Create-A-Servant 3

**Perry Ellis.** · June 30th, 2020, 11:16 PM

Lancer of Industry
“Hello master, so I’ve been summoned as a Lancer this time? Well not to fret, We will still able to forge humanity’s light. Come now master, there’s not a moment to waste!”

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Class: Lancer (Caster)
Alignment: Lawful / Good

True Name

Info

Stats and Deck

Class and Personal Skills

Noble Phantasms

Background

Lancer was born into a family of modest wealth. Not one of power but also not one that lived paycheck to paycheck. During his formative years, lancer often complained about his schooling being to boring an easy. This boredom accompanied Lancer until he approached the railway engineer Charles Nepveu, who quickly noticed Lancer’s potential and took lancer under his wing.

At the end of 1866 Lancer managed to borrow enough money to set up his own workshops at 48 Rue Fouquet in Levalois-Perret. Where he began to quickly grow a name for himself in the world of architecture. Most notably creating two bridges in both Spain and South America. By the Exposition Universelle in 1878 firmly established his reputation as one of the leading engineers of the time.

Then then his first marvel was born. In 1881 Lancer was contacted by Auguste Bartholdi who was in need of an engineer to help him to realise the Statue of Liberty. Lancer then devised a structure consisting of a four legged pylon to support the copper sheeting which made up the body of the statue. The entire statue was erected at the Eiffel works in Paris before being dismantled and shipped to the United States.

After the birth of this modern marvel and representation of freedom Lancer took to planning his next miracle. The design for his tower was exhibited at the Exhibition of Decorative Arts in the autumn of 1884. The tower had been a subject of some controversy, attracting criticism both from those who did not believe it feasible and from those who objected on artistic grounds. Just as work began at the Champ de Mars, the "Committee of Three Hundred" (one member for each metre of the tower's height) was formed, led by Charles Granier and including some of the most important figures of the French arts establishment. However, Lancer was able to complete it I’m just a mere 2 years since breaking ground. Completing a modern marvel akin to pyramids in Egypt. The tower was later named after him. Lancer spoke of this tower as not only modern art, but also the culmination of the last era and it’s impact on the freedom of humanity and science.

Lancer is not normally what one would call a heroic spirit. In life he did not fight some great evil or was born of divine lineage, instead lancer was called upon by the throne of heroes due to the fame two of his most iconic works have gained and the emotions they inspire. As long as those monuments stand, Lancer’s memories cannot vanish. lancer is normally summoned in the CASTER class, if a spark of hope is added to the incantation for his summon, he can manifest in the LANCER class. If summoned in the CASTER class, his Noble Phantasms retain the same name but change effects.

Personality & Lines

**RoydGolden** · June 30th, 2020, 11:37 PM

Eiffel: Pretty good sheet. I like how you fleshed out Skills that aren't very well described in canon, like Light Of Possibilities. Have to say, for his second NP, I don't really get why being a "symbol of hope" equates to cutting off Servants' connection to leylines. Maybe I just wasn't reading closely enough, but I feel like you could include a bit more flavor-text explaining why the concept equates to that effect.

Also, do you have any thoughts on my Kaguyahime sheet?

**King of Padoru** · July 1st, 2020, 06:34 AM

Eiffel: Though you've done a good work with the descriptions of skills, I'm a bit disappointed with the lack of mentions about his knowledge of aerodynamics and its usage in his works. As for the Eiffel Tower NP, its effects feel weird and would need to be fleshed out. Being one of the most popular monuments in the world, I'd say it could act as a powerful NP that could probably equal something from the Age of Gods, making up for its lack of Mystery with its incredible Fame (as well as the fact that it's said that only a hurricane or a nuke would be able to make it fall, so it could be very tanky). Maybe it could do something like nullifying Fame from other Servants, excepting those that boast equal or superior renown (Heracles for example).

**Perry Ellis.** · July 1st, 2020, 12:50 PM

Kaguyahime: looks good to me. While I don’t know a lot about her legend, you know besides what you provided, I think that you were able to stick true to her legend while adding your own flair. I also liked the 5 in one noble phantasm idea you came up with, that is something lthat ive like about a lot of cannon servants that have something similar like ushiwakamaru or herc alter in strange fake.

as for Eiffel, I went back and overhauled the noble phantasm. Tbh I was kind of stuck creatively in how i wanted to do his NP, so I just went with my other idea and as I began to write it out I feel like I was able to explain this other idea better.

@King of Pandora, the lack of his aerodynamics accomplishments is mostly due to both me not really looking up to see what they were and the reasoning I gave as to why he can be summoned. I was going more so for him being the vessel that both the Eiffel Tower and Statue of Liberty would be summoned into like voyager in requiem.

**Kabalisto Koga** · July 1st, 2020, 01:05 PM

Originally Posted by Perry Ellis.

Kaguyahime: looks good to me. While I don’t know a lot about her legend, you know besides what you provided, I think that you were able to stick true to her legend while adding your own flair. I also liked the 5 in one noble phantasm idea you came up with, that is something lthat ive like about a lot of cannon servants that have something similar like ushiwakamaru or herc alter in strange fake.

as for Eiffel, I went back and overhauled the noble phantasm. Tbh I was kind of stuck creatively in how i wanted to do his NP, so I just went with my other idea and as I began to write it out I feel like I was able to explain this other idea better.

@King of Pandora, the lack of his aerodynamics accomplishments is mostly due to both me not really looking up to see what they were and the reasoning I gave as to why he can be summoned. I was going more so for him being the vessel that both the Eiffel Tower and Statue of Liberty would be summoned into like voyager in requiem.

your Eifel is quite good i must say annd the Concept of the Tower is now better i must say and i havent thought of him as Lancer honestly please tell me aside of his noblephantasm how can he fight in a Grailwar respectively is he perhaps more a support servant himself ? like as Lancer he must have some form of physical prowess to an Degree .

and About similar servants i made a Jimmu servant which has a similar noblephantasm like Alcides Kings order and because you mentioned Voyager that reminds me that i once made a servant out of the Titanic which i called Titanica .feel free to look at them and if you do , i am cuurious About your oppinion !

**Perry Ellis.** · July 1st, 2020, 01:57 PM

Originally Posted by Kabalisto Koga

your Eifel is quite good i must say annd the Concept of the Tower is now better i must say and i havent thought of him as Lancer honestly please tell me aside of his noblephantasm how can he fight in a Grailwar respectively is he perhaps more a support servant himself ? like as Lancer he must have some form of physical prowess to an Degree .

and About similar servants i made a Jimmu servant which has a similar noblephantasm like Alcides Kings order and because you mentioned Voyager that reminds me that i once made a servant out of the Titanic which i called Titanica .feel free to look at them and if you do , i am cuurious About your oppinion !

thanks for taking a look at him, ya I would say he is more of a support servant. The Maine idea behind him being a Lancer is his noble phantasm the conceptualization of a giant metal spike in the ground But also due to the large beams he worked with and other large rod like materials he worked with. Lnacer also isn’t his natural class, this class more so emphasizes the meaning behind his two most iconic works and what they represent. His caster class is his more natural class and better fits his fighting style.

basically he’s a caster summoned in the vessel of a lancer which makes him a little more durable but not by very much.

**Kabalisto Koga** · July 1st, 2020, 07:29 PM

Originally Posted by King of Padoru

Thanks for notifying, Koga. I'll get to fix it.

I had a quick look at your contest sheet. It was funny that you decided to go with Persephone too, and it's definitely an improvement from your past sheets, even if it still has some flaws (after all this time I shouldn't ask you to do it, but PLEASE try to fix your grammar). Hopefully we see more sheets from you with at least this level of quality

I have now read your Persephone (and Triptolamus) and i think you made also a good one i like their noblephantasm with exception of Chthonikós Iliostásio as the part "eternall" is for me a bit much i must say . I am curious plöease answer me how your Persephone fin and think of my Persephone ? as our versions are a bit different as my Persephone annd Hades Version has more romance in it and so on ?

It is good to know that i made improvements (really!) About the Grammar and the rest i try my best to make improvements ,and i know that to hold the Quality Level is more difficult then to improve .

so i try my best with the next which will be as Variety not a Greek servant but a northern Explorer which reminds me have you (or someone) has a Picture of a middleaged Explorer or adventurer as i have in my Picture list no Fitting for him ?

**BnEl15** · July 2nd, 2020, 04:24 AM

Caster of Remembrance

"Whatever it is humans have accomplished in life, they are bound to forget. Ufufu, now that I think about it, that seems rather sad, don't you think? That is why I have taken it upon myself to remember each and every one of them. It's the least I could do, both for the masses, and for my dear beloved. It's rather ironic, really; the Lady of Forgetfulness can never allow herself to forget."

"Hm? Is it painful to remember, you ask? Ufufu, I believe you are familiar with the answer, Master of Chaldea. Of course, it could be painful, but through that, I learned of the wonders of humanity as well. Besides, if I don't remember them... Who else will? In a few millennia, who else will bear proof that they once existed?"

Class: Caster
Other Classes: -
True Name: Meng Po
Alignment: Lawful Good
Origin: Chinese Mythology

Parameters:

STR: E
END: B
AGI: D
MGI: A
LCK: E
NP: A

Likes: Her husband, stories of humans, tea
Dislikes: Separation, being too late, overworking
Talent: Brewing tea, giving life advice
Natural Enemy: Qin Shi Huang
Armament: Magecraft, wraiths
Catalyst: Tea made with white and yellow chrysanthemums (not normally summonable)

Class Skills

Personal Skills

Human Observation
Rank: A+

A technique to observe and understand people. At this level, it is not simply observing but the capacity to hypothesize about one's livelihoods and preferences, and even the lives of people whose name are unknown. This requires a tremendous memory that does not forget easily. As the self-proclaimed final preserver of human memories, Caster has spent centuries getting acquainted with countless people, accompanying them in their final moments. Through this, she came to know both the best and worst things humanity has to offer. This grants her the highest possible rank in this skill.

Authority of Diyu
Rank: C

A set of blessings Caster possesses due to her ties to the Chinese underworld, Diyu. This skill allows Caster to summon wraiths to aid her, as well as wield and resist magecraft with ties to death and the underworld. As the Diyu is also tailored to punish sinners, it also grants her parameters a plus modifier whenever she fights against those possessing evil alignment. As she does not serve as a true ruler of Diyu, Caster can only manifest a small portion of this authority. Most of the time, she also seems reluctant to invoke this skill due to her pacifistic, non-combative nature.

Soothing Fragrance of Chrysanthemums
Rank: A

A skill denoting Caster's status as one who accompanies humans in their last moments. In Chinese mythology, Chrysanthemums are often considered symbols of death, embodying not only the grief and lamentation associated with one's own mortality, but also purity and acceptance, symbolized by white chrysanthemums in particular. The flower signifies that one has come to terms with their life, absolved of their sins, and ready to embark on their next life, either back to the cycle of

Samsara

reincarnation

or into the light of

Moksha

Enlightenment

. As a Servant, Caster carries an incense emitting the soft fragrance of chrysanthemums with her. The scent imposes the concept of "acceptance" within her vicinity; hostile impulses are suppressed, while the power of weapons and Noble Phantasms are significantly reduced. Skills that support the concept of hostility (including but not limited to Madness Enhancement, Berserk and Determination of Steel) may have their effectiveness reduced by up to two ranks. If one is exposed to the fragrance for too long, they may begin to hallucinate; the soothing fragrance may envelop them, taking the form of deceased loved ones embracing them gently, uttering things such as "It's okay, you don't have to fight anymore", further weakening their resolve. It takes a high level of mental fortitude to resist the effects of this skill.

Noble Phantasm(s)

Five-Flavored Tea of Forgetfulness
Yíwàng Zhī Shuǐ

Type: Anti-Mind
Rank: B
Range: -
Max Targets: 1

Caster's primary Noble Phantasm, a cup of tea made from herbs found in Diyu, served to her visitors just before they reenter the cycle of reincarnation. The tea induces instant and permanent amnesia of one's entire entire life, ensuring that they are ready to embark on their next journey. Having been purged of all previous sins and knowledge, the spirit is returned to the cycle, their place determined by the karma accrued in their previous lives. This Noble Phantasm has a number of different effects depending on the target and the dosage. If consumed by a human, it simply causes a temporary combination of retrograde and anterograde amnesia (referred as global amnesia) lasting up to a week. After all, the target has not been considered "dead" yet for the tea to unleash its full effects.

A more interesting application occurs when the tea is consumed by those who had died at least once before, including Heroic Spirits and extinct Phantasmals. The smallest dose of this tea disrupts procedural memory, reducing their combat capabilities and sealing personal skills. With higher dose, one would gradually lose their long-term memory. Heroic Spirits would lose access to their Noble Phantasms as they forgot their own legends. Finally, should a Heroic Spirit finish a whole serving of tea, there is a high chance that their existence would fade and return to the Throne of Heroes. After all, once one has completely forgot everything about themselves, one becomes an existence without wish, purpose, and desire. In such a state, what else is there to do but reenter

The Throne

Samsara

? Furthermore, as the tea is considered "a natural occurrence to follow in the cycle of life after death", it is not recognized as an attack. Thus, the notion of defending against it is meaningless; no amount of poison resistance or mental fortification skills may undo the effects of this tea once it is consumed.

Inverse-Colored Tea of Remembrance
Jìniàn Zhī Shuǐ

Type: Anti-Mind
Rank: A
Range: -
Max Targets: 1

Caster's second Noble Phantasm. It is not something that she originally possessed in her legend. Rather, it is the result of centuries of trial and error. Occasionally, Caster encountered those who had lost their sense of self. Perhaps they succumbed to madness, or they had long abandoned their ideals and the things they believed in. Whatever the case, Caster pitied these individuals, and offered to grant them one last vision of clarity before reincarnating their souls. Caster achieved this through another concoction, made from ingredients found in Diyu, supported by her own special branch of magecraft.

A complete inversion of her first Noble Phantasm, drinking this concoction allows one to completely regain their sense of self, no matter how faded or fractured it might have been. It puts the target in a state of mind closest to how they were in life. For a Servant, this may mean unsealing forgotten skills and Noble Phantasm, while nullifying anything that interferes with their sense of self (including but not limited to command spell orders, irregular summoning circumstances, Grail mud, and skills such as Madness Enhancement and Innocent Monster) for the remainder of their summoning. It can be a double-edged blade, depending on the target. For example, removing a Berserker's madness while allowing them to retain their high physical parameters may be advantageous for some. On the other hand, for Heroic Spirits who rely solely on Madness Enhancement or Innocent Monster to fight, drinking this tea may significantly weaken them to the point where they're not much stronger compared to the average human. As this concoction is unrecorded in her legend, Caster does not have it as readily available as her tea of forgetfulness. It requires considerably more mana and raw ingredients to brew, and Caster can only make smaller doses of it at a time.

Description

Caster's True Name is Meng Po, a minor deity serving in the tenth and final level of Diyu, the Chinese underworld.

Caster is best described as a gentle old lady, oftentimes referred as "everyone's grandma" in Chaldea. Having resided in Diyu and encountered countless humans over the ages, Caster possesses extensive wisdom and innumerable larger-than-life advice to bestow to others. Perhaps related to her job, she also possesses boundless interest in humanity. She enjoys hearing the life stories of other Heroic Spirits, marveling at their exploits and sympathizing with their plights. She is especially fond of Chinese Heroic Spirits, acting overly familiar around them like a doting grandmother and claiming that she had met them numerous times before.

As the owner of an otherworldly, supernatural tea house in Diyu, it goes without saying that Caster is fond of tea. In fact, concocting and experimenting with new recipes for tea has been her favorite pastime whenever she finds herself with nothing else to do in Diyu. Normally, she serves her tea of forgetfulness after a meaningful final conversation with her visitor, once they had fully accepted their fate and was ready for their next life. Ideally, she prefers to use her first Noble Phantasm under the same circumstances, but she knows that the battlefield is rarely that kind. Thus, if it is truly impossible for her to recreate her ideal circumstances, she would not hesitate to resort to more devious means such as mixing her tea into other food or drinks in the hope of getting her target to consume it no matter what.

Despite having worked in Diyu for centuries, Caster never once forgot her deepest desire; her initial reason for joining. Caster's wish to the Grail would be to see her husband once again. She is not entirely certain if the Grail could grant her wish, but if it couldn't... Then she'll wait, just as she always had. Even if it would take her another tens of thousands of years in Diyu, she wholeheartedly embraces the memories of her long lost love.

Lore

Once upon a time in the Qin dynasty, there lived a woman named Meng Jiang. Lady Meng was married to a low-ranking civil officer. The two lived in poverty, yet they knew that they always had each other, and thus they were able to get through each day with a smile. Despite their meager income and poor living conditions, they were happy.

It all changed one day when Lady Meng's husband was pressed into service by imperial officials and sent as labor force to build the Great Wall of China. From then on, Lady Meng rarely saw her husband. He would disappear for months at a time for his work, with no way to contact him. Eventually, her husband stopped coming home. Worried, Lady Meng set out to bring him winter clothes. Unfortunately, by the time she reached the Great Wall, she was too late; it was revealed that her husband had already died due to overworking. Hearing the bad news, she wept so bitterly that a part of the Great Wall collapsed, revealing his bones. And so, not long after, Lady Meng passed away, unable to bear the pain of losing her beloved.

Normally, whenever a soul passed on, they would pass through the ten levels of Diyu, each of them granting a specific punishment for their sins, before reentering the cycle of reincarnation once they had been purified of their sins. The process is overseen by Yama, the King of Diyu, and his ten appointed officers, each of them responsible for one level of Diyu. Yama was surprised by one particular soul; she had passed all ten levels of Diyu, but her grief is too strong for her to reincarnate. She refused to forget her husband, no matter how much Yama had tried to persuade her. Eventually, Yama took an interest in the woman. Instead of overseeing the process of reincarnation himself, he appointed her as the new overseer. Thus, the minor deity Meng Po was born.

Meng Po serves in the tenth level of Diyu. Her job is to ensure that souls who are ready to be reincarnated do not remember their previous life or their time in Diyu. She does this by serving her five-flavored tea of forgetfulness, made from herbs and water from ponds and streams in Diyu. This is given to each soul to drink before they leave Diyu. The brew induces instant and permanent amnesia, and all memory of other lives is lost.

Having been purged of all previous sins and knowledge, the dead spirit is sent to be reborn in a new earthly incarnation according to the karma accrued over their previous lifetimes, and the cycle begins again. In Chinese tradition, there are legends of miracle births, where a newborn is able to speak because the soul of the baby didn't drink the Five Flavored Tea of Forgetfulness. Occasionally people are able to avoid drinking the brew, resulting in past life memories surfacing in children.

Unlike the previous hellish landscapes of Diyu, Meng Po's domain consists of a serene field of chrysanthemums, with a small tea house in the middle of the field. The tea house's interior is tailored to suit each visitor, based on their interests and experiences in life. Here, Meng Po made it her personal duty to listen to their final concerns. At times, her visitors shared stories of their lives, their loved ones, their wishes and regrets. Meng Po listened to these stories with patience and interest, occasionally offering words of wisdom and comfort to her visitors. After her visitor had fully come to terms with their fate, she offered them her tea, and accompanied them to the world beyond.

Relationships

Creator's Notes

**Kabalisto Koga** · July 2nd, 2020, 08:41 AM

M eng Po: interesting servant i must say BnEl25 (beside i wonder why have you Chose this Name actually to be honest?) ,could you perhaps Name one or two examples of the artifacts or weapons she can create ? Also ist interesting as i work one two servants which also are having to do with it (the underworld) one is spoiler wise Charon im curious what would she think of my Persephone or Hades given that both are basically Yamas Greek Counterparts ? and as you seem that you have deeper Knowledge in asian mythology and legends could i later ask you if i Need some tipps ?like where would you say are lies your forte ?

**BnEl15** · July 2nd, 2020, 09:41 AM

Thanks. On Charon, Hades, Persephone, and other underworld deities, she relates well to them and looks forward to exchange stories since maintaining the underworld for centuries is a very lonely job (she slightly envies Hades and Persephone, although she would never say it). On artifacts and weapons, she mostly uses it to summon incenses and ingredients to make her tea. Technically she could summon copies of weapons belonging to Yama and his ten officials due to her position, but she prefers not to since she's not exactly good at wielding it, and she couldn't access the weapons' special properties either.

**Kamera** · July 3rd, 2020, 01:53 AM

If this much suffering and sorrow is the will of the gods.
Then to protect the weak and vulnerable creature they have abandoned and mocked,
With this blade that brought ‘the Twilight of the Gods’
I declare war on the gods!

**RoydGolden** · July 3rd, 2020, 04:24 PM

Servant Foreigner:

Appearance:

True Name: Antoine de Saint-Exupery

Alignment: Neutral Good

Alternate Classes: Caster, Rider

Strength- D
Agility- B+
Endurance- C
Mana- B
Luck- C
NP- A

Personality

Class Skills:

Existence Beyond The Domain- N/A
A Skill nominally inherent to the Foreigner Class, asserting their existence outside of time and reality. Due to being overwritten by his Vanishing Flight Personal Skill, this Skill has been lost.

Divinity- B
Qualifies one's aptitude as a Divine Spirit. Foreigner unknowingly became the earthly vessel of Hastur, a Great Old One. As such he possesses B-rank in this Skill.

Insanity- C
A Mental Pollution-like Skill gained from contracting with an evil god that can easily erode the fragile common sense and morals of humans. However, the main qualification for the Foreigner Class is being able to defy this erosion, either by maintaining their integrity as they descend into madness or, instead of being consumed by the madness, they consume the madness itself.

Due to his childish wonder and curiosity Foreigner can mostly resist the Great Old One's attempted encroachment on his psyche. It can be said that upon seeing an eldritch horror that exists beyond time and reality, instead of freaking out Foreigner's reaction would be to merely remark "That's so cool!" with a starry look in his eyes. Since he lacks the common sense to be horrified, Hastur is unable to drive him insane. Much to the Great Old One's frustration...

Personal Skills:

Child At Heart- C+
A Skill given to those who have a naturally childlike temperament that they retained well into adulthood. Foreigner obtains this Skill due to having written the book

Le Petit Prince

The Little Prince

, where through the titular character he idolized a child's innocent wonder for the world while looking down on the drab "common sense" of adults.

His natural childlike mentality is perhaps the reason Foreigner managed to glimpse the Great Old One Hastur without going irrevocably insane, for he lacked the preconceptions of common sense that would normally be obliterated at the sight of such an alien being. This Skill allows Foreigner to block out mental influencing thaumaturgy as well as see through many kinds of disguises.

The latter isn't some extrasensory ability, but simply a child's knack for seeing the world from an unusual perspective and noticing details others would overlook.

Navigator Of The Skies- B
Ability to pilot aircraft and other flying vehicles. Like its naval counterpart, this includes Charisma and Military Tactics of the same rank. At this rank, one can handle most airborne vehicles from the modern era at a high degree of skill and perform all kinds of dazzling aerodynamic maneuverings.

Foreigner was a famous aviator as well as a novelist. He embarked on many daring flights throughout his life and several of his books were even exaggerated retellings of his own adventures in the sky.

Mana Burst (Wind)- C
Denotes a boost in performance by way of infusing one's body and weaponry with magical power and instantly expelling it. Simply put, recreating the effects of a jet-burst by expending vast amounts of magical energy. In Foreigner's case, Mana expelled through this Skill is expressed as windy gusts.

He mainly uses this Skill while flying to simply give a steady guiding breeze to his plane. But Foreigner can also apply this Skill in combat, jettisoning concussive blasts of wind from his palms to send foes flying or compressing it into razor-thin gales that can slice flesh. This Skill is a boon from Foreigner's patron god Hastur, the Great Old One of Wind and Air.

Vanishing Flight- A
A unique Skill born from one of the greatest mysteries surrounding Foreigner, the legend of his fateful last flight over the Mediterranean. While it's believed he got shot down in the war, his body was never found with certainty and what truly happened to Foreigner remains an enigma in this day.

In reality, Foreigner vanished from the World itself, taken up to Hastur's realm Carcosa by the god who intended to keep him for eternity. However, thanks to his great skill as an aviator Foreigner managed to escape being caught in Hastur's realm and instead continued flying. To this day he sails the multiverse in his plane, encountering alien wonders and fantastical new worlds unthinkable to Earth.

This Skill entails a simple but far-reaching effect. The ability to transgress any boundaries, physical or magical, that would stand in the way of his exploration. Through this Skill Foreigner can appear in places that'd be normally impossible for him to reach. On the low end it would enable him to infiltrate an enemy Servant's erstwhile impregnable fortress. A more extreme invocation of the same effect would be for Foreigner to enter another person's Reality Marble or even the Reverse Side of the World. However, Foreigner is only able to use this Skill while piloting a plane or some manner of flying machine.

A fitting ability for one who, in both his writings and life, strove to continually challenge the borders of imagination into the unknown...

Incidentally, a very similar Skill as this would probably be held by a certain American aviator famed for the legend of her mysterious vanishing...

Noble Phantasms

So this is my third Foreigner sheet. I wanted to do a Saint-Exupery sheet after Padoru brought up Eiffel's aeronautics accomplishments and it made me think of what other famous figures were associated with planes while being mostly famous for other things. At first I was going to make him a Rider but I couldn't think of enough interesting Skills and NPs for him.

That's when I remembered The Little Prince was partially based on his real-life account of being stranded in the desert and decided to use that connection to say he had a vision of an "alien entity" at that time, which was actually Hastur (since Hastur is titled the "King In Yellow" it makes some sense he'd appear as a blonde boy IMO). The somewhat mysterious story of his disappearance also helped me inject some eldritch spookiness into the sheet.

As usual comments and critiques would be welcome. Thanks for reading!

**Kamera** · July 3rd, 2020, 06:19 PM

some reviews for sheet that hasn't got one

Ariadne/Arachne
Lots of effort in this one, for sure. I like the idea of fusing Ariadne and Arachne, but the execution isn't really great, the sheet just don't really synch up together well, and feels like two different completely unrelated persons that can conveniently become the other person whenever they want.

For the technicals, the Magecraft skill could have been changed to a more specific kind of magecraft she uses, and most of the details seems to have been covered by Item Construction skill. Arachne's skills could just be packed into a single skill, and the last two skills might as well be Noble Phantasms, even as Caster. Most importantly, she lacks a skill or noble phantasm that connects the two legends of Arachne and Ariadne.

Olaf Tryggvason
Solid sheet overall, great character, the second Noble Phantasm is pretty cool. However, I think the skillset are a bit lacking. Protection of the Faith, even if false, seems odd for him to have, I suggest changing this skill to something that more reflective of him being the key figure of transitioning old pagan belief to Chirstianity, something like Nobu perhaps. Lastly I think both the first and third Noble Phantasms could be converted into a skill instead, just because they don't really feel like Noble Phantasms.

Antoine de Saint-Exupery
I'm not really a fan of Foreigner servants, frankly, and the the Little Prince being inspired by Hastur isn't really a concept I approve. That aside, the character and sheet is pretty neat. However some suggestions. The first Noble Phantasm might as well be turned into a Skill, maybe synergized with the Mana Burst. Lastly, Navigator of the Skies is a weird skill to have considering he was a solo pilot.

That said, any thoughts on my last two sheets?

**RoydGolden** · July 3rd, 2020, 07:28 PM

Originally Posted by Kamerad

Antoine de Saint-Exupery
I'm not really a fan of Foreigner servants, frankly, and the the Little Prince being inspired by Hastur isn't really a concept I approve. That aside, the character and sheet is pretty neat. However some suggestions. The first Noble Phantasm might as well be turned into a Skill, maybe synergized with the Mana Burst. Lastly, Navigator of the Skies is a weird skill to have considering he was a solo pilot.

That said, any thoughts on my last two sheets?

Thanks for the feedback man. I see what you mean that his first NP is a bit simplistic and might work better as a Skill. Mainly I wanted to give him one NP that represented purely the human side of his legend, so it wasn't just all Hastur stuff. Navigator Of The Skies is just my generic name for a pilot Skill that I've used for a few other sheets already. It'd feel weird to change it, even if the name doesn't quite fit him.

And your last Hodr sheet quite good. I like how you assimilated Mistilteinn with the demonic sword of the same name. Works to flesh it out better. Evoking Mistletoe's nature as a parasitic plant to explain how it bonds itself to his saint graph was a nice touch too. Thematically, the fact that he uses the same power that brought about his greatest regret to try and protect others is wonderfully ironic and I feel like he'd make a really fascinating character to see explored in a Grail War fic. His first NP blooming a flower that presumably erupts from within the enemy's body and scattering seeds everywhere is also a really cool, morbid bit of imagery.

**Perry Ellis.** · July 4th, 2020, 12:10 AM

Höðr: Absolutely love this sheet. I like how you were able to incorporate Lancer’s legend with not just his personality but also his skills and NP. When I was reading his NP and skills, I really felt like I was able to get an insight into his character and how sorry he must feel for killing Baldr. His NP in particular was a highlight for me, it was a great idea for him to combine with mistletoe as a function of his np. Also like Roydgolden said I thought I was a nice touch that he ultimate transforms into something that can protect his master because of his greatest mistake.

Antoine de Saint Expuery: another good sheet. Though I get some voyager vibes from him (child like innocence skill) I still think this was well done. I like your reasoning for why hatsur is the old one he identifies with p, not just the color scheme but because he’s a pilot and hatsur’s domain. His NP of locking his enemy in a reality marble is also a good idea and your pairing of it with hatsur’s prison was a nice touch.

**Hound of Ulster** · July 4th, 2020, 05:05 AM

i was told to make john cena into a servant, so here's the doctor of thugonomics

Name: Autolycus

Title(s): The Lone-Wolf Prince of Thieves

Class: Assassin

Gender: Male

Attribute: Sky

Alignment: Chaotic Evil

Legend

Personality

Armament

Parameters

Class Skills

Personal Skills

Divinity: B
Autolycus is the demigod son of Hermes and has particularly thick divine blood flowing through his veins, inheriting most of the skills and abilities his father possessed, such as his speed, natural agility, and aptitude for thievery.

Palé: A+
Ancient Greek wrestling, one of the core combat styles that make up Pankration. Consisting of grappling techniques such as clinches, throws, pins, and takedowns, the ultimate path to victory is to obtain a superior position over the opponent. At the rank of A+, Autolycus is a master of the art, having taught the legendary Heracles how to wrestle. Autolycus himself approaches this combat style as another tool to aid in his larceny. To rob away a human's faculties, incapacitating his foes in order to more easily steal from them. In other words, the possibility of Autolycus stealing from those he grapples with is a matter of course.

Prince of Thieves: A
The many talents inherited from Hermes, further refined by Autolycus's own way of life. A composite skill that is made of different skills pertaining to acts of larceny such as burglary, pickpocketing, extortion, lockpicking, tax fraud, pickpocketing, etc., as well as misdirection and other forms of trickery. Also grants a plus correction in regards to all larcenous activities.

Master of Disguise: B
The greatest gift granted by Hermes, a special ability that ensures all criminal activities performed by Autolycus would not be traced back to himself. A highly specialized mutation of Shapeshift that allows Autolycus to change the form and appearance of both himself and objects or entities within his grasp. While radical physical changes to the body are outside of the ability's reach, Autolycus is able to fashion visual changes that can fool the keenest of eyes, from those as simple as color or minute detail changes to more advanced disguises with details on the level of a Noble Phantasm. Something closer in the realm of an "enchantment of illusion" than actually changing one's body, this skill originally had a different name, although it was changed due to reasons undisclosed.

"Am I not Assassin-y enough for the Assassin Class?"

Noble Phantasm Uno: invisible bag of holding

Name: Hades' ~~Cap~~ Knapsack of Invisibility

Title: ~~Cap~~ Knapsack of Concealment

Rank: D

NP Type: Anti-Unit

Range: -

Maximum Number of Targets: 1

The cap of invisibility that belonged to Hades, and the greatest of treasures that Autolycus has stolen. Originally a helmet in the legends, the cap takes the shape of a cloth hat made from a complex weave that "reaches five dimensions." Anything covered or enclosed by the cloth cannot be observed through magecraft and optical means. Using optical magic to block all forms of magical detection and any presence of magical emanations from the wearer, it is incredibly effective against those relying solely on magecraft to detect enemies. It does not obscure sound, smell, body temperature, or the wearer's tracks, so its usage is mostly situational. Without such indicators being readily apparent, it is possible to easily walk by enemies while keeping quiet, and it allows for the easy kidnapping of others through Bounded Fields without detection. However, this is merely the "standard" function of the cap.

Originally, the cap can also be folded out into a sash capable of rendering multiple users invisible at a time. However, due to Autolycus's selfish tendencies as well as a desire to hide his treasures properly, modifications have been mad to the cap, losing its sash form in favor of allowing the cap to take the shape of an invisible bag to keep his stolen goods in. Autolycus accomplishes this by taking advantage of the weave's unique properties by creating an "extradimensional space" within the bag that can only be accessed when the cap is in its sack form. A bounded field that can hold much more than it could appear. The space within the bag is sealed to a degree, keeping whatever item is contained within it from being brought out in any way so long as the cap remains both sealed and in bag form. However, there is nothing stopping whatever is contained within the bag to just open it from the inside aside from Autolycus's tightened grip. It is, after all, a bag meant for holding material possessions, not other people. It should also be noted that the cap is still able to render both itself and its wielder invisible when utilized in such a matter so long as it is still held.

Noble Phantasm Dos: put your skills in the bag

**BnEl15** · July 4th, 2020, 02:08 PM

"It seems I've been summoned... No idea why you'd choose to summon me when my brother is much more famous and accomplished than I am. Well, whatever the case, I guess I'll fight once again. I'm sure that's what he would want me to do as well."

Source

Class: Archer
Other Classes: -
True Name: Jonathan
Alignment: Lawful Good
Origin: The Bible (Old Testament)

Parameters:

STR: C
END: C
AGI: B
MGI: B
LCK: D
NP: B

Likes: Friendship, meritocracy, self-sacrifice
Dislikes: Hereditary succession to the throne, unjust accusations
Talent: Hunting, warfare
Natural Enemy: His best friend, his paranoiac father
Armament: Bow and arrow, sword
Catalyst: His robe and armor, given to his friend

Class Skills

Personal Skills

Clairvoyance
Rank: C

Generally a must-have skill for the Archer class, frequently used during scouting. Simply looking from a high location is sufficient to fully survey a town and search for enemies. In addition, Clairvoyance will affect the accuracy of bows. It connotes superior visual perception and dynamic occipital capture, such as to supplement the long-range aiming of projectile weapons. Archer possesses this skill as an accomplished hunter and soldier. Archer is capable of keeping track of fast-moving objects within a range of up to four kilometres.

Hero's Attendant
Rank: B

A skill afforded to those whose most valiant feats were performed in service to an even greater hero. Rather then fighting alone on the front-lines, Archer's martial prowess shines brightest when he is allowed to take a supportive role in combat. Battling alongside a hero he recognizes as even greater than himself, Archer obtains a rank-up to his parameters and a bonus to all saving throws.

In life Archer shared a close friendship with a certain future king of Israel. Recognizing him to be more worthy of the throne, he offered great support to his friend, even going against his father multiple times. His support culminated in a vow he took with his friend on their last meeting, the two young men promising everlasting friendship and protection between each other. While the exact conditions of this vow were left unrealized due to circumstances, this skill is a crystallization of loyalty and friendship, shared between the two.

Supporting Charisma
Rank: B

A variation of the standard Charisma skill. While Archer was supposed to inherit his father's title as King of Israel, he declined the position to support his friend, whom he believed to be more worthy to inherit the throne, much to his father's dismay. Archer opposed his father in response, going out of his way multiple times to protect and support his friend. Thus, Archer's variation of Charisma is not used to rally others under his cause. Instead, it is used to wholeheartedly support another's rule. Aside from increasing morale for all allies, it has the added effect of increasing the duration and effectiveness of another ally's skills.

Noble Phantasm(s)

Three Arrows at the Break of Dawn
Sheloshah Khitsim

Type: Barrier
Rank: B
Range: 500-1500 metres
Max Targets: 1 person

The three arrows that Archer used to warn his friend to avoid his father's wrath. Fearing for his friend's life, Archer devised a plan to shoot three arrows as if he was aiming at a mark, while his friend his in a nearby field. Afterwards, he asked a boy to look for these arrows. If he requested the boy to retrieve the arrows, it would mean that there was no danger and it was safe for his friend to return to Israel. Conversely, if he told the boy that "the arrows are beyond you", it would mean that his friend is in grave danger, and he must flee Israel at any cost.

This Noble Phantasm took the form of three arrows that Archer could fire from his bow. After it was fired, a bounded field is established, encompassing a 500 metre radius from where the arrow struck the ground. Archer could either establish up to three bounded fields using the three arrows, or he could use multiple arrows at once to double or triple the range of the bounded field. Afterwards, while it is possible to reproduce these three arrows, it takes a great deal of both time and mana to do so.

Once a bounded field is established, there are two things that Archer could do. By saying "The arrows are on the side of you", the bounded field becomes a designated safe zone for one individual (normally the one Archer considers as his "friend"). Within this safe zone, the target exhibits increased recovery capabilities. The safe zone is protected by a wall of mana. Should this wall be broken by outside force, the mana forming the wall is reallocated to strengthen the target, boosting their parameters akin to a small fame boost as long as they remain within this safe zone.

By saying "The arrows are beyond you", the bounded field becomes a designated danger zone. If the target is detected within this danger zone, they will be teleported a great distance away from the area. The zone is protected by a mana wall that saps the strength of hostile individuals within it, its strength directly proportional to theirs with the goal of locking them within this zone for as long as possible. Furthermore, within this zone, skills such as Clairvoyance and Presence Detection are sealed, further obscuring the target's presence and ensuring their escape.

Unfortunately, akin to how helping his friend's escape incurred the wrath of Archer's father, this Noble Phantasm also comes with a demerit. Once a zone is established, there is a 50% chance that all enemies targeting this Noble Phantasm's original target, Archer's "friend", would become notified of Archer's position. While this may potentially endanger his own life, Archer takes great pride in this Noble Phantasm, as someone who values the idea of self-sacrifice in the name of friendship.

For He Loved Him as Himself
Nadar Khaverim

Type: Anti-Unit (Self)
Rank: C
Range: -
Max Targets: 1 person

A recreation of the covenant Archer made with his friend, swearing lifelong friendship and protection. The vow was initially made when Archer gave his robe, sword, and armor to his friend. This acts shows his implicit trust in him, going so far to even renounce his position as the heir to the throne of Israel, believing his friend to be much more worthy of the title. The vow was renewed on the two's last meeting, just before his friend left Israel. Archer vowed to give his life to protect his friend, and his friend vowed to protect Archer's family in turn... A condition that never came to be due to a cruel twist of fate.

This Noble Phantasm embodies Archer's selfless, unwavering ideal of friendship, only usable when Archer genuinely sees another individual as a friend. Archer is capable of bestowing them with his sword and armor. Doing so is akin to transferring his own spirit core, turning them into a Demi-Servant of sorts. Despite not possessing Noble Phantasms of their own, this Demi-Servant possess Archer's parameters, as well as his combat capabilities ingrained within their subconscious. This allows them to hold their own against Servants. As the transferred spirit core still technically belongs to Archer, should the Demi-Servant receive lethal damage, that damage is transferred to Archer, allowing his "friend" to escape unscathed. This fulfills Archer's vow to protect his friend, as well as the tragic narrative stating that "Archer will die before his friend could fulfill their side of the vow". It goes without saying that this Noble Phantasm possesses high risk and leaves Archer extremely vulnerable, but for Archer himself... dying for the sake of a dear friend might not be such a bad outcome, just like back then.

Description

Lore

Jonathan was a prince of Israel, he was the eldest son of King Saul as well as a close friend of David, who eventually succeeded Saul as king. Like his father, he was a man of great strength and swiftness, and he excelled in archery and slinging.

Jonathan first met David just before the latter's battle with Goliath. At the time, he was already a skilled commander in Saul's army, but even he could do nothing against Goliath. When David stepped forward to oppose the brute, armed only with a sling and five stones, he curiously observed the boy. He cheered for David after he won, and he became better acquainted with him on the following days. While Jonathan initially treated David as a younger sibling due to being slightly older, he soon realized that David had surpassed him in skill, both as a soldier and a ruler. Thus, one day Jonathan presented David with his robe and armor as a sign of friendship. In a way, this act also conveyed a message along the lines of "I know one day you will surpass me and rule as a great King of Israel, and that's all right by me; I will support you all the way."

Jonathan and David maintained their friendship for years to come. Unfortunately, things changed when Jonathan's father, King Saul, became increasingly envious and paranoid of David usurping his throne. Saul gradually became more unstable and made several attempts on David's life. Jonathan tried to convince his father to stop, yet his attempts were in vain. Finally, Jonathan decided to negotiate one last time for David's safety. The two devised a plan where after negotiations have concluded, Jonathan would fire three arrows at sunrise while David hid in a nearby field. Afterwards, he would instruct a servant to look for the arrows, and depending on his instructions, it would mean either it's safe for David to remain in Israel, or things are dangerous and David must flee at all cost. Unfortunately, negotiations failed. Saul screamed profanities at his son, harshly rebuking him for daring to go against his decision. Left with no other choice, Jonathan signaled David to flee. Just before David left for Bethlehem, his hometown, the two friends renewed their vow of friendship. Jonathan vowed to support David's decision to become king, while David vowed to protect Jonathan's lineage in turn.

...Unfortunately, it never came to be. Both Saul and Jonathan, along with the rest of their family, perished in a war against the Philistines. While the war indirectly led to an opportunity for David to seize the throne in the ensuing vacuum of power, David could only weep for the loss of his dear friend.

Relationships

Creator's Notes

**RoydGolden** · July 4th, 2020, 02:25 PM

Jonathan: Nice seeing a sheet for David's bro here. His personality is simple but quite endearing and the NPs fit him well. Have to say I think the Mastery Of Projectiles Skill is a little weird given it seems like something a ton of Archers would have. Mastery of projectiles kind of comes with the Class, so it's odd seeing it as a unique Skill as if to say other equally skilled Archers lack it.

**BnEl15** · July 4th, 2020, 02:41 PM

Huh, good point. It's mostly just my self-imposed rule of a Servant having 3 skills, but it does feel kind of forced. I considered giving him Proof of Friendship instead, or something signifying his friendship with David, but the skill's explanation didn't fully fit him. Maybe Hero's Sidekick would work better?

**RoydGolden** · July 4th, 2020, 02:43 PM

Originally Posted by BnEl15

Huh, good point. It's mostly just my self-imposed rule of a Servant having 3 skills, but it does feel kind of forced. I considered giving him Proof of Friendship instead, or something signifying his friendship with David, but the skill's explanation didn't fully fit him. Maybe Hero's Sidekick would work better?

I wrote a Hero's Attendant Skill for my Iolaus sheet a while back that you could use if you like. Otherwise, there's nothing wrong with a hero only having two Skills.

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