Originally Posted by
Arbitrarity
RB, I kinda feel like your line break formatting is bothering me, I'm guessing it's an artifact of whatever you use for editing? It just looks like you have 3 line breaks between each paragraph minimum, and up to 7 between segments, which would be tolerable with large paragraphs, but makes dialogue incredibly awkward looking. It's like you have double-spacing on in Word AND are putting a full line break between things at minimum.
You can put one break if you need the visual space, maybe 2 between sections, which does make things easier to read, but 3 just takes too much vertical real-estate in my mind.
Anyways, chapter! I'm not really surprised Erik didn't finish Jack off, and he's extremely vulnerable now with almost no legend left, unless he cracks the Gem (which would be unwise). Contracting with Mordred was entirely expected, doubly so since Amaterasu is dead, but also means he's going to be slower to mend, again, and he may not have time.
It's unfortunate that they don't expect Laeticia to have the "body backup" thing she does (at least in canon Apocrypha, though I'm unsure how thorough it is, especially against blessed poison), but that's definitely not a common case that anyone who hasn't read Apocrypha or had her explain it would expect, plus she's essentially helpless afterwards anyways. I am a bit surprised, given how much effort was spent protecting her, that Jeanne went out already, and didn't get to use most of her abilities. Notably, her ability to detect Servants (bypassing Presence Concealment) in a large area, and Revelation (literal plot armor), seem like they should have been effective against Jack as early detection, and her ability to use Command Spells should have probably been more impactful.