Would anyone happen to have any pictures of a red sword? I have a Red Rider sheet that's mostly complete but I still need a faceclaim. Tried looking for some on Google but they were mostly katanas.
Would anyone happen to have any pictures of a red sword? I have a Red Rider sheet that's mostly complete but I still need a faceclaim. Tried looking for some on Google but they were mostly katanas.
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Like, just a red sword on its own or do you want a person with it?
Just the red sword on its own. Red Rider itself is the sword, so showing a person wielding the sword could cause some confusion and mislead people into thinking that the wielder is the Red Rider when in fact they aren't.
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Or this one?
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Athena: Pretty creative take on her overall. I wouldn't have expected Athena having that kind of remorseful and guilt-ridden personality but you justified it quite well.
Her second NP being an army summon is really boring though, not to mention underwhelming for a goddess like Athena. Something based on her status as a goddess of wisdom (a mental buff that lets her for a single instant "see" all possible outcomes of the battle unfolding in front of her and choose the one that maximizes her odds of victory. Would need some limitations to keep from being OP though) or the protective powers of the Palladion (especially fitting for a Shielder) would've been much more fitting and interesting IMO.
Also, are you ever thinking of writing up the Avenger version of her? I'm curious how her abilities would differ in that Class...
Pallas: I think you're the second guy (after me) who ever wrote her up as a Servant, so it's nice to compare our takes. As a whole yours is pretty good. Her Aegis NP is a clever way of integrating the different legends surrounding the shield where sometimes people who stare at it are petrified and other times just stunned in place. The mention that she can get distracted in her Eye Of The Mind (True) Skill is also a nice nod to her legend, and something I kind of wished I included in my Pallas sheet.
I do have a few questions though. First of all, I find it a little odd she's a Lancer when her main NP is a shield. I get that Palladion is borrowing the concept of Athena's spear but it's still performed through her shield. I just think she would've been more fitting as a Shielder. Also, I'm curious why her Magic Resistance is so high.
Honestly, I don't feel comfortable making a Shielder, since I don't totaly understand the class yet. I mean, Bradamante is a Lancer with a shield a her main NP, so there is precedence.
And with her magic resistance, she is a demigod from the age of god's who was trained by a god alongside a goddess. I think that justify a high rank, i hope?
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But also thank you, your Pallas was actually part of my inspiration.
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That second one is actually pretty awesome! Thanks!
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Alternate Classes: Berserker, Ruler
True Name: Zhu Jia of Lu
Alignment: Neutral Good
Origin: China (2nd century BCE)
Armament: Sword
Parameters:
STR: B
END: A
AGI: C
MANA: D
LUCK: B
NP: C
Skills
Noble Phantasms
Description
Lore
"Aaa? So you're my new Master? Don't expect too much from me. It's nothing to do with you. I just don't like using my full abilities for the sake of someone I don't trust yet. I'm sure you understand."
Archer
Surena
Source
STR: C
END: D
AGI: A
MAG: D
LUCK: D
NP: C
Class Skills
Magic Resistance (C): Grants protection against magical effects. Differing from the Resistance effect that merely rejects Magical Energy, this ability cancels the spells altogether. Cancel spells with a chant below two verses. Cannot defend against magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.
Independent Action (A): The ability to remain independent even when rejecting the Magical Energy supply from one's Master; allowing for action even in the absence of the Master. At higher ranks, it is also possible to remain for extended periods of time in this world without an established contract. It is both useful and troublesome depending on the disposition of the Servant and the rank of Independent Action. Acting in autonomy from the Master's Magical Energy supply, the Master can concentrate their own Magical Energy on large spells, or the Servant will be fine even in the case they cannot supply Magical Energy due to injury. The downside is that they can be harder to control and keep by their side, making the only true way to command them is by utilizing Command Spells. It is possible to take action even without a Master. However, to use Noble Phantasms of great magical energy consumption, backup from the Master is necessary. At Rank A, it is possible for a Servant to stay in the world for about a week without a Master.
Personal Skills
Riding (A): a Class Skill of Rider and Saber class Servants, denoting the ability to ride mounts and vehicles. Rider-class Servants will typically possess a high rank. It is said that dragon type mounts are an exception, requiring a different ability other than Riding. All vehicles and all creatures but those of Phantasmal Beast and Divine Beast-rank can be used as mounts. This rank is high enough to have an aptitude for the Rider Class.
Horse Archer (A+): A subset of the Riding skill that denotes one who possesses skill at mounted archery. Due to the high level of equestrian ability required for such a task, rank of at least A in Riding is necessary. Whilst the owner of this skill is riding a mount or at the wheel of a vehicle, the damage and accuracy of ranged attacks is increased.
Military Tactics (B+): Tactical knowledge used not for one-on-one combat situations, but for battles where many are mobilized. Bonus modifiers are provided during use of one's own Anti-Army Noble Phantasm or when dealing against an enemy Anti-Army Noble Phantasm. Surena’s version of this skill also receives a boost against Roman Servants.
Charisma (C+): A composite Skill consisting of a person's charm as well as the natural talent to command or unify an army or country. Increases the ability of allies during group battles. A rare talent, and an ability inherent to Servants of the Saver class. Despite its lower rank, the bonus modifier granted gives this skill a strength comparable to the charisma of his king. It is said that in terms of power and prestige, Surena was second only to the ruler of the Parthian empire.
Love of Luxury (C): The ability to spend money wastefully. Similar to Golden Rule in effect but instead of wealth, various kinds of high-end luxury are drawn to the Servant. Due to the holder's frivolous spending habits, money is actually lost due to this Skill. This Skill also increases one’s vulnerability to charm and fascination type effects. However, the skill has a high chance of guessing the identity of Noble Phantasms and Servants that possess connections to the arts.
Noble Phantasms
Parthian ShotAssault in Flight
Anti Army (D): A famous tactic most famously associated the nomadic, equestrian tribes of the Eurasian supercontinent - the Parthians, Scythians, Mongols, Sassanids etc - involving turning oneself around on the back of a horse so that one faces the rear, so as to enable the ability to fire arrows at an enemy formations while drawing away from them. A simple but effective Noble Phantasm that once activated allows Surena to remain a certain distance from enemies whilst continuously assaulting them with ranged attacks. All opponents past a certain range will automatically accrue slow but steady damage, whittling away at their stamina. Approaching Surena with this ability active is exceptionally difficult, as any direct approach will cause him to move away backwards. Cannot be activated while Carrhae Kataphractoi is in use.
Carrhae KataphractoiGlittering Cavalry Formation
Anti Army (C): A Noble Phantasm representative of the cataphracts, the Parthians’ famous heavy cavalry brigade, units of heavy cavalry where horse and rider were both clad head to toe in armour. During the Battle of Carrhae, Surena covered the bright armour of his cataphracts in cloaks as they drew near to the Roman legions before having them casts the coverings off to the sound of loud drumbeats, with the intention of demoralizing the Romans with the light and noise. Accordingly, upon activation, a burst of sunlight emits from Surena’s armour to the sound of drums, before he charges with terrific force. The offensive ability of this Noble Phantasm is comparable to a cavalry charge. This Noble Phantasm also has the ability to summon a cohort of cataphracts to support and fight for Surena, but this is not available for the Archer class. Cannot be used while Parthian Shot is active.
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Bah, this is something like my third write up of this. The other two got deleted for various reasons and now I want to kill myself.
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Athena. She looks too weak for a Goddess, even more Athena. If you are making changes, I recommend that you grant a similar skill to the Imperial Privilege. She is known as the Goddess of Abilities, the Lostbelt alludes to this depiction of Athena when Charlotte uses the goddess' authority to acquire Battle Continuation.
A separate skill from this could be the symbolization of your wisdom, strategic ability. Being able to visualize multiple possibilities of different actions ensuring control of the battlefield. Basically a junction of clairvoyance skills and military tactics.
Your first NP isn't bad, but you could add more brightness. In some versions, Aegis is armor. You could play with that. And besides Medusa's usual mystics eyes, working on the defensive aspect of NP is a suggestion. Aegis was Zeus's defensive method after all.
I would replace the second NP with a representation of Nike. The Goddess of Victory is constantly associated with Athena and it's in your right hand. So basically it would be an NP that could grant a causality manipulation that would increase the chances of winning. This is very overpowering, but a good limitation would be possible consequences to reach the result (victory) that are beyond Athena's control.
These are just suggestions, don't take it seriously. I wanted to create an Athena profile, but I'm lazy.
Last edited by Ordep; December 21st, 2019 at 11:23 PM.
Bear in mind, despite being a War Goddess, Athena wasn't much for direct combat and neither is her host, hence why her stats are the way they are. As for the NPs, I wanted to give Athena a reasonable way to fight back besides a nameless spear, and since Athena is often associated with tactics, I figured an Army summon NP was appropriate.
"I really wish we didn't had to fight, but i guess this is a war."
Class: Saber
Alignment: Neutral/good
Region: Germany
Height: 168cm
Weight: 55kg
Likes: Honesty, Forgiveness, quietness
Dislikes: Revenge, Violence, Herself
Talent: Economics
Armaments: Swords
Natural Enemy: Herself, Gunther, Hagen
stats
Str: C
End: B
Agi: C
Mna: A
Lck: E
NP: A
Skills
Noble phantasm
Background
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"You are trash, I will have pleasure killing you"
Class: Avenger
Alignment: Chaotic/evil
Region: Germany
Height: 170cm
Weight: 56kg
Likes: Revenge, Violence, Him
Dislikes: Forgiveness, Quietness, Herself
Talent: Destroying
Armaments: Swords
Natural Enemy: Herself, Gunther, Hagen
stats
Str: B
End: B
Agi: B
Mna: A
Lck: E
NP: EX
Skills
Noble phantasm
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