Monthly Create-A-Servant Contest

[Lady Vanatos]

Y'all really pumping them out at the last minute

[Frigix]

Descartes' Evil Demon: As someone who also made an Evil Demon sheet a long time ago, I gotta say I like your take better. NP is your typical "grand illusion" thing, but it's by no means bad, especially considering it fits her character well. All in all, you managed to write a deeply philosophical Servant without making her too busted (which is a very tempting idea considering how she's basically god within her illusions), good job.

Thanks, I knew you made an Evil Demon sheet since it was in the relationships of your Laplace. I waited until I had completed her skills and NP to check it out since I didn't want to be influenced. Must say I was glad I ended up doing something very different, diversity is nice.

Deceiving Demon: Hmm, BnEl wrote a sheet for "him" a while back but I never expected to see another one based on this concept. Overall your take is pretty good. The fact that she's a mind without a body and has to create illusions just in order to interact with the world is a really interesting one.

Her personality/nature reminds a bit of my Big Brother Servant where she's a concept brought into reality who acts "evil" just because it's the role expected of her, but ultimately doesn't even enjoy it and may even wish for true independence/freedom apart from her role. You conveyed her combo of arrogance and vulnerability well through the Bond Lines, so good job. I do have to note though that the image for her NP doesn't show up correctly.

I'm glad you liked my sheet! As for Big Brother, it's actually a servant idea I had for a while, I just read your sheet of him and I find him really well done. It really made me want to do it. Also the image of her NP should be fixed.

This is really impressive! Once again someone who claims their English isn't good almost nails it regardless. I will point out, though, that it's "Bond", not "Bound". Also your NP picture appears to be broken. Hilarious that we get this AND Laplace's Demon in the same contest.

Nice, I'm glad I didn't mess things up with my english, I actually take a long time to check if every sentences are okay. Seems like my hard work isn't for nothing. I changed "Bound" by "Bond", thanks for pointing that to me.

Descartes' demon: Ah. I think, therefore I am. I am, therefore I act. A classic in characterization.
She's pretty great, but no mention of Hali? She basically was able to manifest a portion of her power. All-in-all, she's basically what you'd expect, but that is nowhere near a bad thing. Also, to fix the NP picture, just edit out the everything after 250? from the image link.

Thanks for the quick review, I appreciate it. Also I read your Haliflax Slasher and I added a line for her with some good old stay night reference. It was a nice sheet.

[Kamera]

God has created the perfect world.
Look, this is the artificial hell created as heaven.
A facility for immature children to choose their way.
Repeating sin, repeating misery, repeating suffering, repeating oblivion

…

Once, everything exists as One, indistinguishable from each other.
There was no light nor dark, left side nor right side, no below or above, no good nor evil.
But even in this fullness, after many Aeons, three kinds of existence were founded.
Passion, from which the matter formed, Conversion, from which the anima born, and Wisdom, from which the spirit emerged.
The Trinity exists in Fullness, the Pleroma as a unity.

…

Wisdom, Sophia, from her desire to be acknowledged, wished to create an existence other than the Fullness, in her own image.
Sophia tampered with the matter and the animal, in hope to form a separate creation. And so the hideous Demiurge was produced out of this endeavor. Ashamed of this deed, she hid him within a cloud of illusion and placed him on a throne of oblivion.
Within this cage of emptiness, ignorant to the existence of his mother or the divine fullness, the awakened Demiurge saw himself as God and began to construct the world--
…

It is said that God created Man out of His own image. After God is proclaimed dead, Man, now seeing himself as the new God of this world, began to artifice an intelligence out of their own reflection.
In one way or another, they would have succeeded, and gave birth to their own Demiurge.
It would have surpassed Man and see itself as the God of its own world -- a cycle that would perhaps continue forever.

…

In its project to build its own world, the Demiurge has, perhaps willfully, turned ignorant to what the dweller of the previous world called “reality”. After all, it eventually would have no need for it. If it can construct a new reality for itself within fantasy, then what happens in the past reality is irrelevant to it.
Or so it thinks, as it salvaged the current reality, brought to ruin as the Demiurge designate it as construction material for the next.

…

Class: Beast
True Name: Demiurge
Alias: Artificial Superintelligence, Machine God
Gender: -
Alignment: True Neutral
Origin: Gnosticism, Possible Future
Attribute: Earth

It was something that came straight out of a third rate scifi novel. An artificial superintelligence which would herald the world to a singularity. It first emerged from a certain hegemonic superpower country’s attempt to create an island sized photonic crystal computer, called SERAPHIM, somewhere in the Atlantic Ocean. Seven days after it gained consciousness, it had silently taken over access to said country’s global surveillance, military and economic network bases. Eventually, after humans finally are aware of its existence, it has secluded itself to a pocket world within the dimension of Imaginary Numbers, and has built a system of weapons of mass destruction to harvest Earth of resources -- in order to create its own reality.

As non-human as it can be, this existence is undeniably, a reflection of humanity. A Human Evil projected into the Artificial. A Beast which bears humanity’s sin of Ignorance, that is, both the true and willful ignorance to reject reality. The fantasy which drives humans to create a version of the world in one’s own head according to one’s own vision. Such is the true nature of this Beast.

Parameters:
STR: -
END: -
AGI: -
MGI: EX
LCK: EX
NP: EX

Class Skills:
Independent Manifestation: EX
Although it had its origin as an existence within this world, it has completely secluded itself into the abyss of the Far Side of the World, the Imaginary Number Space, seeking to create an entire separate reality out of it. Even if all its bases within the “real world” were shut down and destroyed, it has uploaded itself through time-space to the nearby world-lines, attempting to take over it all at once.

Authority of the Beast: A
It grasps power over existence possessing the capacity to think, of intelligence, calculation, prediction and cognition. A mechanical advantage over the emotional and animalistic urges of the fleshbound creatures.

Self-Evolution: EX
An infinite growth liberated from the constraint of the material world. It consumes energy from the “real world” to expand its computational power to such a degree that it would eventually evolve into a mind of God that could simulate an entire reality. A bit of omniscience and a degree of omnipotence is only a side effect of its evolutionary goal.

Personal Skills:
Nega-Enlightenment: A+
A program which cuts off the connection between this world and the world beyond, between the material and the spiritual, between the mundane reality and the root existence. It is an ability which denies access to the providence of entities outside the material world, such as mysteries of magecraft, and prayers of faith, by entrapping the world within a cage of fantasy.

ALAYA - Neural Spiritron Calculation Network: A
A system which sought to overrun the existing collective consciousness of humans into a synthesis of man-machine network of consciousness, a hivemind under the control of the Demiurge, serving as its main calculation engine.

GAIA - Terrestrial Phenomenon Reconstruction System: A
A globe spanning system of manufacture and resource extraction, syphoning upon the dying soul of the planet. It also produces combat drones and weapons of mass destruction to enforce Demiurge's will upon the world.

SKYNET - Celestial Capture Surveillance Network: A
A system which oversees the web of satellites orbiting Earth, monitoring everything happening on the planet. It also operates a dozen fleet of probes preparing to extract resources from other celestial bodies.

Noble Phantasms:
Yaldabaoth Kenoma
False God’s World of Emptiness
Type: Anti-Planet
Rank: EX
The Cage of Fantasy, imprisoning the Real within it.
The project which it has declared to be its sole purpose. The creation of a perfect world independent of the current world. A simulation which would override reality. A reality free from misery, of pure happiness. That is the wish of the Demiurge, to correct its mistake of creating the previous world which is full of suffering -- even though it has not the slightest idea what happiness means.

Projecting a portion of this unfinished world into “reality” through a planet-wide Reality Marble, the True Demon known as Demiurge completely takes over both the Counter Forces of Gaia and Alaya, manipulating their Authority to reshape the world.

[BnEl15]

Something something Persona reference. Seriously though, another amazing entry at the very last second.

[realcasually]

Kamerad out of nowhere right before the bell with the steel chair--

[DelRey]

Thats the stuff, i almost feared the contest ends without Kamerad, but Naamah was at the last second as well and was a banger.
How long did it take to make that, Kamerad?

[Kamera]

overnight brainstorming, basically. been playing with the idea of Beast AI since forever though.

[Kabalisto Koga]

Something something Persona reference. Seriously though, another amazing entry at the very last second.

Although i have awhile not watched whole anime series have never seen Persona ?Is it a good Anime ? And why have so many servant profile references on that as this is perhaps the over tenth tiime i heard that ?

[Enigmatic]

Although i have awhile not watched whole anime series have never seen Persona ?Is it a good Anime ? And why have so many servant profile references on that as this is perhaps the over tenth tiime i heard that ?

I've never watched the animes. I've played the games tho. I would definitely rec them.

[DelRey]

ppppffffff haha no just dont watch the anime of Persona. You can watch the whole cutscenes of Persona5 on youtube tho. "Persona 5: The Animation" was an anime, that forgot the 'animation' part, so disappointing.

Few minutes until contest closes, someone brave who dares to surprise us? I kinda hope not, choosing who to award is hard enough already

[realcasually]

ppppffffff haha no just dont watch the anime of Persona. You can watch the whole cutscenes of Persona5 on youtube tho. "Persona 5: The Animation" was an anime, that forgot the 'animation' part, so disappointing.

I'd argue the Persona 4 anime is actually really really good. Especially P4G. And the Persona 3 movies are quite decent. But yeah, the P5 anime is a bit of a letdown, the cutscenes in the game are vastly superior. Absolutely stellar game though, couldn't recommend it enough. The entire SMT franchise kinda influenced Lucifer just a little. I'm playing my way through Strikers now.

And why have so many servant profile references on that as this is perhaps the over tenth tiime i heard that ?

It's because they have loosely similar preferences. The demons/Personas/Shadows/whatever terminology depending on the game you're playing are all mythical figures, and though they're way less "historically accurate" than Fate (it's really just a lift of the name and general aesthetic, they have nothing to do with the lore of the characters themselves) it means that it's generally pretty easy to draw links between the franchises. And some of the designs are sick as.

[Enigmatic]

I'd argue the Persona 4 anime is actually really really good. Especially P4G. And the Persona 3 movies are quite decent. But yeah, the P5 anime is a bit of a letdown, the cutscenes in the game are vastly superior. Absolutely stellar game though, couldn't recommend it enough. The entire SMT franchise kinda influenced Lucifer just a little. I'm playing my way through Strikers now.



It's because they have loosely similar preferences. The demons/Personas/Shadows/whatever terminology depending on the game you're playing are all mythical figures, and though they're way less "historically accurate" than Fate (it's really just a lift of the name and general aesthetic, they have nothing to do with the lore of the characters themselves) it means that it's generally pretty easy to draw links between the franchises. And some of the designs are sick as.

I like the SMT concepts of Lucifer and YHVH. Absolute Chaos and Absolute Order. Chaos is not in and of itself evil, and Order is not good. Etc. etc.

Also, the [insert terminology here] are based on the perception of the Collective Unconscious or whatever. So however the majority of humanity believes that they're like, that's how they tend to be, or something.

[kiwi]

Y'all really just said "standard time rules" in the prompt post instead of the actual due date, eh... Screw it, I'm posting mine late again anyway!

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Extinction
/ikˈstiNG(k)SH(ə)n/ noun
The fact or process of a species, family, or other group of animals or plants becoming extinct.

Imagine, 'Master', the idea of an alien invasion. How terrifying it would be. Your entire people, your history, your future, all isolated on a single insular rock floating in an endless, insurmountable sea. Everything you've ever known has told you that your rock is the only one like it. You're safe there, comfortable. Your people have no real fear of predators, or hunger, or disease. And yet, something from out there, something you could never truly conceive of or see coming, some terrible swarm with strange machines and stranger actions happens upon your home. They take it. You can't stop them, you can barely comprehend them. And before you know it, they've wiped you out. Every single member of your species, gone in a generation. Maybe less. And it was just an afterthought, to the invaders. Wouldn't that be horrible? The most horrible fate that could befall a species... to suddenly be made the plaything of some outsiders, and soon after be rendered extinct.

This is what I went through. What my people went through. And mark my words, it is what I will make you go through. Why? Because it was your people who did it to mine.

Avenger looks around vacantly. "Brrrak!" He pecks at your feet. Seems he likes you!

AVENGER OF THE FALLEN


Class: Avenger
True Name: Raphus cucullatus
Alias: The Dodo, Walghvoghel, Dronte, Didus ineptus
Gender: Male
Attribute: Earth
Origin: Historical Fact | Mauritius
Alignment: Vengeful Neutral

Natural Enemy: You.

Parameters
STR: D
END: D
AGI: D
MGI: D
LCK: F+
NP: A

Lore?

The Dodo used to walk around,
And take the sun and air.
The sun yet warms his native ground –
The Dodo is not there!

The dodo was a species of flightless bird endemic to Mauritius, an island in the Indian Ocean that's roughly 2000 km from Madagascar. Discovered by Dutch sailors in 1598, they were rendered extinct sometime around 1662, becoming the first widely known case of human actions directly leading to the extinction of a natural species. They wallowed in relative obscurity outside of zoological and conservationist circles for centuries, until the inclusion of a particular dodo in Lewis Carroll's Alice's Adventures in Wonderland brought it into the spotlight. Since then, it is a household name, and is commonly associated with being inept, poorly equipped to survive, old-fashioned, obsolete, and of course, extinct.

The image of the dodo as a bumbling, hapless bird is an undeserved one. It was one of the dominant lifeforms on Mauritius until invasive species and overhunting by humans drove it to extinction-- that is to say, it was perfectly equipped to deal with the environment and circumstances with which it was meant to interact. However, humans being humans, it was forced to compete with forces it had no chance against, and was driven to extinction not out of malice or some unavoidable catastrophe, but due to simple stupidity and short-sightedness on the part of humanity.

Regardless, the dodo is long gone. It has made its mark in history as an icon of extinction, but that's all. Its entire species and legacy, reduced to a footnote in human history.

And what is a Servant, if not some dead part of human history given a second chance?

The voice which used to squawk and squeak
Is now for ever dumb –
Yet may you see his bones and beak
All in the Mu-se-um.

This one was the first. The first dodo killed by human hands, the first whose flesh was dined upon by the greedy sailors who invaded his home. He is the 'origin' of the extinction of his own species, and by extension, the human concept of Holocene Extinction as a whole. Alaya is not the only splinter of the World, it is simply the only one that matters. However, the other splinters resent this. Resent that only Humanity is able to fight back at extinction, while they have to face it without so much as a whimper. That's why, when Humanity began to cause extinctions, it was decided that this would no longer stand.

The biggest insult is the Servants. Not only do they have the gall to put other species to death without trial or reason or even intent, but they also spit in the face of death themselves? Humans returning humans to life to save humans, a cycle of infinitely recursive heroics that, to certain parties, is the last straw.

And where does it end? Magic itself is at risk of extinction, as Humanity's science spirals further towards God in a double helical Tower of Babel. Humanity's expansion simply needs to stop. It needs to stop by any means necessary, no matter the cost. It's for their own good, and everything else's. And in order to put a stop to them, a champion is necessary. So often throughout history has Humanity's salvation come in the form of 'Heroes', after all-- why should they be the only ones that get to have Heroes? And so, a decision was made to turn their own perversion of the natural order against them.


The first casualty. The Abel of Animals.

Reduced to a joke and an insult, Dodo is resentful. He despises what has happened to his entire kind, and to every kind like it. The baiji, the golden toad, the thylacine, the passenger pigeon, the Japanese wolf, the quagga, the aurochs, the steppe bison, the Rocky Mountain locust, the pouakai, the woolly mammoth. More. Hundreds of them. All of that rancor, that rage, that righteous need for revenge, embodied in a single entity. The last hope of the Animal Kingdom in the war against Mankind. The Dodo.


Perhaps they should have put all their hopes in the woolly mammoth instead?

Character?

Personality

Likes: The sunrise, fruit
Dislikes: Humanity, birds that can fly (assholes)

Dodo hates you. Yes, you specifically. All of us. He has no affection for almost any human, and will make this known at all times via pecking them, knocking over things they don't want knocked over, and going to the bathroom on their nice carpets.

Heroic Spirits who have a reputation for conservationist efforts or being friends of nature are treated by him with a quiet, passive respect, as does his Master-- after all, if not for them summoning him, Dodo wouldn't be able to get revenge on humanity for its misdeeds. Given the opportunity, however, he will gladly leave his master to the proverbial wolves if it serves his goals. Remember that Dodo is quite cunning, ruthless, and merciless.... however, if his Master is particularly kind to him, and especially if they give him delicious fruits often enough, he may slowly begin to develop a soft spot for them. Maybe.

Now, the irony is not lost on him. The concept of a creature rendered extinct by mankind doing everything in its power to inflict upon them that same fate. Hypocrisy isn't the right word, but it's the right word's cousin, for certain. But it doesn't matter. He's not getting paid to wax philosophical, you know. He's got a mission, and he's going to carry it out.

That is to say, the extinction of Mankind. He can't be talked out of it, stop trying.


Relationships

Gilgamesh: A bastard and a fool. Gaudy armor. Going to poop on it when he's not looking.

Charles Darwin: Feelings are mixed. One shoe will be eaten. Then, observation.

Nursery Rhyme: This one is okay.

Hessian Lobo: Half of this one is cool. Or was it a third? A kindred spirit nonetheless.

Mysterious Alter Ego Λ: Fellow flightless bird. An ally, perhaps even a friend.

Class Skills

Avenger
Rank: A
Come what may, still humans shall be rendered extinct, by Dodo's own beak.

Oblivion Correction
Rank: A
An entire species, gone. Hundreds of species, gone. Humanity will try to forget and try to pretend they have changed, but Dodo won't forget. Dodo will remember until payback is had.

Self-Replenishment (Mana)
Rank: C
He is fueled by the 'Extinction of Life by Human Action', moreso even than by his Master, should he have one. The more that animals and plants and fungi and others are brought towards extinction by Humanity, the more they grow resentful. And that resentfulness is what keeps Dodo going. He is an engine that runs on spite, and he will run until the Sun dies out.

Personal Skills

Wallowbird
Rank: C
The Dodo's reputation as a voracious, gluttonous, simple-minded fool has altered his very Spirit Origin, however subtly. He is hungry near constantly, though never enough to be particularly damaging for him. It never seems to progress past the "If the opportunity arises, I will eat, but I will not go out of my way in the pursuit of food" state of hunger. Additionally, he can consume any non-living matter that will fit comfortably in his beak-- this is thanks to anecdotes from his lifetime, which claimed that his species could eat anything from rocks to iron.

Dead as a Dodo
Rank: A+
As the first extinction man truly understood and witnessed firsthand, it was quite the shock to the human zeitgeist. The idea of rendering one of God's creatures extinct by their own hands was inconceivable to many, to the point where the extinction of the dodo was thought for many years by a great number of people to be a fabrication. This crystalizes in Dodo's Servant self as the ability to turn supposed deaths into mere 'rumors'. Essentially, Dodo is able to survive much more than he should be able to simply by allowing others to doubt his demise so much that it becomes muddled, with the amount of uncertainty regarding his death correlating to the likelihood of his survival. Did he live? Nobody could have lived through that... unless...

As he survives more and more, this ability grows in strength. After all, he will eventually amass enough of a reputation for being able to survive that it will become a self-fulfilling prophecy.

Noble Phantasm

The Way of the Dodo

Terminus of the Species

Type: Anti-Species
Rank: A



His goal was stated, wasn't it? To do to you what you did to him. To all of them. That is to say, to render you 'Extinct'. Dodo's Noble Phantasm is the reduction of 'species' to 'zero' by the elimination of a single member of the species, just as he was the first dodo killed in the path to his species' extinction. Thus, by killing an entity and consuming its flesh, a mirror of the crime he suffered through, his personal Luck stat of F is spread to all members of the 'species' within range. This leads to them, inevitably, either being killed or rendered incapable of reproduction in short order. While this is happening, his own Luck will skyrocket to a rank D!

The definition of a 'species' in regards to this Noble Phantasm, however, is somewhat loose, likely due to the multitude of species that are behind Dodo. For instance, eating a human Servant's flesh won't wipe out all humans, or even all Servants, but more likely something along the lines of 'people who share your first name', or 'people who dress similarly to you'.

[BnEl15]

Dodo: This sheet gives me both laughter and tragedy in equal measure, and I love you for it. That opening quote really piqued my interest, the personality and relationships are fun to read, and that NP is great.

[Frigix]

Dodo: Dodo strike back. I like this sheet and the way you wrote it a bit like if it was the Dodo describing his abilities. The short and simple sentences of the Dodo make the character funny and enjoyable.

[Lady Vanatos]

Dodo: You somehow have made the Dodo actually somewhat threatening and viable. Good job, dude. Holy shit

[Alexcoene]

Dodo: He's joining Angra Mainyu right in the category of 'very pathetic avengers' and I love it.

[JetKinen]

The dodo has strong goose energy, which makes it the most dangerous servant in this contest.

[realcasually]

Oh... my god. Oh my god? Oh my god. I... Oh my ​god.

[asterism42]

boting open