Yo! Points, Reactions, and Laev Comments from me are all gonna be here. Contest went hard this month. I've copy/pasted my previous comments into this one as well, images aside.
The Avenger of RoydGolden,
Cassandra, the Ignorant Prophetess
Really really solid Avenger- a big point for me with her is that, while you go further down the sheet, the particular way you convey her hatred for Apollo is REALLY juicy. That shit’s got a certain visceral nature to the way it sorta seeps into the sheet, and I really enjoy that. Also, big fan of A Tangling Prayer, I’ve been reading through Bungou Stray Dogs as of late, and it makes me think of a cooler Grapes of Wrath.
The Ruler of FarewellToMrA,
Sophia, the Administrator of Alaya
Oh she is SUCH a shitter, I fucking love bastard high-divinities. She’s got some of, if not my favorite energy in the contest, with an all-around rock-solid sheet, that isn’t busted to all shit despite her status in her mythology. Gonna challenge her and Mark to a game of Ticket to Ride.
The Archer of RoydGolden,
Malcolm Muggeridge, Journalist of Decaying Words
I can fix him A very well thought out and constructed sheet- I like the dichotomy of Malcolm trying to find ways against the rot, with Bifrons being a little sicko going, “haha…Yes… YESSS!!”. The NP is a particular favorite of mine, just based off the imagery of his mad dance while an air raid occurs. A wonderful job all around.
The Binder of BnEl15,
Parikshit, King of the New Yuga
HOPE STOCKS ARE FUCKING UUUUUUUUUUP!!!!!!! Love this guy
The Berserker of DracoScribe,
the Keres, Goddesses of Violent Deaths
Man, I’m a fucking sucker for antagonistic forces of the, “Yeah no shit I’m gonna help save the world, I live here” persuasion. Of course, it’s a little more malicious than that, but hey, they’re just a bit extra spicy in that regard. Really enjoyed the birdy banter throughout the sheet
The Archer of Vidiidi,
Laevateinn, the Armament of Ragnarok
hey dats me
The Foreigner of Dreamerless,
L. Ron Hubbard, the Father of Scientology
First of all Motherfucker, quit throwing a pity-party for yourself in the Author’s notes. Take some pride in yourself, you’ve written something that made me laugh here! My distaste for danganronpa aside, the “voice” you’ve written his sheet in is EXCELLENT. What a fucking rat bastard, dude had me cracking up throughout with how much of a sleazy mess he is. I actually quite like the “Insta win NP” because while it’s been a major issue in your past works, the fact that this one clearly and purposely is both impossible to pull off, and DOESN’T WORK, is a great sorta self-commentary. I liked this one more than I initially felt I should. May not get a ton of points, but I found it really enjoyable.
The Ruler of Vance,
Michael, Mercy Swallowed By Judgement
Not a huge amount to say here for me, since it's a very cut and dry sheet to me, but this feels straight out of a law-aligned Faction boss from an SMT game, which makes perfect sense considering it's Mickey. Good shit.
"I don't think I could become a blade for someone like you. You fight against the end, but... I guess it's your why. I'd like to aid someone with free will."
The Lancer of DracoScribe,
Macaria, Goddess of Blessed Death
YEAAAAAAAAHHHH LETS FUCKING GOOOOOOOOOOOO I LOVE HERRRRR.
FANTASTIC story, such a fucking wonderful way of mending the paternity issue present when making a servant of her. The link between the Keres sheet/ the paired theming is REALLY strong as well, it's a perfect sorta message that really comes out in their interactions. All her ranks are great, same as the skills themselves, and I fucking adore the NP. I think the fact that her lance is a scepter-key, making her the gatekeeper of Elysium, is really good, because as a responsibility, it's huge- which in turn, solidifies how much she's become part of the Hades family. This shit's topscoring for me.
"-So you all actually, like have a dedicated happy ending place? It's... wow. This place is beautiful... Do you think I could... I guess visit your underworld from time to time? Not just Elysium, wherever really, it just feels.... I guess concrete would be the word."
The Berserker of Morg van Destro,
Garshāsp, King of Dragonslayers
Yeah bro, that's a fucking Koga sheet in terms of stats, idk what else to tell you there. In writing though? That's a GOOD-ASS story. REALLY fucking strong presentation with that, and I'm a fan of your way of choosing the genderbend route, because it makes a lot of sense with what you've put forth in terms of info. Good shit.
"... gods, you don't even need a blade."
The Berserker of NittyGritty,
Katsuie Matsukara, Shining Phoenix Hero of Tokugawa
"Shining Justice: PHOENIX BUSTAH!!" Fucking loved reading this sheet, super fun. I kneel before the christian-loathing Sentaichad. Sublime theme choice as well lol.
"I dunno what a pope, or a megazord is, but that doessound pretty serious... is it really world-ending though?"
The "Caster" of AndrosTC,
Simon Magus...the Avenger who hide his true self, Demiurge/Dejjal, He Born from Wisdom and Destroys Light
Maaaaaaan, this guy is raw as hell. Pulls up outta nowhere, pulling energy from the reverse side, with an entire squad at his back, and when he goes full heel, he fucking does it again. The fucking magnitude of this man's worldending swagger is immense, and that should be applauded. Wonderful presentation as well.
".... Miss Sophia? Is this the guy you said- WHAT, no, I can't hold him off, I'm going with you! He said he's gonna use me otherwise!"
The Servant of Salt Pillar,
Eris, Discord Since the Dawn of Time
REALLY fucking cool sheet here, it's a frontrunner for me. I really like that you chose the classless container for her, it really backs the feeling of her being a sort of cosmic force as a member of the Proto-Indoeuropean label. You write her with such a soft menace and sense of mysterious grandeur here, I just really like it. Also, TOTALLY get you on that Creator's Comments, I went down the same hole for Mars Thingsus.
"Nonono, that's- I don't want domains of war, I don't want to surround myself with armaments. You... you make heroes. And I want to make a deal."
The Moon Cancer of Ismail2002,
Jarir Ibn Abdullah Al Bajali, Eraser of Idols
Man, every time someone comes in with a servant who persists within or upon the moon/mooncell, I can't help but think of my Rider and Foreigner of my fighting game servants effectively just brawling on his front lawn, before jumping back down to Earth, while they look on disapprovingly. Regardless of my ramblings, dude seems pretty cool. I think the concept of a guy who was evidently super important to a major worldly religion, but we don't have a lot of info on him, just having his soul being up and claimed by the moon like an alien abduction, is really fun. I just have the usual issue of, "wow, I feel like I've never seen a C ranked skill or below on one of his sheets", but that's more of a me thing. Fun concept.
"I... disagree. I think humanity would have been better off, had they not suffered my flames at all. You... does the moon make you like this?"
The Saver of Morg van Destro,
Unknown Soldiers, the Founding Love of the Throne
HOPE STOCKS RISE EVEN FURTHER, PAST THE SKY, THE STARS, AND INTO THE BREACH.
"I... for once, I'm sorry that I can only become one blade. It would be an honor to join you all at the Grand Ragnarok."
The Rider of Scotcheroos,
Artabanus II, the First Conquest of the Apocalypse
Never knew about the Wettstein connection between the two, and this sheet proved a fascinating read for me. Despite being part of the Rider of Conquest, she's also, I feel at least,
really well balanced in the statting department. I came in expecting some generic conqueror, and came out with a real, genuine fondness for a killer Christmas Cake.
Phenomenal, she's a frontrunner for me.
"Hey, Auntie A, you and Miss Eris, is there... wait, seriously, nothing? Huh.."
They actually quite like the haughty/regal facade, it let them indulge in a small fantasy of being a trusted member of some court, like some high lady or advisor. Plus, it reminds them of how their mom acted when anyone came to Muspel. Otherwise, the icecream is very much appreciated.
The Anti-Assassin of Random,
Alice in Wonderland, a Neverending Dream
GODDDDD, she's so fucking cool. I know I didn't elaborate on how much I liked her in planning DMs for Schlock War 8, but she and the whole Antiservant concept are endlessly fascinating to me. I'm utterly terrified, and extremely excited of what awaits of the rest of your work on the concept, because MAN is she a monster. Superb presentation as always, love the preamble too.
"...S-So nobody on the outside remembers me anymore? I- no, I GOTTA burn all this. They can't forget me, or they might try and make another... There CANNOT be another me created."
The Assassin of DesReploid,
Karl May, the greatest German author of Westerns
He made me a bit teary, I'm gonna be honest. The way you portray his world of lies, the earnestness he tells them with, and the desire to not have to lie, or rather, just his shamefulness that he did, the fact that he's sorry- This is one of those servants I look at, and want to see them summoned into a singularity. I want them to be able to have another shot, to live again. Not into a war, but a singularity or lostbelt, so they may have the experience of a real, true adventure. I'd love to see him alongside FGO's Don Quixote.
"Hey, sir? Mr. Shatterhand? Er, May rather? I know that wasn't true and all, but... would you want to go on an adventure like that? I couldn't bring you to Muspel, but I know some people who can call upon a Valkyrie- I think you've got the kind of soul for Valhalla."
The Alter Ego of Uriel,
Louhi, Bunrei Witch of Icy Death
This sheet is gonna be the catalyst to go down the rabbithole of Finnish mythology for me, holy shit. Well formatted to avoid any text slog, I love the effect of the NP's being in the bond lines rising in rank like she's powering up, or as you very accurately put, removing her limiters. Rock solid, great sheet.
"You're... probably sick of it, but I really like how cold you keep it. Granted, I turn the snowdrifts into a hotspring, but with how frosty it is, you make it so I don't have to freak about burning stuff down if I decide to sit withought looking first. Thanks for that."
The Pretender of doncosaco,
Simon Bar Kokhba, he who Refuses to his title of false Saver, the Son of a Star
Dude's got a cool vibe to him. Despite him being a rather tragic, kinda nasty figure, the brusqueness with which you write the sheet makes him come off as a sort of determinator. Like, if hw was summoned, he'd just roll up and parry a noble phantasm with a bowie knife or some shit.
"If it's any consolation... I get you on the whole subject of failing to save your people. World's just afuck like that sometimes."
The Caster of FarewellToMrA,
Barbara Newhall Follett, the Child Genius Who Vanished
Maaaaaaan, this sheet makes me sad. There's something you convey with it that I can't put my finger on, but I
think it feels like you're sort of trapped trying to go back to that house that no longer exists with her. The desire to recapture the freedom and carelessness of childhood. It's just a really good throughline, and I like how it's just all in a neat little package like that.
"Hey, so, I'm reading your book- I actually really like it, but I wanted to ask: with the world you've created... is that what Dreaming is like? The whole stumbling into a different world, so close, yet so far to our own? I can't dream- I think Mr Loki may have forgotten about that part when making me, but I hear great things."
The "Archer" of TQG Imaginatorious,
Höđr...the Faker who attempts to hide their true self, Mistelteinn, Devourer of Light
THIS SHIT SO FUCKING COOL,
HELLLLLLLL YEAH BROTHER. Like, obviously I'm biased due to how he and Laevateinn would be connected, but this is just a phenomenal sheet. A fantastic story, GOATed premise, and it isn't confusing in the slightest, the formatting and writing is great. I adore how he comes off as so devious and giddy.
"Yeah, y'know, I guess we are sorta siblings- and I have to thank you, because without hearing of him making you, my parents wouldn't have commissioned Loki to make me. That being said- You're disgusting. I'll show you EXACTLY how I got Frey."
The Caster of Dreamerless,
the Beatles, the Fab Four of Changing Times
Ringo superiority, fuck Lennon. I'll keep it crystal, not much for me to say here, I much more enjoyed the Hubbard Sheet for it's Comedy. Do like the idea of a band at the end of the world though.
"Hey, so, I listened to some of your stuff in the Throne, and I need to know: What was up with Rocky Racoon? Like, why would you record that? That was awful."
The "Moon Cancer" of DelRey,
Elisabetha K...the Pretender who hides her true self, Elisabetha ○ Kupalnitsa, the Shadow of a Still Night
Eyy, another one in your Hevelius dynasty. Really enjoyed the past binder one with she and her husband iirc, and the same goes for her standalone here. REALLY cool imagery with the butterflies, didn't know that fact about them and the Slavs calling upon them. Fantastic presentation as always.
"... D'you ever have to drink the swamp to do your magecraft?"
The Caster of Serra,
Sajāḥ bint al-Ḥārith & Maslama ibn Ḥabīb, the Arch-Liar and the Soothsayer
Awww, I really like these two. The dynamic is really cute, the skills compliment well, and the imagery of the NP is really strong. Not much more than that from me, It's just short, sweet, and solid.
"I... I was born to remove gods and those who surround them from the world. The effect your clouds have is different, definitely, but... nah. They gotta go. Sorry about this, the two of you do really seem lovely."
The Saver of sutaa,
Prince Charming...the Beast who hides his true self as the Sin of Regression, Lavish
OH THIS IS
MEATY. I really like this one. Fantastic combination of concepts, you have me rubbing my hands with a delightful bit of malice on my mind as I read this. What a fucking villain he is, this is some choice servant content.
"I... I was gonna say you'd be the type I'd offer myself to, but... you've got a weird temperature about you. Not Temprament, no, you... why are you so cold?"
The Ruler and Avenger both of Scotcheroos,
Virochana=Vairocana, the King of the Asura and Embodiment of Śūnyatā
Yoooooo, this is fucking sick! Love the whole deal with them being mashed together, and how that's reflected across the sheet's format. Just really solid conceptually. Also, fuck yeah, SMT refs.
"... you two make my head hurt- wait is it one or two? I- yeah no, this is what I'm talking about"
The Pretender of Kamera,
Helen of Troy, the Eidolon does not hide she is not Helen of Sparta
Eyyyy, fun, short little sheet mashing figures with the same name to make a new one, pretty funky, I like it. As always, bonus points for magical girl transformation sequences.
"Nononono, you're even worse than the last one, there's three of you this time? I'm so sorry ma'am- I can just go with Helen, right? I don't have to specify?"
The Watcher of Baron Magnus,
Cain, Man's Eternal Observer
I too, am an Abelist- the base desire to kill your siblings with a large rock is an innate one. Like, as much of a joke as that is, I've always felt a lot of empathy for the guy. I've seen way more sheets for Abel in my time here, so it makes me happy to see the big C. In personally posit him as a Grand Assassin, but this interpretation as a Watcher is really strong, I'm quite fond of it. This one is a contender for me.
"I... honestly, yeah, I think I could. Piercing through protections to destroy life, as much as I hate it, is kind of my thing. Is- do you want to do it anywhere special? Like, is there a place you've thought you'd like to pass on at? It'll take a while, but as long as your body fuels the flames..."
The Voyager of WhiteFrenzy,
Emily Dickinson, "A Journey for You and Me"
YEAAAAAAAHHHHHH I FUCKING LOVE THAT POEM- Only essay I ever got a perfect score on in highschool was for that poem. Absolutely adore that it's what you used to bring her into this contest, and on such a wonderfully-composed sheet as well.
"Man.... I wish death would stop for me."
The Caster of pinetree,
Nicholas and Perenelle Famel, the Immortal "One"
Still working through understanding all this from what you've put down, but GODDAMN- I just want Nic here to be happy. Fly forward until rest, spaceboy.
Laevateinn is not smart enough to begin to comprehend the nature of theological nothingness.
The Rider of Serra,
Heraclius=Armilus, the Crusader of the Beginning and End
Yo this dude fucking slaps. Knew nothing of the figure before hand, man comes off raw as hell, really like him. All-around solid sheet.
"-It is a fact I am well aware of. However, if you're the cause of it, then I must promise our pillars of flame will duel, mine to attempt to ward it off."
The Avenger of Mycielhasbroken,
Apep, Devourer of Ra
OOOOOOOGGGGHHHHHHHH THAT FINAL ASCENSION ART IS GOOD. With that, the CE, and the overall sheet, it finishes the contest on some of my favorite presentation in the running.
"If they aren't enough to quell you, then so be it- I'll go hotter than that big ball you ate ever was in the first place. Square up."
Bonus!
Bhargava Markandeya
"Hey, Mr Mark? I- this may come as an odd request, but... y'know, I also gotta do my part in ending the world, but- would you be opposed to teaching me how to dance?"
"Nonono, I'm not a devotee to Shiva, I don't even know much of your pantheon, I just- it's your dance."
"No, no objections to it, I just.... gwuh, I'm- I'm trying to say I admire it. I may not be able to fight against Ragnarok, but... I guess it's the way that you do it that I like. Despite the destruction, the way you bring it upon the world is through an artform. I become a physical blade, but in this form you see me here, the one I return to as I burn away into aether after my dad is slain, and how I live before it all- I'd like to put it to use, and partake in your art. Can you show me a step or three?"
POINTS.
Honorable Mentions (unordered)
Eris
Parikshit
Alice in Wonderland
Karl May
Barbara Newhall Follett
Cain
Emily Dickinson
Nicolas and Perenelle Flamel
One Point
Mistelteinn
Two Points
Macaria
Three Points
Unknown Soldiers
Originally Posted by Morg van Destro
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