There's an explanation for their situation, obviously, but my problem is with the concept itself so the justification doesn't really change anything.
There's an explanation for their situation, obviously, but my problem is with the concept itself so the justification doesn't really change anything.
"I am Rider, if you recognize me as your Servant, the contract will be bound and my ghosts shall trample your enemies."
Class: Rider
Alignment: Lawful/Evil
Region: France
Height: 230cm
Weight: 65kg
Likes: Traveling, storms, arts
Dislikes: Liars, sunlight, priests
Talent: Traveling
Armaments: None
Natural Enemy: Mephistopheles
Stats
Str: C
End: C
Agi: B
Mna: A
Lck: A
NP: A
Skills
Noble Phantasm
Background
Personality
Last edited by the god of world-0; April 12th, 2020 at 03:42 PM.
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Dude I gotta say your inconsistency with capitalized words drives me crazy.
Why is "stats" not capitalized but the other section titles are? Why don't you capitalize the first word of every info on those sections, like "none"? Why are the spoilers always all capitalized except "personality"? Why is it "Noble phantasm" on the spoiler but "Noble Phantasm" on the text? Why is "rank" on their NPs level not capitalized?
Also, why is their quote centralized but not the faceclaim?
You're consistently do these exact things, I guess you're just copy-pasting the template... but do these not bother you when you do it?
I use the same template every time, so I guess the capitalization mistakes end up carrying over.
Thankfully, I should be less of a problem now that I fixed the template itself, still won't account for future mistakes though so I will apologize preemptively for that, sorry.
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So, is that all that is wrong with the sheets?
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No need to apologize, I'm the one being the nitpicking asshole. They're good now.
It's okay if it leads to an improvement. I know grammar is my week spot, so I am thankful for this kind of things.
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Fate / White Memoria
Big trilemma. On one hand, the two recent LB chapters got me tempted into making my... 6th? Diomedes sheet. On the other hand, I feel like there's some information that'd be really useful for this that will most likely only show up in Mats 9 next year (mostly regarding Odysseus, Caenis and the Olympians). And of course, there is the persitent problem of Diomedes being a 2800-years-old Gary Stu, whatever character development or flaws he may have had lost alongside the Theban Cycle and 75% of the Epic cycle.
I've spent the last three days digging through Wikipedia's references and Wikipedia's references' references, and the only "new" thing I could find is some whack and not very well accepted theory that he's an aboriginal god, the same guy as Diomedes of Thrace, and got degraded by Homer for the Iliad (and by 10 other authors I guess). Which I guess is the same treatment the Dioscuri got and could make for an interesting thing, but is also not what I wanna do?
Last edited by Zork Knight; April 14th, 2020 at 09:57 PM.
Well, you could do another sheet for the Greeks section (like say for any lesser Gods or Titans if you don't want to do anymore human or demigod sheets) rather than do Diomedes for the umpteenth time? Or given Chaos' role at the tail end of LB 5.2, make sheets out of him and/or his children the Primordial Deities?
I suppose waiting a year for the ineviatble update is better than doing it now and then again in a year
But I suppose there is another Greek sheet I've made that could benefit from an update in this Greek robot frenzy... or rather, inspire something else.
Do it, you know yo want to.
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AssassinGender: Female
Queen of Pain
Alignment: Lawful Evil
Attribute: Man
STR: B+
CON: A+
AGI: D
MAG: E
LUK: C
NP: C+
Skills
Noble Phantasms
Lore and Personality
Last edited by Zork Knight; April 15th, 2020 at 09:16 PM.
Step on me, S-partan mommy
AWAKEN MY RULERS
For the right price
Her interlude is going around putting Servants with increasingly high ranks of Golden Rule on a chokehold until they yield their money
The Little Match Caster
"I am Caster."
Faceclaim
True Name: The Little Match Girl
Class: Caster
Region: Denmark
Alignment: True Neutral
Armament: None
Parameters:
STR: E
END: D-
AGI: E
MAG: D
LCK: B
NP: C
Class Skills
Personal Skills
Noble Phantasm
Lore
Personality
Last edited by Vance; April 16th, 2020 at 03:15 PM.
Servant Rider:
Appearance:
True Name: Huang Gai
Alignment: Lawful Good
Alternate Classes: Lancer, Archer
Armament: A heavy iron rod that can also be segmented and lashed about like a whip.
Strength- B
Agility- B
Endurance- C
Mana- E
Luck- B
NP- C
Personality
Class Skills:
Riding- B
The ability to ride animals and handle vehicles. At this rank, most mundane mounts can be ridden at an above average degree of skill, but not Phantasmal or Divine Beasts.
Magic Resistance- D
Confers protection against magical effects. At this rank, only Single-Action spells are nullified. Magic Resistance equivalent in degree to an amulet that rejects magical energy.
Personal Skills:
Battlefield Discipline- C
Rider was a severe disciplinarian who didn't hesitate to brutally punish his own men when they strayed from the righteous path he instilled for them, and that draconian nature has been expressed in this Skill. Emulates a Charisma equivalent at rank C, raising the abilities of Rider's allies in group battles, but punishes them with the equivalent damage of a D-ranked attack should they make a mistake or go against his orders.
Advice Of The Strategist- B
A Skill given to military-affiliated Servants. By grasping and analyzing the situation, correct advice can be given to one's allies. The higher the rank, the better the probability of the advice given being correct. This Skill is the sublimation of Rider's bold tactical mind that set fire to his own ships to ram them into the fleet of his rival Cao Cao.
Espionage- C
A Skill that doesn't conceal one's presence, but rather makes one's presence fail to register as hostile. This Skill causes others to misunderstand one's status, including mistaking one for a kind neighbor, a harmless pebble, or as their most trusted ally. Rider possesses this Skill from the anecdote where he feigned defecting to Cao Cao's side to lure him into a trap. Rider even had his own general severely flog him to make the ruse more believable.
Noble Phantasm
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So here's a new sheet from me. I was a bit inspired by Dynasty Warriors' version of the guy (mainly his personality), but I tried to go with my own take as well.
As usual, any comments and critiques will be received warmly. Thanks for reading!
Last edited by RoydGolden; April 23rd, 2023 at 04:50 PM. Reason: Swapped out 1st Skill
The NP being using the "mounts" as a kind of Broken Phantasm is a good way to make it more interesting than just summoning ships on fire. His first skill, however, is a bit too simple. Since you say he used to punish his own men, you could include an effect like Charisma E (rising the abilities of allies but decreasing their morale), or making him hurt his allies if they make a mistake.
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I considered making his NP a Reality Marble where he summons burning ships to ram into the enemy, but I figured that'd be too generic. Glad you liked what I did go with. And fair enough about his first Skill. It is a bit simple. I basically intended it to be Huang's variation of the Execution Skill, with the effects and flavor-text reworked to suit his own legend. I'll consider the ideas you suggested though.
Last edited by RoydGolden; April 16th, 2020 at 06:53 PM.
I feel like turning her into a Foreigner worked against you. Having her contract with an Outer God when she's already so tied to a real one doesn't work out, it ends up as a character that doesn't really remind you of Arachne as the Lovecraftian element is so more prominent than her actual story. I think Having a Noble Phantasm solely to justify her looking like Elise seems a bit much, and Arachne being powerful enough to affect an entire city just doesn't seem right.
Also, I think willingly working for the Outer God kinda goes against the concept of a Foreigner to begin with.
I like her whole dedication to truth, specially how casual she sounds about it, but it kinda got buried underAtlach-Nacha.