Oh wow, I hadn't read the other entries yet. I hadn't even realized somebody made a Mehmed for this.Originally Posted by Express
Oh wow, I hadn't read the other entries yet. I hadn't even realized somebody made a Mehmed for this.
If you are expecting a faithful, interesting representation of the character which provides a new take on a historical figure..... don't.
Also I probably haven't said welcome because I've been in a lazy, horrible mood recently. Welcome
These are my Servant and Master sheets
Servant And Master Sheets
Thank you for the welcome, and I thought the sheet was pretty interesting when I read it this morning. I have an entire pastebin dedicated to my struggles in making OC servants that aren't shit, so I'm the last one to judge anybody on that.
Servant Saber:
Appearance:
Source is here
True Name: William Penn
Alignment: Lawful Good
Alternate Class: Caster
Strength- D
Agility- B
Endurance- C+
Mana- D
Luck- B+
NP- B++
Equipment: A copy of the Bible and elegant fencing sword.
Personality
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance- C+
Power to neutralize the effects of Magecraft aimed against oneself. At this rank, spells with a chant below two verses are nullified. Proves difficult to cope with the likes of High Thaumaturgy or Greater Rituals. When faced with forms of Magecraft deemed unholy, the effective rank of this Skill rises to B.
As Saber lived relatively close to the modern day- well after the large-scale erosion in mystery- he would normally possess only a minimal resistance unbecoming of his most noble Class. However, his devote Quaker faith and favor with certain Native-American shamanistic tribes has somewhat bolstered Saber's ranking in this Skill.
Riding- C
Ability to ride animals. At this rank, most mundane mounts can be ridden at an average degree of skill, not including Phantasmal or Divine Beasts. There are no records depicting Saber's prowess with horses or other mounts, but given his martial upbringing he could be expected to have had some familiarity with them.
Personal Skills:
Inner Light- B
A Skill reflecting the Quaker belief in Inner Light. The idea that every individual is endowed with a god-given light that allows them to naturally discern right from wrong, without needing to rely on external authorities. Grants Saber an equal rank in Revelation and Discernment Of The Poor, while also repelling mental interference.
Incidentally, the belief in Inner Light- where an individual's own conscience of right and wrong is held as sovereign- can be seen as the origin to the right of conscientious objection in the modern age.
Pacifist- A
A Skill denoting those who swore never to take the life of a human being. Bonus modifiers are granted while attempting to non-lethally disable opponents. However, should Saber ever break his vow of pacifism he will suffer a permanent rank down to all parameters, along with this Skill being sealed for the remainder of the Holy Grail War.
A devote Quaker, Saber's oath of pacifism did nothing to dampen his prowess in battle. Once when challenged by a well-known French duelist, Saber expertly disarmed his opponent, only to gallantly spare him with a sermon on how no ceremony can justify the taking of life.
Eye Of The Mind (True)- C
The ability to anticipate changes in the battlefield through observation, reasoning and experience. Born from his accumulated experience as a master-duelist, Saber principally applies this Skill to ascertain if an enemy is "one who must be fought", as well as to seek out ways of ending the battle without killing them.
Rhetoric Arts- B
The talent to speak pursuasively and charm others with deft words. Put on trial for blasphemy, Saber argued his case with such dazzling wit that all the jurors unanimously refused to convict him- even when threatened with prison themselves. When the state eventually found an excuse to throw him in prison anyways, Saber spent his incarcaration composing The Great Case of Liberty of Conscience- widely considered as one of the most stirring defenses of religious liberty ever written.
Pioneer Of The Stars- D
A unique Skill granted to those heroes who became turning points in human history. Difficult voyages and challenges deemed "impossible" from the outset can be reconceptualized into "events that can be realized". While Saber himself is a somewhat obscure figure in history, the ideas he helped originate in his founding of Pennsylvania (such as free speech, freedom of religion, checks and balances and universal equality) came to define America for centuries to come.
Noble Phantasms
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So, I know I already made an entry in this contest a few pages back but I was struck with inspiration for a William Penn Servant yesterday and, seeing as he's a Saber, I figured I might as well post him up here. Bit of an odd choice for a Servant sheet I know and I'm sure I wanked him a bit (a lot), but whatever. By the way, major credit for helping to flesh out this sheet goes to the book Albion's Seed, without which I almost surely never would've written this (heck, it's where I found out about Penn being a duelist in the first place). I know I'm probably not going to get it until judging, but as always comments and critiques are welcome.
Last edited by RoydGolden; April 21st, 2023 at 04:50 PM.
William Penn: A pacifist servant, that's nice, but I'm not sure how he's supposed to win or finish a Holy Grail War without killing another servant, especially if everyone's not allowed to fight anywhere in the country if he activates his 2nd NP.
I think the FC doesn't really match the description of a 17th century pacifist..
Also, how is the 2nd NP Anti-World? it think it should be Anti-Violence...
Well, it's just a thing that only I seem to have, but 5 personal skills seem a bit much. I normally have a limit of 1-4 skills I put on my sheets unless it's a special servant, but you're free to ignore this since it's just a personal thing.
Thanks for the feedback. I didn't really expect it given the nature of this contest. I think I pretty much outlined his strategy for the Grail War, which is not to "win" at all but focus on spreading his second NP. He could theoretically beat other Servants without killing them through his first NP, but he'd ultimately run into problems with actually using the Grail since the Mana from killed Servants is what fuels it in the first place.
Funny that you mentioned the FC, since it actually (aside from the obvious anime embellishments) hews pretty close to the guy's appearance as a young man. Here's an artwork of him when he was around 20, for reference.
And his NP is Anti-World because it can theoretically spread to envelop the whole world. I thought of an Anti-Violence classification, but I've used that already for some other NPs and wanted to try something different.
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Fair enough, if I had to pick I'd probably scrap Pioneer Of The Stars, since it was mostly unnecessary aside from giving a little bit of extra flavor.
Personally I consider 5 to be just about the maximum for Personal Skills, but obviously everyone will have their own personal standards.
Decided to redo an old one for this. It's been a while.
Faceclaim
True Name: Maria Ursula D'Abreu e Lencastro
Class: Saber
Gender: Female
Alignment: Lawful Good
Attribute: Man
Place of Origin: Portugal
STR: B
END: C
AGI: B
MAG: D
LCK: A
NP: A
Class Skills:
Magic Resistance: C
As a relatively young Heroic Spirit, who never encountered real magic in her lifetime, Maria's rank in this skill is below average for a Saber.
Riding: B
In her case, she specialized herself in horses, since they are an essential part of knighthood.
Personal Skills:
Chivalry: A+
By adhering to a code of chivalry, Maria is capable of emulating the skills commonly associated with knights, such as Battle Continuation, Bravery, Dragon Slayer and Guardian Knight, albeit at a reduced rank. If she ever breaks the code, this skill will be sealed.
Voyager of the Storm: B
Maria reached the rank of captain in the Portuguese Navy, and was given control of a fortress in India; her skill in commanding and managing her troops is superb.
Noble Phantasms
- Anti-Unit (Self), Rank ABaltasarDream of Knighthood
A Noble Phantasm that embodies Saber's life, as a woman that disguised herself as a man to go on a great adventure. Upon activation, Maria Ursula D'Abreu e Lencastro will be replaced by Baltasar do Couto Cardoso.
Baltasar
Rather than truly manifesting another Servant, this Noble Phantasm uses Maria's Saint Graph, replacing her with a perfect-looking male knight. As Baltasar, her physical parameters and Magic Resistance all receive a Rank-UP, and Chivalry is decomposed into the skills it can emulate, all at Rank C, while Voyager of the Storm becomes sealed. While Baltasar seems to be a different person from Maria Ursula, their personality is virtually identical; he is, essentially, both her "ideal knight" and her "ideal self."
Unfortunately, Baltasar is only an Ephemereal Dream of Maria Ursula, and even with a steady supply of magical energy cannot remain in the world for long. Should this Noble Phantasm remain active for too long, the Saint Graph may suffer irreparrable damage.
Lore & Personality
Spoiler:
Last edited by Zork Knight; July 28th, 2017 at 12:13 AM.
Maria: Hmm... since they're both obsessed with an ephemeral dream of knighthood, how do you think she'd get along with my Don Quixote Servant?
Well, knowing that Don Quixote was an attempt by Cervantes to mock chivalry fans... you can imagine.
How many more days until this first one is over?
EDIT: nvm pls delete idiotic post
Why would the original author's intentions color how she interacts with the character themselves though? Especially since my take on the Don is much more of an idealistic 'absurd heroine' figure...
Because her entire infatuation with chivalry comes from books?
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Source: History
Class: Saber
True Name: Alfred Hutton
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Place of Origin: Victorian England
Parameters:
STR: B
END: B
AGI: D+
MGI: E
LCK: C
NP: C
Height: 1.84m
Weight: 93.4kg
Likes: Sword Techniques, Duels, Black Tea.
Dislikes: Weak Soldiers, Fish.
Talent: Master of the Sword before anything else.
Natural Enemy:
Attribute: Man
Armament: A single sabre.
Catalyst: Manuscript of "Old Swordplay".
Class Skills:
Riding B: Hutton was good enough a rider to writte manuals on sword combat in horseback.
Magic Resistance E: Hutton was but a normal man, he never knew about magecraft and mystery, nevertheless, as he is still a proper saber, he has a minimum degree of resistance.
Personal Skills:
Master of Blades A: This skill symbolizes one's mastery of armed close combat. It also serves as a combination of Eye of the Mind (true) and Bravery, but also makes it possible for the Servant to fight to anything that resembles a sword or dagger as if using an actual sword. At this level, Hutton could cut flesh and shatter bones even with a wooden stick.
Battle Continuation C: Regardless of whether you kill your enemy, if you die, it's your defeat, that is the mindset of a master of the sword, of those who he learnt from and those he taught himself.
Empirean Eye D: A Mystic Eye that makes a desired outcome 'inevitable' by means of completely dedicating yourself to achieving it. That is what it should be, but since Hutton himself was never aware of magecraft, he does not really know about this ability to put it to full potential, but it still greatly enhances the chances of what he commits himself to achieve.
Noble Phantasm(s):
The Swordsmaster that went Beyond the Ages
The Sword Through the Centuries A:
Anti-Swordsmen
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Both the name of his last book and a description to his greatest achievement, Hutton studied every sword and sword combat style that came before him, and created one of his own to be both effective and elegant, he raised sword combat to the level of both science and art and, in fact, created the style used in theater and cinema for over a century, he influenced how the world sees swordsmanship today, having truly transcended time with his sword, it is the symbol of his complete commitment to the art of swordsmanship. In effect, the Noble Phantasm makes it so Hutton completely understand any form of close combat, he sees through feints easily and will not be fooled by unconventional or exotic moves, melee weapons and combat styles.
Lore:
An Accomplished swordsman who managed to achieve mastery of the sword even after knowledge over it was lost, Hutton has little to no known stories from before entering the army, At a young age, the man abandoned college for a military career, and soon a higher officer, seeing that he had brought many swords, decided to challenge him to a duel, only to be easily beaten by the already much experienced fencer. Hutton was then invited to teach his fellow officers fencing and it is said their swordsmanship greatly improved, from there on, he dedicated his life to further studying, training, teaching, improving and writing on swordsmanship.
Personality:
Hutton is serious and confident although not too arrogant, he is also highly sophisticated, paired with his good look, he could be called a lady-killer of sorts, but he gives little to no attention towards anything but a duel, or a discussion regarding armed martial arts. Since he is also very rather intelligent and rather good with tactics, he would pair much well with inexperienced masters. He however doesn't like underhanded tactics and prefer to win through honest duels, so he'd have a hard time with most magi from the Magic Association as a Master.
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woah! i somehow managed! i was thinking on a swordmaster even before i saw the requirement of saber class tbh, but i'm not much of a fan of unoriginal work, i was sure liechtenauer had been done before, even if in another thread, and, unexpectedly, came to discover master fiore had already been done before too, fortunately though, Hutton isn't all that known and i knew enough about him to try my hand. i was really worried regarding the stats, i couldn't have then too high, since he is a modern servant, but i wanted str and end to give him justice, coz i've trained his style before and man, is it though, he had to be a monster to be that strong. i'm not sure i'm satisfied with what i managed, feels a bit too over the top in some parts, but at least the image i have of him was somehow conveyed. i though him to be a servant of little magical powers, but that, regardless of how strong you are yourself, you must not face in a straight forward combat, i imagine caster and archer to having the easiest time dealing with him, but berserkers and assassins falling down soon in combat.
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Mehmed bin Murad - By sherlock1110
El Cid - By Hakuno
Kondou Isami - By Skull
Janos Hunyadi - By Flustered Saber
Ariadne - By GilgameshKingofMemes
Byrnhildr - By You
Sir Lucan - By SleepMode
Umar ibn Al-Khattab - By ThirtyFour34
Watanabe no Tsuna - By Sunny
Isaac Newton - By TamamoRoute
Yagyuu Jubei Mitsuyoshi - By Omida
William Penn - By RoydGolden
Maria Ursula D'Abreu e Lencastro - By Zork Knight
Alfred Hutton - By kami-en
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Hutton: Firstly, welcome to the forum! Never heard of this guy before, but it's interesting to see a "pure" swordsman in the Saber Class for once without any beamu shenanigans or whatnot. His NP feels a little ill-defined though. I get you didn't want to go with something ridiculously flashy (again, no beamu shenanigans) but honestly from the way this NP is described it sounds just like a hyped up form of the Eye Of The Mind Skill (that he already has anyway).
If you want to stick with the concept of "understanding all forms of swordsmanship" then I'd suggest making it so he can copy other sword techniques just by looking at them or something like that (with obvious limitations that he can only reproduce techniques a normal human should be capable of doing rather then reality-breaking stuff like Tsubame Gaeshi). That'd be more worthy of an actual NP, while still staying true to the idea you outlined.
That is exactly how i felt tbh, was quite unsure how to work it out, i could have made him have a higher rank of Eye of the Mind, but that would kind of be too ridiculous, i wanted him to be something like an european version of sasaki, but... well... ultimate techniques are... kind of dumb for european swordsmanship standarts, so i couldn't give him anything like Tsubame Gaeshi.
A Stealing tehcnique on the other hand, would actually have been quite good, he did learn older techniques by pure study, not to say how said techniques also included disarming your oponent... will have it in mind for RPG campaigns using him.
Maria Ursula D'Abreu e Lencastro: I was working on a sheet for the woman who impersonated Jeanne d'Arc that was basically the same principals as this but you've pulled this off pretty dang well so there goes that idea :/
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