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    Juliet: She has the opposite problem as Romeo here. Four NPs for an Assassin with no exceptional heroic feats is just crazy. I'd advise scrapping the mansion one and just folding its effects under Territory Creation.
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    Quote Originally Posted by RoydGolden View Post
    Juliet: She has the opposite problem as Romeo here. Four NPs for an Assassin with no exceptional heroic feats is just crazy. I'd advise scrapping the mansion one and just folding its effects under Territory Creation.
    Eh, that sorta bothered me as well.

    I will do just that.

    I also think Juliet should symbolise the tragedy of her love affair with Romeo. Does the sheet work in that regard?

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    Quote Originally Posted by zikari8 View Post
    @Proteus
    As you'd expect from an unhindered god, pretty powerful stuff here. Halios Geron is an interesting use of his legend. For a Grand Caster to not have magecraft is an interesting choice.

    @Juliet
    There's a bit to comment on here, but I think the one thing that stands out to me the most is Star-crossed Affections, which irks me in some ways. Specifically, the fact that she can choose her Romeo, which to me just goes against the point.
    Well, you should see the Romeo Montagu Berserker sheet on the last page. He mistake mistake someone for Juliet. This actually works for him, given how fast he dropped Rosaline for Juliet in the play.
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    So I just compiled all the sheets posted since ThirtyFour's last update. Hopefully the OP will get updated soon.

    America
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    Gunner- Joaquin Murrieta by Shield_Back
    Avenger- Robert E. Lee by Aridwolverine
    Archer- Wild Bill Hickok by Aridwolverine
    Caster- Walt Disney by venomking
    Rider- Captain Ahab by Saron
    Saber- Abraham Lincoln by Slick146

    Britain:
    Saber- Elizabeth I by god of world-0
    Assassin- Agatha Christie by TresserT
    Berserker- Romeo Montague by Slick146
    Assassin- Juliet Capulet by Slick146

    China:
    Berserker- Chiyou by Daneel Rush

    Christianity And Judaism:
    Avenger- Lunar Cain by zikari8
    Saver- Job by Funderfullness
    Demon Caster- Mephisto by Aridwolverine

    Classical Mythology & History
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    Lancer- Pheidippides by zikari8
    Assassin- Helen of Troy by Omida
    Assassin- Asklepios by ThirtyFour34
    Archer- Commodus by RoydGolden
    Avenger- Lycaon by Skull
    Caster- Prometheus by RoydGolden
    Caster- Herodotus by massive_jojo_reference
    Lancer- Memnon by RoydGolden
    Grand Caster- Proteus by ThirtyFour34

    Fairy Stories:

    Rider- Cinderella by TresserT (part of four sheet combo)

    Finland:
    Assassin- Simo Hayha by Saron

    France:
    Assassin- Marguerite de Bressieux by Daneel Rush
    Assassin- Jeanne de la Motte by god of world-0

    Ireland
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    Berserker- Dorian Gray by Saron

    Japan:
    Assassin- Yamata-No-Orochi by Bird of Hermes

    Germany
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    Ruler- Friedrich Nietzche by TresserT (part of four sheet combo)

    India:
    Archer- Meghanda by TresserT (part of four sheet combo)

    Scandinavia:
    Rider- Tommelise by the god of world-0
    Shielder- Skuld by Omida
    Rider- Odin by god of world-0

    The Slavs:
    Saber- Arpad by Blarfingar

    Uncategorized Others:
    The Fool (Class N/A) by Aridwolverine
    Grand Assassin- Grim Reaper by Clyton
    Saver- Venus of Hohle Fels by TresserT (part of four sheet combo)

    Nasuverse:
    Caster- Illyasviel Emiya by Levnekov

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    Nice work.

    Also Mephisto is from German folklore, not Christianity lol

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    Faceclaim:

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    Name; Christina Alexandra
    Class; Caster
    Armament: None
    Alignment: Neutral Good
    Source: Sweden, Historical fact
    Attribute: Human
    Traits: Human, Queen

    Stats:
    Strength: E
    Agility: C
    Endurance: E
    Mana: A+
    Luck: B+
    Noble Phantasm: A+

    Likes: Art, Researching, Ebba Sparre
    Dislikes: Doing nothing, poorly written erotica, being called a "Jezebel"
    Talents: Collecting literature, Acting
    Natural Enemy: Her mother, Belle's family
    Wish: To reincarnate with Belle so they can live happily

    Skills
    Class Skills:
    Territory Creation: B
    Skill is high enough create a workshop. She studied heavily in alchemy and was prodigy in magecraft, so creating a workshop is of no problem.

    Item Construction: B
    Can create a variety of enchanted items and magical tomes, and can enchant currently existing items with her magic.

    Personal Skills:
    Golden Rule (Knowledge): A+
    A measurement of one's ability to acquire valuable knowledge and magical tomes. She was famous for collecting a variety of books and magic tomes, including her Noble Phantasms.

    Eye for Art: A
    An infatuation with works of art, Caster had hundreds of sculptures and paintings, along with entertaining countless poets and artists. If she sees a Noble Phantasm or person who has connections to art, there is a high chance she can discover their Noble Phantasm.

    Alluring Nightingale: A-
    A mesmerizing-kind of Skill possessed by those with a beautiful natural voice; it is also a declaration of the exercise of power by the royalty. It works as a charm magecraft-like effect towards those of the user's opposite sex, but evasion is possible by means of a Magic Resistance Skill. Even without Magic Resistance, one can abate it to some extent so long he or she maintains a will to resist.

    Retains the elegant grace of a Queen, but her masculinity come as a shock for the skills targets and give it a (-) modifier.


    Noble Phantasm
    Codex Gigas
    The Book of the Devil

    A+
    Anti-Army
    Range: 50
    Targets: 1~30

    A book Caster collected in her youth, it is a renowned religious text, written by a monk in a single night after making a deal with the Devil. While it was written with the aid of a demon, the true story is a little different.

    The monk who wrote the book was a magus, and in order to prove his devotion to the religious sect he was a part of, he was ordered to write out the entire Bible in a single night. Knowing how it was impossible, he made a pact with a nature spirit, for exchange of his soul to assisting the spirit forever, the book he would write would hold some of the most powerful spells known to the spirit. With his soul sold, the book bears the appearance of an average Bible with a large Devil drawn in it.

    However, hidden in the pages of the Bible with magecraft, are detailed incantations on Formalcraft, Caster heavily researched it's contents to expand her own magical potential. Using this Noble Phantasm allows for the summoning and binding of Natural Demons and the manipulation of Gaia's energy.

    Codex Argenteus
    The Book of Silver

    Anti-Army
    B
    Range: 50
    Max Targets: 1~30

    Another magical text hidden in Scripture by an alchemist for the Ostrogothic king Theodore the Great, this book dealt with the study of alchemy, specifically the manipulation of precious metals such as gold and silver. This books acts as a “megaphone” of sorts for Caster’s alchemy ability, expanding her range and power.


    Lore
    A Queen of Sweden, renowned for her love of literature and never marrying. She was born with a large amount of hair and with such a hoarse cry the nurses' swore she had to be a boy, only to be embarrassed when they noticed her true gender. Her father, in layman's terms, laughed his ass off.

    In life, she was famous for her very masculine upbringing and being one of the most educated woman of the 17th century, receiving a teaching normally reserved for boys, learning about philosophy, mathematics, and alchemy. She took particular interest in the latter, and became a promising magus very quickly. She quickly became known as “Minerva of the North” and the “Semiramis of the North” due to her love of the arts and her magical potential rivaling that of the Assyrian queen.

    She managed to acquire two religious texts, the Codex Gigas and Codex Argenteus, which she later discovered to be entire magical novels hidden as the Bible. She, after getting over her irritation of the blatant disgrace for His word, quickly took to extensively studying them, becoming a powerful magus as result.

    She had many prominent men in her life but, to her mother’s disappointment, she only saw them all as friends, having a girlfriend who she had a sexual relationship for many years and continued to write to her after she left Sweden, saying on how she would always love her.

    During her twenties, she had collapsed from overworking, and her physician didn’t, in a stroke of luck, believe in blood-letting as a viable medicine. During this time of prescribed bed rest, her doctor secretly brought her the work of Pietro Antonio, the first written pornography. This gave her a passion for it, which still persists as a Servant.

    She was abdicated in her late twenties, after her growing unpopularity due to her caring nothing for politics and devoting herself to sport and pleasure. She doesn’t care that she lost her crown, viewing it as the best option for both Sweden and herself. “I was never cut out for all that political stuff…still miss that library though.”


    Personality
    Caster is both a kind and elegant queen, a gruff tomboy without a care for society’s opinion, and small tiny pieces of a “raging lesbian pervert”. She is possibly the “manliest” a woman could get, to the point of preferring woman over men and wearing men's clothing with untrimmed, unruly hair.

    She has a passion for erotica novels and philosophy, so expect being dragged around to buy Harlequin novels and similar books. Be forewarned, she hates if it’s poorly written and may lash out at the book for wasting her time.

    She also display a lot of male interests and personality traits, such as modern day sports and alcohol, preferring men's clothing and has an androgynous face and looks like a masculine woman or a feminine man depending on what she's wearing.

    If you happen to be a woman, and pretty, be prepared for flirting and possible groping, along with cheesy pick up lines such as: “You’re just so delicious looking Master, I could just eat you up!” or “Thou sets my heart and my loins ablaze……I didn’t steal it from a romance novel! I resent that accusation Master!” If foiled in her endeavor, she will pout so disgustingly adorably it could probably kill a lesser man.

    If she is successful in getting into a relationship with her Master and she wins the war, the three of them will have happy fun times and ride off into the sunset.

    She loves her father and loves her kingdom, so offending either will earn you her ire. Beware her fury, as despite believing in pacifism and love thy neighbor, she won’t hesitate to unleash her rage upon you for insulting the country and the father she loved.


    Tactics
    Her Noble Phantasms allow her to be extremely powerful on the battlefield, creating an army of natural spirits as her army and use her natural talent for alchemy and transmutation to fight her opponents. Her weakness is someone offending Sweden and/or her father, or if her Master has become her lover, harm her girlfriend, she'll throw caution and any defense to the wind in favor of offense.


    Came in wanting to write a cutie Queen Servant, came out with Merlin's and the Riyo Gudako's rebellious daughter.
    Last edited by Saron; October 5th, 2017 at 04:27 PM. Reason: Fixing FC
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    Quote Originally Posted by Aridwolverine View Post
    Nice work.

    Also Mephisto is from German folklore, not Christianity lol
    Mephisto is still a Christian demon even if he's from Germanic folklore, so I think it's fair enough. Plus I was too lazy to make a specific "Germany" category.

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    @SadisticOrange
    It's an interesting sheet, but it's lacking details. The Naivety of a Fairy skill seems interesting and you created an interesting concept for his existence as a Counter Guardian, but the skill doesn't have any clear effects other than making him act like he has no common sense. Does it increase mental resistance or act like Bravery?

    His Item Construction be a "~", as his Noble Phantasm is essentially his Item Construction skill.

    I'm not saying his Magic Resistance should be lower, but as evident by EMIYA, the connection to Alaya doesn't give a Servant greater Resistance to magic.

    Other than my nitpicks, it's really good and I applaud your creativity!
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    Quote Originally Posted by SadisticOrange View Post
    Jack Frost
    Hello. This is a pretty solid first attempt, but a few things of note:
    Magic Resistance isn't a Caster class skill. If you want it under the Class skill heading, there should be a reason why.
    His Noble Phantasm seems to do the exact same thing as Mana Burst (Frost), which is understandable because Jack Frost hasn't really ever done "one single famous thing". Maybe he can turn into Old Man Winter, since that's what he's based on?
    Naivety of a Fairy is basically Evaporation of Sanity with a different name, and I'm not sure how he qualifies as a Counter-Hero but I'm interested to learn more.
    And welcome to the forum!

    Wait no come back you didn't have to delete it
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    Class: Caster.
    Name: Jack Frost.
    True Name: ???
    Alignment: Chaotic Neutral.

    Parameters
    Strength: D
    Endurance: D
    Agility: B
    Mana: A+
    Luck: B
    NP: A

    Class Skills

    Territory Creation: (B)
    Allows for the creation of a Village resembling those of medieval times. Instantaneous transportation becomes possible within it.

    Item Construction: (~)
    Caster does not have any talent in the construction of any magical items.
    He can however make a physical replica of almost anything using Ice.


    Personal Skills

    Naivety Of A Fairy: (D)
    Grants the Servant an allure of Naivety. At this rank, he is seen as someone lacking common sense.
    Grants Mental Resistance (D) and Bravery (D).
    Even though Caster is far from Naive, the distortion of his 'Legend’ grants him this skill.

    Counter Hero: (B)
    At Rank B, it reduces all of the opponent’s parameters by two ranks. It’s weaker against anti-heroes, reducing their parameters by one rank.

    Prana Burst (Frost): (A)
    Allows the user to dissipate his Mana in the form of bursts of Frost.

    Noble Phantasm

    Frost av vinterånden
    Frost Of The Winter Spirit

    Type: Anti-Unit/ Anti-Army
    Rank: E-A++

    Grants Caster the ability to manipulate Snow, Ice, Frost and all others that come under the concept of [Frost].
    Can be used in various ways from making Ice Cubes to blasting an object to Oblivion with Frost.

    LORE

    Not much is known about Caster.

    Caster is a former Counter guardian who had sacrificed his soul to prevent from destroying humanity through overheating, thus allowing the relatively warm Ice Age we are in to continue on.

    Though nowadays his efforts are weakening due to Science interfering with his Magecraft.


    Character

    Caster is in a world of his own. Often cynical, he has a mischievous side that he rarely shows.

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    Yeah, thanks for that but.

    Tried to edit the original post, but for some reason it deleted it. So...*shrugs*
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    Christine: FC doesn't work, but that actually seems to be a problem with the original image rather then your uploading of it, seeing as even the one you linked on Danbooru isn't showing up properly. Other then that, the idea of a "lesbian princess wizard" is awesome and hilarious, so congrats. She sounds like she'd have a lot of 'fun' reactions around other female Servants, that's for sure...

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    Huh. Didn't see this one.

    So Magical Resistance doesn't fit? But I thought all classes have Magical Resistance.
    Oh well, what do you suggest. Should I delete it or should I give a reason for it.
    Oh and I did not delete my sheet. Tried to edit my post and it deleted itself or something.

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    Quote Originally Posted by SadisticOrange View Post
    Huh. Didn't see this one.

    So Magical Resistance doesn't fit? But I thought all classes have Magical Resistance.
    Oh well, what do you suggest. Should I delete it or should I give a reason for it.
    Oh and I did not delete my sheet. Tried to edit my post and it deleted itself or something.
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    I'd say come up with a valid and realistic reason he would have it, or remove it.
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    Feel free to accuse me of bias, but wouldn't a couple of those female Servants be loli? Juliet at the end of the story was just barely 14. Skuld from at least 2 anime that I know of are portrayed as loli. How old was Helen when she originally kidnapped? I've seen images of loli Chiyou, but I understand if you don't want to go that route. That being said, Chiyou in Dynasty Warriors is portrayed as Lixia's dark side, but Lixia is pretty petite.
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    Quote Originally Posted by SadisticOrange View Post
    Huh. Didn't see this one.

    So Magical Resistance doesn't fit? But I thought all classes have Magical Resistance.
    Okay, you should definitely do some research before writing further sheets. Seriously, you shouldn't write fanstuff of things you know so little about.

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    Yeah. Thanks guys. Removed Magic Resistance.
    And I'd argue that Naivity Of The Fairy is not the same as Evaporation Of Sanity. Both are fundamentally different. One makes someone Naive or someone unknowing of Human character (which was what I was going for) while the one basically makes you a chatterbox. But not Naive.

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    Quote Originally Posted by LegalLoliLover View Post
    Feel free to accuse me of bias, but wouldn't a couple of those female Servants be loli? Juliet at the end of the story was just barely 14. Skuld from at least 2 anime that I know of are portrayed as loli. How old was Helen when she originally kidnapped? I've seen images of loli Chiyou, but I understand if you don't want to go that route. That being said, Chiyou in Dynasty Warriors is portrayed as Lixia's dark side, but Lixia is pretty petite.
    Juliet probably could be a loli (or at least petite) with that FC, the way the image is styled just makes her look more mature.

    With Chiyou, her Caster self as far as I can recall was a loli, but that just wouldn't fit her Berserker incarnation at all. For Helen her looks have probably been adjusted to match the present era's conception of a "perfect beauty" (un/fortunately modern society isn't as lolicon as ancient Greece). And for Skuld, "being portrayed in an anime" is a pretty weak logic to justify anything.

    I think that just about covers it all.

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    Quote Originally Posted by LegalLoliLover View Post
    Feel free to accuse me of bias, but wouldn't a couple of those female Servants be loli? Juliet at the end of the story was just barely 14. Skuld from at least 2 anime that I know of are portrayed as loli. How old was Helen when she originally kidnapped? I've seen images of loli Chiyou, but I understand if you don't want to go that route. That being said, Chiyou in Dynasty Warriors is portrayed as Lixia's dark side, but Lixia is pretty petite.
    Can you please not just drop into threads to ask people to cater to your fetishes? It's really antisocial.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Seika View Post
    Can you please not just drop into threads to ask people to cater to your fetishes? It's really antisocial.
    At least he baited you until coming here. Are you planning on updating the OP anytime soon? You haven't been replying to my PMs and it has been a while. (Sorry if you're busy)

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