Create-A-Servant 3

[BladeOfEden]

Unholy Maiden

Hmm… not really sure how I feel about this one. On one hand, the idea of having a servant that removes pain but increases the severity of wounds is interesting, but… Mother Teresa? Seriously? Something about this sheet rubs me the wrong way, like someone making a servant sheet that demonizes a presidential candidate. A lot of this also seems to be based around Christopher Hitchens‘ arguments about her, which (if you read them over) really seem to misunderstand what Teresa was doing. Furthermore, given how much the Vatican actually investigates its candidates in the canonization process (It’s actually pretty crazy; to put it in perspective, a folk Saint like Joan of Arc wasn’t canonized until 1920. Those church boys do their research and REALLY do not want to make a mistake in canonizing a “less than Saintful” person), it’s highly likely that the majority of the arguments against her were politically based arguments made by people who just don’t like the Catholic Chuch in the first place (ie they were biased arguments). Anyway, that’s just me, what do I know? Still… maybe pick someone a bit less controversial?

[jishara]

Source: Harry Ken Welsh

Class: Avenger
Other Classes: Assassin
True Name: Miss Havisham
Alignment: Neutral Evil
Place of Origin: Great Expectations
Stars: 3/5

Parameters:

STR: E
END: D
AGI: C
MGI: C
LCK: C
NP: B

Height: 189cm
Weight: 100lbs
Likes: Causing heartbreak
Dislikes: Love, happiness, being heartbroken
Talent: Causing heartbreak
Natural Enemy: Estella Havisham
Attribute: Earth
Traits: Humanoid, Female, Weak to Enuma Elish
Armament: A clock handle
Catalyst: A copy of Great Expectations

Class Skills:

Avenger D: Not many grudges are heaped upon her, so she gains a low rank in this skill representing the grudges placed upon her.

Oblivion Correction A: She shall never falter until her grudges have been fulfilled. Her critical power grows as her grudge continues.

Self-Replenishment (Mana) C: She will constantly regain mana until she feels her vengeance has been fulfilled.

Personal Skills:

Perpetual Wedding Day B: The sublimation of the environment she sealed herself in for a large amount of time. Avenger perpetually holds that around her as her wedding day, keeping the food, the outfits, and the set prepared. Food that she comes into contact to rots, and clothing tatters. Even the floors and walls crack around her.

Clocks Stopped C: The sublimation of her setting the time around her to perpetually 9:20. The capacity to "stop the clocks" around her, slowing down her own internal clock to increase the amount of her time that fits in a particular minute, up to ten minutes. However, this can only work once every twelve hours, referencing the one minute.

You've Lost Her A: The sublimation of the joy she took in using Estella to break the hearts of all those around her. This manifests in a passive impulse that causes her to heal around heartbreak and anguish, with this growing more powerful if the emotion is caused by romantic love in some way. She can also enhance the power of anguish.

Noble Phantasm(s):

Estella
For I Stole Away Her Heart And Left Ice


Type: Anti-Unit (Anti-Army)
Rank: B
Range: 2 meters
Max Targets: 1 target

The sublimation of her raising estella in such a way that she "stole away her heart and left ice in its place". When the true name is called, Avenger reaches into a target's heart, freezing it on contact. The targets thus affected will become frozen puppets, unable to feel positive emotions and able to be controlled by Avenger, as well as them gaining this same Noble Phantasm but without the puppet part, merely the positive freezing. However, each one she has costs massive amounts of mana.

Where The Time Went
For I Sealed Myself Away

Type: Anti-Unit
Rank: C
Range: 2 meters
Max Targets: 1 target

The sublimation of her desperate yearning to turn time back, to not have fallen for that man, and that after her vengeance subsided, to not have frozen Estella's heart. A begging for time to turn back that manifests in the clock hand she holds, her primary weapon. Every time she touches her target with it, she steals away a little bit of their time, healing herself and causing herself to reduce in age a bit while bringing the target closer to their "most frail moment". Visually, this manifests as cobwebs covering them, and them gradually aging.

Lore: Miss Havisham is one of the main characters in Charles Dickens' book, Great Expectations. She is a woman who was jilted at the altar by a manipulative fianceee, and underwent a mental breakdown, remaining perpetually in her wedding dress while leaving out the wedding day meal and never allowing visitors. She controlled and manipulated Estella as her adoptive parent.

Personality: A vengeful person who dislikes the idea of love. Her world shattered after her rejection at the altar, and she now believes that everyone is hiding their true nature behind a kind facade. Thus, she would ironically trust far more those who don't hold that facade. Her wish for the grail is to return to the day before she met her ex-fiancee.

Relationships:

Candileja: "Humanity... yes, humanity cannot ever be treated as good."

Estella: "My dear daughter, you know I merely want what's best for you, yes?"

Zeb-Un-Nissa: "Love is a pain that surges through you, an endless agony."

Ikkyu: "Yes, love should be banned. All love should be banned!"

Wallada Bint Al-Mustakfi: "...I see you made it through your love."

Louis XI: "See? Love is an illusion created by manipulative spiders. And I, for one, will not let it stand."

[Shezum3]

Mother Teresa: My Muggeridge's natural enemy suddenly appears. Seriously though I've often thought she was less worthy to be considered a "saint" than people typically believe so a sheet showing that side of her is nice to see. That NP is certainly suitably ominous. I imagine the FC for this Servant would be Bishop Orwell from The Executioner And Her Way Of Life for a similar "unscrupulous holy woman" angle.

I feel her Golden Rule rank is crazy high though. That's greater than Gilgamesh who literally owned all the wealth of the world! Just C (equal to Siegfried who owned Fafnir's treasure) should be enough. Also the last sentence doesn't appear to finish at the end of her personality section.

I've tweaked the golden rule rank. If there is an opportunity, I will make her FC.

[Spelror]

first thing i open and i see oshi no ko and all the feels hit me like a truck

[BnEl15]

"Ziryab": Ooh, you're trying to tackle the deeper themes like love, lies, and tragic unfulfilled dreams! Not bad, not bad at all!

I give you... 6/10 in the angst scale. I love the underlying themes you presented, but the quotes... don't really feel like they live up to this image you're trying to sell us. The Ai fc only made this issue more jarring. She's supposedly lying about giving love and faking smiles, but the lines don't embody that enough. In fact, the relationship lines feel way too honest for someone with her personality. Make her more hyper! Turn those direct insults into backhanded, passive-aggressive compliments that feel innocent at first glance, only to reveal some bitter subtext the moment we think about those for more than a few seconds! Show us more contrast between an idol who lives for music, and the girl who had her dreams stolen from her!

Ahem, apologies, I got way too worked up with this character. Mainly cuz' I see this big potential that you could've expanded on way more. I wouldn't say any of this if your sheet didn't make me feel anything, so you can be proud of that. Also, this is strictly limited to her character. I don't have anything to say about the Skills and NP beyond "that's cool".

[Levin]

Naqi'A: A well made sheet. I really like your work on her skills and especially how Kingmaker interacts with her NP. Her designated class being Archer just because she throws jewels is kind of funny to me. I think Caster would be a more appropritate class given her abilities. A minor complaint, you are overusing word "sublimation" a bit. Otherwise nice sheet.

Ziryab: I usually dislike when people make historical figures into pop-stars, but your take on it is great. Unsettling legend, personality and creepy skills (especially mystic eyes, very creative). Her NP being a personalized reality marble for victims which she fully controls with music is just magnificent. As for negatives, I think Binding Notes is kind of OP for a skill? 9.998 out of 10, would reread sometime.

Unholy Maiden: This might be your best sheet yet, or atleast the one I like the most. I love the tension this servant creates in my mind. Even though I don't approve badmouthing of a saint, your use of the terrible legend built up around Mother Theresa makes me squirm. Her skill Consolation and Noble Phantasm just ring all the wrong notes in me. Great job Shezum.

[Ismail2002]

Thanks for the comments, you two, and looking back, BnEl15, you are right. I went in the wrong direction with those quotes in her relationship segment. Though it would be awkward to change them now, Would it?

[BnEl15]

Hey, I only expressed my own feelings on the sheet. Whether you change them or not is all up to you. No pressure, really.

[Levin]

I am of opposite from Bn and I pressure you to decide for yourself (mainly because my review is inadequate).

[jishara]

Thx for your comments ThreadNomad. I’m glad you like her. The archer was also kinda because she’s tied with (Archer) ishtar.

[Shezum3]

Foreigner of Serpents




Se’fant Fo’eihne’. You shummon me, shuman, shhh… fhat to you fant f’om me?

Class: Foreigner
True Name: Tugarin Zmey
Alignment: Chaotic Evil
Place of Origin: Unknown
Armament: Swords, bow

STRENGE — B
ENDURANCE — B
AGILITY — A
MANA — B
LUCK — C
NP — A

Class skills:

Existence Outside the Domain(C

Class skill of Foreigners. Denotes a being that descended from the void of outer space. The outer god of Foreigner is not so far from Earth

Serpent Man(A)

A skill denoting the alien nature of a Foreigner. This is not just a type of snakeman, his psyche is also different from the human, which is why many skills, such as psychology and understanding of human nature, may not work on him.

Personal skills:

Dialogue with snakes EX

Dialogue option with animals for Foreigner. Due to its nature, Forrainer is much closer to snakes than to people. He is able to give orders to snakes, understand them and use them to attack. However, it is much more difficult for people to understand Foreigner.

Firstly, he doesn’t use facial expressions in communication, his facial muscles are poorly developed. Emotions Foreigner expresses with the help of hissing. Secondly, he speaks with a strong accent - Foreigner hardly pronounces voiced consonants.

You' lanhuahesh... they a'e complesh. Lout. Tishustinsh. I hate thish

Devouring maw A

Maw on the stomach of Foreiner, not a mouth, but a maw. It can be mistaken for special scales, but these are teeth.

Foreigner must eat very plentifully and, moreover, meat. He can swallow small animals himself, while the maw devours that which is larger. Due to the structure of the jaws, the Foreigner cannot chew, so the presence of a second, larger mouth is more than understandable. The mouth also does not chew, but swallows whole. From meat, Foreigner can heal wounds, in addition, this is how he maintains his third skill.

I'm hunh'y... neet mo'e meat

Foul breath B

Foreigner is able to release a special poisonous gas from his mouth. This gas has a very powerful odor that can stun a person for a couple of hours. It is also highly toxic and flammable.

Fhat f'ahile o'hans these p'imatesh hafe...

Noble Phantasm:

Коркодил
Ruler of snakes
A

Gift of Yig, father of snakes. When using this NP, Foreigner turns into a Corcodile, a giant hybrid of a snake and a crocodile. In this form, he has wings, his body releases a fetid gas, which has a very nasty property - it wraps the entire flora and fauna into snakes. Where there is Foreigner, there will be trees from which snakes grow, snake animals, grass from snakes, and so on. These changes also affect people.

Description:

Likes: Serpent, meat, strength
Dislikes: People, bogatyrs, food that cannot be swallowed, cold
Natural Enemy: Volga Vseslavovich, Alesha Popovich

Foreigner’s True name is Tugarin Zmey, character of Western Slavic epic folklore.

This being with inhuman psychology. He is more of a snake than a man, which affected his thinking. Tugarin does not understand people well, which can be fatal for the Master. Do not think that you can make friends with him - Tugarin does not perceive the concept of friendship well, for him there are allies. But they are also consumables, while Tugarin sees nothing wrong with this. He will not reproach if he is stabbed in the back - he will only be surprised at his own oversight. He also evaluates the things around him for heat and cold. Cold things for him are tantamount to a threat that needs to be eliminated. His history began a long time ago, in those days when there was no Internet, no sports, no other modern entertainment. Then people simply had fun - they organized military campaigns against other countries. It was fun and generally profitable.

One of the connoisseurs of such entertainment was the bogatyr Volga Vseslavovich. Once he made a military campaign in one country, whose name has not survived to this day. There, he and his warriors had a good time, robbing and killing the local population, except for beautiful girls. Neither Volga nor his fellows remembered the name of the country, not a single boy whose family died defending the city.

Time passed, the boy grew up, becoming a warrior, but did not forget anything. He dreamed of defeating Volga, but he knew that this bogatyr was a very dangerous opponent, who knew magic and was able to turn into animals. Wanting to become stronger, the warrior turned to forbidden knowledge. He asked for help from Yig, the father of snakes. Yig answered him by giving him a more suitable form - a snake man. The warrior was glad of the new look, new strength, he went to challenge Volga, but it was too late - Vseslavovich had already died by this time. The warrior did not have time to take revenge ... but now it was no longer important. The former revenge for their country has already been forgotten. He joined the nomads, where he took the name Tugarin

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I'll upload the art later.

[Dreamerless]

Archer of Manmade Storms
-- Giver of Poisoned Gifts --



"If the war has come, then that means that you are seeking the Holy Grail and a wish. How cute."

Class: Archer

"Why am I an Archer, you ask? I have no bow. But I do have arrows. Rain is God’s arrow."

Other Classes: Trickster
True Name: Charles Mallory Hatfied
Alignment: Neutral Evil
Origin: Historical Fact, Ars Goetia

Parameters:

STR: B
END: C
AGI: B+
MGI: C
LCK: B++
NP: B

Likes: "People of course. I love to please and let them have whatever they want."
Dislikes: "Getting blamed as a devil. I know that I am a devil, but seriously. That’s just rude."
Talent: Making it rain

"Don’t you dare make a pun out of this."

Natural Enemy: Dorothy Gale (Assassin) (Anju Adams)

"This is kind of balanced, since I’m also her natural enemy."

Armament: "My skills as a moisture accelerator."
Catalyst: His secret formula for rainmaking.

Class Skills

Magic Resistance(E→A++)

Confers protection against magical effects. At this rank, doesn't negate magic but all but only reduces the damage a little. A sewing machine salesman born in the modern era, Archer gains no protection from his Class Container.

However due to his connection with Furfur, Archer has resistance over spells including an element of water or of wishing. Attempting to use any such spell upon him will result in it being strengthened and twisted against the user.

"Why should you wish to harm me with my own elements? I’d let you have them yourself."

Independent Action(C)

The ability to sustain oneself in existence without a supply of magical energy from one's Master. At this rank Archer can remain in the World for one day without an active contract.

"But you’d never sever the contract, right? I’ll be good to you!"

Personal Skills

Rainmaker (A)

Hatfield’s claim to fame; his ability to cause storms and rain. This skill is the sublimation of that aspect of him, allowing him to summon powerful storms and create flooding and waters.
Additionally, this skill grants him the chemical and scientific knowledge actually needed for rainmaking. This is his primary offensive skill and allows a very powerful form of Water Magecraft. However, Furfur has tainted the waters. They have no life giving property to them, only the destructive potential of rain, more like a poisonous curse than any natural phenomenon.

"Rain rain go away, come again another day! Such a stupid song. I wonder if the children will have to make a new one?"

Grand Order (C)

A Skill marking one as host for one of the 72 Demon God Pillars united under King Solomon. Archer's patron is Furfur, a demon who revolves around storms and desire. His nature synergizes splendidly with Archer, a rainmaker who gives people what they want but too much.

"You’re mad I’m a demon? We’re all demons here. Each of you is a sinner. Am I really so bad?"

Deception (D)

The Class Skill of Tricksters: the ability to weave deceit so skillfully, reality pales by comparison. Supports the telling of tall tales, evading questions, misrepresenting the truth and every other manner of deception.

Although he technically never lied, Archer’s reputation as one who perverts contracts and deals grants him this skill. Essentially, his variant of the skill is not the power to lie, but to deceive while not lying. Asking him for something will get you what you want, but not in the way one might hope.

All of his words are laced with mental interference magecraft and he receives natural bonuses when attempting to secure an agreement. However, any such deal will invariably end poorly for the other one.

"But I thought that was what you wanted. Why do you hate me so? Did I cheat you? No. I even gave you interest."

Affection of the Holy Grail (False) (C)

A skill for one who is loved by the Holy Grail and thus is granted its boons. While Hatfield has never actually met the Grail during his legend, he is able to cobble this skill together from a collection of anecdotes that point to something “Graillike” about him. Primarily, his penchant for granting wishes in a way that goes horribly, rather like Kiritsugu Emiya’s desire for world peace instead becoming the extinction of humanity. If he had ever met the corrupted Grail, it is likely that he would be their favorite servant. This skill grants him great luck, but always at the expense of others and their dreams.

"Even the judge of this war loves me. Still think you have a chance?"

Noble Phantasm(s)

A Storm Built On Human Desire
San Diego Storms
Be Careful What You Wish For

"Fine, I suppose this is the only reason you summoned me. I’ll whip up a storm surpassing all expectations!"



Type: Anti-Army
Rank: B
Range: 1-99
Max Targets: 1-99

The great storm which Hatfield created in San Diego. Causing the destruction of two dams and millions of dollars in damages, this phantasm allows him, with proper preparations, to cause the skies to open up and release a destructive downpour that grows as time goes on. Rain will fall and fall and fall without end, flooding the city he’s in and recreating the original disaster.

While this requires a great amount of mana, the floods act as a kind of self fulfilling ritual, fertilizing the ground that they destroy to make more mana to keep on flooding. Additionally, this rain will be poisoned with demonic wrath and will be more like a storm of arrows from some malicious god than any mere rain. A manmade disaster caused from greed, meddling with that which one was not meant to, and the sadism of Furfur. The only way to end this phantasm is to kill Hatfield.

However, if this phantasm is not used of Hatfield’s own volition and is instead “wished for”, it will shift into something else.

A Storm Built On Human Desire
Hurricane of the Twisted Monkey’s Paw
Something Wicked This Way Comes

" You goddamn fucking idiot. You’re so hilarious. Watch how the rain falls! It’ll consume everything! We’ll definitely win the war just like you wanted! Be careful what you wish for, you fucking beautiful dumbass!"

Type: Anti-Desire
Rank: EX
Range: 1-100
Max Targets: 1-100

The true purpose was not the storm, but instead the desire itself. The idea of a wish perverted is this phantasm. While activated it will become a storm of wishes and not normal rain. Individuals who desire to be wealthy will drown in gold. Those who wish to be handsome will have their face ripped painfully into an attractive form. Manifesting any desire and wish into a painful horror. The only way to avoid some miserable fate is to not have any desire and renounce it all.

However, what is more human than to want? To separate people from their desires is to destroy their purpose. This phantasm therefore is practically inescapable in its nature, spreading with the storm and bringing that which was promised, but not like you thought. Be careful what you wish for.

Description

Charles Mallory Hatfied was an American mage, salesman, and “rainmaker” who used a combination of luck, magecraft, and chemical knowledge to artificially increase precipitation and help farmers. However, within the City of San Diego, on a normal contract, he gave what was promised but much greater. A storm that caused massive property damage and started the trope of a poisoned gift. Some even claimed he was a demon bringing storms from the devil. This was correct in fact as the Demon Pillar Furfur had claimed him as a vessel, living in his circuits.

Hatfield and Furfur have an interesting relationship in that Hatfield neither resists nor supports Furfur’s more sadistic tendencies and just goes along for the ride. After all, he’s being allowed to do interesting things with interesting people and it sure as hell beats being a salesman. He himself can be mocking and demonic when time goes on, but that’s him being more edge-lordy than anything else. He does, however, have a mean streak to him. From his pathological lying to his joy in twisting contracts, Hatfield himself is just not nice at all. Additionally, he’s a cynic that believes that wishes will never work out and anyone who thinks different is an idiot.

Wish: "If you’re asking that, you know nothing about me."

Creator's Notes

Kamera’s project lives on. I was thinking of submitting him for Scribe’s contest, but instead the Beatles. Kind of regretting that.

Any advice?

Thoughts?

[RoydGolden]

Tugarin: Interesting take on him as somewhat of a "tragic monster". I will say him being a Foreigner as opposed to Rider doesn't really add much. The NP and Skills are pretty directly based on stuff from his legend without much "Outer God flavor". Also his Serpent Man Skill repeats the first two lines. Might want to correct that.

Hatfield: Pretty good as a whole and maybe one of my favorite sheets from you (although I might be biased having considered writing him up myself). You hit most of the beats I would've, with the Rainmaker Skill, deception one and one based on him being a devil. Affection Of The Holy Grail might be a bit of a stretch but you did manage to tie it into his legend. It makes sense he'd have a Skill based on the "make wishes come true in the worst way possible" thing. The first NP works as a perversion of granting prosperity where the rains nourish the ground just to make more flooding and the second one runs with that concept. It's OP but the condition of needing a wish balances it a bit. I wonder what would happen if (in the classic counter to an evil genie) someone's wish was "to stop the disaster" or "make everything go back to normal"?

[jishara]

Source: Migraine Sky

Class: Caster
Other Classes: N/A
True Name: Moni Mekhala
Alignment: Neutral Good
Place of Origin: Cambodian Legend
Stars: 3/5

Parameters:

STR: D
END: B
AGI: C
MGI: A
LCK: C
NP: C

Height: 167cm
Weight: 110lbs
Likes: Kindness, water, strategy
Dislikes: Brute strength, destruction
Talent: Bringing rain
Natural Enemy: Ream Eyso
Attribute: Sky
Traits: Humanoid, Female, Weak to Enuma Elish
Armament: Bal Pikear
Catalyst: An outfit for the traditional dance depicting her

Class Skills:

Territory Creation A: The capacity to create a Temple that boosts her magical prowess. Caster's temples can be created underwater or in the sky.

Item Construction C: The capacity to create items. In her case, they form out of water, and so this works better the more water that is around.

Personal Skills:

Divine Core of the Goddess EX: She was, from birth, a naturally perfected goddess of the sea. This skill incorporates Divinity and an absoluteness of body and of mind, purging mental interference and maintaining body shape.

Wisdom of the Divine Hermit C: The teachings of her teacher, the divine hermit Lok Ta Moni Eisei, manifested in the form of a skill. A general magecraft potential, with her understanding how to wield air, fire, and earth to her will, though not as well as the water that she was born as a goddess of.

Goddess of the Sea B: The sublimation of her status as goddess of the sea. The capacity for her to manifest, control, and meld into water, transforming the vapor and ice nearby into water, merging water together, and even transforming herself into a shower of water that can go through any crack.

Noble Phantasm(s):

Bal Pikear
The Storm's Lightning

Type: Anti-Army
Rank: C
Range: 10 meters
Max Targets: 100 targets

The sublimation of the crystal ball she received as a reward from her teacher due to her strategy for collecting dew. This noble phantasm manifests in the form of that same crystal ball, which can passively emit blasts of blinding light and electricity in a way similar to a tesla sphere. When the true name is called, a rainstorm manifests from it, bombarding her targets with blinding and overloading lightning while nourishing her allies with rain.


Tukasansaeum
The Dew Collector

Type: Anti-Unit
Rank: C
Range: 10 meters
Max Targets: 1 target

The sublimation of her strategy for collecting dew: she placed her handkerchief out in the night, and then wrung it out into the cup that needed to be filled in the morning. This manifests in that handkerchief, which endlessly leaks water and dew. When the true name is called, it absorbs that around it, wrapping around enemies and surrounding them with swirling and harshly flowing water.


Lore: Moni Mekhala was a major part of the Cambodian myth for thunder, lightning, and rain. She was a goddess of the sea and a student of Lok Ta Monei Esei, and he decided to challenge all his students to get him a cup of morning dew the fastest. Moni successfully did, and thus was gifted a crystal ball, while his other two students, a demon of fire and a prince of earth were respectively gifted an axe and a dagger. The demon grew jealous, and attempted to steal the crystal ball, killing the prince along the way. But Moni was able to dodge the demon's axe strikes and blind him with lightning, before deciding to let him go and flying higher. It is said that this is what causes rain.

Personality: A kind and caring person. She likes to constantly be in water, whether it be swimming in it or flying in a rainstorm. She naturally dislikes those who remind her of Ream Eyso, the demon of fire who constantly tries to hunt her down, but she likes those that remind her of the prince, Vorachtun, who tried to help her. Her wish for the Grail is to just not get chased by Eyso.

Relationships:

Wungala: "As someone else with an endless feud, you can do it!"

Nebuchadnezzar II: "You just take, and you Take and you TAKE, no matter the cost."

Gan Ning: "You became a criminal to do it and yet you became a hero? ...I wish that would happen with Eyso."

John Bentinck: "...Why do you remind me so much of someone? Hmm... why do you hide away from my rain?"

Nia Ngao Zhua Pa: "Another spirit of storms? How wonderful! Nice to meet you."

[RoydGolden]

Assassin of Agriculture:
Steel-Hearted Philanthropist

Appearance:

Source

True Name: Herbert Hoover

Alignment: Lawful Neutral

Alternate Classes: Caster, Player

Strength- D
Agility- C
Endurance- D
Mana- D
Luck- C
NP- B

Personality

Blunt and terse. Described as one whose fund of smalltalk was perpetually overdrawn, Assassin is a man of few words who evinces little emotion in his interactions. This nature leads him to be understood as someone cold and unfeeling. Even while organizing famine relief in Belgium Assassin was criticized for handling the logistics of food distribution without showing any concern for the victims, as if the whole enterprise were merely a math problem.

However Assassin is actually a compassionate man who cares deeply for others, though he has trouble expressing it. He especially hates starvation and will go out of his way to feed anyone who needs it. While he's a kind person Assassin has an authoritarian streak as he believes all power would be better placed in his own hands to help the people. He easily slides into manipulating others as if pawns on a chessboard for the sake of his ideals, although Assassin recognizes this trait as a weakness of his and tries not to fully embrace it.

Assassin is very prickly about his legacy. He hates the Great Depression, seeing it as the greatest blotch on his legend. Although Assassin refuses to acknowledge his own blame for the disaster, instead saying he would've solved it dozens of times were it not for his enemies and venal bureaucrats sabotaging him at every turn. He reserves particular hatred for Franklin Roosevelt, whom he accuses as a mere opportunist that exploited the crisis to catapult his own rise to presidency. The merest mention of the man brings venomous rants to his lips, totally scattering Assassin's stoical demeanor. In these moments he comes off almost as a Berserker-Classed Servant.

Assassin's wish on the Grail is to go back in time and prevent the Great Depression, allowing him to win reelection and guide America down his desired future.

Likes: organization, efficiency, freedom
Dislikes: famine, dissonance, Socialism
Talents: philanthropy, centralizing authority
Natural Enemy: Franklin Roosevelt, Black Rider

Class Skills:

Presence Concealment- D
The talent to cut off one's presence as a Heroic Spirit. However the level of concealment drops sharply the moment one prepares to attack. At this rank, it's suitable for spying so long as no sudden movements are made. While he never had any experience with espionage in life, Assassin's gloominess and introversion allow him to easily evade notice, belying the natural charisma of a President.


Personal Skills:

A Piratical State For Benevolence- A
A sublimation of the committee Assassin founded to relieve the famine in Belgium, which one British official called "a piratical state organized for benevolence". It grants him all the resources of that committee, including a Golden Rule Skill at rank C and the ability to call on familiars for distributing supplies.

Furthermore this accredits Assassin's feat of negotiating an end to the famine amidst World War I when both great powers were more concerned with their own enmities than feeding the hungry. At the height of his influence Assassin received permission from both the British and German to cross the Channel at will, brokering treaties between either side. A man whose unprecedented reach was akin to a "shadow ruler" pulling the strings of Europe, yet wielded that power entirely for benevolence.

Allows Assassin to transgress borders that'd impede his philanthropic mission, suppress hostile intent to conduct diplomacy, recognize fellow Servants from the cultural worlds that he bridged and manipulate others by such byzantine webs that his own involvement becomes invisible. Essentially a composite of the Territory Infringement, Proof Of Friendship, Great Multicultural Exchange and End Of The Spider's Web Skills at rank B.

Engineer King's Charisma- B-
The unique charisma of Assassin. A man who was decidedly uncharismatic interacting with others, but nevertheless drew immense popularity for his deftness in handling crisis. Steel-hearted administration devoted to maximizing the capabilities of his subordinates- as if pieces in a single grand machine only he can visualize.

Assassin is able to control anyone who willingly puts themselves under his command (although they need not know of this effect) as extensions of himself. It's a cruel ability that violates the free-will of his allies, but in turn allows Assassin to forcibly augment their battle-performance. Collective tactics that would be hard to pull off normally become child's play as Assassin conducts the army like an orchestra. At its fullest potential he can bestow entire ranks-up to the stats, Skills and even Noble Phantasms of those he's directing, manifesting their "most optimal potential".

However pushing such an output is akin to overclocking the Servant's Spirit Core, grating their Saint Graph and incurring self-damage. For that reason Assassin is mainly careful to only enhance a single parameter or ability at a time rather than across-the-board to minimize strain. A less scrupulous Assassin could drive his subordinates to fight until their bodies give out, even sacrificing them as "suicide-bombs" to hinder the enemy.

In life Assassin possessed an inhuman genius that saw humans as no more than chess-pieces to be manipulated in the most expedient manner. The kind of person destined to become a great Overlord or Demon King if born in ancient times. However he willfully sealed away this side of himself, dedicating his talents to philanthropy and democracy. Ascribing the - modifier as Assassin fears the full extent of his machiavellianism and shies away from it.

"This country, this world is a great engine. And I have the ear for it. So believe in me, Master."

Centralization- B
The ideology Assassin subscribed to in life. He believed all powers should be unified around a single ruler, who could use them for improving the wellbeing of the people. While he followed Democracy rather than being a true absolute ruler Assassin still oversaw unprecedented expansion of the Federal Government during his presidency.

Assassin can absorb the Skills of others, taking them for himself and depriving the original possessor. This requires direct contact and takes the form of tree-roots extending from his body, siphoning their authority as a dark greenish aura. The time needed to absorb a Skill varies based on its grade, three seconds for E to D rank, six seconds for C to B rank and for A-rank having to hold onto them uninterruptedly for ten seconds. EX-rank Skills, mental ones and those born from a unique accomplishment cannot be absorbed. Assassin has special compatibility for authorities of civilization and agriculture, treating them as a grade down for the purpose of absorption.

Noble Phantasms

Food Dictator

A Modern Annona

Rank: C+

Type: Anti-Unit~Army/Anti-Famine

A crystallization of Assassin's role as Food Commissioner for America in World War I, affectionately dubbed "Food Dictator" by the people. It also encompasses his work establishing charities to fight famine across the globe. As a Noble Phantasm this makes Assassin's existence synonymous with ending famine, allowing him to grow crops like wheat, corn, millet and rice wherever he goes just by circulating his magical energy through the earth.

Even barren soil could sprout with life under Assassin's feet. These crops are unnaturally healthy and nourishing, not only filling hunger but replenishing one's stamina and magical energy when ingested. Furthermore they can be weaponized to tangle foes or block an attack. However as a more insidious effect this Noble Phantasm claims the territory wherever their roots reach, cutting off other attempts to tap leylines. Reflecting how Assassin choked out competing charities to his own.

This Noble Phantasm's true form is a giant tree that erupts from the ground when he invokes its true name, topped by every kind of grain in a crown-like array. Its roots reach out rapaciously to drag in opponents and absorb them, centralizing their authorities in Assassin himself. It's especially hungry for authorities based on civilization and agriculture. A monument both to his efforts feeding the world and obsession with consolidating power. The "great tree" whose roots connect the world, in other words a second coming to the Noble Phantasm of a certain Roman founder.

Great Depression

Financial Panic Of The 20th Century

Rank: B

Type: Anti-Wealth

The dark side of Assassin's legacy and a Noble Phantasm he hates using. Symbolizing the Great Depression that swept America during his presidency, causing widespread misery. While his true guilt is debated by history Assassin was still tarred with the Depression, contributing greatly his loss to Franklin Roosevelt. Upon invocation Assassin's hands blacken, becoming vessels for a potent curse that corrodes all forms of wealth.

Anything Assassin lays hands on is eroded in proportion to its financial value. For instance a simple mud hut would take a while to be affected while a lavish palace crumbles rapidly at his touch. Noble Phantasms are largely exempt from this, being of inestimable value although Mystic Codes can be decayed based on the money they'd fetch in the magical world. Assassin's first Noble Phantasm and Centralization Skill are mutually exclusive with this, and cannot be used while it's active.

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So here's probably the last sheet I'll be posting here for a while. As usual comments and critique would be welcome. Thanks for reading y'all!

[jishara]

Source: Tyrannoninja

Class: Assassin
Other Classes: N/A
True Name: Sophonisba
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral
Place of Origin: Carthage (3rd Century)
Stars: 2/5

Parameters:

STR: E
END: D
AGI: C
MGI: C
LCK: D
NP: C

Height: 172cm
Weight: 110lbs
Likes: Her people, power, allies
Dislikes: Rome
Talent: Gaining allies
Natural Enemy: Romulus
Attribute: Man
Traits: Humanoid, Female, Weak to Enuma Elish
Armament: A small dagger
Catalyst: A painting of her death

Class Skills:

Presence Concealment D: She is able to go unnoticed, hidden by the aura of those around her. A class skill for the Assassin class.

Personal Skills:

Expert in Many Specialisations D: One noted for her extreme proficiency in many different fields naturally gains this skill, denoting one who holds proficiency in many fields. In her case, relevant skills involve instrumental performance, Charisma, Golden Rule (Beauty), Magecraft, and Eye for Art at rank D.

Syphax's War B: The sublimation of the role she had in convincing Syphax to fight against his erstwhile allies, the Romans, in several battles. This manifests in the form of a skill that causes her to be able to "break apart allies", fraying connections and bonds of trust. However, this has a downside, as this also operates between her and her allies.

A Bitter Marriage B: The sublimation of her famous death scene, one depicted in numerous paintings. She gracefully drank poison upon being offered it, and then berated Masinissa for the "short and bitter marriage" before dying. This manifests in the form of a combination skill. At a touch, her body has been permeated with this poison, which operates subtly from her voice at short range. It can't easily be detected upon being found.

Noble Phantasm(s):

Visus Vel Vox
With A Touch

Type: Anti-Unit
Rank: C
Range: 10 meters
Max Targets: 1 target

She was noted as being "so charming that the mere sight of her or even the sound of her voice vanquished even the most indifferent". This manifests in her Noble Phantasm. All those around her, who can see or hear her, are afflicted with a Charm effect. When the true name is called, this massively overcharges into one binding the target to her will.

Lore: Sophonisba was a Carthagian noblewoman noted for her role in convincing King Syphax to switch sides. She was married to him due to the Carthagian Senate's vote, with them stating that he was the best candidate. He was an ally of Rome at the beginning, but her influence convinced him to switch sides. However, he lost a crucial battle, resulting in his defeat and her being taken captive and then being forced to drink poison.

Personality: An elegant and serene person. She truly hates Rome, seeing it as "patronizing people claiming they are the best of all", and believes that, even if it not be her own Carthage, Rome should have been destroyed far earlier. This would naturally be her wish for the Holy Grail. She also hates other patronising people.

Relationships:

Romulus: "Rome is not supreme. Rome is not even good!"

Caligula: "...How did rome even survive you and Nero in succession? It should have fallen!"

Livia Drusilla: "..,And of course, a poisonous empress. Naturally, still not good."

Julius II: "You modeled yourself after Caesar? Well... I suppose there are worse romans to model yourself after. But still, I would think you would model yourself after someone else."

Livy: "Ah, rome's little propagandist. Interesting to meet you."

Creator's Notes: OOH I love that Hoover!

[Dreamerless]

I wonder what would happen if (in the classic counter to an evil genie) someone's wish was "to stop the disaster" or "make everything go back to normal"?

If someone wished for "everything to go back to normal", they'd end up time looping themselves by things going back to right the way things were and then repeating. At least that's why I think it might go. Thanks for your kind words btw!

[RoydGolden]

If someone wished for "everything to go back to normal", they'd end up time looping themselves by things going back to right the way things were and then repeating. At least that's why I think it might go. Thanks for your kind words btw!

You're welcome. Any thoughts on my Hoover?

[Dreamerless]

I really like them! They'll definitely have an interesting relationship with my Woodrow Wilson when I make them.

Do any of the rest of you have thoughts on Hatfield?

[jishara]

Class: Berserker
Other Classes: N/A
True Name: Ptolemy Ceraunus
Alignment: Neutral Evil
Place of Origin: Macedon (3rd Century BC)
Stars: 3/5

Parameters:

STR: B
END: D
AGI: D
MGI: D
LCK: B
NP: C

Height: 172cm
Weight: 110lbs
Likes: Holding power, tricking allies
Dislikes: Being tricked
Talent: Backstabbing
Natural Enemy: Iskandar
Attribute: Man
Traits: Humanoid, Male, Weak to Enuma Elish
Armament: A khopesh
Catalyst: A record of his life

Class Skills:

Madness Enhancement D: A tendency toward impulsive and overly cruel moves that cause problems with his allies and his structure.

Personal Skills:

Death of the Last General A: The sublimation of his role in killing the final remaining Diadochi, king Seleucus I, who Berserker killed while he was performing sacrificial rituals. This manifests in an aura around him which enhances his power against those viewed as generals. In addition, Berserker gains a free strike against enemies performing magecraft.

Bloodstained Reign B: The sublimation of his bloodstained seventeen-month reign, of which the climax was his slaughtering of the younger children of his half-sister/soon-to-be wife, after the only request she made was to ensure her children were safe. Every strike he makes gushes out far more blood than should be natural or possible, with him gaining minor control over it.

Ceraunus B: The sublimation of his title of "Ceraunus", which meant Thunderbolt in greek and referenced his impetuousness and cruelty. This manifests in the form of minor lightning control manifesting through his hands and his khopesh, which is mostly used in controlled thundershocks to strike targeted points on the opponent's body.

Noble Phantasm(s):

Ceraunus Izneveri
Your Support Has Betrayed You

Type: Anti-Unit
Rank: C
Range: 10 meters
Max Targets: 1 target

The sublimation of Berserker's betrayal of King Seleucus, who saved his life and supported him for a time, before Berserker decided to kill Seleucus while he was sacrificing to the gods. This manifests in the form of his khopesh, which passively makes those around him more likely to aid him. When the true name is called, the khopesh releases a brilliant beam of lightning towards a single target which bears the property of betrayal, making it gain power the more his target has aided him. A perfect attack with which to backstab his allies..

Lore: Ptolemy Ceraunus (319-279 BC) was son of Ptolemy I Soter and brother of Ptolemy II. He went to the court of Lysimachus, but later fled to Selucus I, who provided him sanctuary and political power. But Ceraunus wasn't satisfied with merely that, soon after killing Selucus and seizing the throne for himself. Unfortunately, he made horrible tactical moves, such as slaughtering the children of his half-sister and refusing aid from his armies or allies against the Gauls, and died seventeen months later.

Personality: A cruel and haughty person. He believes himself to always be in supreme control, and constantly performs horrible tactical decisions believing that they will show everyone just how truly powerful he is. However, they tend to work out horribly and result in problems for him. His want for the Holy Grail is merely as a proof of his glory.

Relationships:

Alexander: "So, the man claiming to be King was just a foolish child?"

Iskandar: "Your soldiers are pathetic. Very destroyable."

Hephestaion: "So... you're a random mage general? Guess it's time for me to defeat you, then."

Ptolemy I (BnEl): "Dear old dad. Such a pleasure to see you again! Hope you like what I've done with the role."

Yeongsangun: "Language was a bit excessive, but other than that..."