever would do that.


    Creator’s Notes:
    This was a collaboration with Shiki-pon, so I would like to give a big thanks to him. I am quite proud of the way that this has turned out. I will post the rest of the information for the TATARI Lostbelt to the CaS/L forum shortly.

    And speaking of Lostbelts, the Mexican Lostbelt is coming along nicely. I’m going to keep the details under wraps until the Mexican Lostbelt King’s sheet has been posted. Once that is done, I will post the rest of the information for that Lostbelt to the CaS/L forum.


    Edit: Finally fixed all of the formatting issues! This is what I get for accidentally using Quick Reply...
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    That's kinda the imagery I was going for to be honest. Thank's for the praise and yeah I have a Rider Belisarius sheet where he's the normal historical form who's still best friends with Justinian but then I had the idea of Belisarius actually taking the crown of Western Rome and started making this but it evolved into Avenger after I read about the blind beggar myth.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Lily Emilio View Post
    Should've given him Kalaripayattu. He is a master of it and it is the basis for Shaolin Kungfu. That way you can also give more flavor to his interaction with Buddha. Or just mention it in the martial art description.

    As for a 2nd NP, I suggest the Yijin Jing. It's a real martial art book said to be his creation after staring at the wall for 9 years straight (and I have this book lol). The book teaches you how to breath, train your body and mind to strengthen your muscles. In many wuxia novels, those who master the Yijin Jing is capable of utilizing chi freely, allowing them to use it to attack and defense. Maybe you can make it so that when he activate it, he is able to utilize natural chi (magic energy) freely to boost his attack and defense to extreme for a limited time. Something like that.
    Thank you very much for sharing your wisdom, Lily. I really appreciate it
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    ...So, does anyone have any feedback on my Lostbelt Vlad sheet? (gets subjected to spontaneous combustion for requesting feedback)


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    The universe is infinite, the human potential is infinite as well.
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    True Name: Albert Einstein
    Nickname: King of Scientists
    Class: Archer
    Alt.Classes: Caster
    Alignment: Lawful Good

    H/W: 175mm/90kg
    Armament: A miniature white hole in the left hand and a miniature black hole in the right hand
    Wish: a longer life perhaps?
    Origin: Germany
    Natural Enemy: Howard Philips Lovecraft

    STR: D
    END: D
    AGI: B
    MNA: A
    LCK: B
    NP: EX

    Class Skills
    Magic Resistance: C
    Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.

    Independent action: B++
    It is possible for a Servant to stay in the world for two days without a Master. However, this is the ideal value achieved by maximally conserving mana and avoiding battle and Noble Phantasm usage.


    Personal Skill
    Natural Born Genius: EX
    Even since young age, Archer has strived to teach himself basic maths, though he claims that his knowledge of math is based on eagerness to study it and not any talent, there is no denying archer's inherent knowledge of mathematics even at a young age is something worthy of praise. Allows for the use of most skills, except those inherent to the body, or those that are specific to individual heroes.

    Knowledge of mathematical processes: A
    A skill that represents archer's advanced knowledge of mathematics, although any man can learn math at an advanced level, it takes a special kind of man to formulate theories about the cosmos using pure math. Archer has the ability to formulate and solve complex mathematical processes and formulas withing his very mind, even in the middle of a fight, he is constantly calculating the most efficient and most effective path to reach and strike an enemy. It does not matter is his enemy is the greatest martial artist or the most magnificent of kings, if their bodies are bound withing our universe, he can calculate a path to strike them.

    Distortion of time and space: B+
    Based upon Archer's theories of relativity, this skill allows for independent command of space time through the creation of singularities [Black Holes] by compressing The surrounding Mana of the enviroment and the Od of the body into a infinitely small point in space The black holes created allowed for limited control of time due to time dilation. Although the Einstein family was once a great family of mages, practicing the form of magecraft that allowed for physical compression of mana and conversion of physical objects to energy or mana, which he used as the inspiration for E=mc2. Creation and control of Black Holes requires a great deal of mathematical precision, something he easily accomplishes with his second skill. in caster class, this skill becomes A.

    Understanding of the infinite cosmos: EX
    A type of skill that allows the user to comprehend the scale and the size of the cosmos. understanding of outer space allows for a mind to comprehend or at least understand the functions of higher dimensions. as such. Archer is completely immune to the form of insanity induced by trying to comprehend an Outer god or an Elder god, or for that matter any type of insanity brought about by a monster that is considered to be above the understanding of humanity, however he also managed to spread this knowledge to all of humanity and gave it a new understanding of the cosmos. and as such this skill replaces the Pioneer of the star skill.


    Noble Phantasms
    A path through the infinite black
    He who understood and comprehended the Sea of Stars
    EX [Anti-phantasm/Anti-mystery]

    Ever since its conception humanity has looked at the stars, attempting to comprehend the nature of the night sky and infinite heavens above. some called the individual stars "gods" or "spirits" or even the heaven itself. others such as a certain writer were afraid of its wast expanse and considered the incomprehensible monsters that may lie within its corners. however it was Albert Einstein that provided humanity to understand the very function of gravity, and thus the universe itself. through his two theories, Special Relativity and General Relativity. that describe the function of the entire universe.

    it is through this skill that he is considered the "Greatest anti-mystery servant" in existence. Due to this NP's nature being constantly active, it allows him to shut down and reverse any Noble Phantasm that bases its nature in mystery by simply glancing in its direction and consciously and actively try to understand it, the only noble phantasm that is spared from this is Enuma Elish due to the fact that not even Archer can understand the genesis to its fullest extent. Otherwise, Even noble phantasms based on eldritch gods, such as Qliphoth Rhizome can be shut down. the very existence of this noble phantasm makes archer the greatest enemy of A certain writer [see: Natural Enemy]

    This Noble Phantasm is so powerful it can reverse and shut down even whole events caused by mystery. for instance if a noble phantasm were to destroy the world, he would simply have to use this noble phantasm to understand its function and it would reverse all of the destruction caused by that noble phantasm, this might be an extreme case, but the same concept applies to all noble phantasm.

    Normally such a powerful noble phantasm would require a large amount of mana to sustain despite opposing its very existence. his ability to convert objects to either Energy or Mana makes the load of this noble phantasm more bearable. it still requires a strong master with a large mana pool however.

    The man made Eldritch god that dwells in the heart of darkness
    Rah, the infinite event horizon of a black hole.
    EX [anti-world]


    A object, perhaps a being whose existence is not too far away from being an eldritch god. it does not refer to any kind of sentient being, but to the concept of "Singularity" itself as the only thing based in science that humanity cannot fully understand, this very uncertainty of a function of a black hole's very heart forms the basis for this noble phantasm.

    by converting everything around him to mana, including the very air itself, and the compressing it to a size of a Planck length in an instant by consuming his body's and his masters entire mana pool as well as the leftover od in the air, he is capable of creating a black hole so powerful it starts shredding apart the very fabric of reality. he then uses his second skill to create a relativistic counter-effect that destabilizes the very core of the black hole spinning it to incomprehensible speeds, this chaotic system results in the black hole ejecting the consumed material at relativistic speeds of more than 50 percent the speed of light, such speed create a powerful relativistic jet that shreds apart everything in its path, the relativistic jet is so powerful it has the capability of piercing the very planet's core when focused down, at a glance it is very similar to Ars Almadel Salomonis, but where as the former bases itself in the magecraft of king solomon and the power of the 72 demon gods, the other bases itself purely in science, with only the name of the noble phantasm being borrowed from Israeli myth. due to its destructive potential, archer considers this a desperate situation only noble phantasm that can and must only be used when the fate of the entire planet is at stake.

    as explained in the beginning, this noble phantasm requires an extremely large amount of mana to activate, again, converting objects to mana allows him to make the burden easier on both himself an the master. even so, there is rarely any master that will be able to support this noble phantasm.


    etc
    CE: Music of life
    Music is life, it is a string of mathematically accurate distortions of air used to produce a beautiful sound, music is really no different from math, i was proficient in playing the violin and my skills with instruments often inspired my scientific work. what about you master, does music drive you?

    Personality: An eccentric genius who gives out an aura of kindness and humility often not seen in servants who are geniuses themselves, Albert Einstein is somebody who equally values both their life and their work. although in his case they are one in the same, he gives out the feeling of a cool grandpa, even considering his masters young age, he already sees a great genius like himself in him, there is no feeling of ego or superiority as there often is with other geniuses with chaldea, instead there is only felling of ease and calm. taking into consideration his class, he is not a good fighter and is more built for the class of a caster, although the sheer firepower of him being in archer class is generally much more effective than any number of powers he would gain in the caster class. thus, he prefers to stay true to his class's name most of the time. His interactions with other servants are mostly on the positive side.

    Relationships:
    Nikola Tesla/Leonardo da Vinci: OH HO, do i smell another intellectual genius who i can talk and formulate theories with. haha but no that is just a joke, although i'm glad to see other of my ilk in this chaldea.

    Howard Phillips Lovecraft: A racist shut in who is chronically afraid of criticism, huh, truth be told i don't even hate him, i feel bad for him, to live life rejecting science thinking it will lead us into destruction. proof that the cosmos can never conquer humanity, it should and will be the other way around.

    Abigail Williams: I cannot hate a kid that is for sure, but seriously, what is yog sothoth, even? an un-understandable entity that possess people and drives them mad? Foolish children's tale. this entity is just another concept waiting to be understood by man. so kid remember this, that evil tentacle monster in your head is not at all evil, or a monster.



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    I wanked him thats for sure, although this sheet was waiting to be finished as part of my If you run out of ideas break glass sheets, i might have wanked him but at least i tried to make the wanks sensible and as nasu-like as possible. criticism is welcome.

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    Vladdie: Don't want to be harsh or anything, but the sheet sorta lacks the... oomph, I guess, that I thought it'd have.
    Then again, I probably would've spent a month or so trying to get it just right, and it'd have missed October (which in retrospect seems an obvious time to release every monster- or scare-related sheet possible I should get back to work on that Unhcegila sheet).
    You managed also to explain the background behind him and his NPs succinctly, though.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Shiki-pon View Post
    Vladdie: Don't want to be harsh or anything, but the sheet sorta lacks the... oomph, I guess, that I thought it'd have.
    Then again, I probably would've spent a month or so trying to get it just right, and it'd have missed October (which in retrospect seems an obvious time to release every monster- or scare-related sheet possible I should get back to work on that Unhcegila sheet).
    You managed also to explain the background behind him and his NPs succinctly, though.
    …I wasn’t even aiming to release in October specifically. That was a lucky coincidence.

    Well, what do you think specifically could be improved on. And, I’m glad that you think I did a good job with the background for Vlad and his NPs.


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    Servant Lancer:

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    True Name: Tydeus "The Fallen Hero"

    Alignment: Lawful Good/Chaotic Evil

    Alternate Classes
    : Saber, Berserker, Shielder

    Strength- B+
    Agility- B
    Endurance- A
    Mana- B
    Luck- E-
    NP- B+

    Personality
    Honorable, just and pious. At first blush Lancer is the very picture of an ideal warrior, respecting his foes and honoring the gods in his every action.

    Lancer believes firmly that in battle one should never disrespect their opponent. Instead, one should give thanks to their opponent for giving one a chance to achieve greater glory and honor by defeating them. The one who wins is the strongest, so there's no reason to hold resentment even in the face of death.

    However, there is "another side" to Lancer. Beneath his stoical exterior a ghoulish voice whispers constantly at the back of Lancer's mind, urging him to hate his foes and indulge in barbaric acts on the battlefield. Lancer normally does his best to repress this voice, seeing it as unbecoming of a great hero. But if he's under extreme emotional pressure Lancer may give in, erupting into a bloodthirsty frenzy. Upon coming to his senses Lancer will be disgusted by his behavior. The only thing that stops him from killing himself to atone for the disgrace is the thought that doing so would betray his Master who relies on him to fight by their side.

    Lancer harbors somewhat of an inferiority complex towards fellow great heroes. He, who gave in to hatred and threw away his pride as a warrior has no right to hold his head high around great heroes who clung to their honor until the bitter end. At least, that's what Lancer himself thinks. Conversely, he empathizes greatly with those who struggle against the evil inside them, like Gilles de Rais in the Saber-Class.

    Lancer himself is unaware of the voice's true nature. He believes it's merely a repressed aspect of his own psyche, not knowing that it's actually the voice of a goddess breathing in his ears. Regardless, Lancer's wish on the Holy Grail would be to finally free himself of the cursed voice tormenting him. Only then will his soul know peace.

    Attitude to his Master
    As an honorable warrior, Lancer does his best to serve by his Master steadfastedly. However, out of fear for what would happen if he ever gave in to his rage, Lancer keeps a certain aloofness in his interactions toward his Master. He's afraid of getting too close lest he accidentally hurt them if he lost control. This detachment can be easily seen as apathy or cold-heartedness by others, making Lancer seem much more suspicious than he really is.

    Likes: honor, Athena
    Dislikes: the voice in his head
    Talents: fighting large groups of enemies by himself, boxing
    Natural Enemy: Melanippus, Tisiphone, his other self


    Class Skills:

    Magic Resistance- B
    Confers protection against magical effects. At this rank, spells with a chant below three verses are cancelled. Even if targeted by the likes of High Thaumaturgy or Greater Rituals, it is difficult for the Servant to be affected. Even though Lancer has no anecdotes of combating sorcery himself, he lived during the Age of Gods when supernatural forces regularly intervened in the affairs of men. As such he naturally sports this level of resistance.


    Personal Skills:

    Battle Continuation- B
    The ability to keep fighting when heavily injured. At this rank Lancer can persevere in combat even after sustaining lethal wounds, fighting on until his last drop of strength is exhausted. In legend Lancer was mortally wounded by the Theban champion Melanippus, but still survived long enough to hurl a spear at his killer before perishing himself. Rather than the blessing of a resolute body it would be more accurate to call this Skill a result of Lancer's sheer stubbornness, as he refuses to let himself die until he can take his opponent down with him.

    Affection Of Erinyes- A
    Denotes that one has received the favor of one of the Erinyes, three goddesses tasked with carrying out vengeance. Though called goddesses, as their nature is to both incite and punish human evil they're really closer to demons. In Lancer's case, affection is from Tisiphone, the erinys who presides over punishing murderers. Tisiphone was the one who stoked the conflict that culminated in the Theban War, and chose Lancer as her vessel to bring forth madness and atrocity. Tisiphone's voice mutters constantly in Lancer's ears, feeding his hatred and encouraging him to perform more violent and brutal acts in battle.

    Her favor bestows Lancer a rank-up to all parameters except Luck, but in return erodes his sanity and brings him ever closer to descending into bestial fury. In proportion to how much he succumbs to Tisiphone's influence, Lancer's Alignment wavers eratically between Lawful Good and Chaotic Evil. Practically this grants him an equal rank in the Contradictive Mind Skill.

    Additionally Tisiphone herself will intervene directly either if Lancer is about to die or if he's going to win "too easily". Either way would be bad for Tisiphone, who desires nothing more than to prolong her "fun" for as long as possible and watch her "beloved" hero sink deeper into madness and depravity. For instance if Lancer is about to finish off his worst rival by throwing a spear at them, Tisiphone may intervene by knocking the spear out of the way, sparing them to further stoke Lancer's rage. As Tisiphone is a goddess of vengeance, this Skill also imparts Lancer the effects of Avenger at rank C.

    Pygmachia- B-
    A Skill measuring one's proficiency in the art of ancient Greek boxing. At this rank, one's level of prowess in the art can be extolled as on the level of Olympic champions. Lancer won the boxing event at the first Nemean Games. Thus, he naturally boasts a high affinity for fistfighting. Even deprived of his spear Lancer can hold his own against fellow Servants with only his fists. His punches are comparable to spear thrusts, able to split armor and clash against bladed weaponry. However, the more he gives in to his rage the more this Skill's rank will waver, as Lancer abandons any semblance of technique to simply try and tear his foes apart like a wild beast.


    Noble Phantasm
    Xecheilos Odium
    Spear Throw Of Overflowing Spite


    Rank
    : B+

    Type: Anti-Army

    According to legend in Lancer's final battle with the Theban champion Melanippus he hurled his spear so violently as to rupture his own body, hastening his death. Lancer's Noble Phantasm is a recreation of this anecdote. An "ultimate spear throw" that surpassed his limits as a human, fueled by spite at the one who killed him.

    To invoke this Noble Phantasm, Lancer first pulls back his arm as far as possible, drawing his whole body as tight as a bowstring for a single mighty spear throw. The blade of his spear blazes to life in sickly green flames, manifesting Tisiphone's influence and Lancer's own overwhelming hatred towards the enemy. Lancer then recites this Noble Phantasm's true name and hurls the spear at the opponent with all his strength.

    In mid-air the fire engulfing Lancer's spear coalesces into the shape of a monstrous serpent. With a hideous shriek the serpent bares its fangs and bites down at the same time as it crashes into the oponent, erupting in an explosion of venomous flame. As a maximal release of Tisiphone's authority over bloodshed, this Noble Phantasm also imposes a Mental Pollution-like effect on those caught in the blast. Surviving foes will fall into a frenzy and start attacking each other indescriminately. This effect can be resisted based on one's own disposition and Skills affording protection against mental interference at rank B or higher.

    However, in return for ignoring his body's limits Lancer himself suffers severe self-damage when using this Noble Phantasm. He throws his spear with such force that his muscles tear apart and bones shatter, willfully destroying his body in return for bringing the opponent down with him. Due to Tisiphone's favor and his Battle Continuation Lancer can just barely survive after invoking this Noble Phantasm.

    But he'll still require immediate treatment to not succumb to his injuries. Truly hatred is a fickle boon indeed.



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    So here's another sheet I've been working on. I wrote up this guy before as Berserker but later on I came across the legends of him being driven mad by Tisiphone and thought that'd be fertile ground for an alternate version of him. As usual, any commentary and criticisms would be greatly appreciated. Thanks for reading y'all!
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    I'll trade you a Tydeus review if you review my Lostbelt Vlad (or not, I'll just review it anyway).

    Tydeus: Being Lancer is suffering indeed. Sheesh! I feel bad for the guy. Having the favor of one of the Erinyes must make the poor guy miserable.

    So, mechanically, he's got the classical "Suicide attack NP+Battle Continuation" kit. That works out pretty well. And the fact Affection of the Erinyes can work either for him or against him is very interesting. Part of me wonders how such a Skill would work in F/GO gameplay.

    ...It's probably just have, like, a 50/50 chance to either buff him or debuff him, or something similar to that.

    As for Xecheilos Odium, the way it's described makes it seem pretty interesting. It's not every day that you see venomous fire, after all. And the effect that using it has on his body is a nice little dosage of Body Horror.

    Overall, it's pretty good.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Lambda-Nu View Post
    I'll trade you a Tydeus review if you review my Lostbelt Vlad (or not, I'll just review it anyway).

    Tydeus: Being Lancer is suffering indeed. Sheesh! I feel bad for the guy. Having the favor of one of the Erinyes must make the poor guy miserable.

    So, mechanically, he's got the classical "Suicide attack NP+Battle Continuation" kit. That works out pretty well. And the fact Affection of the Erinyes can work either for him or against him is very interesting. Part of me wonders how such a Skill would work in F/GO gameplay.

    ...It's probably just have, like, a 50/50 chance to either buff him or debuff him, or something similar to that.

    As for Xecheilos Odium, the way it's described makes it seem pretty interesting. It's not every day that you see venomous fire, after all. And the effect that using it has on his body is a nice little dosage of Body Horror.

    Overall, it's pretty good.
    Thanks for the feedback man.

    For your Lostbelt Vlad, parts are interesting but overall it feels kind of... flat? I dunno'. His personality just feels bland and like the most obvious possible idea for a "Vlad whose embraced being a vampire and now acts super edgy and evil". His fusion with TATARI is a cool idea and his desire for a companion to stave off his loneliness adds some much-needed flavor personality-wise, but overall I'm not impressed. I don't think the fault really lies in your execution, it's just that I find the idea itself fairly trite and uninspired. We've already seen enough variations of Vlad accepting his vampirism in canon that another one just doesn't excite me. Sorry, but that's how I feel.

    Also, does his third Skill do anything? It just seems like flavor text without any mechanical effect. (Which to be fair is increasingly the norm for GO-original Skills, but I've already made my thoughts on that clear in the past).

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    Quote Originally Posted by RoydGolden View Post
    Thanks for the feedback man.

    For your Lostbelt Vlad, it's an interesting idea but it feels kind of... flat? I dunno'. His personality just feels bland and like the most obvious possible idea for a "Vlad whose embraced being a vampire and now acts super edgy and evil". His fusion with TATARI is a cool idea and his desire for a companion to stave off his loneliness adds some much-needed flavor personality-wise, but overall I'm not impressed. I don't think it's really the fault of your execution, I just think the idea itself is fairly trite and uninspired. We've already seen enough variations of Vlad accepting his vampirism in canon that another one just doesn't excite me. Sorry, but that's how I feel.

    Also, does his third Skill do anything? It just seems like flavor text without any mechanical effect. (Which to be fair is increasingly the norm for GO-original Skills, but I've already made my thoughts on that clear in the past).
    It's fine.

    ...I really should have asked Shiki-pon about the effects of that third Skill.

    Admittedly, Vlad's kinda shaping up to be the Ivan of my fanon Lostbelt Kings; the first King, who has an interesting concept but ultimately doesn't shape up compared to the others. Hopefully the Mexican Lostbelt King will be end up coming out better than this one...


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    Berserker of the dark burrow

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    Class: Berserker
    Alignment: Neutral/evil
    Region: Iceland
    Height: 221cm
    Weight: 203kg
    Likes: Darkness, silence, is sword
    Dislikes: Light, heroes, being bothered
    Talent: killing
    Armaments: sword
    Natural Enemy: Hrómundr Gripsson

    stats

    Str: A
    End: A
    Agi: B
    Mna: C
    Lck: E
    NP: A

    Skills


    class skills

    Madness enhancement(EX): Rank-Up parameters, but robs most Servants of all reason, sanity, and cognitive thinking. Berserker is an empty carcass&nbsp; without any desire beyond sitting admiring his sword and killing anyone who interfere with him doing so.

    personal skills

    Battle continuation(B): Because of Berserker being a
    living corpse
    Draugr
    , Berserker can keep fighting even while suffering deadly injuries, so long as he does not suffer a decisively fatal wound.

    Isolation(A): The desire to be alone. This skill grants a buff in strenght if Berserker is fighting by themself, but Inversely causes a rank down if he is forced to fight with allies.

    Shapeshift(C): As a
    living corpse
    Draugr
    , Berserker has the ability to grow in size or change into a variety of animals. However, any form he takes will have Gray skin and smell of death.



    Noble phantasm


    Cursed Blade that Slays Light
    Mistilteinn

    rank: Anti-unit, A
    A cursed sword forged by Loki to murder the god of light Baldur. It is a terrible weapon created only to kill, Berserker himself having slay hundreds with it's blade.
    It generates a thick darkness that surrounds the weapon at all times, totally nullifying any Light it touches. By calling it's name, this darkness can be released in a wave of death that kills anything on its path, even charing the ground.
    Because of his legend, Berserker himself actually has a weakness to this blade, and if someone somehow manages to take the weapon from him, they would be able to kill him easily. However, they would also have to deal with the curse the blade carries.

    The Undead King in the Dark
    Draugur Alfurgangar

    rank: Anti-unit(self), B
    A continually active Noble Phantasm that represents Berserker status as a
    living corpse
    Draugr
    , a curse that he acquired after long years in his burrow with only his blade as a company.
    The curse causes Berserker exhale death in his very breath. His steps turn the soil infertil, his touch spoil any food and poison any flower and even his smell kills anormal who dare to come close to him.
    Further more, he also resists other things meant to cause death, which means that weapons do less damage and other curses outright don't affect him. However, things who are meant to prevent death, like healing magic, now will damage him.



    Background


    Berserker identity is that of Thrainn, a charatter appearing in the Icelandic Hrómundar saga Gripssonar. He was a king that conquered Valland(Gaul) and after years of cruelty, closed himself in a burrow with his sword Mistilteinn.

    After several years, the hero Hrómundar, under service of King Olaf, enters the burrow and finds Berserker, now turned into a terrible
    living corpse
    Draugr
    . After a long battle, Hrómundar manages to wrestle Mistilteinn out of Berserker's hands and, after having him tell of the four hundred and twenty persons Berserker has killed with the blade, cuts the undead's head off and burns his body.



    personality


    Berserker wants nothing more than to sit in the dark, alone, admiring his sword and tending to it. Any attempts of comunicating with him will be meet with either total ignorance or lethal force. A master must be smart when dealing with him, as failing to recognize his desires will result in Berserker attempting to slay his master as he would any enemy.
    Beyond that, Berserker is a simple shell. He doesn't feel the want for food or drink, he never sleeps and his interest in the opposite gender has long since faded. He is empty, and the only thing he cares about now is his sword

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    Quote Originally Posted by RoydGolden View Post
    Thanks for the feedback man.

    For your Lostbelt Vlad, parts are interesting but overall it feels kind of... flat? I dunno'. His personality just feels bland and like the most obvious possible idea for a "Vlad whose embraced being a vampire and now acts super edgy and evil". His fusion with TATARI is a cool idea and his desire for a companion to stave off his loneliness adds some much-needed flavor personality-wise, but overall I'm not impressed. I don't think the fault really lies in your execution, it's just that I find the idea itself fairly trite and uninspired. We've already seen enough variations of Vlad accepting his vampirism in canon that another one just doesn't excite me. Sorry, but that's how I feel.

    Also, does his third Skill do anything? It just seems like flavor text without any mechanical effect. (Which to be fair is increasingly the norm for GO-original Skills, but I've already made my thoughts on that clear in the past).
    I suppose the idea I had for the sheet would've been less stereotypical anger and more bouts of hot anger whenever he was awakened. Kinda like him viewing the whole TATARI thing as taking the bullet for the rest of the world (and then using that to squash the Ottomans), then "dying" to it as TATARI scatters. He's all content with that role, but suddenly finds himself alive again when rumors of him gather enough steam. He'd probably thrash whoever was Christianity's enemy at this time and manage to chill around for a time. Then he'd find out what legends actually say about him these days...
    It pays to note that Lostbelt!Vlad does not share the regular one's complex with vampirism, as Dracula was probably never written in what's essentially the Vampiric Lostbelt. If it was, it might've been a 'true story' of his rampages (which probably eventually started targeting Christians due to their "lies" about Vlad and his lineage, as well as how devout they were.
    The idea is still very bland as a starting point, I admit, at least when we're talking regular Vlad.

    Also, The One Who Wears Death is the Skill that allows Hessian Lobo to manifest those tentacle things he sometimes uses in attacks. The way I'm reading it, that's essentially sheer malice given physical form. I recall imagining that Skill as the explanation for Dracula's shadow being more or less autonomous.

    Quote Originally Posted by Lambda-Nu View Post
    …I wasn’t even aiming to release in October specifically. That was a lucky coincidence.

    Well, what do you think specifically could be improved on. And, I’m glad that you think I did a good job with the background for Vlad and his NPs.
    Quote Originally Posted by Lambda-Nu View Post
    It's fine.

    ...I really should have asked Shiki-pon about the effects of that third Skill.

    Admittedly, Vlad's kinda shaping up to be the Ivan of my fanon Lostbelt Kings; the first King, who has an interesting concept but ultimately doesn't shape up compared to the others. Hopefully the Mexican Lostbelt King will be end up coming out better than this one...
    Improvement-wise it would probably the most important to shape and define his story and personality to escape the stereotype pit. I think one of the most important parts of this would be the pacing of his backstory, given that Vlad isn't the kind of person who'd just flip his lid immediately upon being condemned. Since he has no clue what he actually is anymore, he wouldn't see anything wrong with his methods (much like he probably thought in life) and would thus fall into confusion and outrage when he eventually remanifests and finds out what the people are saying about him.
    ... Or something like that.

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    Shiki-pon doesn't sleep? Well, I guess i can't point fingers myself.
    Next servant coming, any opinions on Berserker


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    Caster of the swamp

    "I'm Caster.*sigh* I don't really want too, but i guess i can help you... maybe...



    Class: Caster
    Alignment: True neutral
    Region: Romania
    Height: 145cm
    Weight: 36kg
    Likes: nature, trees, isolation
    Dislikes: cities, technology, people
    Talent: magic, gardening
    Armaments: Broom
    Natural Enemy: those who destroy nature

    stats

    Str: D
    End: C
    Agi: C
    Mna: EX
    Lck: C
    NP: B

    Skills


    class skills

    Item Construction(A): The Skill to manufacture magical items, from implements of war to items for daily use. Castet is even capable of making healing potions that grants limited immortality.

    Territory Creation(A): The skill to build a special terrain that is advantageous to oneself as a magus. Caster's Territory is her forest, who is equal to a temple.

    personal skills<

    Shapeshift(C): A skill that represents the ability to change appearances. There are several anecdotes on Caster's legend of her changing shapes to frighten invaders.

    Familiars (Zana)(A): Caster has the ability to employ fairy-like beings called "Zana" as her familiars. These are small creatures that look like black beans with an orange eye. They have low strenght but are highly proficient in healing and increasing the natural abilities of others. They can also sacrifice themselves to create a strong barrier able to withstand an B rank attack.

    Witchcraft(A): Caster is highly proficient at Descântece, which is a old form of Romanian Magecraft. She can do several think like bind her foes, curse them with blindness, make weapons break and much more. She is good enough to even affect most modern magic with her spells.



    Noble phantasm


    The house of the witch
    Descantatoarea

    rank: anti-army, C+

    Caster's noble phantasm is the materialization of her home, the swamp she lives in.
    It activates automatically when she is summoned, starting from the spot the first appeared and sprending from there. It slowly changes the land into a magical space filled with Mana, the air itself becoming too thick for regular people to breath.
    The swamp will drain the strength of those in it and full it back to Caster, creating a cycle where she gets stronger while the enemy weakens. The more strenght it saps, the more it will grow, eventually turning into a great forrest so big that those inside lose their sense of direction and get lost.
    The noble phantasm also refuses the concept of "human advances". Modern devices such as cell phones stop working immediately and Servant skills that are born from it are less effective depending on their rank. If the Noble phantasm is used on an already existing forrest, it will use that as a basis and be even stronger as a result



    Background

    Caster is called Muma Pădurii, which can be translated as Mother Of The Forest. She is a mythological character in Romanian tales who is described as an woman, sometimes ugly, sometimes beautiful, living alone in the forest who will to attack children, kidnapping and enslaving them. However, she's not always described as purely evil. She will cry and sob because people cut the trees, which are her "children".

    Caster can be good or evil: punishing bad people, those who don't respect nature and cut the trees or showing the right way out of the forest to children who are lost and helping those who are in need, it varies wildly from region to region.



    personality

    Caster is a loner. She neither knows how or wants to interact with people. She rather just stay on her swamp testing her spells and taking care of her plants. If forced to deal with other people, she will act very awkward and snarky. She is particularly bad with children, in the presence of whom she will generally panic and/or do very stupid things.
    However, she is not devoid of fellings, as she really loves nature and cares for her plants like a mother would. A master who accepts this and helps her may even create a bond with her, although they would need to be forever careful to not betray her trust by harming nature.



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    Alternate Classes: Lancer, Rider, Assassin, Berserker
    True Name: Wu Song
    Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
    Origin: Water Margin
    Armament: Paired sabres

    Parameters:
    STR: A
    END: C
    AGI: B+
    MANA: D
    LUCK: D
    NP: C

    Skills
    Class Skills

    Magic Resistance - Rank C: Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether.
    Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.

    Ruffian - Rank A: A composite Skill of Riding and Independent Action. As an add on, it has the effect becoming stronger during banquets and such.
    Though originally an officer of the law, Saber eventually took the law into his own hands in order to exact justice. From there, he drifted until he became a member of the chivalrous thieves of Mt Liang.

    Personal Skills

    Harm Star - Rank A: A Skill marking the user as one of those who are the reincarnations of the 108 stars said to bring misfortune. A reborn demonic star, they are burdened with calamity and karma since their birth.
    Saber possesses an extraordinary capacity for causing destruction in his wake. Even when saving and protecting others, he manages to devastate his surroundings. Though not seeing himself as a hero, he is saving the world, one act of random destruction at a time.

    Chinese Martial Arts - Rank EX: A Chinese rationality. A value that measures one's mastery of the martial arts that made becoming one with the universe as its objective. Its learning difficulty is of the highest level and, unlike other Skills, it is at A Rank that one is at a level where one is said to have finally "learned it".
    The style utilized by Saber is called Drunken Eight Immortals Boxing, also known as Zuì Quán Ba Xian. It emulates the movements of the Eight Immortals, building up to a complete style with eight variations.

    Beast-Slayer - Rank C: The ability to unleash a special attack towards magic beasts and wild animals.
    Saber attained great fame for slaying a man-eating tiger in his youth. Having broken his staff, he managed to kill the beast with his bare hands, even though he was drunk at the time.

    Noble Phantasms

    Swordplay Under the Moon
    Yue Xia Chuan Dao

    Anti-Unit, Rank B
    A sword technique serving as Saber’s Noble Phantasm. Though it was originally a technique adapted from shadowboxing and thus not something to be applied directly to combat, the guidance of Saber’s master and his own observations on Yue Xia Chuan Dao’s nature have allowed its usage in battle. It is a secret technique, with only Saber and his masters being capable of executing it during his era.
    With a fierce cry, Saber leaps into the sky, holding his blades close. At the apex of his leap, seeming as high as the moon, Saber unfolds his blades like wings, seeming to release a ray of bright light toward his enemy. When viewing Saber’s maneuver, those immersed in the martial arts are further affected by a fascination-like mental interference effect, just as Saber himself once was, lowering their ability to respond further. As his enemy is distracted, Saber lands and executes a strike.
    Though Yue Xia Chuan Dao’s usage isn’t limited to the night, its effect is magnified in moonlight.

    Wind Cannot Blow Through, Rain Cannot Leak Through
    Feng Buneng Chui Yu Buneng Lou

    Barrier, Rank C-
    A sword dance employed purely for the sake of defense. When used by a true master, it is said that even blowing wind and falling rain are scattered before hitting the user.
    Saber’s use of Feng Buneng Chui, Yu Buneng Lou is capable of blocking all attacks of rank C or below. As his defense relies on technique rather than the expenditure of magical energy, the cost of maintaining the defense after activation is negligible.
    Unfortunately, Saber’s defenses do not block attacks composed of magical energy at all, as he often found himself unpleasantly surprised by the attacks of sorcerers.

    Description
    Likes: Getting drunk, shadowboxing
    Dislikes: Magic that causes weapons to move on their own, the attentions of women, bribery
    Talents: Destructive acts of heroism, internal martial arts
    Natural Enemy: Queen Medb

    Saber’s true identity is Wu Song, the Pilgrim.

    Song is an enthusiastic warrior and cares little for the rules of society, even those imposed by the Holy Grail War. Though he will protect people in peril and fights against evildoers, his conduct is very much that of a bandit, taking the property of others when he wishes to. Though he is an evildoer, he possesses a righteous heart. Even as a martial artist, his “honourable conduct” is somewhat questionable, as he sees few problems with attacking from ambush, striking at tender areas and other methods that are commonly seen as dishonourable. However, he will respect the sanctity of a formal duel as a comparison between the skills of martial artists. So, rather than striving for ‘the honour of a martial artist’, he instead upholds ‘the honour of martial arts’.
    Believing himself to be no hero, Song is vehemently unapologetic about his past as a criminal. Though he does not feel that all of his and his companions’ actions were right, he feels that they were at the very least correct under the circumstances. He does find himself nonplussed when something spectacularly destructive occurs as a consequence of his actions, however, and tries to avoid responsibility for such unintentional damage.
    Song can get along with just about any kind of Heroic Spirit, especially those that dwell in the world of martial arts. He can grow particularly enthralled by true masters, both those that fight using weapons and those that do not. However, he is leery, almost frightened, of female attention, to the point that he seeks to avoid the company of women altogether.
    Song willingly serves his Master, having had no misgivings with authority in general during his life. However, he holds a fierce hatred of those that use money and corruption to their advantage, and refuses to work with such people. Sometimes, he can even be driven into a murderous rage by such forms of exploitation. Naturally, his problems with women also apply to his Master.
    Like his fellows, Song has a deep hatred of the Song dynasty. However, rather than wishing for their deaths, he wishes that only the corrupt elements of the government would be removed.

    Lore
    As one of the 108 Stars of Destiny, Song is a fictitious existence, though partially grounded in the group of bandits assembled by Song Jiang during China’s Song Dynasty.
    In his youth, Song attained fame with his slaying of a man-eating tiger. He had wandered, drunk, from a tavern and then took a nap in the wilderness. After being attacked by the tiger, he managed a desperate defense and killed the beast. For this, he was offered employment as a law enforcer, which he accepted.
    During his service as a constable, Song became involved in the investigation of his brother’s death. Sensing foul play, he patiently gathered evidence and witnesses for his case, suspecting his brother’s wife, Pan Jinlian, to be responsible for the killing. However, just as he was about to present his case, Pan Jinlian’s new lover, a government official, bribed the magistrate, causing the case to be thrown out. Incensed, Song then held a wake for his brother, during which he murdered both Pan Jinlian and her lover. He then turned himself in, having completed his vengeance.
    The locals sympathised with Wu Song and plead for leniency, so the magistrate spared him from execution and sentenced him to flogging and face-tattooing, exiling him to a prison camp in Mengzhou. There, he served the chief warden’s son, evicting a hooligan who had taken over a restaurant, and impresses the officials so that he was granted a position in the prison inspector’s manor. However, his new task was a ruse by the inspector, who was in truth the hooligan’s patron. The inspector frames Song for theft and then imprisons him in a cellar. He then arranges for Song to be exiled, instructing his escorts to kill him along the way.
    As Song’s escorts attack him, he bursts free of his shackles, slaying the attackers. He then heads back to the inspector’s manor and kills his entire household, the inspector and his conspirators included. Song then uses the blood to write a confession on the walls and flees the scene.
    At this point, Song eventually drifts to Mt Liang, where he joins Song Jiang’s band of outlaws, becoming one of the leaders of the infantry after the 108 Stars of Destiny come together in what is called the Grand Assembly. Their adventures eventually result in the Song dynasty acknowledging them and granting the bandits amnesty. Song vehemently opposes this, but still accompanies his fellows on a campaign against the invading Liao army and rebel forces on Song territory.
    During the campaign against the rebel leader Fang La, Song was assigned to attack the enemy in Muzhou, where he encountered and fought with Fang La's sorcerer, Bao Daoyi. Bao Daoyi used his magic powers to control a sword and sliced off Wu Song's left arm. However, Song was saved by Lu Zhishen before Bao Daoyi could kill him. He was one of the few bandit heroes who survived the campaign against Fang La. While the survivors returned to the capital to report their victory to the imperial court, Song declined to go with them because he did not wish to serve the Song government, which he perceived to be corrupt.
    He remained in Liuhe Pagoda in Hangzhou and led the life of a Buddhist recluse until his death at the age of 80.



    And here I thought I was done making Chinese Servants for a while... But if I don't make these, I'm just going to make Greeks for the foreseeable future. Then again, I'll probably find something from somewhere else at random.
    And no, I'm not making the 108 Stars of Destiny as my next "Servant group". Not the entire group, anyway.

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    I don't know much about Water margin, but i always loved the drunken master archetype.


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